NAVARASA:The Series-- # 2 UP on Pg 13! Vibhatsa (Disgust)

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sslmay11

@sslmay11

Voyager

Posted: 11 years ago

#141

Another brilliant piece of writing. I doubt whether CV's will ever match the way you guys write. Hats off!!!! Thanks for taking so much effort and time to make our weekends.

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prettypri

@prettypri

Rocker

Posted: 11 years ago

#142

@curledup...Hats off to you for your selection of Dilsher and Mala as the subject of this story!

The hope in Dilsher's heart and his thoughts on how he wanted Mala to react contrasted sharply with what actually happened! And he knew in h heart that what he had thought wouldn't happen because after all she never did that!

But even so when he saw disgust for himself in the eyes of the one who should have shown love and understanding, that was heartbreaking!

I must say I have hated Mala for walking out on Rudra since that was shown and I did feel that she wronged Dilsher too but the way Dilsher poisoned Rudra's mind I couldn't really feel for him! But your writing and this story made me feel how helpless and broken Dilsher felt in this situation!

The contrast between war and the sights and sounds of home was also beautifully described!

All in all I am amazed by how well you have written a story depicting disgust!👏

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Aaradhaya1688

@aaradhaya1688

Dazzler

+ 5

Posted: 11 years ago

#143

ths is really superb and different

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Maya

@What_the

Voyager

+ 5

Posted: 11 years ago

#144

Asho!!

One comment was not enough...

Had to come back...

I have been thinking about this Mala that you showed us..

Who feels disgust when she sees the limp which now mars her once vital and wholesome husband..

We are all tuned to feel compassion and sympathy for the victims of war...

So it shocks us that she was cruel enough to be repulsed by the sight of her husband's injury.

This Mala is weak, selfish..

She thinks skin-deep and cannot imagine spending the rest of her life with this man, who is the father of her child..

And this leads to her leaving him, as well as her child?

Was it a moment of weakness? of desperation?

Or was she really not strong enough to look past the surface and love selflessly?

Come to think about it...how many of us are?

The disclosure of the reason why Mala left is something that I am really looking forward to on the show..

You write so beautifully, you make me think...you make me come back...and comment again...

I have four res-es to un-res on other stories...those writers are going to kill me!

Which reminds me, I am waiting for you to unres on Sleepless and let me know what you think of my woolgathering..

Love

Maya

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SS88

@SS88

Rocker

+ 2

Posted: 11 years ago

#145

@ Navin- How did you make my heart break for a character we haven't even seen yet in the show? This was beautiful. The way her transformation, or rather dehumanization was depicted. The scene that brought tears to my eyes was when she was scrubbing herself. I really wished she would meet Paro. I want one of the navarasa OS to be on their meeting. Or you could write something. Please , pretty please *Insert puppy face*

@ Curled : Wow. We have all been wondering why Mala left Dilsher since the last 4 months. But what a way to show the complexities of her character. That she was a weak woman. Who wanted only perfection. And anything that marred her perfect life had to be left behind. Let's see how the Cvs handle this.

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hkdrama

@hkdrama

Beginner

Posted: 11 years ago

#146

Navin, Curled,

Amazing work 👏. Two different works...each powerful in their own way.
In love with this series.

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napk

@napk

Navigator

Posted: 11 years ago

#147

You said so much in few words. Powerful writing. You are amazing.

After going thru so much pain from the war he looks forward to the love from his wife. He was not sure whether he could expect all that love and care from her... She looked at him disgust? Not sure of her reasons to change her behavior but that is very sad. Even with him falling down she didn't come to help him. How could someone change so soon.

I'm loving this series, wonderful work guys.

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Anushka

@bebo2050

Inactive

Posted: 11 years ago

#148

great this is so cool , otherwise weekends the forums would be dead .

read both the stories , intense !

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Mirabell

@Mirabell

Navigator

+ 6

Posted: 11 years ago

#149

@napstermonster and @curledup

What an emotion to start with! Vibhatsa [bhibatsa] the one that we have a hard time hiding and hiding from! The pain associated with this rasa was so well portrayed...In Nandini's case its all the more ironic, considering that this rasa surfaced with her rescue! That the feeling of dirtied with disgust is associated with homecoming was the saddest tragedy in this story- the opposing and tension filled dichotomy of home/private-clean and public-unclean was so well represented textually here.. Just wow and kudos

Looking forward to more rasas!

--Mirabell

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amv63

@amv63

Explorer

Posted: 11 years ago

#150

Navin, this story filled me with Vibhatsa. At the men who force themselves on the Nandinis, the Rukhsars and the Jamunas of the world. At the women like Didi-Maa who are as guilty of defiling these young women as are their male clients. It's ironical that the woman is called Didi-Maa, both titles for a woman that are associated with respect and love and protection. And it filled me with Vibhatsa for the millions of men and women like us who mostly remain mute spectators of this defilement.

Navin, this was I think by far the most powerful piece of fan fiction I have read. And also the most difficult to read.

You have captured the true depths to which a woman is sometimes forced to sink, ironically by those of her own gender. What is equally heartbreaking is that Nandini believes she has "truly become filth" who does not deserve to be rescued. She was no longer Nandini. In fact she had not heard her own name, not used her own name, in 9 months. Now she was merely a woman forced to submit her body to survive.

Her envy of Rukhsar who has "only one month's grime on her" while she has months of filth to scrape off her skin, off her very soul. Her attempts to rid herself of this dirt were just so so sad.

A beautiful if achingly sad story, Navin.

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