YuvAni FF: Separated (both POVs) part 7. p17 End+note - Page 11

Originally posted by: divyareddy123

wow mehwu great updates

read both part 4 n 5 together its awesome

how can u stop at the scene

atlasy our hero started to confess

She waited to hear more. Her eyes widened with anticipation. Her mouth was slightly opened and her eyes were wide waiting for the next part so eagerly as suhani 😉

give us more and soon

Originally posted by: yanks28

Yuvraj needs to take her on dates pehle toh then she will dress up 😡 Yeah Vikram is just one of those guys with a big ass ego...he thought she wouldn't turn him down. A lot of creeps like him do exist...they can't take no for an ans

Originally posted by: yusramazhar1

👏kia khoob likhti ho...

bari sundar dikhti hoo...

tumhay kaisay hum btaein

kay hum pagal hogye hain

parhkay yeh updateee..

mujhko dunia mil gai hai dil yeh khil gaya hai

tum jo mere sath ho ...

mai lovely gaiyaan

update yeh parhkay

update yeh parhkay...

WHAT A UPDATE...

mind blowing

mind boggling

total jhakasss...

👏👏👏

what did loved?

EVERY THING ...

what did i not love?

NOTHING ...

no no no there is something that really disturbed me that i will mention in the end of the review...

right now everything

is just

loveyyy

doveyyy...

there is something called genre ... not everyone really have that thing in them to write sad happy emotional .. fight sequence ... suspense to some extent the way you write it..

you can write anything...

any genre

still with the same impact...

i literally loved every single thing...

the start really made me sad because suhani was feeling miserable...

like that pyar ki uljhan ...

like i loved the fact that yuvraj nay usko aek baar vikram kay baray mai kaha and she was also suspecting him (his intentions) .. the kind of faith she has on yuvraj .. and the way you described it is commendable 👏

Was there more to Yuvraj's sudden change of heart about Vikram? At times my heart told me that Yuvraj might actually be jealous of him, but then, how was that possible?

awwwieee... she felt it but than how can yuvraj feel that way according to her..

wish she could get into his heart and see what more he wants to feel and do with suhani.. or she can actually get to your head .. because you are going to give us "50 shades of yuvani"

all that suspecting suhani did while vikram asked for dinner

and than her shocked out

freaked out self where she guessed that he actually lied to her

and instantly she messaged her husband

i mean all of it was mind blowing...

and the epic slap...

how dare that son of a bitch asked her to accompany him to his apartment and than he have that audacity to grab her ???? i mean where is yuvraj ( suhani's bf i vikram heads) lol

here comes epic-ness by the most fantastic writer i have ever come across

I was going to murder this guy. I got Suhani's message in the middle of dinner and bolted off.

its just like the show .

he do gets worried

hyper active

scared for her

its all on his face

but cvs don't gives him scenes to show it..

thankfully i have you

whol fulfills my wishes and makes me ultra happy..

you know you make me fall for him again and again ...

i am blessed to have you

tumnay aek kaniya ko khush kia hai.. tumhari sari muradein poori hoon behna...

I was scared to death, in all honesty. I arrived and saw what I had expected but hoped not to see. I caught Suhani right as she was about to stumble.

lut lia dil ...

the way he caught her

an the way she recognized the touch...

this is called

dil say mohabbat..

soul lover..

this is beautiful

She looked relieved to see me and hugged me tightly and I hugged her back. "Are you ok?" I asked. She looked completely distraught.

i actually am short of words because the whole sequence you have described amazingly ..

i mean i am going to do the detailing now...

these sudden hugs which you put in your work are like bunch of flowers showered on me and yuvanians i hope :P but me definitely... i mean i always wanna see it in the show.. but you wrote like really in real.. i could imagine it.. dil full hai for now...

behna the dialogues said by vikram were so good

dekho mujhy uskay dialogues bhi bht pasand aye... antagonist rocked for me in this one...

i mean all of those lines that suhani was leading him on were like on point...

wah kia bola hai...

isay yuvraj ka demag toh khatrab hona hi tha ...

