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Posted: 13 years ago
res 😳

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Aditi 🤗...me loved loved this chappie yaar 😳...n me very very sorry for this late unres 😭
Wow...the way gulaal placed those imlis close to her herat n have a FB of her running after kesar for calling her his wife that too in front of the class to his teacher...wah re kesu kahaa bhi toh kisse kaha...I really liked how vasant said very convincingly that kesar is right abt what he is saying n the way he managed to make gulaal understand the whole thing...i really liked it so much...she stood there all the night just thinking abt him na...n she realized that she has to make him understand that what is good for him n for her...she is so lost n hurt as he left without meeting her before leaving...
Coming to the dairy n letter...he would have read the dairy sooo many times na...the way he said that its his mistake for thinking bad abt her intentions 3 years back is so kesarish...the way he apologized to her n stated that he is wrong but how can she not share this info to her kesar...how can she go through all this all alone...then ofcourse the question of how she can force him to back out of the responsibility of being her kavach n taking care of her when its his time to be her kavach...
Awesome chapter it is...looking forward to the next chapter for the talab scene...

Edited by MR21 - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Adu...🤗
Where should I start from...Right from the moment she stood there with her imlis...YES!! I could Imagine Mansi like that holding on to the imlis...
And that flashback part ws the best...Yes certainly it was INNOVATIVE!HEARTWARMING NAD HEART WRENCING ..ALL AT THE SAME TIME!!You know what I had always wondered that what if really Vasant did not die.What would be the status of KG relationship..But your past version is so different.The way Kesuda jamaoes all haq on Gullu and Gulaal is shcked at Vasant encouraging him to take care of Gulaal when he grows up..It reminds me of the scene when Kesar throws a tantrum that Vasant snatched Gulaal away from him...Awww I could totally imagine chotu kesu...Throwing a tantrum and bossing around claiming Gulaal sa his...Awww this is so cute cute cute❤️

Gulaal pehle baat to yeah hai ki usne galat nahi kaha,sach kaha,jo maine usse kaha tha,agar tumhe baat se narazgi hai toh yeah shikayat toh mujhse honi chahiye usse nahi,ha agar tumhe uski baat se nahi per uski abhivaykti se narazgi hai toh yeah baat tumhe usse samjhaani chahiye,kyuki baat toh sach hai,aur sach ko kiske saamne rakhna yeah vyakti pe nirbhar hai,aaj agar tum usse sach kehne se rokogi aur kal issi ke liye tokogi toh galat woh kaise hua Gulaal…."

This part is really Epic Adu...I loved The way Vassy said this...Ahhh the SAINTLY GHOSTY...No wonder Gullu was smitten by his fever till the last moment he made a re-appearance😆

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Gulaal jolting back to reality ..her confusion was wonderfully potrayed..I loved the dialogues ,the little emotions you are touching..Kinda gives a warm feeling to the heart..So REAL taht I can almost imagine it happening in front of my eyes...Kudos to that⭐️

And the last part..The DIARY and the note..EXCELLENT!Too good to be described in words..The acceptance of his mistake of not trusting her and his seeing her in a new light all so wonderfully potrayed👏...I lubbed it...WONDERFUL👏

Now I really can't wait for that LAKE-SIDE confrontation...I want the chappi now...UPDATE PRETTY SOON PLEASE🤗

Edited by manzilmukul - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
@Aditi,Superb update, next part update soon please.



