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Posted: 14 years ago
Arrey yaar tum log bhi na...

give me some time to think of something na re...I shall post an epilogue..I am working in it...maybe in a couple of days...definetely before this week ends...

khush!!!!
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Posted: 14 years ago
Saaaaazzz..... First and foremost...
Congratulations!!!!
Dazzzzllleee...... dazzle... as IF- Dazzler!!!! Keep rocking !!!!👏⭐️
Now Dhyaameeet... yeh kya tha!? End ? 😡😡😡 baap bole to ab behen ko gussa mat dila huh!! Keh deti hain, bhai tak baat pahuunch jaayegi.... humko to SS ko FF mein badalne ko maangta! bas.. bola na!?
Jokes apart... sigh, khooli hain aankhein, aur khwaab bhi dekhte hain, par yakeen hi nahin hota ki khwaab ab ek hakikat hain..
Khanak finally will be his!! Yes..... Such a sweet end. Though personally I can take it ahead. So am not expecting an epilogue here but turn it into an FF saaaz...
Shantanu and Khanak together are like live wire... they bring out the sizzle the electricity. they have a togetherness, that is so placid at the same time like a ticking bomb.... their interaction, their knowing each other so well... sigh.. for this reason alone, pleej.. turn your SS into an FF...
Hoping that this IF-Dazzler will kindly take into consideration this humble plea from an entranced friend....😳
(Dhyaameett... behen ke gussa a rahela hain.. bhai ko boloon kya!?😡)😆😆😆😆
ClapClapClapClap Waiting....😃
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Posted: 14 years ago
excellent saaz ........
just read the last two parts.........its amazing....
glad k sari misunderstanding clear ho gayi....
but i think u end it too soon...its always a pleasure to read ur SS...
u are a wonderful writer..........
looking forward for ur details ..............
Edited by adeelakhokar - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago

THANK YOU TO EVERYONE ESPECIALLY

@May..here you go dear..the epilogue…I really really hope you like it..

@Priyacool: you know what you are my best reader becos it seems like you were truly confused…which was kind of the intention..but to be fair..I had left loads of hints in every update…

@Roshni: Kya kare..my dimaag does not work beyond 6-7 parts re..

@Smitha: RIGHT YOU ARE!!! Thanks ..on the dazzler part..I guess!!..is it a good thing..don;t even know

@Angel: Yes sweetie…you did guess and I love you for that…

@Vaishu: thanks re..epilogue coming up

@Simi: Spicy vicy kuch nahi…ab tu mat shuru ho ja…

@Shriya: Your Russian film type endings cracked me up majorly…

@SYS: well not dinner..but have them in the same room and there is a table between them..hope that counts..

@ AG: Thanks jee

@Vandoo meri bandhoo: tera bhook hardtal almost convinced me re..but kya karoon agle hafte se not in forum much re aur tujhe pata hai mera waise bhi originality kum hain..but epilogue padh aur hardtal thod de..

@Nisha: Thanks re

@Deepali: thank you jee..epilogue hai..sorry extra part nahi..

@Ramani: Hope the epilogue keeps you happy

@Karishma: okay sweetie..have not ended it but am giving you an epilogue..CAPS band kar nahi tho Veena maregee.

@Neha: Yes, my dear, you were correct..Khanak shaadi shooda agar hoti tho Shaan uska pati hota..hai na..?? thanks sweetie

@ Shama: Aww..I am going to miss writing this one too..thanks for your comments

@Ammu: mm hmm

@Cadbery: Kya re..sab dhamkee ke baad teen line ka comment..ja!!

@Aditee: Really you loved the Shaan Suraj hug (you do realize it was a take off from rahul-shaan hug)…please tell me you got that..paise tho wapas nahin mil rahe hai..lekin haan epilogue hai bilkul free

@ Deepa: HALLA BOL ko mera full support..le epilogue

@Rooji: I cannot believe you have not commented on the last few parts..now you better do..

@Naveen: thanks re

@Krazee: thank you..that was the final part..but there is an epilogue..hope you like that one too

@Dish: thank you my dear

@Zara: thanks so much, hope you like the epilogue too

@Purvi: yes..here you go..thanks

@ Shal: I hope this was your ASAP..if not..behave!!..love you re..

@Vat: this was your comment on the last part??? Seriously???!!!

@Mani: Can I admit a secret desire..I want to be Daadi when I grow up…I swear I do..can I also say this was the shortest comment you have ever posted on my SS..

