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Anonymous--

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Posted: 12 years ago

#331

Amazing amazing update Ananya!😃
I loved how you penned down Sharon's POV..It was beautifully written👏
And she was talking to her conscience,which we all do. She is slightly confused about her feelings for him and you brought that out very very well. Overall,very nice update.
Though I didn't quite get the ending...what happened? Did she fall?😕

Edited by Neeti96 - 12 years ago

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Crazy4AshVik

@Crazy4AshVik

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Posted: 12 years ago

#332

Great Update!!😃

Loved Sharon and her conscience's confusion😆

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swa-ron

@swa-ron

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Posted: 12 years ago

#333

beautifully pened
awesome

bt im confused abt the end part

update sooon

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shaani2209

@shaani2209

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Posted: 12 years ago

#334

lovely update...

nicely penned..

thanks for the pm...

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Roger

@HPHolic-3

Dazzler

Posted: 12 years ago

#335

Amazing update
Its really good to read about sharon pov,she is madly in love with him but still a lil confused
She sneak into swayam's bathroom just to see what he do with football...:p
I really loved how she thought about his little little things his sweet behaviour n specially about his hair which she surely love to run her hands instead of pulling his hair...
Waiting for next part
Ps.would love to read about swayam's pov too...:)

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Phantasm

@Phantasm

Dazzler

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Posted: 12 years ago

#336

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UNRES

Nice start Ananya, loved the thought you mentioned on relationships. And from there the POV's start. You know more than anything else, POV's are the first things that catch my attention. Through them , you can convey your thoughts about the characters and make the readers instantly connect to them. Good job done there. The brain size talk😆 And the way she was counting on how many adjectives she used for him, Nice!!!. Football in bathroom, thats weird, or maybe the bathroom is long enough for him to kick the ball inside it. 😳The comparison with Chocolate, again amazing, I liked the part where the chocolate becomes sticky and annoying, but still you enjoy the feel inside your mouth. Just the way it holds true for Swayam!!!😳

So overall one fab update, the POV was brought out aptly. So you can pat your back for the same😉

PS: I didn't get the last part, why did Swayam shout?

And of course thanks for the dedication,🤗 hope that we get to see Swayam's POV in next update. Update soon

Edited by Rutu - 12 years ago

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Namrata Jadhav

@nj_SRKholic

Rocker

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Posted: 12 years ago

#337

sharon's pov was beautifully penned by u ananya..!!

d last lines confused me a bit but i knw ul update d next chappy n il knw it...!!

well ur writing is awesum dear.. keep writing..!!

update soon..!!

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tanuka

@Tanuka_TanHa

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Posted: 12 years ago

#338

ANANYA 🤗

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sorry for the late reply 😳

the update was awesome.

sharon's POV as to what she actually feels abt swayam was fantastically described .

swayam ka entry time was mast..😛

will be waiting for the next part , update soon..

thanks for the PM.

Edited by Tanuka_TanHa - 12 years ago

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Shishir Darsh

@marauder

Sparkler

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Posted: 12 years ago

#339

Quite an unusual but captivating update. So far the updates have been from third person POV but it was quite a pleasant surprise to find an update completely from Sharon's POV. It was nicely penned, perfectly showing the confusion of Sharon's mind. The way it started with Sharon trying to define his friendship/relationship with Swayam was really awesome. And then the way how she waent on about his antics and how she had started to love his antics ( and him too) was refreshing as well as quite calming and soothing as reader. Waiting ofr the next update. To see what's net in life story of dangar and doomna.
P.S - Football in bathroom 😆. Nice! But I would prefer basket ball 😛