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Edited by kalika.j - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
Aditi🤗main aa gayi😃 and wow what a fantastic chapter I got to read as soon as I came back.That FB scene with Gulaal,Kesar and Vasant was just brilliant...too good.I could definitely see it play out in the show.It was very realistic and seriously you are getting so good at this👏I enjoyed it a lot.I don't know whether I have told you this before but if I haven't let me just repeat I love your hindi dialogues.The shudh Hindi just takes those lines to a whole different level.It is just beautiful.ok so coming back to the chapter...I loved how you continued the scene with the FB and then moved onto Gulaal's reaction.I feel so much for her right now.I can understand her situation completely.The words that were spoken by Kesar all those years ago are now coming true and she is rightfully confused...aaah this brings me to Golu and his vaada...awww that was so sweet.He was absolutely serious about that one na.There was never anyone else for him ever except Gulaal.I loved the little glimpse we got of Vasant too.Gulaal was hurt and disappointed when she found out that Kesar had left and it was not because she did not get a chance to speak to him or clear his so called misconceptions na...loved the letter...very straightforward and honest-the qualities I love most in Kesar.I am now waiting eagerly to see what happens next.I hope you will be able to update soon.A big hug for giving us that beautiful FB scene yaar🤗
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Posted: 13 years ago
Updated my comments Adu🤗
@ Kalika...Lubbly creation👏
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Posted: 13 years ago
Hey aditi loved the chapter!
Flashback scene was soo gud!
And also loved to read the emotional letter of kesu.
Thanks 4 update.
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Posted: 13 years ago
unres done in previous page!!!

Edited by MR21 - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
Aditi,

first of all for dis super late commnts...


ye kya? bachpan se line maaroying... he alwaz considered her as his,na... good dat she's nt accusng him for his feelngs... n d letter... so passionate yet poignant...

waitn 4 nxt part...
for dis beautiful update

Edited by sharmishta - 13 years ago
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Piyu,Mini,Kalika,Ramya and Shradha🤗thanks guys because of you I still haven't given up on this story

Piyu and Mini I must thank you for putting up with me throughout the self doubt phase that i have gone through while writing last few chapters,but for you both I would have not been able to go on...Thank you for being my friends and wish you all a Happy Friendship Day

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Chapter 22

….and our path separate here…..

DB entered in Gulaal's room and picked up the note that lay on the floor keeping it in the diary restoring it on the table,to it's rightful place, at least in her mind

Gulaal jaldi se tayar ho ja,tu janti hai na der hone pe kitna chidta hai woh,maine vaada kiya hai,tujhe waha tak leke aane ka….

Gulaal who was sitting on the floor with her head down, looked up slowly and smiled through the tears nodding her head in approval of DB's request

On the way to Saruben's place DB asked Dushyant to drop them near the temple, Dushyant who looked bit disturbed throughout the drive suddenly applied brakes harshly to stop at the temple, DB alighted and started climbing the steps without waiting for Gulaal……Gulaal who was looking at Dushyant with enquiring look finally asked if everything was ok with him, still keeping his eyes on the road Dushyant replied…

"Gulaal,agar tum Kesar se milne ja rahee ho toh usse keh dena, har waqt woh mere aadmiyo ko chakma nahi de sakta,maine uski suraksha ke hetu se hi unhe uske piche lagaya hai,agar samjha sako toh acha hi hai,PB se bhi kaha tha ki uske pairo main aisi bediya daal de ke unko tod ke kahi ja hi na sake per……" he sighed heavily nodding his head in disapproval

"Dushyantji, Kesar apni padhai toh puri karle aur phir ghrahasthi i ki jimmedaari ke layak toh ho jaaye uske baad hi hum koi nirnay le sakte hai,usse pehle kaise…"

"Gulaal,main sirf Kesar ko apni aakho ke saamne dekhne chahta hu,Mujhe uss Durgesh per bilkul vishwaas nahi hai,saher mein Kesar pe nazar rakhna bahut hi mushkil hai,aur pata nahi mujhse aisi kya dushmani hai ki mere saath sidhe muh baat bhi nahi karta woh……aakhir bada bhai hu uska….hamesha uska bhala hi chahuga na…."

"Apne bhai ke qatil ke saath kaise sidhe muh baat kare Dushyantji…" Sharp edge in Gulaal's voice startled Dushyant who looked at her horrified, stunned and speechless…..