@Jess: thanks darling for your comments and tu bhi shuru ho gayee in sab ke saath..bola na no FF but haan epilogue padh le aur tera vishesh fabulous tippani compulsory

@Adeela; Thank you dear..

ALL WHO PRESSED LIKE: thank you 2… lekin aglee baar apna kripaya key board ka istamal kijiye..

EPILOGUE COMING UP..

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Posted: 14 years ago

now re baba...in five minutes...hey ram...
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Posted: 14 years ago
ooooh!
am so sorry for phudkofying! :P

dint realise hadnt commented....lol...

what do I say? It was obviously good!!! Awesome tha!
and hey when I ask you to convert it to FF, dont you get my appreciation 😡

Kitna filmy tha...lol..

but srsly, any mehta that comes my way from now on, I am calling them Mehtajee :P
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Posted: 14 years ago
5 mins ho nahi gaye?

😃
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Posted: 14 years ago

and leaves the building to fulfill his dream'

--

EPILOGUE

It took Shaan all of four days to fulfill his dream..


Day 1:

Since she had refused to take his calls and had apparently told Natasha she does not allow strangers in her home..he decides to do the next best thing ..

The next morning at 7:30 am, Khanak steps out of her building gate and walks towards the bus stop adjacent to the gate..she does not spot him at first..because its his car that catches her attention..parked across the road..and then she realizes it is him leaning on it with folded arms in jeans and a checked shirt..

Khanak: (thinks): Itne sawere kaala chashma pehene ki kya zaroorat?

Shaan: (thinks): Its her ..come on Khanak..ek baar..just look at me..

Khanak: (thinks and wrings her hands): Yahan mat aaiyee..third floor walle uncle bus stop pe khade hain, woh kya sochenge??!..Bhagwaan kare bus aajaye..

Shaan: (thinks): Bus ..please mat aao..yaar itni traffic kyun hain..main cross kaise karoonga??..damn it!!..

The bus arrives, Khanak gets in..Shaan leaves.. only to return and stand opposite her institute that evening..

He spots Khanak coming out of the institute..hoping she would glance at him..

Shaan: (thinks): but NO, she is busy chatting away with everyone..WHO does she NOT know??..Me, I suppose..

Khanak: (thinks): KYA?? Yeh kya har jagah pahunch jayenge..kitne ziddi hai yeh..?!!?..main kyun dekhoo unkee taraf..(while glancing at him of course)..

Shaan: (thinks): Now no one and his mai baap can stop me.. (and starts walking towards her as soon as she is out of the main entrance)..

Khanak: (thinks): yeh tho meri taraf aa rahe hai..(and suddenly)..AUTO!!..

Shaan: WHAT THE???? (as he steps back when an auto zooms in front of him..and watches Khanak sit in it and the auto drive off..two feet away from him)..yeh auto kahan se aaya??..UNBELIEVABLE!!

DAY 2:

Khanak hums while locking her front door .. walks down the two flights....out of her building..and towards the bus stop determined not to look at the opposite direction..and she does not..she knows he is there..can feel his presence..of course she can..okay, she did glance..but does not look until..everyone at the bus stop is looking in that direction..

Shaan: Arrey aap yeh kaise kar sakte hai??

Havaldaaar: (cop): Apun bola na..yahan no parking hain..gaadi hatao yaha se aur fine bharna padega..

Shaan: Main subah subah itni cash nahin leke aaya hoon..mere paas sirf credit cards hain..

Havaldaar: RTC ko apna baap samajh ke rakha hai..credit card ka main kya karoon? Chattoo??

Shaan: Dekhiye aap batamizee par utar aa rahe hain..

Havaldaar: Tu mereko bolega batameez kaun hai??

Shaan: Please havaldaar 'thanedaar saab..please..(pointing towards the bus stop across the road and looking at her while doing so)..dekhiye..bus aayegee aur woh chalee jayegee..

Havaldaar: Bus jaane ke liye hi aati hai..

Shaan: Please bus aane se pehle mujhe bus stop jaana hai..(he can now see Khanak staring back at him..he tries to wave..she looks away)

Havaldaar: Tujhe bus stop kyun jaana hai? Tu Car mein aaya na??

Shaan: Dekhiye please..(joining hands and pleading)..please..please..please..yaar!!..

Havaldaar: Tera Please vease chodh..bus aake bhi gayee..

Shaan watches the bus rumble away with his dream in it..he trudges his way back in the evening opposite her institute..he knows he is a little early..wants to take no chances..

