YuvAni FF: Separated (both POVs) part 7. p17 End+note - Page 10

Created

Last reply

Replies

136

Views

37.3k

Users

21

Likes

304

Frequent Posters

divyareddy123 thumbnail
10th Anniversary Thumbnail Voyager Thumbnail
Posted: 10 years ago
#91
wow mehwu great updates
read both part 4 n 5 together its awesome
how can u stop at the scene
atlasy our hero started to confess
She waited to hear more. Her eyes widened with anticipation. Her mouth was slightly opened and her eyes were wide waiting for the next part so eagerly as suhani 😉
give us more and soon


yanks28 thumbnail
15th Anniversary Thumbnail Achiever Thumbnail + 2
Posted: 10 years ago
#92

The following 12 member(s) liked the above post:

maria_05, alyia2008, qwerty012, kishu789, sunshine33, Annu92, yusramazhar1, Zainy21, SM.Lopa, swetha10, shanakyasharan, rbb1,


Love you ALL. 🤗🤗🤗❤️

yusu1993 thumbnail
11th Anniversary Thumbnail Voyager Thumbnail + 3
Posted: 10 years ago
#93
👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏kia khoob likhti ho...
bari sundar dikhti hoo...



tumhay kaisay hum btaein
kay hum pagal hogye hain
parhkay yeh updateee..
mujhko dunia mil gai hai dil yeh khil gaya hai
tum jo mere sath ho ...



mai lovely gaiyaan
update yeh parhkay
update yeh parhkay...



WHAT A UPDATE...
mind blowing
mind boggling
total jhakasss...




👏👏👏





what did loved?

EVERY THING ...


what did i not love?

NOTHING ...





no no no there is something that really disturbed me that i will mention in the end of the review...









right now everything
is just

loveyyy
doveyyy...







there is something called genre ... not everyone really have that thing in them to write sad happy emotional .. fight sequence ... suspense to some extent the way you write it..
you can write anything...
any genre

still with the same impact...



i literally loved every single thing...

the start really made me sad because suhani was feeling miserable...
like that pyar ki uljhan ...


like i loved the fact that yuvraj nay usko aek baar vikram kay baray mai kaha and she was also suspecting him (his intentions) .. the kind of faith she has on yuvraj .. and the way you described it is commendable 👏




Was there more to Yuvraj's sudden change of heart about Vikram? At times my heart told me that Yuvraj might actually be jealous of him, but then, how was that possible?



awwwieee... she felt it but than how can yuvraj feel that way according to her..
wish she could get into his heart and see what more he wants to feel and do with suhani.. or she can actually get to your head .. because you are going to give us "50 shades of yuvani"



all that suspecting suhani did while vikram asked for dinner
and than her shocked out
freaked out self where she guessed that he actually lied to her
and instantly she messaged her husband
i mean all of it was mind blowing...


and the epic slap...
how dare that son of a bitch asked her to accompany him to his apartment and than he have that audacity to grab her ???? i mean where is yuvraj ( suhani's bf i vikram heads) lol




here comes epic-ness by the most fantastic writer i have ever come across



I was going to murder this guy. I got Suhani's message in the middle of dinner and bolted off.


its just like the show .
he do gets worried
hyper active
scared for her
its all on his face
but cvs don't gives him scenes to show it..

thankfully i have you
whol fulfills my wishes and makes me ultra happy..
you know you make me fall for him again and again ...
i am blessed to have you

tumnay aek kaniya ko khush kia hai.. tumhari sari muradein poori hoon behna...



I was scared to death, in all honesty. I arrived and saw what I had expected but hoped not to see. I caught Suhani right as she was about to stumble.



lut lia dil ...
the way he caught her
an the way she recognized the touch...
this is called
dil say mohabbat..
soul lover..
this is beautiful


She looked relieved to see me and hugged me tightly and I hugged her back. "Are you ok?" I asked. She looked completely distraught.



i actually am short of words because the whole sequence you have described amazingly ..
i mean i am going to do the detailing now...

these sudden hugs which you put in your work are like bunch of flowers showered on me and yuvanians i hope :P but me definitely... i mean i always wanna see it in the show.. but you wrote like really in real.. i could imagine it.. dil full hai for now...




behna the dialogues said by vikram were so good
dekho mujhy uskay dialogues bhi bht pasand aye... antagonist rocked for me in this one...
i mean all of those lines that suhani was leading him on were like on point...

wah kia bola hai...

isay yuvraj ka demag toh khatrab hona hi tha ...


