NAVARASA:The Series-- # 2 UP on Pg 13! Vibhatsa (Disgust)

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Sonata24

@Sonata24

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Posted: 11 years ago

#121

@Napster:

Words fail me as I write this review, tried holding back tears that just wouldn't stop falling as I read this new piece of writing.

You took that one character that has barely found mention and given out her heart-wrenching tale-

A victim, hardened by the torture received from the cruel hands of fate... Her own past seeming like a birth away. She's all empty laughs, and sardonic humor now. Almost amused when someone comes to find her, to rescue her-to take her back home. What home! She thinks, and Rescue from what! As if she knew another way of life!

I read this once half an hour ago, came back to it again now to read it once more. You have done complete justice to this theme. I congratulate you therefore, for having written such a beautiful piece. I have said earlier once that not many can evoke emotions this strong. You do it so well and manage to do so, effortlessly.

Truly a pleasure reading your work. Thank you for writing this!

@Curledup:

I will be frank, I did not expect Rudra's parents to be the center piece of this tale. All the better because I loved what you have written. I've never really thought disgust existed in their relationship. I just figured she was unhappy. To think she was disgusted...

""And Dilsher laughed his laugh, disguising his shaking footsteps and limping leg-- would she accept him? A cloth tattered by the hands of war? Of course she would! She would sew the cloth back together again, making it so strong that the gustiest of winds couldn't tear it apart. But she never did that. Would she still love him, even though he was incomplete? Of course she would! She would hold his hand, guide him in, worry and chide. But she never did that. Would she help him, recover for him his self-esteem? Of course she would! Her soft whispers and kind words would weave together his threaded confidence. But she never did that.

She never did any of that. ""

This paragraph moved my heart, and I felt so so so sorry for Dilsher. You have done an amazing job at showcasing Dilsher & his wife's characters. And more than anything, you have shown the relationship at play to work very well for the chosen theme. Very very well written!

Thank you for writing this!

Love,
Sonata24

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Brin

@_CrazyRudraFan_

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Posted: 11 years ago

#122

Napster you are tremendous. The thought in the 1st place shook me..the description forced tears off my eyes... Immense. There cant be words enough to express the avalanche of emotions ur writing creates. With each line i thought there cudnt be a write-up better than this.

Got to know you didnt want to post this here n deprive us of this piece of art? Read ur comment of what u thought and how u thanked the readers. You're not only an amazing writer..but also an awesome person i believe. 😊

God bless u girl! More power to you. 👏Never ever consider ne of ur work as "crap" if at all u do...go publish it right away.😉

Curledup... What do i say..word VIBHATSA, on dis forum, was born with two new angles that took the readers by surprise and for which..i cannot appreciate u enough. Great great work dear! Keep on going..on n on! Ur talent is to reach out to world n more!

Cant thank you two enough for the kickass start to the Navrasaas!

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Roshni

@rashika

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Posted: 11 years ago

#123

Amazing second part.

The descriptions between war and home had so much difference in between them. While war felt cold home felt warm, war where you were duty bond to perform the task at hand, home was a place where you felt loved.

After war Dilshar has come back home but injured waiting to see his wife, the woman he loves wondering if she would help him feel like the man he once was but then seeing her and meeting her made him realise she didn't feel like that. Instead his whole life shattered realising that she was disgusted by him. I felt very sorry for the man. Rudra was the only one who helped his father because he was his son no matter what.

Beautifully written.

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Tvbug2011

@tvbug2011

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Posted: 11 years ago

#124

Ahhh Curled-up!! What a wonderful weekend this is turning out to be!!! What an incisive, intense, power-packed piece you've delivered!! Left me quite winded, it did. So few words and the depth, the layers - just awed by your skill! You've made me think and feel. And re-evaluate Dilsher and Mala. And go back and re-read it to wake-up to the meaning. Gosh!! Still a little shell-shocked but then you truly blew my mind. Thank you.

Edited by tvbug2011 - 11 years ago

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Tannu

@Tannakstar

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Posted: 11 years ago

#125

This was so brilliant! I think it's ingenuous to write these stories that neither concern Paro nor Rudra! Navin-Di gave us Nandini and you gave us Dilsher and both have been executed perfectly - there really is no way you could improve it.

Initially when you began narrating about the cruelty of war, I assumed you were talking about Rudra, but how surprised I was to find it from Dilsher's point of view; it was very refreshing. And then it soon became heartbreaking to know that all his hopes that Mala would lovingly tend to him were instead going to be met with disgust. We - as an audience of Rangrasiya - have not yet discovered the reason Mala ran away and when we do, I still think I'll prefer your story because it shows how Dilsher became so bitter and therefore why Rudra was so mistrustful of Paro.

Yes. This was an amazing story from a completely different insight that one doesn't usually expect from a Rangrasiya OS, but it was definitely a pleasant surprise and it was definitely perfect. Well done :)

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...pinky...

@...pinky...

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Posted: 11 years ago

#126

Again, another fantastic story in this series! The aftereffects of war. Many claim him a hero, while others see him as less of man, especially those he doesn't expect it from.

You detailed Mala's disgust for her husband's condition quite potently. If RR uses that as the reason as to why Mala fled her family for Thakur, it would make for great drama. It will show us that Mala is still human under that angel-like personality is she portrayed to be. But, I hope that don't because then my dislike for her will merely increase to a point of no-return.

Thank you for this!

Edited by khushiarnav88 - 11 years ago

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shagun-rocks

@shagun-rocks

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Posted: 11 years ago

#127

you have beautifully portrayed the aftermath of a war...a man seeking some solace within the confines of his home is thus treated...also what i love about this series is that it's not just about paro and rudra but how the other characters have been poignantly projected..first it was nandini and now bapusa...

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roxon

@roxon

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Posted: 11 years ago

#128

brilliant...updates...i hope there is more to nandini's life than wat was there in the first part...

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Radhika

@YellowBoots

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+ 6

Posted: 11 years ago

#129

A worthy follow-up post. I love the character of Dilsher and it was lovely to read his backstory of sorts. I also liked what you did with Mala, without judging her and keeping her entirely human. I hope when the show will focus on the reason for Mala's departure they won't thrust down some moralistic crap on us. Who am I kidding?! 😆

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ICanDoThis

@ICanDoThis

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Posted: 11 years ago

#130

Dear Navin
Iv read this just now.

All words seem trite, inadequate and reek of tokenism.

For the praise of your work.
And for acknowledgement of nanidini living hell and that of
Countless women like her across the world.

You hav written a shocking, gut wrenching deeply powerful, no punches pulled, story depicting
What happens to an innocent young girl dreaming of a fairy tale
Happy-ever/after,but soon realises she is a victim of inhuman human traffickers.
Selling women with less respect and regard than if they are a pair of plastic chappals.

Its THEY who r Disgusting.
Abhorrent.
A deep Shame upon humanity.
The dirtiest filth of our societies.

Not Nandini

But her living nightmare experiences strip her of her self respect
And self esteem, self worth and identity.
Debasing her to the lowest point where she believes herself to be disgusting.

My heart always bleeds and prays for such women and children.
As all of who r decent human beings do.

Congratulations napsterji on yet another incredible piece of work.

Im sure all the following stories are gonna be just brilliant too.
Iv now read the works of the writers who r involved in this new series.
Ur all so talented and hav ur own unique styles.

I for one, am extremely excited.

Thank u
Love
Samina

Ps. Please cud someone tell me me wat Navrasa means?

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