ArYa SS: A Father's Trial - PART 5 Up (PG 22) - Page 11

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Posted: 12 years ago
@Zahra15: Thank you. And welcome to my fiction world. Btw, I love the stories you write. I am glad you enjoyed the teenagers. I am still playing around with Pooja, so lets see - she may get her own story, who knows 😉. Haven't decided yet how Vikram turns out though I do have some ides about the inquisition 😆.


@Kadeen: thank you lil sis. Pooja's cake eating came directly from one of my cousins - I think he was around 10 too...😛.


@Sunrio80: thank you! If the words can evoke a picture in your mind, I am doing at least a part of my job right.


@Borna: Thank you. To tell you the truth, Pooja's tennis lessons idea originated from Arti's hockey mastery. Oh and you are so sweet to go back and leave additional comments for part 1. I did read them, thanks for the encouragement and appreciation.

@Maham: Thank you - and am glad my story provided some relaxation and pleasure at the end of the day for you. Pooja does pay the price of being the youngest - but she reaps the rewards too, so its all good 😃. And am still working out the inquisition...



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Posted: 12 years ago
@Zetter - thank you, especially for going to the trouble of reading all the parts. The inquisition will definitely be a party for the elder Scindias - jury's out on the teenagers' reactions.

@Lulujjj - thank you. Working on the update...


@Dona86 - thank you. You are always so encouraging.


@Naureen - thank you. As you mentioned, Pooja does not like music - sports her thing.


@Taahir004 - Thank you, my friend. And so sweet of you - hooked to my stories. Will try to keep up with the supply for your "addiction" 😉.


@Pearl-girl
- thank you sweetie. I think Pooja won everyone's heart - I am glad. Its hard to create a character and convey exactly how you see him/her - and for me at least, its harder if the character is a child. So I am glad that at least in this intro, she came across as I am seeing her.


@Coolkiwi, Rasheeda, Freya123, Saffi
- thank you! I really appreciate your taking the time to read and provide feedback.

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Posted: 12 years ago
@Vanny - thanks. Not sure how much space I should give Pooja - or Payal for that matter. I started this story specifically about Palak's crush and I think I will end it with the crush - the other kids may one day get their own story, especially Payal. She's turned out to be pretty unique in my head, so let's see. The inquisition won't be scary per se, but...teenagers and BFs/GFs beware!!!!😉


@rutu83 - thank you. And yes I do PM, will add you to the list. Thanks for the interest.


@Maha9 - thank you. I am glad Yash is turning out the way he is...


@USManeetian - thank you. Me too - I really would like the baby to survive.

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Posted: 12 years ago

Originally posted by: kdsubs1

@Vanny - thanks. Not sure how much space I should give Pooja - or Payal for that matter. I started this story specifically about Palak's crush and I think I will end it with the crush - the other kids may one day get their own story, especially Payal. She's turned out to be pretty unique in my head, so let's see. The inquisition won't be scary per se, but...teenagers and BFs/GFs beware!!!!😉


You're welcome Kat! 🤗
Maybe you can have an epilogue in that case then! 😊

I'm eagerly waiting to see your version of Payal. Her character has so much scope for many nice developments! 😉

Please update soon! 😳
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@Kat: Finally...I read the third chapter...and I can only bow to your storytelling expertise. 👏That was stupendous. The entire chapter just visually floated across my eyes...the depiction was that stark. Your hold on the agewise and genderwise characteristics of each child and parental reactions to each one's antics is simply awesome. I adored Yash's one-to-one with each of his kids...it's so naturally endearing...a typical father!!! 😃

So, subjecting the friends to a friendly inquisition is sort of a Scindia tradition...eh!! Well, this is going to be interesting...first, stuff the victim with Mumma-made cake and goodies, and when the victim is all soft and malleable, catch him off-guard with intent-seeking queries...nice, very nice!!!😛
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Posted: 12 years ago
OMG!!! Pooja reminded me of myself wen I was her age I wud always make my mom and dad by all sorts of snacks for me and they wud ask me to share and I wud yell no and wen I got fed up of the snack I wud sweetly look at them and say "mummy, daddy u can have some now!" and they both wud look at me and say " yea! now tht u don't want any u r giving us the snack!" and I wud give them puupy dog eyes and sweetly reply "yea!" and they wud laugh at me and take the snack 🤣btw wht does petu mean??? and Pooja is sooo cute I just love her and her love nickname for Payal "Pali" Ansh and Yash share a very good Father-Son bond and I'm thanking my stars right now tht I don't hav a father lyk Yash who wud embarrass me lyk tht
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Posted: 12 years ago
Lovely update, Kat. Enjoyed reading. 😊 Looking forward to the inquisition.
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Posted: 12 years ago
@Shah10, Mishti13 - thank you for taking the time to read and provide your feedback.

@Iqra - thank you! Yes, Yash and Arti are turning out to be pretty good parents. I suspect there's a little bit of projection involved here from my end, but at least it makes for good story-telling 😉.

@Hana - thank you. I am still working on the inquisition...

@Hansa - thank you. I think the bond between the children is defined in the show to a large extent - I have just explored it further.


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@Vanny -- you are a sweetheart 😛. Let me see, I may throw in a part of a part to address Payal - at least it will get her off my brain for a while 😉.

@Indu - thank you, my friend. Now that Yash's shackles to the past have dropped by the way-side and he has opened his heart to love and Arti (waiting for that in the show btw), his natural instincts as a father play a much stronger role. I like this Yash, so end up giving him some extra air-time 😆.

