Opposite Distracts:Part 3 on Pg. 4

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Posted: 16 years ago
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Helloooooo😳😳...me back to harass you all with another piece of my pen😆...but this time i am Seriously trying something totally different... i have been craving for innovation in my writing style and my genre too..so thats why u r seeing me continously bombarding you with new stuff😆😳

This essentially is an AY fic but it has a flavour of Remix in it...after watching yesterday's kahaani and seeing Priya-Pri together i was seriously hyperly unbelievably missing remix like hell..and moreover i have got a lot of requests for a remix fanfic..so i finally decided to give it a shot...its quite a challenge for me because this would revolve around so many different personalities{even those whom i might not like ever} and its definatly going to be a task to carve everyone's character without any bais on my part😆😆...
this is a dedication to the spirit of AY, to the spirit of Remix, which before season 2 was much more than just a particular love story, it was all about sharing dreams and hopes, of all possible relationships and friendships of unity and diversity and together attacking life
Do give it a try and tell me where to improvize on as always i don't have any plot for future updates as you all know i write on the spot whatever comes striaght from my heart😳
Credit For Title : Bindaas TV Show Kiss2Bang2's Caption
PPS.........oyeeeeeeeee all you insane peeps from the hottest station of the nation😳😳😳 i know u all wld be surprised by this one but trust your loons she has a whole package of goosey surprise waiting for you in this..one that would surely melt your heart...😳😳...but guys read this one unbaisedly because you guys are the only ones from whom i can expect an honest opinion on the whole thing in toto..hai bhaggu am getting really scared now so many FFs' on the roll and not even one nearing the finish line😕..i dunno am just like on this hyper craving for writing something new every other day..."touch wood"😉
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Part One
The scene is set in a very dangerous room, which can smolder into flames ANYTIME

One quarter of the room was painted in pretty pink and was stuffed (suffocated rather😆😆) with dozens of soft toys from bears to dolls from ellys to mickys it had it all and to add to the misery of 'someone' it also smelled of lipstick and nail paint of allovera and cucumber. In short it had all the ingredients to bring vomit to 'someone's' throat.

The only gleam in such a big disaster being a bedside photo frame, which hoisted the smiling face of 'someone's' best friend, his eyes asking her to take care of his princess. It was only because of Him and her Mom that this 'someone' was tolerating all the bimboness around her

But then this 'someone' was no less was she? She knew how to throw her weight around when the need be. Just a look at her quarter could make 'someone' else feel the acute paucity of oxygen in her lungs. What with the deadly red colored walls that symbolized blood, the gory reptile posters, heaps and heaps of mashed clothes that did not even had the aroma of a perfume (which in 'someone's' eyes stood 4th in her list of most hideous crimes anyone could ever commit), loads and loads of junk food which gave 'someone' nightmares full of pimples and obesity😆😆😆.

The only thing that stopped 'someone' from fainting was a collage full of beautiful memories and amidst those was the memory of the wedding day of her father, the day, which blessed her not just with a mother but also a sister and gave her the family she had alwas dreamt of having

And in between the two unmistakeably different corners lied the No Man's Land, a land especially carved out by their parents in order to maintain the MUCH NEEDED sanity of their brains😆😆 Thye had deliberatly colored this area in white because white is the only color which was made by blending all other clolors including "red" and "pink"
The room was unique and so were the two individuals living in it. They were poles apart and most of the time they were each others biggest itch but there were moments which melted their facade. In Red's case it was the sight of pink sleeping with her teddy tucked in one arm and a shy smile etched on her face which made it obvious that her Prince Charming was visting her in her dreams.....a sight that always made Red's eyes moist and made her heart vow to always preserve her happyness
And in Pink's case it was the sound of her snoring which woke her up every morning and made her see the shining sun flaming in her red hair...this was a moment when she always realized that the brigtness in Red's eyes had always reminded her of the sun's light, that there was some similarity between Red and the sun, that both filled her with a massive sense of security...a belief that at the end of the night dawn would break and both the sun and Red would be there to vanquish her darkness....
The strange ways how love surfaces is indeed very strange and amidst all this strangeness i have forgotten what the scene was all about so i would leave u all with this strange mush in your heart which is making you sigh with awe to see the deapth of love masked between both Red and Pink
Edited by smritisashi - 16 years ago
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Posted: 16 years ago
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smriti wht cn i say abt the fic yaar......itz so cute.............i m in luv wth ths fic firstly becoz it is remix fic..secondly its written by u n thirdly evry line is damm cute..........i m readin a remix fic after ages.........n luv the way u strted the fic yaar.....hve alwwys luved tia n ashi nok jhok.....bt ths so cute............n the way u addressed ashi as someone....so gud yaar...................the description of tia's part n ashi reacn to it is so hillarious..............bt the last two paras r the sweeetest.........the way u wrote thy were poles apart bt there ws smthng tht thy liked abt each other...........n sonu n sumeet part is also vry sweet.................really cute part..........continue soon👏
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Posted: 16 years ago
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omgggggggggggggg i absss luv dis smritiiiiiiii!!!!!!!!!!! red n pink!!!!!!!!!!! n hw v apt is d beginnin!!!!!!! n i luv bth d rooooms! deyr typiclly my typs frm ashi;s angl n d stuff toy bit frm tia's angl!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! n yayyyy uv dne it so beautflly!!!! white in b/w 4 d no mans land dat mkes red n pink 1!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! n hw uv shwn deyr 2 distinct persnalties yet one tru bond n fct in cmmon!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
gr88888 gr8888888 gr8888888888888!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
continu contu contuuuuuuuuuuuu!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
yet anotha dffrnt thng uv tried out tdy☺️
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Originally posted by: sweetzkarish

