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Posted: 15 years ago

Haal Bura Hai

Mere Dil Sey Khilwad Huaa Hai,

Poocho Na Haal Kitna Bura Hai..

Har Rishta Ab Jhutha Lagta hai,

Har kona dil ka Khali Dikhta hai,

Har Aasoo Khudko Hi Kosta hai,

Har Pal apni parchai dekh darta hai,

Pyaar Aaj Badnaam Hua hai,

Poocho Na Haal Kitna Bura Hai..

Kaisey Maine Uspar Vishvaas Kar Liya,

Kaisey Ussey Apna Dil Yunh Dey Diya,

Kaisey Uskey Chumtey hi Nikhar uthti thi,

Kaisey Taufon Ko pyaar Ki Saugaat Samajhti thi,

Pyaar Ka To Vajud Chaknachur Hua hai,

Poocho Na Haal Kitna Bura Hai..

Kyon Apney Shareer Ko ussey Chuney Diya,

Kyon Atma sey uski hun yeh tak keh Diya,

Kyon Banawati Baton sey Apna Sansaar Bun Liya,

Kyon Ek Dhokey Ko Vartaman Bhavishya Samarpit kiya,

Krodh, Dard Ka Angaar Phuta hai,

Poocho Na Haal Kitna Bura Hai..

Ab To Hazaar Tukdey huye Hain Dil key,

Ab To Ankhon key Asoo Reh gaye Sukhey,

Ab To chuney Ki yaadein Shareer to Jhulsarahi hai,

Ab To Pyaarkey palo ki hassi, khon key Asoo Rula rahi hai,

Vishvaas, Pyaar, Jeevan Ek sawaal bana hai,

Poocho Na Haal Kitna Bura Hai..

Kah Gaya Woh Mera Tumsang Ab jee bhar gaya hai,

Kah Gaya Woh Pasie tumpar bahut lutaye har pal ka Heesab kiya hai,

Kah Gaya Woh Aurosey milunga Pyaar ka Pura Maza Main Lunga,

Kah Gaya Woh Bavkuf nahi Jo Saari Umra ek hi Ladki key sang rahunga,

Dil Dukhta hai,Bhulna Chahta hai,

Bhul nahi Paata,Nafrat Jarur karta hai,

Haal Kuch Mera Aisa hai..

Bheed mey Tanhaee Mehsus Hoti hai,

Akeleypan Mey Beeta Kal Kahar dhaata hai,

Yaadein Raaton ki neend Udaa le jaati hai,

Sacch ka samna Din Ko Bojhil banati hai,

Haal Aisa hai,

Khud Ki Na Uski Hatya Ka Paap Kar Sakti hun,

Sisakti Roti nahi Sannatey khamoshi mey Jeeti hun.

............... Bhoomikauttam
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Posted: 15 years ago
Mind blowing !!!! 👏 👏 👏
You know what I love in your verses??? Their simplicity....Otherwise as I have told you before...Me and Poetry...ahh well...😆
And do you know why exactly I love your poems????
Because they do not depict some thing mushy about love or something very horrific or anything tooo patriotic....
They depict simple but important aspects....the problems which seem trivial but solving them can make a bigggg difference !!
Like here.....
Being Cheated in love happens with dont know how many girls...😭
The immature age, goody goody notions about love developed after reading novels and watching films...sugarcoated and fake promises, gifts leads to all this...
But the factor which play the most important role, i think, is not having frank behaviour with your parents and habbit of hiding things from them...
Your words did their assigned work and it really touched my heart....
you know what am I thinking???
Majhya aayushyat mi ekhadya jari asha mulila vaachvu shakley na, tar swatahla lucky samjen...😊
Ashaach chaaaann chaaan kavita lihit raha...tujhya nimmitta ne tari mi kavita vaachtey !!
Lotsss of luv,
mana.😊
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Posted: 15 years ago

Khud Ki Na Uski Hatya Ka Paap Kar Sakti hun,

Sisakti Roti nahi Sannatey khamoshi mey Jeeti hun.


Awesome < Mind Bowing And Superb ,Amazing well describe all emotions of the Girl , Dhokhe ka dard saaf dikh raha hai 😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭awesome bhoomi very nice poem thank you so much for pm i am glad to read 👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏

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Posted: 15 years ago

Originally posted by: Revolutionbreez

Mind blowing !!!! 👏 👏 👏

You know what I love in your verses??? Their simplicity....Otherwise as I have told you before...Me and Poetry...ahh well...😆
And do you know why exactly I love your poems????
Because they do not depict some thing mushy about love or something very horrific or anything tooo patriotic....
They depict simple but important aspects....the problems which seem trivial but solving them can make a bigggg difference !!
Like here.....
Being Cheated in love happens with dont know how many girls...😭
The immature age, goody goody notions about love developed after reading novels and watching films...sugarcoated and fake promises, gifts leads to all this...
But the factor which play the most important role, i think, is not having frank behaviour with your parents and habbit of hiding things from them...
Your words did their assigned work and it really touched my heart....
you know what am I thinking???
Majhya aayushyat mi ekhadya jari asha mulila vaachvu shakley na, tar swatahla lucky samjen...😊
Ashaach chaaaann chaaan kavita lihit raha...tujhya nimmitta ne tari mi kavita vaachtey !!
Lotsss of luv,
mana.😊

