Gulaal: What If chp 26(part II) upd Pg 57 - Page 36

Originally posted by: manzilmukul

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First of all thanks Adu for this wonderful weekend bonanza 🤗What more could one ask for ..A weekend full of Gulaalism😳
hahaha per geene chune he galoolians bache hai read karne ke liye😉

Well now coming to the chappi.I must clap for your little miss Snooty Talli aha I liked her tease and Gullu ka chidhana What a refreshing break from Galoolism .Actually its great to see a human Gulaal rather than a Goddess.
Hahaha Talli ko bhi samaj aa raha hai per Gulaal mayyia ko nahi ki Kesu kya chahta hai,chalo Gullu goddess na sahi human hi sahi per usne abhi bahut kuch relize karna baaki hai na😳

Wow and just wow!is the word from the moment GO! the moment DB entered and started the much needed conversation with Gulaal.The way she tries to talk with her regarding her status is just beautifully WORDED!!

per apne kartvyo ki khatir hame waqt ke sath samjhauta karna hi padta hai,per waqt ki ek khashiyat aur bi hai ke woh hamesha ek jaise nahi rehta.

This was the EPIC line👏Wonderfully penned down👏

Sach hai na waqt kabhi ek sa nahi rehta,Gulaal will realize this too very soon as she needs him as much, only issue is that Kesu never gave her that chance of realization by staying apart,he only cried,threatened ,promised but never actally executed that threat,it was much needed in my opinion for her to realize that need was from both side sigh!

The entire conversation ,the denial of skeptical Gulaal and the wonderful conviction of DB .All was just so wonderfully penned down..I simply loved it.So much so0 that the heard hearted Gulaal too is forced to think about whatever she wants in her life.

This is something I always had my doubt about if that ghathbandhan would have been tied to Kesar at the time of her saying tathasthu then she was binding him in that promise along with her as that what ghathbandhan symbolises and i just went with my conviction while writing this...

I am just loving the way in which you are exploring unresolved issues in the show.The show's only loop hole was the unnecessary focus on a completely horrible UNIDIMENSIONAL character rather than focusing on REAL issues.

Hats off for trying to build those bridges and exploring those untouched portion⭐️s.KUDOS👏

Thanks you so much Piyu an floating on cloud nine...itni tareef😳

Ahhh NEEDLESS to say that the final part being my favourate.The unwavering faith in Kesar makes her follow him .But she returns to her USUAL self sensing awkwardness..Ahhh The lighting of the candle and her losing herself was so BELIEVABLE.I loved it.
Hmm that faith never wavered na,not even when he was professing his love and she was chanting all that paap and bhavna,she was hurt but never in doubt about his integrity sigh! will never see something like this ever again😭

Thanks for the wonderful chapter..🤗...I am now running to give my comments on the much awaited confession.Loved it👏

Originally posted by: manzilmukul

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Hiala CONFESSION hui gawa..TURBA time🥳

Now coming to the chapter.Wonderful..Brilliant again.!! Right from the moment she was lost,right from the moment she felt as if she wanted to become the same Gulaal.The mixed guilt in her heart for losing herself even for a second was wonderfully potrayed.She is one hard nut to crack na with all her vachans intact.How could she even for a second think about anyone else except Vasant..This reality had to strike her again and the way she again recedes in her shell was more than EXPECTED!!Credible and moreover BELIEVABLE.

As you said earlier,this Gulaal is huamn she has her moments where she wants to be happy,she wants to be loved and cared for she has that desire,yearnings but then her vachans and responsibilities takes over which weighs her down and then that galoolism takes over but here she will realize soon enough of futility if not accepting truth that your heart is pushing you towards...

I loved how she realised that those were inlis and the way she goes back to her patronizing mode..
Yup the way she had turned towards him all determined full on ready to pounce for that statment he made in the morning but the imlis softened her again and she is back to that mollycoddle mode😊

Ahhh That has to hit Kesar na...I somehow loved when he shot back..YES!! that was much needed.Like show ,I could feel for Kesar..YES!! I could coz no one especially Gulaal never ever bothered to care for his feelings his marzi...No matter how well she thought ,but she actually never cared for his feelings.All that she could care was that her promise to TALLI and her broken heart.

