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Posted: 12 years ago

#541

I knew I knew it. He its not going to let her go. YaYYY * victory dance*
So is Zoe going to work for Asad? Tell me YES. That'll be a treat .

Omg Najam saw her bhaijan. I'm just waiting for them to meet.
Ayan is a sweetheart.

God why are you such a brilliant writer? This is my current favorite FF.

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Natasha

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Posted: 12 years ago

#542

Faiza 😲 You did not PM after 6th update !! I am catching up now on the rest !!

I am naraz better pm me the next one !!

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madhuri

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Posted: 12 years ago

#543

mast update...
now wht will happn..
i want asad to take zoya to his home ..
n nazma n zoya moment was superb...
now who is her brother..
hmm continue soon...

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Posted: 12 years ago

#544

Originally posted by: Naughtynatty
Faiza 😲 You did not PM after 6th update !! I am catching up now on the rest !!
I am naraz better pm me the next one !!

Whaaay? Really? Howcome! 😲 Did you delete me of your pm list, Nat?!

Anyways i'l surely pm you now on pakka! 🤗

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Posted: 12 years ago

#545

Originally posted by: nupsie
Faiza...!!

I hav finally read all the nine chapters!!

n I wanna say...I love u Faiza🤗🤗

Wat a brlliant, amazing, outstanding writer u are👏

Everything is so well writte, the present story, the flashbacks, the past, the pain every character is going through from Najma to Rashid, to Ayan to AsYa...I cud visualize each n every scene n feel each n every emotion that u hav portrayed so well...loved each n every bit of the story so far! ❤️

I feared an Ayan-Zoya angle in between but then the way the story progressed I felt like they are goin to be gud frens or more like bro-sis!

m so curious to know wat happened between Rashid n Dlshad, wat about Ayan's family, wat exactly happened to Zoya's family...wat happens wen Asad meets Najma...n can't wait for AsYa story to pick up!! But I loved this thing that they hardly know each other, they they can read each-other's eyes, understand the depth of each-other's pain...m glad Zoya saw Asad in that vulnerable state, a shattered man craving for his mom's love! 😔

n oh my u hav even given space to characters like Giselda in ur story who hava past, and thats the true ability of a writer to giv each character a story of their own so that they dun seem like sumthing unwanted or extra and a waste of the space...👏 And I even loved the characterization of Najma's frend Noor😛

Girl I can't tell u how how much I am in love with ur story...this story deserves to be converted nto a movie or a show...its sooo much better than wat we see on TV these days😆

Ur writing is flawless and u hav this ability to keep the readers hooked and a wanting more each time u update!👏

This is surely the best FF I've ever read, I anyway read ery few but this is undoubtedly the BEST!! <333👍🏼

Love Ya babes🤗

P.S. - I want the next update today, can't wait to read wat happens next!!😛 n dun forget to PM me😳

EDIT: I just realized that my comment got a bit too long...but this a comment for al ur nine parts together, itna toh banta hai😃

OMG NOOPUR! 🤗

Girl you got any idea how your comment made my day? Im so happy you're reading my FF. Welcome to Chapter Black. Thank you so much im so mega happy you like it! 🤗

I loved your comment, so so so encouraging. Zara and you are really sweethearts will pestering me to update. 😆

Thankyou so much. Loveee youuu! 🤗 ❤️

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Posted: 12 years ago

#546

Originally posted by: Pisces_Gurl
Wow...This is awexome...
How everyone can judge the fake smile...
Well its not easy to plaster a fake smile while the heart is in severe pain
Loved every scene..
Zoya n Najma's convo was cute...Finally Najma saw her bhaijaan...

That disgusting lady demanding Zouya back...what will happen now...

Asad looking at secretly..wow..cute..
Loce the whole..
Update soon..

Thank you so very much. Im really glad you are liking my story. 😃

Its definitely not easy, no. Hope you like further updates too. 😳

Originally posted by: Alveena12
very very interesting, please update soon and pm me

Thank you so much. Im glad you're liking it and sure sweets. 😃

Originally posted by: laizu
Uff, fabulous part. Asad, Zoya, Najma in the same restaurant. What will happen next?

Wait and watch. Hope you like my next update too. 😳

Originally posted by: shreya11mehra
soo nice...very,nice part...

sry fr late cmnt...

Thats not a prob. :) and thank you. :)

Originally posted by: Akilla
loved it

Thank you so very much😃

Originally posted by: Sirit-of-Dead
Omg.. Awesome part ...
I hope zoya won't misunderstand Asad..
I want najma to see her brother admiring zoya..
Plz don't make ayaan fall for zoya..
Can't wait for the next part dear..
Continue soon
N Thx for the pm :)

Lets seee where it goes. 😆

Just trust me with the story. 😳 thank you so much btw😃

Originally posted by: ..vidhi..
fabulous update faiza...continue soon!!!

