OS: Yesterday and Tomorrow--Forgiveness (completed) - Page 14

When I was waiting for the 3rd part it struck me hard as of how Parvati can forgive him even after all this...Whatever kind of crime it is, one has no right to punish anyone like this without a solid evidence...I am astounded about how strong Parvati is and how she endures this torture!
Kudos napster!!

uRGENT!

Wonderful update as usual. This was definitely not an easy read as parvati's pain was far too much to ignore. Unknowingly i had questioned the country's judicial system as well which perhaps approves of this kind of torture inflicted upon prisoners. I am in love with your writing . But you seem to exceptionally fond of cliffhanger i guess! So i know you will consider this as pouting and trust me i am doing this intentionally as well. But just couldn't help it
'update'

Originally posted by: Oldestfan

uRGENT!

Napster, if you have not already, read Ian Flemings From Russia With Love. Yes, its about that other Jallad, his name is Bond, James Bond.

There are two interedting KGB characters in this book. One is a female interrogator, and the other is a government hired, handpicked, psychologically profiled psychopath.

Originally posted by: Exprimere

I am kinda upset you left it where you did. I can take 6 k words EASILY. I will comment again after the final part. Give and take.

P. S I love you, I LOVED the part. But what happens to Paro yaaa? What happens? When will Rudra stop that real wala Jallad? It was so bad to read that about Paro!

That was an intense upd.

Originally posted by: napstermonster

I am not ashamed to admit I am a feminist AND a huge Ian Fleming fan, but I have not read from Russia with Love. But the concept of the government hired handpicked psychopaths is so much a part of modern day warfare, I wanted to incorporate this--if you've read even one exposure on Abu Ghairab or the un-redacted papers from Guantanamo, you will see such psychopathy, it will scar you for life! I actually based the concept of Jasheem Khan from an amalgamation of those images---these are not crazy slobbering villains of TV that you know are evil right away--these are regular men and women, who hold down jobs and even have a social life and a family. They are full blown psychopaths who just happen to also have an outlet for their natural inherent psychosis in their jobs where they torture, and inflict pain for a living. Its fascinating reading, especially from the very pragmatic, Army viewpoint of "use what you have."


I will be posting part 3 soon--polishing up on the Hindi, and some scenes that are okay, but that I keep reworking. I'm giving myself a few hours, and then in whatever version it is in, Im going to say "hell with it''and then it's going up!


I've been getting very helpful feedback on the dialogue I use--thank you all for that. People, advance warning, and apologies for my Hindi--I'm Bengali, and Hindi isn't my first second or even third language--its basically a hodge-podge of TV, 80s movies and bad Doordarshan--so please excuse the bad grammar and my inability to differentiate between male/female tenses! Please feel free to PM me corrections, if you are bothered by any passage/line, and I will happily update! But in general, I hope you guys aren't offended by the bad Hindi--unintentional, I swear!

Res for a lengthy comment. I need time to think of something appropriate to reflect this story. My brain is already hurting thinking about what to write. How do you manage to write content this intense? I would have given myself a migraine coming up with this. ⭐️

oh no...!!!!!!!!
w8ng for the next part..!