But though here the scenario is a bit different,yet the pain in Kesar's voice was so heart wrenching.

"Aur meri marzi,kya meri marzi janene ki jarurat nahi hai kissi ko bhi,mian kya chahta hu,kya sochta hu,isse kissi ko koi farq bhi padta hai ya nahi..." He couldn't keep anger out of his tone anymore

These lines stole my heart.So painful...But the confession.It was BEBAK!!Completely Kesarish.

Kesar love of our life 😆 is so direct na when it comes stating facts ,never one to mince the words or try to portray a facade,that's one of the reason we all adore him na and yes he is what he is..just like an open book...easy to read...down to earth😳

Loved how he said that their relationship was never dependant on this DV.He had always loved her.No matter whatever the circumstances ,he would always be her parchaii...What a wonderful thought👏

Loved it.Brilliant👏The last part where she reaches for the imli,is just so heart wrenching...

Thanks Piyudi for such lovely words,it means a lot and encourages me to continue inspite of so few takers for this story,Thanks you🤗

Also loved the bits of her denial,her shock ,her lagaav and paap rant but humara Kesar was COOL!! 😎We all love him for that!!

Loved the wonderful confession.👏👏..Ahhh now desperately waiting for the next WEEKEND for the next update🤗

Originally posted by: minizz

Aditi🤗So sorry for being so late with my comments but I did read through both the updates in the weekend.I loved both of them.They were just awesome.The first update was a nice build up to the confession chapter and that confession was everything I wished for and more.I could visualise the entire scene in front of my eyes😍

Hey Mini No worries yaar you got here and that's more than enough for me.🤗

loved Daiba's talk with Gulaal a lot.It made me miss her so much in the show.I wish she had been there in the show.She would have been the voice of reason for Gulaal though I have my doubts whether Gulaal from the show would have listened to her at all😕.She was too stubborn na but here Gulaal is affected by her words.

Yes indeed DB always had Gulaal's best interset at heart,she had seen her battle it out lone handed against JK and her family and also PB's silence throughout that ordeal,she had seen her struggle to put Kesar on the right track against all odds so it's no surprise that she wants her to be able to finally reap teh rewards of her single minded determination I agree show wali Gulaal would not have understood where she was coming from and would have shut her out like she did every one else

Yes she may deny all she wants but DB's words have indeed made a mark in her mind.One line which really made me smile was the one where after the conversation DB says that she need not wait up for Kesar and Gulaal wonders as to why Kesar had not told her...loved that moment...so subtle...this shows Kesar's indifference does matter to her.This is such a small thing but it does unsettle her.DB's smirk proves that she realizes this very fact.

Thanks for catching this,yes subtle cause there can be no other way with Gulaal and this is what DB is going to explain to Kesar too,with her you cannot force anything sje will realise his worth when he is about to slip away forever oops!!! no more

That is my fav moment in the chapter Aditi...now coming onto the next part.I was biting my nails waiting for the next update after this yaar.I was checking my phone every 5 minutes to see if you had updated or not.I really loved the build up to the most important scene...and awww his gift of imlis...how could she not melt right...but then she had to say all that stuff to him.Typical of Gulaal na.

