My first SS:Jihne mera dil lutiya TEASER pg69 - Page 32

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Posted: 13 years ago
first of all m extremely sry for disappearing dis delay in comment...
coming to updates WoW both part 7 n 8 were really sweet n brought a BIG smile on ma face...

d moment maan cut d phone smirking i knew hes on his way to his 'shoni' n yup here he was to look in her eyes n call her his shoni...

awww geet's plight she cant even pretend to b angry on him...hehe so sweet...

loved d concern maan had seeing his shoni teary n luved d way geet understood maan beyond words...

awww they cant even sleep without each others warmth with them...both had a sleepless night...

d whole song sequence was truly mesmerising...their luv their passion portrayed d strength of their relationship...n thanks a ton for choosing dis song gudiya...its ma favorite...n truly was icing on d cake wid their flowing luv...

n the last phrase 'log kehte hain...' was so true seeing their increasing luv each day...

again sry gudiya...amazing updates yaar...
truly beautiful...
luvya loadzzz...
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Posted: 13 years ago

Originally posted by: todayzstar

Aahye my fav song piye re wow..
update was fab yaar..⭐️
cntnue soonn..

My too fav...Thanks dear for ur precious comment..i will give update very soon.
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Posted: 13 years ago
Thanxs dear for ur precious comment
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Posted: 13 years ago

Originally posted by: crazydevil87

first of all m extremely sry for disappearing dis delay in comment...
coming to updates WoW both part 7 n 8 were really sweet n brought a BIG smile on ma face...No sorry ok di..and ur comment brought the smile on my face😊

d moment maan cut d phone smirking i knew hes on his way to his 'shoni' n yup here he was to look in her eyes n call her his shoni...Ap galat thodi ho sakti hai

awww geet's plight she cant even pretend to b angry on him...hehe so sweet...

loved d concern maan had seeing his shoni teary n luved d way geet understood maan beyond words... it is true love

awww they cant even sleep without each others warmth with them...both had a sleepless night...ya becharo ki ankhe red ho gai lack se

d whole song sequence was truly mesmerising...their luv their passion portrayed d strength of their relationship...n thanks a ton for choosing dis song gudiya...its ma favorite...n truly was icing on d cake wid their flowing luv...it my fav too di..pehle to sirf update likhi fir dimaag me aya kyu na ye song saath me use karo

n the last phrase 'log kehte hain...' was so true seeing their increasing luv each day...

again sry gudiya...amazing updates yaar...
truly beautiful...
luvya loadzzz...

luve u too di...and thanxs for lovely comment😊
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Posted: 13 years ago
thanks alot to all my reader for ur all encourage.I really thankful to u all.but this time my number of like decreses somewhere feel bad😭.But thanks for all ur comments
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Posted: 13 years ago
Fabulous update👏MaaNeet moment was so cute n romantic 😳GR8 song selection.It was situational.Do continue soon. Eagerly waiting for next update.😊 Sorry for very late comment.😳Thanx 4 the PM.
Edited by SIZZZLER - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago

Originally posted by: SIZZZLER

Fabulous update👏MaaNeet moment was so cute n romantic 😳GR8 song selection.It was situational.Do continue soon. Eagerly waiting for next update.😊 Sorry for very late comment.😳Thanx 4 the PM.

Thanks alot dear for beautiful comment.😊
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Posted: 13 years ago

Thanxs alot for ur all encourage friends.I reply to all ur comments individual plz have a look on them to replies start from page 53.

I dedicate this part to my Abgina Di because of her encourage i try to write another romantic update.Hope u like it.

PART-9
Log kehte hai shadi ke baad jase jase waqt beeta jata hai pyaar kam hota jata hai,lekin inka pyaar dekhne ke baad kon manega is baat ko.Inka pyaar itna Paakh hai ke waqt ke saath saath badta hi ja raha hai.ye khude ke vo frishte hai jo ek dusre ke lie hi bane hai.Ek dusre ke bina ek pal jinna bi ye gawara nahi samjte.Ek pal ki duri bi inhe mout se badtar lagti hai.Jo bi inke pyaar ko dekhe bus uski gehrai me dooob jaye.

Plz listen to this song in backgroung.Its makes update more romantic. http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=sCb6yudiIVU

Tere bina tere bina dil naiyyo lagda
He remembering how much he missed her in that 12hour.O god how he felt helpless not even call her jaan in that hours.That time kill him from inside.vo usse ek pal ke lia bi door nahi hona chata agar uska bus chalta to vo apni shoni se kabi door hi na ho bus 24 ghante uske pass uski baho me rahe.He kissed her forehead lovingly and get up go to washroom to take a shower.

Mera dil naiyyo lagda
Geet feel something alone she roamed her hand on bed feel empty.She get up imediately and her eyes automitically start searching for her man.She dont want to away from him for a sec.She fears if that was a dreams which she live fully.She take her towel wrap aroung herself and get off from bed.

Tere bina tere bina dil naiyyo lagda
As she get up she hear a click of opening and closing of door.She look up to meet him.

