ArYa SS: A Father's Trial - PART 5 Up (PG 22)

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Sunrio80

@Sunrio80

Voyager

Posted: 12 years ago

#81

Wow! What a superb and a fabolous update you have. It was as if I'm watching the scene while reading the story. Loved the bonding of the siblings and special mention to the loving and proud father Yash!

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MelodiousDreams

@MelodiousDreams

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+ 4

Posted: 12 years ago

#82

That was such an enjoyable update, Kat!

I really love how you touched upon pretty much every relationship in this part while keeping everything flowing and fun! Yash-Ansh, Ansh-Palak, and the relationships that Yash (and Aarti) share with Payal and Pooja as well! Yash and Aarti are such wonderful, understanding parents - the little details about their parenting and the extent to which they know their kids (based on habits/personality) were woven in so nicely. Oh, and I loved the Yash-Payal-Pooja interaction at the end. A random thought that just popped into my head: Pooja and her tennis lessons makes me wonder about Aarti and her hockey experiences...Ah, and her love for good food, like her darling papa - that was great! She's such a bundle of cuteness! "Papaaa!" "Poojaaa!" Awww!

I'm so glad we're getting to find out more about the two younger members of the not-so-little family of six!

Looking forward to the Scindia Inquisition!

Edit: I've left a few brief comments about part 1 on page 4! 😊 I'm still planning to go back and write more, but I just thought I'd leave a little note...

Edited by MelodiousDreams - 12 years ago

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Maham

@Allbut1

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+ 5

Posted: 12 years ago

#83

Kat, that was adorable, adorable, adorable! I had such a big smile on my face throughout, especially during the last part which was just the cutest!

The Ansh-Yash dynamic has always been my favorite, and you played on that perfectly! They truly are one of a kind father-son pair and I could just see the forlorn looks on their faces as they realized that they are no longer the only men in Palak's life 😆

But for me the most precious interaction was between Pooja-Yash and then Pooja-Yash-Payal! You wrote in so naturally and the banter between the father and daughters was just a treat, loved how they ganged up against poor little Pooja in the end!

Thank you so much for the update, it's just what I needed tonight! Will be looking forward to the Scindia inquisition 😉

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Zetter

@Zetter

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+ 3

Posted: 12 years ago

#84

Well this is my first time reading this story so had to read the two previous chapters and i must say that you're doing an excellent job, Sweetie 👏👏👏

Ah Oh my I can't wait for the Scindia's inquisition sounds like it's gonna eb a party for the Scindia while poor Vikram gonna be sweating in his seat 😆

Love the dynamic of their little family ❤️

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lulujjjj

@lulujjjj

Inactive

Posted: 12 years ago

#85

Kat loved your story the way it flows covering up all the characters
so beautifully written. pls update quickly.

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Dona

@Donnaa

Trailblazer

+ 3

Posted: 12 years ago

#86

loved the update
beautifully written...
thanx for the pm..

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Mishtieeeee <3

@Koolsmile

Inactive

Posted: 12 years ago

#87

Fab update Kat 👏

Father-Son convo was awesome 😃

The way Ansh told him of being protective to his sis was adorable 😛

Ansh was also finding a away to discuss awl wid his parents 😛

Yash's cross questioning scared Ansh 😆

Awl their friends have to bear Scindiya Inquisitions before entering their children's friends circle 😆

Pooja was so cute 😊

Pooja came running into the room calling out to Yash, "Papaaa…."

"Poojaaa…." Yash replied in the exact same tone as he caught the 10 year old up in his arms and swung her around. 😃

She ate half of the cake n threw the left over in dustin so that mumma didnt catch her 😆

Payal scared the poor baby 😉

Papa-Payal-Pooja interaction was 😎

As Pooja sighed in relief, Yash rounded on her in mock fury "But you young lady, deserve a punishment for this. Hmmm…Payal, what do you suggest?"

Payal grinned – "let's have her skip her tennis lessons and go for an extra music lesson."

"Nooo" screamed Pooja running out of the room. seems that she doesnt lyk music 😆

Update soon 😊

Naureen 😃

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Taahir

@taahir004

Achiever

+ 10

Posted: 12 years ago

#88

This part so well written Ansh and Yash still seem to have a very close bond while Ansh and Palak too has this close bond I enjoy reading your SS its almost like I'm watching an episode been telecast .

I'm totally hooked to your stories now just looking forward to the Inquisition will Vikram come out a sportsmen or will he simply chicken out

do update soon I'm really hooked

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Pearl

@Pearl_27

Dazzler

+ 3

Posted: 12 years ago

#89

I loved Yash-Ansh bonding,Yash approached the matter calmly and Ansh at last had to spill the beans.

My favorite part was the Pooja-Yash interaction,Papaaa!Poojaaa! Aww!!
Pooja-Yash-Payal were the cutest.

Loved it Kat!
Absolutely adorable!