smriti wht cn i say abt the fic yaar......itz so cute.............i m in luv wth ths fic firstly becoz it is remix fic..secondly its written by u n thirdly evry line is damm cute..........i m readin a remix fic after ages.........n luv the way u strted the fic yaar.....hve alwwys luved tia n ashi nok jhok.....bt ths so cute............n the way u addressed ashi as someone....so gud yaar...................the description of tia's part n ashi reacn to it is so hillarious..............bt the last two paras r the sweeetest.........the way u wrote thy were poles apart bt there ws smthng tht thy liked abt each other...........n sonu n sumeet part is also vry sweet.................really cute part..........continue soon👏

hey kaaaaaaaaar😳😳 hell happy daat u likeeeeeeeeed it😃
i would reply to u properly later just wanted to clarify daat not just ashi is"someone" but tia too is "someone" ashi is adressed as someone wen i wrote about tia's side of the room and tia is adressed as somone wen i wrote about ashi 's side of the room😳😳
PS...i know for a fact daat d ENTIREEEE RF {entire in double quotes😉} would also end up readin it and am dead sure they would also end up LOVIN it😆...but they would NEVER come out in the open and appreciate it😆😆.....not daat i need ot be told ki i ROOCK😆..daat i already know😳😳😳 but it definatly keeps d enthu going😳
Edited by smritisashi - 16 years ago
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Posted: 16 years ago
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ooooh.. how cuuute... awesome start smrits 👏 .. cant wait for d nxt part.. great job 👍🏼
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Originally posted by: shriyaroxxx

ooooh.. how cuuute... awesome start smrits 👏 .. cant wait for d nxt part.. great job 👍🏼

woooooooooooooooow shriiiiiiiiiiiiii u manaed to take out time and actually read tissssss😃😃 I am soooooooooooooooo humbleed shriiiiiii😳😳😳 u ave definatly made me super enthu to continueeee😳😳...muaaaah🤗
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Originally posted by: smritisashi

hey kaaaaaaaaar😳😳 hell happy daat u likeeeeeeeeed it😃
i would reply to u properly later just wanted to clarify daat not just ashi is"someone" but tia too is "someone" ashi is adressed as someone wen i wrote about tia's side of the room and tia is adressed as somone wen i wrote about ashi 's side of the room😳😳
PS...i know for a fact daat d ENTIREEEE RF {entire in double quotes😉} would also end up readin it and am dead sure they would also end up LOVIN it😆...but they would NEVER come out in the open and appreciate it😆😆.....not daat i need ot be told ki i ROOCK😆..daat i already know😳😳😳 but it definatly keeps d enthu going😳