Khanak is trying to get out of a serious conversation with one of the professors who has insisted on talking and discussing with her Wright design theory ..she has to walk out of the building with her..

Khanak: (thinks): Ab woh wahan honge..main professor se peecha kaise chudaoo?

Shaan: (thinks): Oh please! Kissi old lady ke saath itna baat kya kar rahee hai?

Khanak: (watches him coming towards her and shakes her head with a no..tucking her hair behind her ear while doing so)

Shaan: (thinks): WHAT?!!! This girl will be the death of me..(he waits only to see the 'old lady' get into an auto followed by her)..

Khanak is forced to share the auto with her professor and can feel Shaan's irritation a mile away..As soon as she gets in..and the auto takes off..she peeps out of the side and looks at him..looking at her with his fingers holding his belt loops and an angry look..she bites her lips..he kicks an invisible stone..he glares at her..she sticks her tongue out and her head in..remembers his pleading to the havaldaar from the morning and smiles..

DAY 3:

Khanak takes special care to dress up..she wears her favorite magenta pink saree..well nothing special she thinks..she does have a submission and it is good to make an impression..walks to the bus stop..and..stands..there is no car..no him..she thinks maybe he is late..she waits..she misses two buses..there is no sign of him..she is getting late..she takes the next bus..'kitni galat thi main..kaise insaan ke saath dil lagaa baithee..hmph..itni bhi narazgee kya'??

She has spent the whole day being extremely restless..her submission is all wrong..she hardly eats her lunch and is silent throughout the day much to the amazement of her classmates and friends..he haunts her..

The evening does not see him either..she is now upset and sad..'kahin meri galatee tho nahin..' she thinks and starts walking towards the bus stop..a classmate yells out to share an auto..she declines..she walks along the path they have walked together on that rainy day..she catches her bus..she misses him..

Shaan is extremely restless..the traffic jam is not helping..he is going to be late..damn the new wing and all that bloody music business..he could not make it to see her in the morning because of the early meeting..and now he is going to be too late..he is going to miss her..by the time he reaches the institute, he knows he is late..no point he thinks..parks the car..and walks around..the same lanes he walked with her that rainy day..has nothing changed since then..he misses her..when suddenly..

Chaiwalla: Arrey bade saab..kaise ho?

Shaan: (with a small smile): Theek hoon..

Chaiwalla: Saab..woh madam thi na aap ke saath uss din..woh apna cell phone ka batwa bhool gayee idhar..

Shaan: acha?? (hurriedly walks towards the chaiwalla and a small boy standing next to him washing cups)

Shaan: (taking a hand made cell phone cloth cover from him): thanks..(runs his fingers over the small embroidered ganesha over it..so her, he thinks)

Chaiwalla: jab aap milenge na ..tab de dena..bhool gayee na becharee..zaroorat hogee..

Small boy: Bhool kidhar gayee?? Ussine tho diya tha inko dene ke liye..

Chaiwalla: Tu gapp bass (keep quiet!)..(turns towards Shaan): yeh pagal hai..bachaa hai na..kuch bhi bakta hai..aap de denge na..

Shaan: (with a small smile and laughter in his heart): Haan haan..don't worry..

Chaiwalla: Chai peyenge?

Shaan: Aaj nahin..kissi aur din..

Chaiwalla: unke saath aana..(with a huge smile)

Shaan: (with a bigger smile): SURE!!

Shaan sprints away back to his car and drives home humming..

DAY 4:

Khanak hopes this day is better when she leaves the building and walks towards the bus stop..her heart stops..he is actually standing at the bus stop..admist ten others..in his white shirt and jeans..she cannot stand next to him..how can she..she is in white too with a multicoloured duppatta..but in white..people will suspect for sure..she keeps stealing glances..her heart dances..he smiles..his heart flies..they are so close..the bus arrives..they get in..he is last to get in..she is worried he might miss it..she sits next to a lady..he stands close to her..their hands next to each other on the back bar of the seat in front of her's..the bus jerks..his hands hold the top bar..she gets off at the institute..he takes her seat..she stands in front of the stop looking at the bus ..waits until the bus leaves..he peeps out of the bus..she waves to him..he smiles..her heart flies..

He gets off the next stop..sprints across to the opposite side of the road and takes the bus to the stop where he has legally parked his car only to return in the evening..opposite her institute..leaning on his car..waiting for her..

She walks out..she waits..she looks at him..has a small smile..he smiles back..none of them move..an auto stops in front of her..she gets in..the auto leaves..her phone rings..she smiles..she answers..