"Ha Dushyanti Kesar ko sacchai ka pata hai,meri tarah usne bhi iss zeher ka ghoot toh pee liya hai, chuppi ke siva aap usse koi aur umeed mat rakhiyega,main aapse haath jodke vinati karti hu…iss ghar ki shaani banaye rakhne ke liye yehi uchit hoga….." Gulaal turned around and hurried behind DB leaving Dushyant staring at the spot she was standing

DB was waiting for her at the temple along with Kesar, she stopped remembering Dushyant's words ,she had to convince Kesar to accept PB's proposal somehow, the thought made her apprehensive and anxious, unknown fear gripping her heart and she stood rooted to the spot…

"Kya baat hai Gulaal…."Kesar came near and enquired, his eyes reflecting concern and anxiety Gulaal felt she conveyed her need to talk alone in not so many words and Kesar taking the hint turned towards DB ….."Aapko Arvind Sarufui ke yaha chod dega,aur main Gulaal ko ghar chod dunga,chalta hu DB aap apna khyal rakhiyega,bahut jald wapas aaunga…."he hugged DB who just nodded her head in way of acceptance ruffling his hair lovingly

Gulaal and Kesar walked towards the lake in complete silence each contemplating what was going through other's mind still they reached near the tree they had been before and sat down overlooking the tremendous force of gushing water flowing down tearing apart the strongest of the mountain…….

"Gulaal,main janta hu tu mujhse naraz hai,maine teri diary bina teri izzajat padhi,per tune bhi toh mujhse saari baate chupayi,soch agar mujhe yeah diary nahi milti toh main tujhe kitna galat samajhta,aur tujhe kya laga tha agar tu kissi ko nahi batayegi toh yeah baat kissi ko pata nahi chalegi,aisi baate kabhi na khabhi toh saamane aa hi jaati….."

"Kesar, hum ab iss vishay pe baat kyun kare,tu janta hai main vivash thi,apne Vasant bha ko to janta hai na phir yeah sawal kyun,kya mere liye aur koi rasta choda tha Vasant ne…."

"Per ab toh hum dono iss mushkil ka milke saamna kar sakte hai na,,mujhe ek mauka toh de apni galtiya sudharne ka,main tujhe woh saari khushiya dena chahta hu jiski tu haqdaar hai,maine woh Gulaal ko wapas paana chahta hu jo mere Vasant bha ke saath iss gaav ki chaukhat per aayi thi,main….."

"Woh Gulaal toh Vasant apne saath le gaya Kesar,Iss Gulaal ke liye toh Vasant ka woh sapna pura karna hi jeevan ka ek maatra dheyey reh gaya hai,iss parivaar ko ektra rakhna,iss gaav ke liye dekhe hue uss sapne ko sakaar hote hue dekhne bas yehi toh chahti hu main,Vansant jaha bhi hoga yeah dekhkar bahut hi khush hoga…."

"Aur tujhe iss tarah ghut,ghut ke jeeta hua dekh bhi khush hi hoge hai na,hamesha se teri khushi hi toh chahi na unhone,yehi likha tha na tune uss diary main,woh kaise bhul gayee Gulaal,kabhi toh dusro se pare apne liye kuch soch,tujhe bhi jeevan main kush rehne ka,apne sapno ko jeene ka aur apne liye jeene ka haq hai na Gulaal,Main tujhse keh chuka hu Gulaal main tere siva kissi aur ke saath…"

Kesar,Gulaal's sharp voice stopped him mid-sentence and he looked at her questioningly, Gulaal looked at him straight and uttered in a determined tone "Yeah kadapi mumkin nahi hai Kesar…..Tujhe PB ki baat swikaar karke apni umar ki ladki ke saath vivah karna hoga,issi mein sabki bhalai hai…"

"Kyun,Kyun karun main kissi aisi ladki se vivah jise main janta tak nahi,jisse main pyaar nahi karta,aur main kyun kissi aur ke baare main sochu,jab ki main……"

"Kesar mujhe iss baare main aur koi behas nahi karni,tujhe wohi karna hoga jo parivaar umeed karta hai tujhse,unki ummeedo ko……"

"Nahi Gulaal,main teri tarah zeher ko has ke nahi pee sakta,manta hu main kabhi bhi teri zindagi mein Vasant bha ki jagah nahi le sakta,na hi lena chahta hu,sirf apni ek choti si jagah banana chahta tha jo mujhe malum hai kahi na kahi dabi padi hai,mujhse woh umeed toh mat cheeno,main kabhi bhi PB ki baat nahi maan sakta,kabhi nahi….."