Thankyou babes. 😃

Originally posted by: jazsidhu
omg tis is really awesome...so beautifull...totally luv it...wonder wat is the raaz behind zoya identity n who is she n where she belong n hw she end up here ...hope asad will help her n take her away frm tat giselle...thx fr the pm...m just hook to tis ff..its one of my favourite ff...u r really superb...ur writting skills can potray wat the other person is feeling n hw they r reaction to a situation...
thx fr the pm n please pm me fr the next update...please continue soon n eagerly waiting fr the next update...👏

Awww. That really means alot to me. Sachi. Encourages me alot! 😃 thanks a bunch. 😃

Originally posted by: janestone6
I knew I knew it. He its not going to let her go. YaYYY * victory dance*
So is Zoe going to work for Asad? Tell me YES. That'll be a treat .
Omg Najam saw her bhaijan. I'm just waiting for them to meet.
Ayan is a sweetheart.
God why are you such a brilliant writer? This is my current favorite FF.

Haha thankyouuu! Im s glad you're likig it! 😃

Hope you keep liking it. I really love reading your comments! 😃

Originally posted by: soniaraheja
mast update...
now wht will happn..
i want asad to take zoya to his home ..
n nazma n zoya moment was superb...
now who is her brother..
hmm continue soon...

Thank you so very much, i am glad you are liking my story.

Questions tou ab agei hi answer hungay. 😆

Thankyouuu once again! :D

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Posted: 12 years ago

#547

'Uncontrollable Emotions'

'Bhaijaan', a voice escaped her lips.

A lump fromed in her throat as she looked at him, her vision blurring with the tears. This is it. This is finally the moment she had dreamt of all her life. Seeing her bhaijaan.

She took a step forward, and and another towards him, her form shaking with the intensity of her thoughts. She was just a few feets away from him when she saw him straighten himself from behind the pillar and make his way towards the door.

Najma saw him leave the restaurant, and her breath constricted. No. She couldn't let him go. Not after all those years, she couldn't let him go when she had finally found him. She ran towards the door, bumping into tables after tables, chairs after people, excusing herself for crashing into waiters who cursed her.

And when she finally thought she had reached, she felt a hand on her arm, pulling her back.

'Najma!', she heard someone say, but she ignored.

She tried to loosen the person's hold.

'Najma!', she heard once again.

But no. She was going to go out that door, crash into his brother's arms and cry for all those years. Cry for their mother's death, cry for their father's misery and just fill in each other on their lives and go back home to Mumbai and-

Her thought process was brutally interupted as she felt a stinging pain on her left cheek. Raising her gaze, she saw the person who had been holding her and had just slapped her across her face. Noor.

'SNAP OUT OF IT!', Noor yelled at Najma, pulling her towards the bathroom.

'Let go of me, Bhaijaan is outside!', Najma cried. 'Please Noor, let me go!'

Noor could not stand seeing her best friend like this. So vulnerable. She had always known how much she had wanted her brother back in her life. She had often caught her crying in a corner. This was one thing Najma never talked to her about. The only thing. But Noor knew everything. And she knew if Najma went out that door and did what she wanted to, she may live with this pain forever.

Noor pulled a sobbing Najma who had caught the attention of many people present in the the restaurant in the area, into the bathroom.

'I'm sorry for that', Zoya apologized, as she sat on the table, infront of Ayaan once again.

'No. I am sorry', Ayaan said looking at her. 'Listen, can we please start over? I want us to be friends'.

Zoya could see the sincerity in his eyes. Plus what other option did she have? She was living in his apartment, he was the only person she knew and wasn't afraid of. And although he was told to this by his boss, Asad Ahmed Khan, he was sharing his apartment with her.

'Me too', Zoya said, trying her best to pull up a smile, putting the cold steak into her throat.

'Thank you', Ayaan said out of relief.

Asad Ahmed Khan. Oh crap! He was outside, he remembered.

'Hey, will you please give me a moment?', Ayaan asked Zoya, highly embarrassed. 'I need to make an urgent call'.

'Oh certainly, sure', Zoya said. 'I'l just finish off my with my food, quiet hungry', she finished honestly, looking at him apologetically.

'Please do!', Ayaan said to her reassuringly.

She moaned in pleasure as the man kissed her collarbone, her legs wrapped around his waist.

