#5 - AsYa/KaBhi FF : My Mental Love ! PART 20 - PART 23 ! Go #6 !

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shonajain

@shonajain

Voyager

+ 2

Posted: 10 years ago

#801

fantabulous update bano
zoe is finally growing mentally
asya. convo was wonderful...they are awsum

naya insaan???
contnue soon
lots of love
shona

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nilusoni

@nilusoni

Rocker

Posted: 10 years ago

#802

awesome part loved it

thanx for pm

plz pm me for next part

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ChocoBerry

@ChocoBerry

Rocker

+ 4

Posted: 10 years ago

#803

Awesome update Bano.

I loved how you described Zoya's realization that Asad was not the father of the baby age was carrying. Her breakdown in her washroom was so well explained dear 👏

How she looks through her iPad to understand the reality of her life was done well too and how she goes to Asad to thank him for his support and the description of her toughts to get justice and how Asad's emotions are spiraling out of control were written so well.

I loves the whole scene of her getting scared until they pick the rest from the park was a good read.

The highlight of the update was definitely their talk in the park. Brilliantly written and all emotions expressed so well 👏

Loved the WHOLE update Choti Bajijaan ❤️

And thank you for such a super update. Love you 🤗

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Gulaabo

@Gulaabo

Inactive

+ 5

Posted: 10 years ago

#804

now this was the most endearing chapter of this story...

zoya truly realized what a saviour means!!

curious about the stranger...hope he's someone good...

continue soon

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Mayur Chan

@MayurChan

Sparkler

+ 2

Posted: 10 years ago

#805

Hii...Bano..iam grateful to my stars i got the update through P.M... :-P well jokes apart i must say i wasn't expecting that conversation between them you suprised me and it was on target excellent...but i feel sad for zoya ...that girl is actually becoming fine and adaptable in this world but she again has to be a victim of her horrible past...a very well written scene that was which showed her grief...and then my fav moment in the Update ASYA hug...how she was not letting him move...and how she choose her heartful thankful words awesome...Asad well if you get this situation again and again then he can live his lifetime cherising these moments...you know i have typed this much but still it was only half of the part :-D...zoya realized that her SAVIOUR will always protect her no matter what and she went out with that confidence...humm...the scene in the car was also cute and briliant..well you no iam out of words...but will not ask you about the stranger...because iam not being able to guess him...and can only wait for that to be revealed...but on honest note it was a MAHAUPDATE...long , emotional, and superb...continue soon.

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AsadZoyaILU

@AsadZoyaILU

Navigator

+ 2

Posted: 10 years ago

#806

thank u very very very much for the update i loved it but i so want to know who the stanger is plz tell quickly and plz a bit more jealousy bit plz of sana and asad but i also want zoya to find out that asad only loves her when r u going to update next

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PrettYSmile

@PrettYSmile

Inactive

Posted: 10 years ago

#807

Whatever u r doing there.. leave dat n come to india n plllzzz start writting serials. ..u ll be a tough competetion to big writters like ekta kapoor, gul khan, palki malhotra.. n many more.. n m not kidding[/B]m damn serious.. .m sure many ppl will agree with me[B]

Seriously, kaha se laati ho yaar ese nayyab ideas..
I really want to know ur real age.. coz i dont belive u r a teenager.. ur work doesnot seems of dat.. .

About the update, kya bolu.. kuch hai hi nahi.. from the start to end.. .SPEECHLESS. ..dont have words to explain..
Right from the starting to till here, the way u have moulded the characters, specially zoya, its soo mature u know.. .
How beautifully u have shaped the storyline.. .
I was always a fan of ur stories. ..but today it increased another level.. ..commendable. ...

I suggest u plz think about writting seriously.. .
I always wanted to c ur previous story(stalker leading) in a show played by our amazing kabhi obviously.. .
But today.. .i cant express what m feeling..

Soo, update toh, each n evry bit was great.. specialky zoya s fkashback, knowing about her pregnency was commendeble..

Main baat toh bhool gayi tere chakkar me.. .arey wah, itni jaldi update kar dia.. ..doble surprize..

N ye new entry, first i thought ayyan.. then i think koi zoya wel wisher, dost ya relative ho.. ..pata nahi.. .lets c..

Sorry if i foret something,...i ll pm u.. ..

Amazing. ..