"Theek hai,toh tu wahi kar jo tujhe theek lagta hai aur main bhi wahi karungi jo sahi hai,main kal hi iss DV ko todne ki arjee Panchayat mein dekar iss ghar se hamesha ke liye chali jaungi,main tere iss niranay ki wajah se ghar mein kissi ka bhi saamna karne main ashksham hu,kaise mila paungi nazare unse jinko diye hue vachan ko pura nahi kar payee,kaise rahungi uss chat ke niche jo baar,baar mujhe apne vishwaasghaati hone ka ehsaas dilate rahegi…yehi chahta hai na tu toh yehi sahi….."

"Gulaal,nahi tu aisa nahi kar sakti,tu iss ghar ko chod ke nahi ja sakti Gulaal,tu mujhe chod ke jane ke baare mein soch bhi kaise sakti hai….".Kesar's urged in a croaky voice trying hard to stop the tears that threatened to overflow from his eyes

Gulaal turning away from him replied in hesitant voice, "Kear yeah toh ek hi shart pe mumkin hai agar tu PB ki baat maan le aur Talli se vivah karne ko rajee ho jaye…."

Kesar didn't utter a word throughout the journey and on reaching the backyard alighted from the bike waiting for Gulaal to get down before saying…."Gulaal mujhe teri har shart manjoor hai,main tujhe iss ghar se dur nahi dekh sakta…" and then murmured to himself ….."aur yeah bhi yaad hai ki bada hokar mujhe hi tera khayal rakhna hai,tujhe akele nahi hone dunga,vaada kiya tha tujhse usse jarur nibhaunga Gulaal….." he took off on his bike without turning back to look at Gulaal who could not stop tears from falling freely……

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Edited by enchanted23 - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
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awww partner you made me emotional.A big hug my dear friend🤗


What an apt title for this chapter.Good choice Aditi.Coming to the chapter I really loved this installment...well that goes without saying na.DB is acting as a cute cupid here na trying to unite the soulmates but I guess it's not the right time yet.Gulaal has to realize how important Kesar is for existence and it has not yet happened.This chapter serves as the foundation for it.loved the conversation between Gulaal and Dushyant.You have brought out Gulaal's pain very well.It reminded me of the scene between Gulaal and Dushyant from the show where she for the first time reveals that she would never be able to forgive him.The only difference is that in the show she spoke of her pain and here she reveals Kesar's state of mind yet we do get to know how much she is suffering.The dialogues Gulaal says expresses not only Kesar's heart but also hers.Very effective dialogues Aditi.now my most fav part of this chapter-Kesar-Gulaal conversation...the beginning where Kesar and Gulaal convey to each other silently was so sweet.They understand each other completely.They don't need any words.I loved that small silent exchange.Kesar is so so mature.He astounds me at times.His respect and love for Gulaal...it just blows me away and you bring it out so beautifully with the help of simple straight forward dialogues.Gullu is in her Galool mode and tries her emotional atyachar too.She always does this na...she knows that Kesar would never be able to see her go away from the house and she uses that knowledge to her advantage.Kesar knows that he would never be able to replace Vasant and that dialogue about "choti si jagah"awww loved it😳I was smiling while reading that part cause Gullu is soon going to be completely and irrevocably in love with him.He is going to take over her senses and here he is talking about a small place in her heart😆The ending was awesome.so very Kesarish...of course he won't give up so easily na.So Gullu all confused at the end...well her journey towards realization has begun...I am so looking forward to her confusion,her tadap for Kesar.Thank you so much for this beautiful update yaar🤗eagerly waiting for the next update to see what happens😍
Edited by minizz - 13 years ago

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