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Posted: 13 years ago
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nice cs ... cntinue soon
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loved d Cs..
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Amazing prologue and nice cs
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Guys thank u for all ur comments, sorry couldn't reply individually due to less time, next time se pakka will reply everyone, next part will be in sometime.
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Chapter1
part a
(written by roshni aka mohit dewaani)
It was a shining afternoon in beautiful city of dehradoon , excitement and happiness was spread all over afterall today was a big day ! The dobriyal mansion was full of peoples and was being decorated with colourful flowers and lights , madhu dobriyal was running here and there scolding the workers for not doing work properly , she was highly tensed yet very happy .
Her husband arnab dobriyal was just looking at madhu giggling as everything was just perfect still she was getting hyper running here and there for no reason .
Madhu : arnab would u please stop standing there laughing , Do some work , go look after catering .
Arnab : why should I madhu , when u hav double checked everything.
Madhu : you are useless arnab ! TARA where r u ? Come fast mamma needs your help .
A beautifull girl of around 22 years came down holding a flower basket with a big smile , she was looking simply amazing and the blue salwar kammez was adding to her beauty , she was looking adorable in her specs but was looking over excited , why shouldn't she it was big day afterall , tat was Tara dobriyal.
Tara : yes yes mumma , why u shouting ?
Madhu : Tara ! Wat is this ? U aren't ready yet , guest have started arriving and is your bratty sister ready or today also she is showing her laziness to get ready
Tara : areee mumma , chill na she is almost ready and u know my di looks most beautiful girl today btw stop taking tension , your make up is spoiling
Arnab laughing : exactly , thoda thoda toh already spoil ho chuka hai !
Madhu : tum Baap Beti na , u both just too much now stop this bakwaas and go get ready and yes Tara call abhay and ask him in how much time he will be reaching , and also see if the catering arrangement is perfect orbit , and yes also check piya's stuff and ha ask piya if she needs anything and also see if guest doesn't hav any problem and tell waiters to start serving the starters and ...
Tara : ok ok ok mumma , Relax abhay will be reaching here in almost an hour , every arrangement is done , di doesn't anything if she would need she would tell ,and I hav already told waiters told start serving , anything more or should I go and get ready ? And why u look so tensed
Madhu : why shouldn't I be , it's such a big day today now go fast and get ready.
Tara went to piya's room to see wat she is doing and piya facing the window texting sumone and blushing , few friends of piya where also sitting there and they were chatting and giggling and trying there best to get their friend piya's attention but all in vain as she was lost in her mobile only .
Tara : DI !
Piya turned around , she was looking Incrediblelly beautiful and magnificent today , Her kajal was perfectly complimenting her adorable baby Brown eyes , her light pink lip gloss was adding a perfect shine to her curves of rosy lips , the jewellery on her were perfectly complimenting her beautiful features , besides makeup her blushing and big smile was giving a perfect shine her to blushing face , she was literally glowing today !
Piya : wat my star
Tara : stop it di , it's your WEDDING today atleast today give sum attention to us rather than keep on chatting with your to be husband on phone , u r gonna go today DI !!!
Piya keeping phone aside : ok fine stary , u know I will miss u kash I could pack u in my bag and take u along !
Tara : dunno worry di , main kabhi bhi tapak jaungi at your home to harass you , jiju and that champoo dever of yours
Piya : waise yeh Kya star ! U aren't ready yet u r bride's sister afterall Vogt ready fast so tat u can steal the heart of many young men out there
Tara : I m not a thief like u di !
Just then piya's phone twitted , she looked at it and then at Tara with a very eager eyes , Tara rolled her eyes .
Tara : ok fine answers the text , u r mad
Piya : yes I m madly in love with abhay .
Then after almost 1 hour , there was a sound of music at the gate of dobriyal house , piya's all friend, cousins rushed to see the the Baraat , it was kind of huge Baraat , all piya and abhay's college friend , few relatives of abhay , and also the staff members of abhay's office and a over happy brother abhay raichand Varun raichand was dancing with full swing , Varun's happiness could be clearly seen from his handsome face , abhay wasn't in sight , he was sitting in his newly bought Porsche 911 but soon the Dulha came out , he was looking extraordinarily handsome , like some Greek god every girl today must be jealous piya for sure ,piya who was looking all this from her window was blushing hard , suddenly she felt a nervousness and butterflies in her stomach , she checked herself in mirror to see if she looked perfect . Just then Tara came,
Tara : come fast DI , abhay has came to take you away
Piya checking herself one last time in mirror : m I looking fine na star ? I m not looking clumsy na ? U think abhay will like it
Tara : stop worrying di , you looking the most beautiful bride ever !
Piya : it's just tat I m nervous waise star u are not looking less beautiful today , tere Saath Kisi ladke ki setting Kardu Kya ?
Tara : sharukh khan ki , kar logi mere liye ?
Piya : sorry he's already committed , Varun chalega ?
Tara taking a pillow in her hand : DI I will kill u
Piya : Accha then were will u held my funeral ? Disco mein rakhna please
Tara : no no I will toh held your funeral in Switzerland
Piya : so that's the place u and Varun are going for honeymoon
tara : stop it DI Piya hugging
Tara : god I will miss u soo much
Tara : mee too di , chalo now don't make me senti , we hav to go down everyone must be waiting
Then finally piya along with Tara came down from the flowery staircase . Today piya was looking like an angel from , Abhay was stunned to see piya , he was just staring and staring at her , abhay winked at piya which made piya blush more , finally they were standing next to each other .
madhu : o my god , my daughter looks soo beautiful , pata hi nahi Chala when u become soo big .
Abhay giggling : Kya mom , she is toh looking like a monkey
Piya : abhay !!!! U seriously think like tat ?
Abhay : just kidding piya , I hav never seen you soo beautiful u know u should more often wear the bridal attire
Piya : very funny abhay .
Varun : chalo now time for exchanging garlands .
Piya and abhay both took garlands in there hands . Piya moved forward to put the garland in abhay's neck but just then abhay moved , then she again tried to put the garland but abhay again moved , then piya looked at other side angrily , abhay came forward and lowered his neck for piya , piya gave a big smile to abhay and put the garland around abhay's neck and abhay also did the same . Flowers where being showered on them in form of blessing .
Abhay took piya's hand and both started moving towards the mandap .