No, buddy, you just can't take no for an answer. When a girl says no, it means NO." I said.


such a gentlemen ... !


miss writer apki isi adaa pay toh hum fida hain...

you never miss to show yuvraj's actual traits ...
he is always a gentlemen ...


"I thought my wife had a pathetic choice of friends, but you've just proven me wrong."




i was actually waiting to read that how are you gonna pen down him telling that moron that suhani is his wife.. but the way you actually spill the beans in vikrams plate was pretty different.. i loved it... the above line by you.. i have read it in your yuvani double dinner one shot.. tabh bhi i adored yuvraj and appreciated you and ab bhi balkay right now i am adoring you more... i love when yuvraj shoves off the reality in suhani's face that her friends are pathetic.. i mean i want you to write a shot where snail is also there and yuvraj actually tells infront of both friends ...
that he hates the fact that snail is a part of his wife's life...
he wants to throw or erase snail forever..
bcz wo uskay paon kay nakhun kay barabar bhi ni hai

(sorry i can do p.h.d on this... )




I managed to punch him a few more times before Suhani stopped me. He threw another punch at me and his body barreled towards me. Suhani was in the way and he shoved her aside so hard that she fell down. She fell on her arm and I saw her grimace. This just set me off like nothing else.

"You're in deep trouble now." I said. I pushed him down




wohooo

wooopieee

i actually wanna cheer my dude ..


behna kis kis cheez keliye apko appreciate karo...





lafzo mai nahi hota jo byann..

likh kay yeh update tunay wo kar dia... 😳



"Yuvraj I think you need stitches. Stop...you're bleeding heavily." She was crying. She tried to pull me towards her. I held her face. "Are you alright?" I hugged her. I kissed her forehead. "I was so worried when I got your message." I said. She tried wiping my face with some tissue. Vikram was down on the ground, writhing in pain. "This is my wife, Suhani Birla. No one knows her better than me. She's mine...and you're never going to touch her with your dirty hands again." I said.





awesomely written...
the hug
the forhead kiss..
i mean i guess usay bolnay ki zarorat bhi nahi hai
he loves her so much
these little gestures you have wrote...
i am flattered by you





I held Suhani's hand and we left. Suhani was crying silently. I touched her face. Inside the car, I looked at her arm and she had a pretty bad scab on her elbow. She'd fallen with all her weight on her arm. "I should go back and murder this guy. I can't believe I considered him a friend. He acted so professionally. What a bas***d. I want to cut him into..." I stopped when Suhani hushed me.



angry mr yuvraj birl a.. is my favorite...
anger makes him looks hawt..
kash wo wapis jata :P
but he actually broke so much in vikram making him emasculated (sorry)




intelligent toh hum itnay hain
kay yeh mauka best hai biwi ko uskay ghar wapis laiky janay ka..
ghumao gari udhr
i love you dude..
the room entry
and again a hug..


nachooo saray jee phar kay ...

😛



"You don't know how I felt when I got your message. I was so scared."

"I was scared too." She confessed. "I want you to know something. I love you and I'll love you for the rest of my life, no matter what happens." She said. She continued crying and kissed my cheek. I melted. I wiped her tears.

"I know you love me..." I said. Our foreheads touched. "I know that I don't deserve you but I'm really selfish, so I want what's mine. I said. She was quiet. She didn't quite get what I was saying.

"Come back home." I said. "This is where you belong."

"But why?" She asked. I had to be honest now. I couldn't leave her hanging anymore. It was time to open up.