Khanak: hello..

Shaan: Aapki duppatta udd rahee hai madam..

Khanak: Oh..(grabs her dupatta)..thank you..

Shaan: you are welcome..

Khanak: (worries he might hang up): Acha..Suno..

Shaan: (shuts his eyes):Kaho..

Khanak: (bites her lip): Kal kahan the?

Shaan: (with a slow smile): Meri yaad aayee??

Khanak: (smiles): woh mere sawal ka jawab nahin hua..

Shaan: (smiles): agar sawal ka jawab jaanna hai..tho mujhse milna padega..

Khanak: (sassily): Kab aur kahan??

Shaan: Kal..main tumhe pick up karoonga..insititute se chuthi le lena..

Khanak: (what can she say to a dial tone)

Shaan hangs up with a satisfied smile on his face ..runs his fingers through his hair..this day could not have gone better..

The next day, Shaan is waiting in his car right in front of her building..she steps out of the gate..smiles at him through the window..and steps in..

Khanak: Hum kahan jaa rahe hai

Shaan: surprise hain..

Khanak: Main bahut excited hoon..

Shaan: acha..

Khanak: Haan..main iss din ka intezaar kab se kar rahee hoon..

Shaan: (with a questioning look while driving): Acha?

Khanak: (animatedly): Haan..bilkul..aapko pata hai..institute mein meri saheliyaan ne kahan ki jaise filmon mein hota bilkul waise hi..iske baare mein itni baatein ki..

Shaan: Acha..woh bhi interior designers hain..

Khanak: Haan..meri hi class se hain..unko itna mazaa aayaa ke woh tho ke rahe the ke iss sheher ki baat kuch aur hain

Shaan: Tumhari institute ki sabhi ladkiyan out of station walli hai kya? Contacts banana itna mushkil hoga..

Khanak: Iss ke liye contacts ki kya zaroorat? Institute mein ladke bhi hain..aur waise bhi ek ne tho doosri saheli ke bhai ke saath gayee thee..

Shaan: Kahan gayee thee??

Khanak: Date pe..aur kahan??

Shaan: (dawning on him): Date?? ..

Khanak: Haan..jaise ke hum ab jaa rahe hain..

Shaan: (dawns on him, rubbing his forehead while driving): Main tumhe mere office leke jaa raha hoon Khanak..

Khanak: (shocked!): KYA???? Hum itne din baad pehlee baar mil rahe hain,,aur aap mujhe office leke jaa rahe hai..KYUN?

Shaan: (animatedly): KYUNKI mai kal wahee tha..

Khanak: THO??

Shaan: (driving into the Khandelwal Group of Companies building complex): OH Hello.. tum jaanna chahti thee ki main kal kahan tha..okay??..aur haan..mera office almost completed hai aur main chahta tha ki tum uska interiors decorate karo..

Khanak: (getting out of the door): Hey Bhagwan! Tho yeh hum kaam pe jaa rahe hain?

Shaan: (after handing the keys to the attendant and pressing the elevator door): Well..not exactly..

Khanak: (entering the elevator with him): Not exactly..woh kya hota hai..??

Shaan: (with a small smile): room mein hum akele honge..

Khanak: (stares at him and then with a shy smile): DHAT!!

Shaan: (smiles back): DHAT?! Kya Dhat..main sirf yeh ke raha hoon ke naya wing hai..jyaada log nahin honge..aur anyways aaj Saturday hai..tho workers bhi nahi honge..tum kya soch rahee ho, Khanak?

In the closed elevator which was occupied by only two of them..Shaan walks towards Khanak..and they smile at each other..he is very close to her when he whispers into her hair..

Shaan: Date pe kissine tumharee saheli ka haath pakda..

Khanak and Shaan intertwine their fingers ..and wait for the elevator door to open up to their destination..

They enter his cabin..or almost done up cabin..she remembers the last time she was here..she looks at him..looking at her..he mouths a 'sorry'..she smiles back..they are still holding hands..

She notices the big window..and the desk..there are some boxes in front of it..almost hiding the desk.. there is even a small refrigerator..no chairs ..she lets go of his hand and goes to the window..he holds her shoulders from behind..and asks..

Shaan: Kaisi lagi?

Khanak: Peechlee baar se tho behtaar..

Shaan: (turns her around and holds her face): Tumhe pata hai Khanak..aaj mere sapne poore ho..