Yup he has just used the same trick he used in the show but in different context,he had not plan this for confession oh no way Kesu doesn't plan he just says what comes to his mind but he did want to apologise for his behaviour in the morning not because what he said was wrong but he knew that would have made Gulaal's life miserble and how could he tolerate that😳

I was so happy when Kesar stuck to his guns and proudly declared his love for her.There was no hesitation only clear determination in his tone and gaze.This was such a brilliantly written scene Aditi.The dialogues were just bang on.Right from Kesar's slight anger at Gulaal's declaration of getting him married to another girl and his declaration of love to Gulaal's response which was expected but here I could feel for her confusion...her doubts and her fears.loved all of Kesar's dialogues in response to Gulaal's attempts to make him understand that this is not love and that this is "paap" and stuff.All of his dialogues were so simple and straightforward just like him😳
Aww Thank you partner for liking this,Just like him I too wrote without much thought whatever came to my mind I am so happy that it came out well
Aditi,thank you so much for using my suggestion.It made me very happy😃The entire scene was a treat to read and I read it more than once yaar.It was just too good.Thank you so much for these wonderful updates.I am really sorry for these short comments but I will get back to my usual lamba comments from mnext week ok.tab tak ke liye chorrryryyy😭

No worries Mini,Thank you for your wonderful comments,I know you are busy and you still got here that means so much to me🤗 Makes me so happy thank you😳

Originally posted by: kalika.j

@Aditi, for this sperb update.

kalika.

Originally posted by: without-fathom

Aah, I see what you were saying about both Gulaal being a tad easier shrew to tame, and Kesar's turn now to prove his worth as gold. I love how you've set the stage up for both Aditi - and the way in your given settings and predicaments you've been able to delete the need for extreme instances from both Gulaal and Kesar in the face of this confession so that where they stand now is somehow synonymous with the time Kesar first offered to release her from the DV - is such a credible flow in this story.

Thanks Jzee, I have tried my best to keep "extreme" instances out,word so correctly used, well these two without that intense push/pull will not be same right and as I have said before for me the journey is worthwhile when it is under taken by two individual who may start off with completely different intenstion but slowly realizes why there cannot be any other destination and how they need to be together in order to get there and this relization and the lessening of distance so as to join the path towards the final destination is what makes the journey so interesting and enchanting,don't know if I am making any sense😕

Because following on what you said, this is not a Kesar who is "stranger of a decade" packaged for Gulaal... and while this Gulaal has similarly self imposed shackles with respect to the idea of Kesar as her husband, somewhere, the detachment is not as wide a gap as that of still seeing a child of 10 in him! She has seen him grow into his adolescence, even if there have been stretches of absence, the fact that he's been in and out of the picture through his decade of growing up, unlike the show - does legitimately warrant a weaker wall-out reaction from Gulaal. She has - willingly or not - seen more than just Vasant's dream in Kesar; occasionally she has had defining moments of seeing Vasant in Kesar - not viz the family and responsibilities et al, but as her partner...

Yes, she does in her heart have that desire,that need,that wish for someone to hold her hand,for that shoulder to rest on, for that support to lean on,she has spent over 10 years of her life talking to a picture and writing in a diary that cannot provide her these small comforts,she may be extremely strong and determind woamn who stands and walks tall for her promises and responsibilities but she still human who does once in a while let's that mask slip and reveals that vulnerable face who wants to be loved and cared for just like others

And I loved the dialogue where she talks of how her need of him became a selfish holding on and then a betrayal to what she thinks is right and a promise she owes the family... It does form a huge part of Kesar being unable to let her go - Gulaal never could do as much herself!

Thanks exactly,She never realized this cause Kesar never gave her that opportunity,he never ever did what she always did to him,threatened to walk away and that one time he did she cme running,he should have tried this earlier sara zanzant hi khatam ho jata😆

Overall - a beautiful and seamless transition in this space where Kesar's love has been candidly and in no uncertain terms been placed in the common ground to no longer avert or shy from, so that ahead of here can come both Gulaal's journey from resistance to acceptance and beyond, and Kesar's journey of proving himself without bothering or suffocating himself with identity conundrums about himself, Gulaal and what they have!

Thanks Jzee,I am glad you have liked the story so far,I know there will be some instances where it could have been written in much better way but that on hindsight one can always contemplate and analyse and come up with various what If scenarios, chalo for a novice writer like me,journey so far have been really interesting and I am grateful for your comments -it has encourged me to keep going at this Thanks you🤗

👏 Loving the progress, as always!

xx

JZ