Saved by Ammi - Asya O.S - Page 3

Originally posted by: Laila2009

this was a really well written story except a rushed ending really hurt the story. I thought you did a fabulous job and wished you'd have added more to the end and given more about Asad and Zoya's inner reactions towards the end. You had a great climactic ending that could have been built up some more and the with more towards the end. It was too matter a fact rather than with the depth and emotion you gave in the earlier part. I really liked it and consider this one of the more mature and well thought out stories that I have read. i definitely think you gave us a much needed maturer Zoya whom I really liked. I just WISH it had not had such a rushed ending.

Thank you Laila for the comments. As I said earlier, I am not a writer. Just trying to find some other hobby than baking and cooking (this way I won't have to eat all of it and become fatter). I will definitely keep your points in mind when I write the next story.

Nice. My heart cried for Zoya for a good part of this story.

Thank you all.
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lovely i luv it very much and the os was well written i luv it. it was awesome

Kash ...I want this in QH.😳

I just loved it!!
everything
And Asad deserved the treatment from Zoe in the end

Loved it..loved each and every part of it.
Awesome work 👍🏼