I held her face. "Because I can't take it anymore. I can't take the emptiness, the silence, the loneliness...none of it. I'm not strong enough. I want your love. I want your care and attention. I'll die without you. I need you." I confessed. I let it out. I felt lighter, but this was only the beginning. She waited to hear more. Her eyes widened with anticipation. Her mouth was slightly opened and her eyes were wide. Her eyes became teary.




this one can actually melt any rock...
whatever suhani said..
how she admitted her feelings and that they will never change..
i hated the fact of suhani working..
uski laoptop wali presentations hi theek thi..
i just want yuvraj to like be the guardian angel for her ... and vice versa for a pair .. lol :P
you got that baby...


pyar kabhi bhi kum ni hota
na bdalta hai if its true..
agar wo bdal jaye
kum hojaye
toh wo pyar ni hota..
ssel show mai bhi yeh baat mai bht appreciate karti hoon that unho ny leap ni dia suhani nay kuch aur ni kia bcz she loves him alot.. and you are the master to polish these little things...

for yuvani its true love..
and true love waits...
i know when yuvraj admits his love he will be deeper than suhani in the show...
bcz that guy takes time




and what yuvraj said ...


M.E.S.M.E.R.I.Z.I.N.G

i am mesmerized...

yeh choti choti batein
he not even said i love you
but his feelings
usnay sab sach bola and there is more...
awww..
i am aaww struck
like seriously...
he wants her to care for him
uspay dehan dai
to love him ...



"Come back home." I said. "This is where you belong."


a big fat hug for this...
it touched me...









*tarap tarap kay iss dil say aah nikalti rahi
iss point pay ruki ku 'aisa kia gunah kia humnay????????



babie you better update...


i am truly genuinely deeply irrevocably in love with you behna.. and the way you write..
i have already told you that you are one of my favorite writer
A because you are wonderfully talented at writing and explaining
B because you write on my yuvani and i know for a matter of fact whatever might you write it will be beautiful

and latsly

c because you are my behna dil ka rishta hai humara...




ummahhh








yanks28 thumbnail
15th Anniversary Thumbnail Achiever Thumbnail + 2
Posted: 10 years ago
#94

Originally posted by: SM.Lopa

Wow another AWESOME update 👏
The best thing about your FF is that its only about YuvAni and no SoDa. I was feeling so low because of their negativity but now it seems I'm recharged again. Thank you 😃

In the beginning Suhani was crying. I felt so sad for her. I can't imagine tears in her eyes. It hurts me.

Wow Suhani was wearing blue Sari. She must be looking so gorgeous and attractive
I can't blame Vikram. This guy was so irritating throughout. I felt like to jump into your FF and kill this wannabe rapist.

But then the entry of our HERO 👏 Wah Wah Wah what an entry full on heropanti...I just loved this part. I really want to see Yuvraj fight for his wife like this in the show as well. Aww its a dream 👏

I was cheering for our prince. Gosh Sahil was looking so handsome while bleeding and all sweating. Hot Man hon...then Suhani came to stop him. Total hindi movie feeling. Pure entertainment Appi 👏 Just loved the way he boldly said this is my wife Suhani Birla... she's mine.

And then just ❤️ ❤️ ❤️
They were in their bedroom hayeee Just love for this scene. Gosh he confessed wow wow wow...Sweetest and simplest confession ever that directly touched my heart and just like Suhani right now my mouth is open, my eyes are wide and waiting to hear some more from Yuvraj. Just GREAT ❤️

Update soon please. And thanks for updating fast fast.



wish the writers gave Yuvraj a chance to be her hero on the show I loved this confession as well...the word love isn't everything. i think what he said means that he more than loves her, she kind of owns him.😳
yanks28 thumbnail
15th Anniversary Thumbnail Achiever Thumbnail + 2
Posted: 10 years ago
#95

Originally posted by: rbb1

So part 4 was good as all of the updates lol him saving Anjalis number as Suhanis annoying co worker, aww she was wearing a simple purple saree hope we get to see her in a saree soon in the show

Wow suhani and Yuvraj both getting jealouse it's good but Vikram doesn't seem to be a nice guy he seems creepy from what Yuvraj think and I think Yuvraj might be right suhani better becareful she is naive but needs to be smart

Poor anjali she likes Yuvraj and doesn't even know he is not interested and that he is married

Aww bhavna and suhani meet after so long that's nice and Yuvraj staying with suhani till bhavna came to take suhani was just a gentlemen thing to do, I like how he made an excuse to stay to suhani

Wow he is angry and threw a glass out of the window angry young man at last he didn't wake up poor Sharad but if he did we would have gotten to see Sharad tease him a big