Next part in pg 13
Edited by Rmuk - 13 years ago
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part b
Written by me
Part 2
The wedding mandap was well decorated with kalashas (pots filed with water), garlands of mango leaves, coconuts and banana leaves also the of use fabrics, lights, crystals, flowers, Wrought Iron unique shapes and other materials insuring all religious aspects of a mandap, which include the four pillars and havan kund (fire box) has added special effect to the beautiful mandap. Abhay and piya both sat into the mandap together. Both looked into each other eyes looking lost into their own world of love, piya was just staring at the blue eyes looking at her with love and abhay was busy staring at the most beautiful bride sitting infront of him, with those baby brown eyes which was making him go weak in his knees. Both were living there sweet little moments when suddenly it was disturbed by varun, as he started lauging seeing his brother lost into his own world of love,
Varun-: Bhai, I know that u are in hurry for this shaddi to end, so that u can have our bhabhi, but bhai for that u need to atleast finish this rituals after that u can stare at bhabhi for as long as u want.
Piya just blushed and abhay smiled and lightly scolded varun,
Abhay-: varun, u have become very naughty, wait let ur time come, then we will see, who is in hurry.
Varun-: yea, yea we will see.
Their conversation was innterruted by Madhu dobriyal, who was more than mother in law, was mother for both abhay and varun after the death of their parents.
Madhu-: keep quite u both, varun come with me.
Varun smiled and winked at abhay and went with mrs. madhu dobriyal, which made piya blush more and abhay smiled looking at piya, whose cheeks were scarlet red which was adding a special effect to her heavenly beauty.
At last the priest started chanting slokas (mantra) and abhiya both started doing all the rituals, at last it was.the time for vows, tara tied the knot and both abhiya took seven vows, with piya infront in first three and abhay infront in the next four, both promised to themselves and each other to obey each and every vow and to never leave each others side.
After that both abhay and piya sat back in their respective places and abhay putted vermilion in piya's forehead and tied the mangal sutra around piya's neck, making piya his forever and ever.
After some more rituals they were declared as married couples, both abhay and piya smiled at each other, happiness sparkling from both of their eyes. After that all the functions arranged were done and everyone enjoyed. Tara and varun performed a dance on some random songs, and some other college friends danced too and at last abhay and piya both danced on the song, 'dil ibadat', swaying their body on the tune and people just adored their undying chemistry.
After all the functions were over, it was the time for 'bidaai', the most hard and emotional moment for the family and bride. Piya was both happy and sad at the same time, happy that she will be with abhay, her abhay now forever, and sad that she had to now leave her family, her parents and her sister.
Abhay and piya both tooked the blessings of the elders of the family and piya hugged her mother and cried a lot, then she hugged her father and at last her naughty sister, who was not at all looking her usual bubbly self, piya knew she was sad because she is going,
Piya-: (crying) Tara, I will miss u a lot.
tara-: I will also miss u dii.
Both hugged each other and at last separated.
Tara-: dii stop crying, I know u are dying to be with jiju in his, oops I mean in ur's room and then..
But before tara could complete her sentence, piya smiled while blushing red and hitted tara lightly on her shoulder and both the sister hugged each other again and finally separated.
Both abhay and piya bid final adieu and went and sat inside the white mercedies waiting for them and drove away from there with varun following them in another white car.
After a journey of 45 mins which looked like a eternity for both abhay and piya they reached their destination that is raichand mansion. Raichand mansion was decorated with chain of lights, flowers, curtains which made it look more classy. Abhay got out of the car first and then opened the door for piya to come out. Piya got out of the car slowly as due to the bridal attire she was having problem in walking, abhay sensed that piya was having problem in walking, so without telling a single word, abhay picked up piya in his arms making piya suprised,
Piya-: abhay what are u doing?What if varun will see us like this, I don't want to be teased again, plz let me down na.
Abhay-: (smiling showing his cute dimples) piya no one will tease u and I know u are having problem in this attire, now stop talking and let me carry you.
Piya knew that whatever abhay said was right and no one can stop abhay raichand so she decided to be quite and let abhay carry her.
After entering the mansion abhay saw that varun has not entered yet, so he decided to carry piya till there room, which was already decorated with flowers and candles, waiting for the two soulmate to come and live the moment for which they were waiting since long...

