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Posted: 17 years ago
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oh my goooooooood oh my goooooooooood oh my good surrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrr🤣its threee thrity am in the night and am going a nutter sitting here reading your fic and updating myself with it🤣

goooooooooooood i must giving u a standing ovaiton on your writing skills surrrrrrrrr👏this is an outstanding piece of work truely truely truelyyyyyyyyyyyy outstandingggg👏👏👏 i mean i am just on the sixth part right now and i had to sotp my self form going further coz i had to rpely soooooooooooo much for these parts only but am so dying toooooooooo read aageeeeeeeeeeeeeeee😳😳😳oh my god this is sooooo so gripping and u just wana og on reading and reading😳😳am soooooo happy i am reading so many parts together😳didn't have to wait loong for the next chap😳😳😳see thats the benifit for being a totla sleepyhead😆😳

i wld tell u honestly mere eyes automatically skipped the t and r parts😆😆but the ay parts are juuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuust☺️☺️☺️oh my gooooooood why are they so cuteeeeeeeeeeeeeee??☺️☺️

and what awesme dialouges maaaaaaaan🤣🤣🤣..tumhare brain ke tukade kar ke usmain se hay nikal ke cow ko khila dungyyyyyyy🤣oh my god oh my gooooooood🤣🤣🤣insanes ka masehaaaaa🤣🤣🤣madness ki mallikaaaaaa🤣shit shit shit and i loveeeeeeeeeeeeeeee all the dhin tadak dhin notes oyu have given🤣

and awwwwwwwwwww in th eend of part fouuuuuuur☺️☺️☺️just loved loooooooooooooooved looved the way u described yuvi's feleings☺️☺️i mean yeeeeeeeeah he wld hav bene so not okay with giving HIS guitaar to someone else and he wld hav been so angleeeeeee but what wld irk him more was that admiring look in ahsi's eyes which wasn''t for him but for osmeone else...☺️...awww....and yes ENVY is the word its so the word he would so hav been envious of nay guy who becomes the object of her apploud coz he knows that her applouds don't come just aise hi they wld come straight form her heart and wld come only if she really thought he deserved it...☺️☺️

and then in the next part in cnateen where he was allllllll lost in his own world or rather in HEr world where he could see and hear only her voice only her faceee...☺️☺️...that too was shoooooooooooooo cuteeeeee...☺️☺️

and i looooooooooooooooooved this one line u wrote in one of the parts where ahsi finally agrees to be yuvi's partner in the project and shes looking at sam's eyes and thinking how cutee he is and then she looks at yuvi's eyes and a shiver runs down her spineeeeeeeeeee...☺️☺️☺️....oh my god....this is it...this is what love is......☺️...they are unaware ignorant or in an utter state of denial but these small things are so sooo soo proff enough that they are smitten by each other..☺️...i mean she getting a shiver by looking at someone's eyes hten it has to be yuvi's eyes where she always tries to find a refleciton of herself..☺️☺️

and oh my god that ahsi sonya part waaaaaaaaas🤣mohatarma meri ilteja toh suniyeeeeeeeee🤣aapse mulakaat ka luft uthane aayi hun🤣shucksssssss shucks and umraoo jaaaaaaaaaan🤣oh my god usually ahsi is the one to send her mum into a totla toss but osnya killed her this timeeeeee🤣this was so amazing sur so so amazing i just adoreeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee the momyy dotty jodi like hellllllllll😳😳

i must again say sur awesme awesme awesme awesmeeeeeeee😳😳😳its so well written that i could visualize every single sceneeeeeeee😳😳😳and am soooooooooooo glaaaaaaaaaad u haven't kept ay as a couple😳😳lthe fic might be a "remix" oriented but all i can see is ay ay ay and ayyyyyyy😳😳and trust me am loving every single bit of thisssssss😳😍

thaaaaaaanx for this awesome ficcy sur thaaaaaaaaaanx soo soo much and kepe continuing soooooooon soooooooon soooooooooooon now that i wld finsih the rmeaining part by tonight itsef i so wnt be bale to waitttttttttt for the next part so u better ocntinue jaldi jaldiiiiiiiii😃😳

loveee youuuuuuuuuuuu

big huggyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyy

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Posted: 17 years ago
#92
okieeeeeeeeee just finished reading the last part and belive meeeeeeeeee am so not in a state of mind to right abhiiiiiiiiiiii

i just wana go sleeeeeeeeeeeeeep and have a goooooooood night full of ay dreamssssssssssssssss oh my god surrrrrrrr that was romaaaaaaaaaaaaance at its very beshtttttttttttt i wld write loads abt eveyr single expresison u hav described in it but tomorooooooooo for now am offfffffffffffff into my ay dream worllllllld

loooooooooooooooooooved the fic surrrrrrrr seriously loved it hats off to youuuuu totally totally hats offfffff and yeaaaaaaaah

