NAVARASA:The Series-- # 2 UP on Pg 13! Vibhatsa (Disgust)

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bohemia

@bohemia

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Posted: 11 years ago

#151

curledup,

What a heartbreakingly beautiful story. I loved the way you built up the story of him expecting a hero's welcome, and ended up facing disgust.

Your story hit a bit closer to home. I am contemplating if I should share it on an open forum.

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amv63

@amv63

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Posted: 11 years ago

#152

curledup, that was heartbreaking.

Dilsher has seen the worst war can offer -- the screams of women and children is something no soldier can ever come to terms with, be they friend or foe. And sometimes death is the only relief.

I love how you've brought out the juxtaposition between the memories of war and the familiar sights and smells of home, of love. The anticipation, the slight nervousness, almost, that Dilsher is feeling.

Only to have his worst fear come to life when, instead of the love and concern he had hoped for, there is nothing but disgust on his wife's face. Vibhatsa. Toward him, toward the injury that causes him to limp. Toward the disfigurement of a once physically imposing body.

Yes, war is never kind. And it is at its cruelest best when it leads to rejection by the very person from whom you expect nothing but unquestioning and unconditional love and support when you need it the most.

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dumas

@dumas

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+ 4

Posted: 11 years ago

#153

awesome part loved disher pov thanks for the pm.

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Mani

@DirtyDancing

Navigator

Posted: 11 years ago

#154

Navin di
earlier i seemed to relate disguist with something akin to loathing, never on earth had i realized it could have meanings such unfathomable.
Nandini's sufferings was so vivid...and painful.
Really Heart wrenching to see what a poor soul has to go through.

curldup di
dilsher had always a person hard to decipher, guarding insecurities in a shell...a man seeming so tough outside hiding his pain...failing to live upto the expectation of a husband ...trying to redeem himself by fulfilling his responsiblity as a father as a brother...all this the reflection of his past...his feelings described so perfectly.
LOVED BOTH THE UPDATES

Edited by sarun22 - 11 years ago

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Guinea

@Guinea

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+ 4

Posted: 11 years ago

#155

Fantastic writing ...raises the bar of fictional writing in the forum. Brilliant 👏

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Radhika

@YellowBoots

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+ 6

Posted: 11 years ago

#156

Was this series not continued?

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dprover

@dprover

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Posted: 11 years ago

#157

Very emotional and beautifully written

Can't wait to read more

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Brin

@_CrazyRudraFan_

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Posted: 11 years ago

#158

Hello Navin sa!!

I'v mostly been a silent reader of ur posts.. Since never got the courage to post on ur amazing posts.

But what reminded me of this work of urs??

Mardani. The movie. Was watching the movie, n the worst kind of emotions n fears n disgust the girls were going thru reminded me of this post. The words u wrote describing nandini's disgust were shown on the screen n i was like woaahw!!

This is a sincere request from ur fan. Plz continue your amazing write-ups. N make it a part of your carrier. More power to u.

Much love,

Brin😳