Only to be interrupted by voices..loud voices nearing his office..and his door clicking..he suddenly drags her and gets under the desk..she is confused..

Khanak: Hum yahan kyun hai?

Shaan: (putting his finger on his lips): Shhhhh!!! Koyee aa raha hai..

Khanak: (whispering animatedly): THo? Yeh aapka office haina..tho aap kyun chipp rahe hai?

Shaan: (looking upwards for a second and whispering back): baat tho tum sahee keh rahee ho..

Khanak: (continues whispering): tho chaliye uthiye..

They are almost going to get out from under the desk when they hear familiar voices very close..

Suraj: Natasha..chalo bhi..nahin tho late ho jayenge..

Nat: haan haan aa rahee hoon..bus main Shaan ke liye ek note likh rahee hoon..aaj last day hai..aur abhi maine apna desk empty kiya hai..thoda emotional hoon..ek second..

Under the desk:

Shaan: (mouthing): Natasha..

Khanak: (nods)

Nat: (trying to wriggle out of suraj's arms): Kya kar rahe ho?? Bahut badmaash ho gaye ho tum..choddo

Suraj: ek kiss de do..bus ek..

Nat: Of course not..

Suraj: (with a smile): matlab ki definitely yes..

Nat: Tum..chodo,..

Under the Desk..

Shaan: (whispers with a disgusted look): OH GOD!!

Khanak: (grits her teeth and louder whisper): MEHTAJEE>..

Suraj: KHANAK?????!!!!!

Nat: KYA??Main tumhe kiss kar rahee hoon aur tum Khanak ka naam le rahe ho??..What is wrong with you?.. (and storms out)

Suraj: Arrey Natasha..suno tho..hey bhagwaan!!

Under the desk:

Khanak and Shaan burst out laughing..

Khanak: (getting up): Chaliye..uthiye..

Shaan: (pulling her back): Aisi kya jaldi hai..

Khanak: (sits splat next to him): arrey..mujhe bhook lagee hai

Shaan: ek minute..(and returns with two ice-cream cups)

Khanak: kissmiss wali icecream!!!

And there under the desk..both of them eat their rum and raisin..occassionally feeding each other..

Shaan: (stares at her and starts chattering): You know what Khanak..mujhe yakeen nahin hota ..pata nahin main kya soch raha tha..tumhare liye jo mehssos karta hoon.. now I can't wait anymore..

Khanak: (smiles and puts her head on his shoulder): Ab tho main aapke paas hoon.. saath hoon..tho phir kiss baat ka intezaar..

Shaan: (smiles): Har baat ka..tumhe paane ka..tumhe poori tarah apnane ka..yeh tho bus shuruwat hai Khanak..Just wait and watch!!

Suddenly Shaan keeps his cup aside and takes her cup and keeps it aside too..holding her face, moves his face very close to her..bringing his lips close to hers..

Khanak: Kya kar rahe hai aap?

Shaan: (grins): Kissmiss..

And while Shaan kisses his miss..Khanak runs her fingers through his hair..kissing him back..the cups of rum and raisin forgotten..

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Review Mandatory

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I had not planned this SS at all..it was completely an impulsive move from the MOTW thread and I thank Deepali and Rooj for that..I want to thank all my readers silent and not so silent for reading my SS and encouraging me throughout especially Aditee, Jess, May, Rooj and SYS..thank you from the bottom of my heart... I really hope you guys liked the epilogue and it meets everyone;s expectations.. I don't know if I shall be writing an SS again..at least not anytime soon..because the source of my inspiration ..Golden RBO is slowly becoming faint in my mind..I do hope I can come back with another story..maybe this time, it won't be that influenced by Golden..

Finally for the second time..I am presenting a special treat at the end of my SS..yet again a VM by Smitha on a song from the movie Satya written by GUlzar and music by Vishal Bharadwaj..a personal favorite on many counts..movie, music, playback male singer, lyrics..this is in my mind a fitting end to the epilogue..the VM creates an image of shanak's beginnings when the epilogue ends..I want to especially thank Manita for suggestion of a couple of scenes in the VM.

Last but not least the one person who really came through for me is Smitha..who I shall be forever indebted to as an SS writer..there is nothing like her talent to take the story to the next level..Smitha, I don't think words can ever do justice to how much it means to me that you added your char chand to my Shanak story.


[YOUTUBE]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Ag7uqCX9NAU[/YOUTUBE]


Edited by saaaz - 14 years ago
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Brat
I love it when you're being Brattie😃
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Now where are all the brats???

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