CONTINUEEEEEEEEE SOOOOOOOOOON PLEASEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE
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Posted: 17 years ago
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Uv n ashi hold their breath....uv moves closer to ashi...and into the shadows....they r standing absolutely close to each other...the undercurrent of anxiety builds up sparks b/w them...they look into each others eyes...savouring the moment....reading thru each others minds and hearts and souls.....
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dis is damn romantic 😍 o surrrrrr i luuuuuv uuuuuuuu🤗🤗🤗 i jst luv uuuu🤗i mena sid is da most romantic part of da whole fic☺️ da way u ryt naa is jst 😍really reaLLLY LYk it😍 ooooo i jst wish dey always remain der besides dat wall standin clooooose 2 each other ☺️☺️breathing each others breath☺️n starin each other☺️☺️☺️awwww surrrrr ur jst amazingggggg 😳 i reallly love uuuuu 😳 suurrr 😳 n i also luv ur ficcyyyyy 😳 😳 muahhhh 😳
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Posted: 17 years ago
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hahaaaa priyaaa!! just read ur reply n saw sid written their n i was shocked ki i am the most romantic part of the whole fic???? then i thought mebbe sid of remix! n after dat understood u misspelled dis wid sid!!! lolzzzzzzzz 😆


sssssssssssuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuurrrrrr when r u continuing??? 😡 😡 y do u make us w8 like hell dat??? i feel like running after u but then u give us such awesum parts dat we 4get our anger! 😳 😳 plz yaar continue sooooooonnnnn!!! plzzzz 😳 😳 😳
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Posted: 17 years ago
#95
Oh gosh!!!Thanx sooooo much ppl!!!I dont know wat to say!!U guyz have been sooooo sweet to me n appreciated my efforts..aur main hoon ki or rather my net connection... 😡 Im so so so soooooooooo sorry ppl!!!!Anyways...thanx a ton ton to to everyone!!!Smriti n priya n..devilz_here(Forgive me ive got an awful memory wen it cums to remembering stuff like names n numbers...... 😕 )

But heres the next chapter..i hope u guyz like it!!!
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Posted: 17 years ago
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This isa lil treat for the tia ranveer fans...hope ive kept up to the romance spirit!!!

Chapter 10
They party away and have loads of fun.....
Tia and ranny are dancing separately but their eyes are only on each other...{Flute n naa jaane kaise in background...}
Tia smiles coyly as ranveer gives her all lover boy looks from across the dance floor.....