ya smriti i knw smeone is fr tia toooo.....bt i luved the way u described ashi reacn to tias part...........
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Part 2
After all the Mush lets get to some Dhamaal😆😉
The scene now shifts to another room which is no less than a virtual warland😆😆😆 and every time a war happens there is But one winner, The Greatest of Great Her Royal Highness SONYA RAY...
Wondering why she is still Sonya Ray and not Sonya Ahuja? Because she has been Sonya Ray all her life and just because shes married to a certain Mr Plaster of Patyala😆 that doesn't mean she would change her IDENTITY, no ways she is filled with too strong a substance to do that, and besides she knew even if she thought of changing her name Mummum would have KILLED her😆😆 I mean the poor thing was already suffering from acuteeee indigestion by having a sister in the name of Tia Ahuja so IMAGINE her plight if her own Mom too joined the Ahuja clan😆😆😆
So yeah she was still the same Sonya Ray and still as divaish as one could possibly be😳😳 and still HYPERLY INSANELY TRUELY MADLY DEEPLY and OBSSESIVELY in love with her dotty😳😳...her whole life might have changed and that too forever, she might be the queen of The Ahuja kingdom, she might have a husband who adored her and a new daughter who worshiped her, she might be at the pinaccle of happyness, but one thing in her life was still unchanged and every single moment of the day she whispered a little prayer to God to always keep that aspect of her life UNCHANGED because her life's existance depended on the strength of that ONE thing, on the existance of that ONE person, till the time SHE was with her time could never stop for Sonya but the second SHE goes out of her sight everything comes to a stand still
People often say a woman is incomplete without a man but in her case she was incomplete without her daughter She was a strong woman and she had lived through a lot butt he one thing which she could not survive was going away from her daughter. Her daughter beheld her life she could sustain anything but not being close to her dotty would definatly kill her. Ironical it might be but her dotty was her biggest strength and her only weakness. Nobody in this whole wide world and I repeat NOBODY can fill the aura of her daughter in her life.
Sometimes she did feel immensely guilty towards Sumeet and Tia, no matter how much she loved both of them, they would never be what her Mummum is to her. It was not easy for her to love anyone else other than her Mummum, for over two decades she had dedicated every single second of her life to her dotty and she knew she would continue to do the same aage bhi coz chahe woh kitny bhi badi kyun na ho for her she would always be that same miracle of destiny which happened to her when her Mummum was placed in her hands as a little bundle of cotton feathers, her small little fingers trying to grasp her, her tiny face all pink and her big big beautyful eyes sparkling with light, light which till today is the only light Sonya ever longs to see. Her Mummum was present in her every breath and no matter how many people she might be surrounded with, if Mummum wasn't there she would suffocate to death.
And early that morning she was feeling nothing short of suffocation. Pata nahi kyun neend main hi she started missing her dotty loadsssssss as in loads and loads and loads and apny desperation main she started kicking her darling hubbyy😆and started moving out of bed by climbing rather stampeding over him😆
"AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAH Sonya kya kar rahi ho tum"
"Mujhe bohut zore ki aa ri haiii"😆
"Kyaaa?? number Onee?🤢 ager tumhe subah ke sade teen baje bathroom jana hai toh tum APNY SIDE SE KYUN NAHI UTER KE JAATYYYYY😡 WHY DO U ALWAYS HAVE TO GO ON TOP OF MEEE...islie kahta hun raat kos one se pahle bathroom jana chahiye, itna toh meri princess bhi janti thy since the time she was three year old pata nahit um kab badi hogi😡😡"
"Main badi ho ya na ho lekin ager tum ne jaldi se shut up nahi kiya toh tum kabhi buddhe nahi ho payogeeee kyunki main tumhara khoon kar dungi😆":
And with that she attacked his nanhaa sa chottta sa fragile little neck which started crumblling under her grip😆😆😆
"Hay Bhagguuu kahaan phans gaya main subah sade teen baje meri biwi mera khoon kar ri hai"
"Hay Bhagguuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuu", she shouted andstarted crying yelping rather in her nautanki style😭
"Areeeee meri drama queen ab kya huaaaaaaa itna tang toh Tia bhi nahi karty thi"
"Mujhe bohut zor ki aa ri haiiiii😭😭😭"
"Toh jaa naa yaa main godi main leke jaoooooooon😆😆😆"
"Duh-huuuuuuh apny grossness apne paas rakho okie mujhe bohut zore ki yaaaaaaaaaaad aa ri hai mummum kiiiiiiiiii😭😭😭 mekko mummum chahiye abhi ke abhi"😳😳
And that made him smile like anything he adored her most when he saw this unexplainable craving in her eyes she always felt for Ashi, somewhere he felt that seeing her love for Ashi has brought him much more closer to his own princess, she had without knowing made him realize that just like nothing can surpass Ashi for her similarly nothing could ever take on Tia in his life and he also knew she would never let that happen, she would hate him if he dared to start loving her more than Tia. What perfect understanding, they were sharing their lives, they were sharing their love, they were sharing everything but their daughters continued to be their life's utmost pride and happyness.
So Mr Cement Makheja picked his beloved wife in his arms and together they walked through the dawn to see the most beautyful thing in their lives...their adorable daughters....
Edited by smritisashi - 16 years ago
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Posted: 16 years ago
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i hope u all like this part guys😳😳 ik now it could have been better but oh well😆😆 i so suck with dialouges maaan😆 am dreading writing the dialoges between AY😆😆
In this part i have tried to show three relationships and in every single relationship the people involved were starkly different from each other be it Sonuuu-Mummum{though i feel they r just Externally different from within they share the same belief the same values and the same heart} or Sumeet-Sonya or Tia-Sumeet😳😳...hence it becomes relatable to the title of the fic😳
i know u all r waiting for the BIGGEST "distraction" of Ashi's life😆😆☺️ but uske liye thoda intazaar hopefully your wait owuld be worth it😳😳
Do let me know how did u all find this part😃

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