'So will you do it?', she asked between her moans. 'Will you bring the girl to me?'

'Yes', he said between his groans. 'Now scream my name, you wh*re!', he said into her ear as he slammed his hips agains hers once again.

'Why did you stop me?!', Najma barked at her friend who seemed no less than an enemy to her at that very moment, yanking her by her shoulders. 'Answer me, why?!'.

Noor removed Najma's hands away from her shoulder and slapped her once again, knowing she was getting hysterical once again.

'You go upto him and do what?!', Noor yelled at Najma, to shake some sense into her. 'Do you think he'l even look at you?'.

'W-what do you mean?', Najma asked, tears cascading down her face as streams, as she looked at her friend's face, horrified.

'He won't accept you, Najma!', Noor said, in a lower voice. 'You can't just go upto him like this?'

'Why not?!', Najma yelled. 'He's my brother!'

'Who hates your existance!', Noor yelled once again. 'Who blames you for his mother's death!'

Najma looked at the bathroom floor, taking a step back so she could use the sink for her support. She couldn't stand.

'H-how do you know?', Najma asked in a small voice.

Noor came forward and hugged her best friend. She knew she was dying inside.

'His interview to the Bhopal Magazine last year', she whispered to her while she rubbed her back. 'He said the birth of his sister killed his mother'.

'He called me his sister, Noor!', Najma said as she sobbed in her best friend's arms. 'He called dad 'the man' and me his sister'.

Noor knew she had a point. But she couldn't let her do this. She would ofcourse do anything she could to untie the brother and the sister. But not like this. She would have to first find out what Asad Ahmed Khan felt about Najm Ahmed Khan, his sister.

'You understand?', Asad asked Ayaan. 'You have to do this!'

'Sir, I have never spoken against what you have asked me to do', Ayaan replied, his voice low. 'But I refuse to do this!'

'I know. Ayaan, I know why, but believe me, Zoya is not safe here!', Asad said, his hands on Ayaan's shoulder.

He was panting. With all the running, the whole tension in the air, he felt exhausted.

'Sir, my sister is dying! I can not go and see her die!', Ayaan replied, his voice shaking.

'Nothing will happen to, Nikhat', Asad said, his heart actually aching for the man in front. 'She will be fine. She could do with some company, Zoya might be able to help'.

Did he just? Did Asad Ahmed Khan just say his sister's name? He remembered her name? After all these years, how did he? Ayaan was shocked. He looked at his boss's face. He may never understand this man, he thought.

'I'm sorry, I can not see my sister die!', Ayaan said before he marched back into the restaurant, for the first time denying his boss something.

Asad stood outside the restaurant, his hands in his hair. He needed to get Zoya out of this place. Ayaan refused to take her to his village. Where could he send her? He needed someone to be on a look out for her 24/7.

He coudn't save his mother, but he would be damned if he let this girl get even a scratch on her. He will keep a watch on her, and not let anyone harm her. Why? So his mother's soul was at peace. And also, because she was the only woman he had seen who's eyes mirrored the same pain he held. And no human could bear more pain. She would be destroyed if she did.

Thats it. He got it. He knew what to do.

He reached out for his cellphone, and typed a message.

'Ayaan, make that girl join Dislhaad Industries!'.

'Are you serious?', Zoya exclaimed, clappimg her hands together. 'You really found a job for me?'

'Yes', Ayaan said, faking a smile.

He couldn't tell her in who's company though. Not yet. He felt guilty. But he knew his boss had good intentions.

'But I didn't even tell you my qualifications, so how did you?', Zoya asked, sipping her coke.

'I got a call to ask if I knew someone suitable to fit in for a vacancy in the Design Team', he told. 'It's a construction business'.

'But without knowing my qualifications, how did they agree?', Zoya asked puzzled.

Ayaan had no answer to this. He wasn't fit in for the lying.

'Well, do you have qualifications necessary for this job?', he asked.

'Yes, yes I do', Zoya answered. 'I have an engineering degree, thanks for asking', Zoya replied sarcastically.

'Please, just trust me', he said, sighing.

Zoya had to. She had no other option. She wanted the job as soon as possible, pay off Asad Ahmed Khan for 'buying' her out of that hell, buy herself a new apartment and start a new life. She had no choice but to trust her new friend, Ayaan.

'Okay', Zoya smiled. 'We shoud be getting back home now'.

'Yeah', Ayaan replied, returning that smile.

After paying the bills, they sat in the car, headed back to the apartment. Asad Ahmed Khan wants to save a girl. Again. Why? He remembered his sister's name. Maybe that man did have a heart, Asad thought smiling in the car.