No, buddy, you just can't take no for an answer. When a girl says no, it means NO." I said.

such a gentlemen ... !

miss writer apki isi adaa pay toh hum fida hain...

you never miss to show yuvraj's actual traits ...

he is always a gentlemen ...

"I thought my wife had a pathetic choice of friends, but you've just proven me wrong."

i was actually waiting to read that how are you gonna pen down him telling that moron that suhani is his wife.. but the way you actually spill the beans in vikrams plate was pretty different.. i loved it... the above line by you.. i have read it in your yuvani double dinner one shot.. tabh bhi i adored yuvraj and appreciated you and ab bhi balkay right now i am adoring you more... i love when yuvraj shoves off the reality in suhani's face that her friends are pathetic.. i mean i want you to write a shot where snail is also there and yuvraj actually tells infront of both friends ...

that he hates the fact that snail is a part of his wife's life...

he wants to throw or erase snail forever..

bcz wo uskay paon kay nakhun kay barabar bhi ni hai

(sorry i can do p.h.d on this... )

I managed to punch him a few more times before Suhani stopped me. He threw another punch at me and his body barreled towards me. Suhani was in the way and he shoved her aside so hard that she fell down. She fell on her arm and I saw her grimace. This just set me off like nothing else.

"You're in deep trouble now." I said. I pushed him down

wohooo

wooopieee

i actually wanna cheer my dude ..

behna kis kis cheez keliye apko appreciate karo...

lafzo mai nahi hota jo byann..

likh kay yeh update tunay wo kar dia... 😳

"Yuvraj I think you need stitches. Stop...you're bleeding heavily." She was crying. She tried to pull me towards her. I held her face. "Are you alright?" I hugged her. I kissed her forehead. "I was so worried when I got your message." I said. She tried wiping my face with some tissue. Vikram was down on the ground, writhing in pain. "This is my wife, Suhani Birla. No one knows her better than me. She's mine...and you're never going to touch her with your dirty hands again." I said.

awesomely written...

the hug

the forhead kiss..

i mean i guess usay bolnay ki zarorat bhi nahi hai

he loves her so much

these little gestures you have wrote...

i am flattered by you

I held Suhani's hand and we left. Suhani was crying silently. I touched her face. Inside the car, I looked at her arm and she had a pretty bad scab on her elbow. She'd fallen with all her weight on her arm. "I should go back and murder this guy. I can't believe I considered him a friend. He acted so professionally. What a bas***d. I want to cut him into..." I stopped when Suhani hushed me.

angry mr yuvraj birl a.. is my favorite...

anger makes him looks hawt..

kash wo wapis jata :P

but he actually broke so much in vikram making him emasculated (sorry)

intelligent toh hum itnay hain

kay yeh mauka best hai biwi ko uskay ghar wapis laiky janay ka..

ghumao gari udhr

i love you dude..

the room entry

and again a hug..

nachooo saray jee phar kay ...

😛

"You don't know how I felt when I got your message. I was so scared."

"I was scared too." She confessed. "I want you to know something. I love you and I'll love you for the rest of my life, no matter what happens." She said. She continued crying and kissed my cheek. I melted. I wiped her tears.

"I know you love me..." I said. Our foreheads touched. "I know that I don't deserve you but I'm really selfish, so I want what's mine. I said. She was quiet. She didn't quite get what I was saying.

"Come back home." I said. "This is where you belong."

"But why?" She asked. I had to be honest now. I couldn't leave her hanging anymore. It was time to open up.

I held her face. "Because I can't take it anymore. I can't take the emptiness, the silence, the loneliness...none of it. I'm not strong enough. I want your love. I want your care and attention. I'll die without you. I need you." I confessed. I let it out. I felt lighter, but this was only the beginning. She waited to hear more. Her eyes widened with anticipation. Her mouth was slightly opened and her eyes were wide. Her eyes became teary.

this one can actually melt any rock...

whatever suhani said..

how she admitted her feelings and that they will never change..

i hated the fact of suhani working..

uski laoptop wali presentations hi theek thi..

i just want yuvraj to like be the guardian angel for her ... and vice versa for a pair .. lol :P

you got that baby...

pyar kabhi bhi kum ni hota

na bdalta hai if its true..

agar wo bdal jaye

kum hojaye

toh wo pyar ni hota..

ssel show mai bhi yeh baat mai bht appreciate karti hoon that unho ny leap ni dia suhani nay kuch aur ni kia bcz she loves him alot.. and you are the master to polish these little things...

for yuvani its true love..

and true love waits...

i know when yuvraj admits his love he will be deeper than suhani in the show...

bcz that guy takes time

and what yuvraj said ...

