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Hey Guys...The twins are back with a story now..Hope you like it eventhough we arent so good like all the other writers here...
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Scars have the strange power to remind us that our past is real. The events that cause them can never be forgotten.

CORMAC MCCARTHY, All the Pretty Horses

When your mind is re-living those glorious moments of life it forgets about the present happenings, you just feel like indulging into those moments when life has made you unbelievably content.

Bloom indulged into these thoughts every night after all she was in the captive of Blaze in his mansion, a place where life would surprise her, where any day she could be murdered mercilessly. Her hungry mind rattled to gather all the moments she spent with her father. It was rare that she thought about Blaze, his thoughts always sent cold shivers down her spine or made her head gleam with droplets of sweat. But sometimes she did ask God, why He had given her the beautiful yet vulnerable emerald green vase.

She remembered that day vividly when she spotted the vase in the market place, she had wondered from where has this beautiful elegant piece of creativity emerged from. The sight of it made her heart fill with intense happiness. She was surprised why the owner of that vase left it in the busy market place at the side of the crowded road wrapped up in a cloth from which a part of the beauty peeped out like a new flower emerging from its bud. She tiptoed towards the vase, fearing that its master could be around. Her chocolaty brown eyes fixed on the vase; she picked it up with her small soft hands in utter delight. The next moment she ran with a twinkle in her eyes to her father and spoke endlessly about the vase in her hands. Her father was just happy to see his little princess dancing with joy hugging the emerald vase to her tiny body.

Her chain of thoughts broke when she heard a knock on her door. The door opened slowly with a screech, Prim -her friend/a prisoner like her here in this monstrous mansion- came in with a white cloth in her hand that covered something.

"Prim what made you come here and what's that in your hand?" Bloom blurted out with fear as no communication within slaves cum prisoners was allowed.

"Bloom keep you voice low" spoke Prim and showed Bloom a tiny earthen pot that contained a green sparkling thick liquid.

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So how was it? Good, Bad or Horrible? Want us to continue?

-Shivangi and Shivika

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NikiBh8 thumbnail
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Posted: 13 years ago
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It Ws Too Short
Write More :D
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Originally posted by: NikiBh8

It Ws Too Short

Write More :D

Thanks Nikki This was just the first part wanted to see the response then will post more...
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The whole mysterious, symbolic, medieval undercurrent to the story has made this the most intriguing thing that I've read in days, months even. You gals have the talent and I would like to see it used more often. It goes without saying that I would love it if you decided to continue. Something about tragedy, misfortune and bondage gets me all interested in reading such a work. And of course the mystery of the emerald vase is enough to keep me hooked to this story. So please continue, Shiv sis. And also, I don't understand how both of you can write a story together.😕 Do explain!
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Posted: 13 years ago
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interesting start !!
surely do continue...
thanks for the pm 😊
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Is this a fantasy adventure fan fcition ? Nice intriguing start. And nice character names.
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Nyc start
U should continue n update it soon
I really like characters nAme
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damn short... but its nyc...
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Posted: 13 years ago
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intrigued by the way u have written it...no wonder why i call u both "wonder twins"...continue it...
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Well I loved it..mystery and suspense I love and sadness...pls continue it ofc!!Write longer parts..shiv twins!

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