'Did you return him the card?', she asked as they stood in the elevator to go up in their apartment.

'What card?', Ayaan asked, looking at Zoya, who was looking everywhere but him.

'His card', she said in a small voice.

He looked at her face. Her body stiffened everytime she spoke of him.

'Zoya, I know you don't like him', Ayaan said looking at her. 'But you'l be surprised one day when you realise you owe him the world and see him never gloating'.

Zoya looked at Ayaan's face, trying to find the meaning. She did owe Asad Ahmed Khan, yes.

'He helped me once. He never gloated', Ayaan said as they got off the elevator. 'My own personal ego makes me his slave. Makes me feel indebted'.

Zoya saw the urgency with which Ayaan rotated the key in the keyhole of the door. What did he mean?

'He did so much for me that I feel burried under the pile of his greatness', Ayaan said throwing away his jacket as they reached in.

Zoya could see hwo the conversation had made Ayaan so restless. She was worried, genuinely.

'But he', Ayaan said in a raised voice, pointing towards Zoya, shocking her. 'He never asked for anything in return!'

His body shook voilently.

'Ayaan-', she started hut was cut off.

'He saved my sister from being raped! Saved her from the man who had almost taken advantage of her geing handicapped!', Ayaan was almost yelling now. 'He beat the man black and blue, and took the blame of my irresponsibility on his shoulders!'.

Zoya was in tears now. She had no idea what Ayaan had went through. She had no idea about this side of Asad Ahmed Khan's.

'When the world blamed me for not being able to take care of my handicapped sister', Ayaan said, choking on his words. 'He told the media, yes, the media, that HE had hired me and kept me away! But the truth was, that he didn't know any of us before then!'

'And, and after all those years, he still remembers my poor sister's name!', Ayaan said, his voice now low, as tears formed in his eyes, and his body shook with emotions. 'I owe that man my life and my sister's!'

Zoya saw him walk into his bedroom and shut the door behind him with a bang. Tears fell down her face, her body unable to take all of it in.

She was shocked beyond words at the calmest man she knew break into such a mess. And then what he had revealed about Asad Ahmed Khan. It reduced her to tears.

The monster from that night, the man who had come to his door and apologized, the man who had sent him new clothes, and the man Ayaan had just revealed. Were they the same man?

Zoya caressed the fabric of her salwar kameez, slowly tracing her fingers over the pattern.

'Allah Miyaan, himmat dena mujhe', Zoya said raising her hands in the air, joining them together. 'Himmat dena mujhe aur taaqat dena mujhe ke mein hur shaksh ko pehchaan sakun. Apni qismat se larne ki taqat dena, apmi qismat ko Qubool kerne ki taaqat dena. Ya Allah, mujhe himmat dena'.

(Translation: Allah Miyaan, give me strength. Give me strength to see through peaople, to understand them. Give me strength to battle with my fate, and to accept it. Oh Allah, give me strength.)

A/N:

Okay guys, story is finally moving. Im so sorry i couldn't reply to the comments of the last update. And i just realised there were many errors in the last update. So sorrry, couldn't proof read. As i was already so late in updating, I thought maybe you guys would want my update more than my replies. 😆 but i read all the comments and i love you all. *big hug*! Feedbacks to this chater too please. And a special thanks to Yamini who made a banner for this FF. I finally have a new banner, see page 1. 🤗 So this update is dedicated to her and Noopur and Zara who constantly threatened me to update. Love you all! <3

Edited by -ElmoFuj- - 12 years ago

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Natasha

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Posted: 12 years ago

#548

*edited*

OO I am the first one 😆

Amazing update !!! Omg I think Noor was wrong she should have let Najma meet Asad !!

BUt then again she is a concerned friend and doesnt want her to be hurt so acceptable.

God Ayaan is a sweetheart to Zoya I am so loving this friendship.

Akdu is a kind heart would do anything to save someone in need.

Overall dhamakerdar Update !!

I will wait to see if I get a pm this time 😆

Edited by Naughtynatty - 12 years ago

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Farhana

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Posted: 12 years ago

#549

Kept stalking your FF 😆

Oh my god, this part...

Najma, I feel so bad

Really really great part Faiza

Applause's

I love you for this part yaar

🤗

Edited by risingsea101 - 12 years ago

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Nida

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Posted: 12 years ago

#550

Hey ...
That was mindblowing !!
Seriously ... It was so intense !!!

Awww Najma and Noor's scene broke my heart ... </3

Ok !! So now we got to see a very compassionate side of Asad ... :)
And I'm lovin' the way the story is moving ahead ... :-)

Thanks for the pm ... :D

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