Ps-: guys we both have written this chapter together, hope u guys will like it, prologue is a mystery type, so it may not have any link with this chapter. This part is just the beginning of perfect paradise. Hope u guys will like it and sorry for the delay as we both were hell busy and if u all like it then pls leave ur precious comments, love u all.
Edited by Rmuk - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Me first🥳
Aww i love Tara and Pia😳 they are cute sissiy's😆
Abhiya ki shaddi hogayi😆

Nice update girls! looking forward to the next chappy😉😆
Thanks for the pm🤗and continue soon😳

Edited by Abhiya_Gunner - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
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PROLOGUE ME VO LADKI 21 YA 22 YRS KI PIA HAINA AND JO BOY 22 YRS KA HAI VO ABHAY HAINA AND JO MAN 24 YRS KA HAI VO SHAYAD PIA KA DAD HAINA ??????
GN TC KS HSD
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Originally posted by: arunsunita_gm

PROLOGUE ME VO LADKI 21 YA 22 YRS KI PIA HAINA AND JO BOY 22 YRS KA HAI VO ABHAY HAINA AND JO MAN 24 YRS KA HAI VO SHAYAD PIA KA DAD HAINA ??????

GN TC KS HSD

Piya ka dad 24 years ka and piya 22 ki! 🤣🤣🤣
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Posted: 13 years ago
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rosh and romi u both did a fab update
i just loved it yar
the way rosh u describe the situation of abhiya marriage
the way piya msgng with abhay
piya tara conv was too gud
than in next part liked it the way romi u described the whole mandap scene yar
marriage is totally tradition
and the way abhay tease piya and even varun tease abhay
their bid scene and than the last scene of abhiya where he carried piya
yar i loved it
glad that in 1 part abhiya marry
great work u both did
take ur time and cont it

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