@Kesha - not at all surprised that Pooja reminded you of yourself - she reminded me of you 😆😆. Thanks for reading girl. Oh - and congrats on the test you did so well on. Good job!!

@Morris - thank you. I am glad you liked it. And I hope the inquisition when it comes, won't disappoint everyone...
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Part - 4

Yash held Payal close as they laughed over Pooja's antics in the kitchen. Just then, Paridhi walked in. "Yash Bhaiyya, can I borrow Payal please?" she asked smiling at Payal.

"Of course", said Yash, sending his daughter off with a kiss but with a twinge of pain in his heart. Even after all these years, Yash still found it difficult to share Payal with his Chote and Pari…..

About six months after Pooja's birth, Pratik and Pari had announced her pregnancy. The whole household had been filled with joy at the prospect of another baby and that too, one born to the youngest son of the Scindia household. Yash suspected his mother at least had hoped that this one would be a boy.

But it was not to be. A few weeks later, Pari had collapsed and had been rushed to the hospital. She had miscarried. And as much as that had hurt, what broke their hearts was that Pari could never get pregnant again – the complications through the miscarriage had destroyed her chances of a future pregnancy.

As the entire family rallied around the grieving couple, the 6-year old Payal had seen what the others had not. She sensed the anguished despair and guilt tearing at Paridhi's heart and of her own accord, the young but wise child had reached out to her Chachi. Payal spent hours with Paridhi everyday, prattling on about school and her friends and everything else that fascinates a 6-year old. Slowly but inexorably, her childish innocence and charm had pulled Pari out of her grief and into the real world again. As Pari recovered, Pratik had gained the strength and confidence to face the world as well. The two adults responded by loving Payal as their own daughter. No one had said anything, no words had been exchanged, but all the other family members saw the change.

Over the years as Pratik started his restaurant business and Paridhi became a radio and TV show producer, they continued to treat Payal as their own child. They also did something which the others had found baffling earlier, but were now coming to appreciate. Pratik and Paridhi discussed all their business ideas, issues and problems with Payal. As a young child, she understood nothing – but gave them her undivided attention anyway. The focused attention in turn helped the adults find their own solutions. But as Payal grew, it became obvious that she had picked up a lot of business acumen from these discussions – and perhaps she had it in her genes anyway: she started asking questions, intelligent ones that forced Pratik and Pari to think outside their comfort zone, often leading to remarkable conclusions.

The gentle, artistic Payal had the most keenly developed business sense of all the Scindia children – who would have thought! Yash and Arti adored the girl – and they especially appreciated her innate ability to sense another's pain and reach out to them, intuitively knowing how to provide comfort. A rare gift indeed. As proud as they were of her, Yash still found it difficult to share her with his brother.

And if he had so much trouble sharing Payal with his own brother, what chance did he have of accepting a boyfriend for Palak, thought Yash ruefully. Granting himself a few moments for self-pity, Yash decided it was time to rescue his wife from the kitchen dungeon.


Strolling into the kitchen, Yash's jaw dropped. There were platters of food everywhere – Pooja had not exaggerated. There was enough food to feed over 50 people – and yet they had invited only 10 children!!

"Arti!" exclaimed Yash.

As Arti turned to him, Yash glanced over at Vidhi and immediately felt guilty at the tiredness he saw on her face. Making his mind up, he walked up to Arti, took the spatula from her hand and turned her to face Vidhi.

"Arti – what are you upto? Have you seen how much food you have already prepared? Enough to feed an army!! And look at Bhabhi – she is exhausted!! And you are still making her cook? This is more than enough. Neither one of you, or Pari, are going to step into the kitchen. Whatever food is ready will have to suffice. And no need to serve the kids – they will prefer to serve themselves anyway."

Without giving Arti a chance to speak, Yash continued, "Bhabhi – go. Go and rest. Leave this mess to Ram Dulare and his minions. Arti – you are coming with me", saying this Yash practically pushed the two women out of the kitchen.

As Arti freshened up, Yash walked around the room muttering to himself. When she came out of the bathroom, he turned to her. "What was that all about Arti? What's got into you? Why are you making so much food?"

Arti flushed guiltily. Reading the look on her face, Yash exclaimed "You didn't want to let Palak down!" Reaching out to her, he gathered her into his arms. "Oh Arti, its just a bunch of friends coming over, not a baraat you know!" he teased.

Arti sniffed, leaning into him, rubbing her cheek on the open-V of his chest, "So, I over-reacted this time, huh?"

Yash tightened his hold on her, grinning to himself, "just a tiny bit, just enough to cook for an army!"

Arti smiled sheepishly "I was nervous, and when…"

Yash joined in unison "and when you are nervous, you cook."

"Waise why are you nervous? That idiot Vikram is the one who should be nervous" muttered Yash, his temper rising at the thought of the boy who had dared to look at his daughter.

"I bet he would be if he knew what was in store for him" Arti said smiling, with a glint in her eyes.

"Yes…" Yash said with a malicious satisfaction. "And you ladies have been preparing too, I see."

"Well of course. We have to evaluate him as well, not just you men folk" Arti retorted.

Yash nodded, "Yes. Not that you would give us a choice here. If we could I think all of us, Ansh included, would skip the inquisition all together and just throw him into the pool, then pick him up, roast him alive and send him his merry way" Yash said with a far-away look. He could just visualize the scene….

"I wonder how Priti ever got married…" muttered Arti, referring to Vidhi and Pankaj's daughter who had got married a couple of years ago.

"Hmm…what? Did you say something?" Yash asked absent-mindedly.

"Oh nothing, nothing at all" retorted Arti as she left him gloating over his plans for the inquisition.

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