M.E.S.M.E.R.I.Z.I.N.G

i am mesmerized...

yeh choti choti batein

he not even said i love you

but his feelings

usnay sab sach bola and there is more...

awww..

i am aaww struck

like seriously...

he wants her to care for him

uspay dehan dai

to love him ...

"Come back home." I said. "This is where you belong."

a big fat hug for this...

it touched me...

*tarap tarap kay iss dil say aah nikalti rahi

iss point pay ruki ku 'aisa kia gunah kia humnay????????

babie you better update...

i am truly genuinely deeply irrevocably in love with you behna.. and the way you write..

i have already told you that you are one of my favorite writer

A because you are wonderfully talented at writing and explaining

B because you write on my yuvani and i know for a matter of fact whatever might you write it will be beautiful

and latsly

c because you are my behna dil ka rishta hai humara...

ummahhh

Originally posted by: yanks28

wait babe it's coming in an hour i promise.

"I can't live without you..." I said. My voice trailed off. It was very difficult for me to open up about what I felt for her. I didn't know how to let those feelings go. I was possessive and protective of them, as I was of her. Confessing what I felt for her was similar to having my teeth pulled. I had kept it in for so long. I tried to let it all go. She deserved to hear it. "I was alive before I met you Suhani, but I wasn't living...not even close." I said. "I think I was just moving through life...I wasn't aware of anything. I wasn't aware of myself. I didn't know what it felt like when your heart beats. Now I'm aware of it. Now I know I have a heart. I am aware of the blood which pumps through my veins. Now I know what it feels like to stay awake all night thinking of one person even though you're exhausted. I am more alive than I ever was. You've woken me up."

She was speechless. I held her hands and knelt in front of her. She was sitting on our bed. I was on the floor. She looked into my eyes, giving me a half believing, half skeptical look. She looked like she would begin crying any second now.

"You're my reason to live." I said. That was it. I couldn't confess anything more. It was too personal. I didn't know how to let it go. It belonged to me and I was fiercely protective of it all. But this was the single biggest truth I could possibly confess to her. "You're my life. You're the center of my universe and my life revolves around you."

Her mouth opened slightly. She didn't speak. "Please come back home." I whispered. "Why didn't you tell me this before?" She asked. She was crying now. "How long have you known that you feel this way?"

"I don't know. It's all been beyond my control. I can't believe how deep they are. I can't explain it. I don't know what you've done to me. I can't call it love, it's like, I belong to you now..." I said. "Suhani, I had to tell you today since my keeping it in was hurting you. I don't know what is love. I still don't. If this is it, then it's a lot more powerful than what I imagined. This is like gravity. You're gravity, and I would float away without you. I am what I am because of YOU."

She stopped me.

"Were you jealous of Vikram?" She asked.

"Yes. I didn't like the fact that he just couldn't stop touching you. "

"So this means that you want to spend your life with me? You want me to be your wife, and no one else?"

"I want you for as long as possible, even longer. You're my wife and I only want you as my wife."

"Not a friend?"

"I want a wife now. My friend can wait." I said. I smiled. She smiled back wholeheartedly and looked down, shyly.

"Will you come back now and this time, not stay in Maa's room but ours?" I asked. She nodded. "But, I need to go back home and get my stuff. I think you and I need to talk to Mummy and Papa and explain some things to them." She said. I agreed with her.

"Wanna go now?"

"I think we should." She said.

We got ready to leave and just then Maa came out of her room and watched the two of us coming out of ours with the utter shock on her face.