they both dream....The place is empty.....its only the two of them...tia and ranveer.....
they walk towards each other......and hold hands....ranveers hand snakes onto tias waist and she holds onto his shoulder...and they begin dancing....they dance together.....to the soft melody of the song....they sway together to the soft notes of melodious music....
(Remeber...this is a dream sequence...!!!!)
Suddenly tias woken out of her dream...by vrinda:Tia!!Kahaan khoi hui ho???She spots ranny n says..ooooo....ranveer ke khayaalon mein na???
Tia blushes but doesnt say anything...
vrinda:Arrey tia..is mein sharmaane ki kya baat hai???accha go...dance with him...
tia:NO vrinda!!!!!
Vrinda:Of course yes tia!!!Jaao na!!Isse pehle ki koi aur aa jaaye go!!!
She pushes tia ahead...tia tentatively takes a step forward and starts walking towards ranveer....she smiles at him:Ranveer...can tia have a dance with you??
Ranveer:Smiles n takes tias hand n they go onto the dance floor...
they talk as they r dancing...
Ranveer:Tia..humein laga tha ki aap humare poochne ka wait karengi...
tia:Kisliye??
Ranny:Dance ke liye...
Tia:Oh puh-leez ranveer..Tia pooche ya tum...baat toh ek hi hai na...n waise bhi yeh important nahin hai ki kisne kisse poocha...important yeh hai ki...
Ranny:...ki hum dono ek doosre ke saath hain..rite??
Tia laughs:Rite!!
Ranny:Tia..hum toh bas yehi chahte hain ki aap isi tarah se humare saath rahe...
Tia:GIggles..dont worry ranveer..tia chahe bhi toh tumhe chodke nahin jaa sakti...filhaal toh bilkul nahin...
Ranny:Matlab???
Tia:Giggles again..matlab..tia ka bracelet tumhari shirt mein atak gaya hai!!Laughs loudly!!!
Ranny looks sheepishly at tia:Arrey...tia...
Tia stops him:Its ok ranveer mazaak tha...tia tumhe chodke kabhi nahin jaayegi..
Ranny smiles:Waise tia...aapko nahin lagta ki aap aajkal kuch zyaada hi mazaak kar rahi hain??Kahin yeh...ashi ke saath rehne ka asar toh nain hai??
Tia:OH ranveer!!Ab tia tumhe kya batae...Tia ko us ashi ki wajah se kya kya nahin jhelna padta hai!!!
Ranny:kyun kya hua???
Tia:Pata hai...aaj subah usne apni towel tia ke dressing table par itni zor se feki ki tia ka moisturinsing lotion uspe gir gaya....
n jab tia ne use daanta toh kehti hai...(imitating ashi).so sorry timbo...woh kya hai na ki tumhari koi bhi cheez dikhti hai na..toh my hands reflex mein wanna try n destroy them...
aur jab shaam mein use us towel ki zaroorat padi toh uspe cream laga tha isliye usne tia ki towel se apna face wipe kar liya!!!!!!
Ranny:Ha ha ha...toh kya hua..face hi toh wipe kiya na...
Tia:Haan...lekin face pe itni matti thi!!!
Ranny:Matti??!!!
Tia:Haan..mud...woh punk ek mud fight kar ke aayi thi..leo ke saath....woh usse milne aaya tha na...
Ranny cant control his laughter!!!Ha ha ha..
Tia:Ranveer!!Tia ki itni buri haalat hai aur tum has rahe ho???
Ranny:Ha ha ha...arrreeyy..ha ha..nahin tia....ha ha ha...hum aappe nahin has rahe the....hum toh yeh soch ke has rahe the ki jab sonia aunty n sumeet sir ki shaadi ho jaayegi tab aap dono ek hi ghar mein reh kar bechare aunty n sir ka toh jeena mushkil kar dengi!!
Tia:Not funny ranveer...waise ashi aur uv wapas aaye ya nahin???