Glad they are meeting each other and talking a bit, if he really misses her he can text her no one can stop him from texting her



Awww Ray you gave me 2 separate reviews and both are so long. 😳 I am glad you liked the way he stayed with Suhani till Bhavna came...he was watching out for her safety.
yanks28 thumbnail
15th Anniversary Thumbnail Achiever Thumbnail + 2
Posted: 10 years ago
#96

Originally posted by: rbb1

Part 5 is fab wow Yuvraj fighting for his wife is brillant

Yuvraj not caring that he is hurt but still hitting Vikran wow

Yuvraj scared when he read Suhanis message awww

Yuvraj wanting to go back and kill Vikram good thinking

Suhani texted Yuvraj that's was a good move

Suhani standing up for herself was great

Aww suhani was scared Yuvraj was hurt bad

Suhani dresses up she needs to dress up better when she goes on dates with Yuvraj

Vikram is creepy and disgusting she was being a friend and he took it the wrong way what an a**

I'm glad Yuvraj took suhani to their home and best thing is they went to their room that too after so long and it's good suhani asked him why he wants her back she needs to come back with a reason

It's fab Yuvraj confessing and telling her how much he misses her etc

Now next part he better tell her how much he loves her and do something romantic for her

Can't wait to read the next part



Yuvraj needs to take her on dates pehle toh then she will dress up 😡 Yeah Vikram is just one of those guys with a big ass ego...he thought she wouldn't turn him down. A lot of creeps like him do exist...they can't take no for an ans


yanks28 thumbnail
15th Anniversary Thumbnail Achiever Thumbnail + 2
Posted: 10 years ago
#97

Originally posted by: swetha10

Awesome update..

erhh vikram so creepy!!! luved yuvraj...
awww suhani's confession was really sweet..
finally yuvraj confessed tht he misses her..
eagerly waiting for the next one.. continue soon



Thanks Swetha...so nice of u to comment for every part...glad u liked their confessions.
yanks28 thumbnail
15th Anniversary Thumbnail Achiever Thumbnail + 2
Posted: 10 years ago
#98

Originally posted by: bfsams

Sorry for the late review.

It was awesome...awesome...awesome...I just loved it Mehwish 👏...I have no words to praise you👏👍🏼...this is a gift from Allah to u...


The phone convo. btw suhani & Pratima...Yuvraj seeing suhani without wearing sindoor & mangalsutra...warning her about vikram...missing her...sweet confession from suhani...and the confession from yuvraj.😉... all are fabulous.

I held her face. "Because I can't take it anymore. I can't take the emptiness, the silence, the loneliness...none of it. I'm not strong enough. I want your love. I want your care and attention. I'll die without you. I need you." I confessed. I let it out.

This confession killed me.😉 I hope u continue from this in the next part.

I'm willing to see this character of Yuvraj in the show. But unfortunately we are not getting it now, hopefully we will see him soon like this.

Eagerly waiting for the next update and I love you Mehwish.😳❤️



It's ok Benazir, I'm happy u like my FFs too.😊 I really hope we get a confession this deep and touching on the show. 😭
yanks28 thumbnail
15th Anniversary Thumbnail Achiever Thumbnail + 2
Posted: 10 years ago
#99

Originally posted by: shanakyasharan

part 6,7,8,9,10 de dijiye madam😳



ok willl try my best 😳

Originally posted by: sunshine33

just lovely...quietly anticipating the next chapter dear!



ok thanks hun😃
rbb1 thumbnail
19th Anniversary Thumbnail Elite Thumbnail + 4
Posted: 10 years ago

Originally posted by: yanks28



Awww Ray you gave me 2 separate reviews and both are so long. 😳 I am glad you liked the way he stayed with Suhani till Bhavna came...he was watching out for her safety.

you gave us such brillant updates you deserve two different reviews and yes it's nice he thinks about her safety
Edited by rbb1 - 10 years ago

Related Topics

Top

Stay Connected with IndiaForums!

Be the first to know about the latest news, updates, and exclusive content.

Add to Home Screen!

Install this web app on your iPhone for the best experience. It's easy, just tap and then "Add to Home Screen".