Hi Mana,
How nice to know the simplicty of the usage of words make u feel connected to the poem... glad to know that ... I think in poems i get real more..there is no need for me to have a happy ending but get in flow of the topic inmind..I guess Poems are better way at that..in stories i dont i dont feel i shoudl as well.. My poems are a form of story tellign in their little wya and when i get responses liek urs i feel good that the concept whcih was touched and tried to brought out was able to soemwhere connect..
Thanks for pointing out those feels nice that my poems touch a chord with reality with simple words..
I guess fallin gin love itself has aspects which are very very difficult and when u fall in love with the wrogn person its worst.. people show how in film or serials or stars leave one boyfriend and than can get someone else..but in real life.. and for middle class girl its not easy to forget those memoreis, forgive her mistake of choice and to be able to take chance at LOVE again.. it takes lots of time to pass by and loads of support of friends,
feels good to get ur response on this one.. i have felt there is a style of addign verses here which r for me a bit different than my revious ones.. always nervous when none have read and when i got ur comment i was at ease seriously..
Agaa me Majhya Ayushyat ashi Mulgi pahili ahey Ani majhi maitrin ahey mahnun tila sangitla to mulga borobar nahi , khup chinta pan hott challee hoti ,ticha jeevan pudhey kass honaar.. ek ardha divas tichyashi dicussion madhey vayaa gela..pann tichaa vishvas majyha bolnyavar navhtach..ani Amchi maitri tutli..
Agaa jevhaan me lihu shaktey malla vatatay tu sudha lihu shaktey... yete me
Bhoomi
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Posted: 15 years ago

Originally posted by: monikaseth

Khud Ki Na Uski Hatya Ka Paap Kar Sakti hun,

Sisakti Roti nahi Sannatey khamoshi mey Jeeti hun.


Awesome < Mind Bowing And Superb ,Amazing well describe all emotions of the Girl , Dhokhe ka dard saaf dikh raha hai 😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭awesome bhoomi very nice poem thank you so much for pm i am glad to read 👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏

Hi Monu,
Glad Monu u liked this poem and felt the meotions touched u ... thanks U so much for appreciating these poems of mine.. it really means a lot for me.. and keep smilign always i know u look awesome wiht it.. luvu always..tc
bhoomi
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Posted: 15 years ago
"Haal bura hai" realy really nice bhoomi, ur so talented!
Mashallah 😊
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Posted: 15 years ago

Originally posted by: urooj92

"Haal bura hai" realy really nice bhoomi, ur so talented!

Mashallah 😊

Hi,
thanks a lot for appreciating my work. I am glad u liked my work. It feels so nice ot get to hear this from u , I dont know how talented i am..its just my thoguhts whcih i feel nice about rest its my readers who push my thought and my writing.. And am sure u too r talented enough.. coming from u is such a great feeling..
tc
bhoomi
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Posted: 15 years ago

Originally posted by: bhoomikauttam

Hi,
thanks a lot for appreciating my work. I am glad u liked my work. It feels so nice ot get to hear this from u , I dont know how talented i am..its just my thoguhts whcih i feel nice about rest its my readers who push my thought and my writing.. And am sure u too r talented enough.. coming from u is such a great feeling..
tc
bhoomi

no problem Smile
u really are very talented! i just find it so amazing how ur poems have so much meaning in them.. in every poem of urz the words are just so good, i just cant describe how beautiful ur poems are..
i dont knw anything about poetry, these poems that i share here are not mine, i dont write them, i just have a very big collection and like sharing it here.. But you I think are really really good and ur poems are just awesome!
keep up the good work!
God bless you Smile
take care
love
Urooj
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Posted: 15 years ago

Originally posted by: urooj92

no problem 😊
u really are very talented! i just find it so amazing how ur poems have so much meaning in them.. in every poem of urz the words are just so good, i just cant describe how beautiful ur poems are..
i dont knw anything about poetry, these poems that i share here are not mine, i dont write them, i just have a very big collection and like sharing it here.. But you I think are really really good and ur poems are just awesome!
keep up the good work!
God bless you 😊
take care
love
Urooj

Hi ,
Really nice to know from u , u enjoy the meanign in my peotry..sometimes i wonder if my written words can be called poems too..hehh but thanks for makign me know my work is much appreciated and makes so much sense to read and enjoy. U know i never read poetry that much as sometimes couldnt understnad the heavy usage of words.. now i enjoy reading and have also enjoyed knowing the emanign s of words..
have read few of the poems u have posted.. its great to read other work and know the perspective of different people many times the emotions are the same..
thanks so much for encouraging me .. i have posted all my work here and have enjoyed shring my work with my friends here.. its good u learn each day adn thoguhts sharing on sical issue makes one aware of so many happenings.. poetry is a short way in little time to go throguh many emotions deep and true if words are put across in proper way..
have a good day dear..tc
Bhoomi
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Posted: 15 years ago

Hey Bhoomi I'm Just Speechless Yaar

Very Well Written MIndblowinG Awsome Great 👏👏👏👏👏
Hat's Off For You Keep WritinG And SharinG
Thanks
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