Ashis meanwhile busy dancing with....vrinda!!he he he...vrinda was feelin all lonely n mopy so ashi pulled her onto the dance floor n she was twirling away to glory!!
uv meanwhile was busy admiring her from a distance...he thought to himself....
Us bet ko lekar ashi abhi bhi mujhe maaf karne ko tayaar nahin hai...aisa kya karun..kya karun aisa ki use mere pyaar pe yakeen ho jaaye...kaise use convince karun ki...ki mera pyaar saccha hai..kaise...
he looks away from her..unable to stare at her without a pain welling up within him...
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Posted: 17 years ago
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And now Bonus!!!I felt soooo guilty for makin u ppl wait ki i thought ill post another chapter!!!! so here it is....Comedy ka tadka!!!!
Chapter 11
k so the partys over n all r returning to maurya...Sid unfortunately is pretty high n drunk...so uv n ashi are tryin to make him walk straight n not make noise....the others are walking up front...
Ashis huffing n puffing as they enter mauyas gates...Hey BHaggu!!huff.....huff....Mujhe nahin pata tha ki yeh dodo ...huff....itna bhaari hoga!!Kya khata hai!!???
Uv:Ladkiyon ke thappad..huff...tabhi toh...huff...huff....iski skin...huff..buffalo ki tarah ho gayi hai...
Sid:Oh watta babe!!oh watta babe!![Hes singing actually....]
Uv:Shut up sid!!!
Sid:Okieee...n very conviniently proceeds to remove his shirt...
Uv:Sid!!U dufus!!Kya kar rahe ho!!???
Sid:arreeeyyy..[The extra letters are to emphasize on his slurry speech!!].....tumm hhii neee toh kahaa naa...ssshhhhirrtt UP!!!tohh maaiinnn ttooohh...
Ashi:Hey Bhaggu!!Main tumse kahoongi pants down toh tum woh bhi karoge???
Sid:Okiieee.....shakes his head n takes a hold of his belt meaning to remove it!!!!!
Uv grabs hold of him..Dude!!!dude...stop it all right....STOP it..
Sid salutes at uv n says...yesss shhirr!!!
Ashi:Ab tum ruk kyun gaye??Chalo!!!
Sid:Uv ne kahaan naaa....SHTOP!!!he says pushing his palm right onto uvs face!!!
Sid...sid....sid bro...isse pehle ki jumbo aake humari band bajaa de...plz plzzz yahaan se chalo!!Uv says joining his hands and bending his head before sid...
Sid looks at this and holds up his hand to give aashirwaad...Sadaa suhaagan rahoo beti!!He blurts out!!
Uvs totally mad at him now and goes to grab his collar and give him a punch on his nose!!But ashi stops him...Uv!!uv...relax...cyco mat bano..agar isne aur zor se chillana shuru kar diya na...
Sid:Oh waatttt a Baaabeeeeeee!!!!!!!!!Hey babyyyyy....
Ashi:Toh teeno pakde jaayenge...baaki sab abhi tak hostel pahunch gaye honge...Abhi isko lekar chalo!!!
they go towards sid...
Sid:Yeah Babyyyy!!!ooooooo....ooooo.....ooooo{Imitating himesh wid hand up in d air holding imaginary mike...}
Uv:Sid..
Sid:kkya hhai...(talking as if nose is blocked)...Sorry...kkyyaaa haiii uv dude...
Uv:Tumhe laddu khilana hai..
Sid:Ladduuuuu..wowwwww.....khilaaooo khilaooo
Uv:Say aah..
Sid:AAAHHHHHH.....
n Uv stuffs an handkerchief in his mouth and ashi quickly pins his hands at the back and they both drag him back to mauryas building...
On the way Sids cell drops off...but uv n ashi dont notice...sid starts jumping up n down looking at his cell...trying to tell the 2 that his cell got left behind...
Ashi:Oh ho...Fish without water ki tarah tadfadaana band karo sid!!Wat is it.??
Uv spots the cell...Ashi...Sid ka cell gir gaya peeche..plz jaake utha do..tab tak main ise le jataa hoon...

ashi goes back..
Hey BHaggu!!Shes muttering to herself..Yeh sid ko toh main nahin chodungi...Bends down n picks up the cell...Khud ke brains mein croc ke eggs hain...hum sabko bhi cyco banaa dega....says looking at the fone..n then starts walking back to the building...
But unfortunately for her...sumones see her.....sumones watching her....from a hidden window...That person is watching her every move...and a sadistic smile spreads across their face...Who do u think this person is???
Find out in my next chapter!!!!!Till then keep guessing!!!!!!!

hope u liked it ppl!!do give me ur comments n suggestions!!
Luv
Sur
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Posted: 17 years ago
#98
Great work Sur 👏 and that sid part was totally hilarious 😆 aur ashi uv ko cyco nahi banane ko kah rahi hai jabke she always thinks he is a cyco lagta hai ashi ki feelings bhi strong ho rahi hai 😉 😳 😳 and who's that man please itna suspense mat create kar jaldi reviel kar
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Posted: 17 years ago
#99
Hey thanx a lot gungun!!Chalo kisi ne toh padha!!! 😉 😆 im glad u liked it!!!n dont worry...suspense khulega..intezaar ka fal meetha hota hai..rite??But ill definetly cont soon!!!Thanx!! 😃
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Posted: 17 years ago
hey surrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrr hillarious part yaar! gr8 work 👏 n as gungun said sid's part is really very funny! n ashi-yuvi toh pehle se hi ek doosre ke liye psycho n whacko hai!ryt?? 😳 😳 😳 sid unhe kya banayega! 😆 😆 😆 n who is spying ashi??? whoever he/she is... pitne ka plan bana rahe hai kya? plz continue soon yaar! u hav created suchha suspense ki now toh i can't w8! so plz do the good deed! 😉

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