She ran towards Suhani and grabbed her hand. "When did you come back home? Why didn't you wake me up? I've missed you so much. Why are you leaving again?" Suhani hugged Maa. Then Maa noticed the wound on her arm and my forehead.

"Oh no, I thought you two were better than this. Was there no other way to resolve your issues!? Suhani, you hit Yuvraj? Yuvraj, I thought I raised you to respect women!" She grabbed both of us by our ears.

"Oh no, Maa...we'll explain it all later but we didn't hit each other." I said. Maa let go of me and then slapped me.

"I should have slapped you a long time ago, Yuvraj!" She was furious. Suhani held her and calmed her down. "Maa, Yuvraj saved me. I was in a bad situation and he came there and saved me." She said.

"But you're going back home, aren't you? It means my son still hasn't learned his lesson. He skips meals and looks dejected without you but still doesn't have the guts to tell you how he feels? Yuvraj, as your mother, I'll do the honors. Suhani, he loves you and he's not man enough to admit it." She hit me again. Suhani stopped her.

"Maa, Maa, Maa! Calm down. Yuvraj told me he..." She paused. Maa looked at my face. I nodded.

"I told her everything, Maa. I was just taking her back home so we could talk to her parents, you know, formally, and I need to apologize to them." I said.

"Yes, and I need to pack my things and then I'll come back home." She said. Maa hugged me. "Thank you. You made your mother proud today." She said.

"Maa, go back to sleep now. When you wake up, Suhani will be there. I'm not letting her go anywhere again. Well, at least nowhere without me..." I said.

"I'm not sleeping! I'm going to wake Sharad up and tell him. I'm going to tell everyone that Suhani's back and Yuvraj loves her!" She jumped excitedly and walked off. Suhani and I went back to her house.

Suhani's POV:

Mummy and Papa were thrilled and had no questions. They gave us their blessings and I packed my clothes and we left. I couldn't believe what all had transpired tonight. I kept recalling every word Yuvraj had spoken to me. His confession was more heartfelt than anything I ever dreamed of. I just wanted to hear an "I love you too" from him all this time but whatever he told me blew me away. I kept staring at him in the car while he drove. He looked like a thousand ton weight had been lifted off his shoulders. He looked relaxed and happy. I felt a nervous anticipation for what would happen when we were alone. Tonight was the beginning of our relationship as husband and wife. Everything was out in the open now.

He reached and held my hand for a few seconds and smiled. "Are you happy?" He asked.

I nodded. We went home and to our room.

I had always imagined what it would be like if Yuvraj told me he loved me. How would it change our relationship? I got my answer fairly quickly. I wanted to unpack my things but he put his arms around me.

"You can unpack in the morning..." He said. His voice sounded different to me. He kissed my neck. I turned around and looked at him. He smiled. I smiled back but I couldn't maintain eye contact with him. He had never looked at me this way before so I wasn't used to it. He brought me closer and touched my face. He was holding me so tightly. I couldn't escape even if I want to.

He placed his finger under my chin, lifted my face and kissed my lips. I had waited for months for these moments, but right after this kiss, I realized that he craved it just as much as I did. He grabbed me and kissed me harder. I couldn't believe his intensity. It seemed like he was just as desperate for my touch as I was for his. He held my waist and our bodies were pressed together in an instant. His kisses reached my neck and shoulder. I felt his arms and back and ran my fingers through his hair and held him as close to myself as I could. My thin saree felt like no match for him as his hands pushed my pallu aside. It dropped from my shoulder and he kissed my shoulders.

We were breathless and still standing pressed against one another. I trembled each time I felt his fingers caress my waist. I pulled on his collar. He took his shirt off and threw it across the room. It felt like there was electricity in the air between us. I saw hunger in his eyes and felt it in his touch. He sucked on my lips. Somehow none of it felt like it was enough. I wanted all of him. He stopped and picked me up and carried me to our bed. He looked into my eyes the entire time. My heart beat doubled seeing his desire so openly on display. Between his desire and my desperate need for him, neither one of us would be able to stop tonight.

We kissed and my patience wore thinner with each kiss. Our foreheads touched and in between he paused for a moment.