Mera dil naiyyo lagda
There she say him coming out from washroom rubbing his wet hairs with towel only wearing his jean,towel aroung his neck.A smile crept on her beautiful rose petals likes lips.Oh that was not dream.

Tu hi meri, hai zindagi
She lost in him.His well tone structure,his muscles..opps perfect body only made for her.

Tu hi meri, hai har khushi
She run towards him,go and get him in tight hug.She hug him with her full strenth.

Tu hi meri, hai bandgi
It is so quick for maan that he could not react.But soon he relize by her tight full hug that she feared not found him next to her.Shayd usse is baat ki jyada chinta thi ke vo lamhe kahi koi sapna na ho.She dont even live or sleep without him for a sec.

Kaise kahoon? kahaan jaaun?
Maan also hugged her tighly try to conway that he is there with her not going anywhere And that moments was not any dream..It looks like their bones will crushed by this much strength.Waterdroplets weting her neck.

Kise karoon sajda?
Maan cressing her back with his outermost love and passion calming her down.

Haan, kise karoon sajda?
Geet calm down,she reduce the strenth of grip around his waist while resting her head on his wet and cold chest.

Tere bina tere bina dil naiyyo lagda aa
They stand there for sometime just lost in each other touch in their closeness.She hearing his heartbeat which tells her that how much helpless and lifeless without her in that hours.Shesmiled.

Mera dil naiyyo lagda
After somtime geet raised her head to meet his gaze only see the same in his eyes.Maan see her moist eyes.He want to divert her mind.He came closer to her and teasingly splash waterdroplets on her neck.And start sucking them giving pleasure to geet.

Kaise kahoon? kahaan jaaun?
He see her still in towel.His hand make their way under towel.
Maan:Shoni tum towel me aur bi tempting lagti ho.

She herself forget that she is only towel on herself.[i thinking who cares]She blushed furiously.she hide her face in her palms.He kissed her hands one follwed by other.Take them from her face.

Kise karoon sajda?
He again start caressing her bare skin roaming all around.While he kissing her collarbone giving her lovebites their.

Geet[with complaing face]:Jaan muje sab shadege stop it na.

Maan:Shoni how i stop i said na u look more tempting in it.To me kase control karo.

Geet:To theek hai me change karke ati ho.

Haan, kise karoon sajda?
Saying it she free herself from him and start going away from him.He immidetly held her by her wrist and pulls her toward himself.

Teri kasam teri kasam jaan-e-jaana

She lost her balance and with thud fell on his hard chest.She look up to meet his gaze.She was shocked to see ''gussa'' in his eyes.

Maan increase pressure on her back making her more close.Maan:Shoni Tum mujse mera HAQ sheene ja rahi thi?[he said it even he know she doesnot even think of doing it intensionally ever]

Teri liye tere liye, main deewana
Geet first got confused then apne dimaag par jor dalne ke baad usse yaad aya.O teri ye me kya karne ja rahi thi,Ab kya hoga babaji.Vo bhoole to mano par yaha to me hi bhool gai.

Maan:Babaji kuch nahi kar sakte tume is gustakhi ki SAJA jaroor milegi aur vo bi...

Geet:Vo bi kya?

Maan:Shoni itni bi kya jaldi hai tume kuch gaanto ke baad pata chal jayega.Kaise jiyein kaise jiyein ye batana

Maan goes to dressing table and get a box wraped with gift packet.He give it to geet.She opened it and find a beautiful white and pink anarkle suit.Its is soo simple but look so mesmerized.Its color combination make it mesmerizing.She softly cress it.He cares for me soo much how can i live ever without him.[dress looks like it]

Maut bhi mujhko naa aaye -
Maan take geet in front of dressing table take the box from geet and kept it on table.Maan make geet to face him.While she is blusing furiously.Maan raised her face by holding her chin.Geet see in his eyes like his eyes saying haye apki adaye wase Ab tak to apko adat ho jani chahia thi.She hit playfully on his chest and hide herself in his embrace.

Tu hi meri, hai zindagi
Tu hi meri, hai har khushi
Tu hi meri, hai bandgi
He slid her towel down.Opps now her bare skin touching his bare chest.A desire start rising in them.They hug each other passionately for stopping it at that time.He caressed her back smoothly and slowly sending current down her spine.

Tere bina tere bina dil naiyo lagda
Mera dil naiyo lagda

He divert his mind to do work in hand.He take kurti from box and make her wear while kissing her on all her body make immpossible for her to stand.He completed with dressing.

Maahi mera maahi mera sona-sona
Maan make geet to face mirror.She turn not see the dress but his love bite all over her neck and shoulder.She make a baby face while maan see her expression through mirror.She look soo cute ki he pull her cheeks like saying u look so cute while make baby face.

Rabba mere rabba mere hai salona
He slide her hair one side to do her dori.He slowly and seducingly trail his finger on her back to make her shiver.She close her eyes in anticiptation.He kissed her back.After making alot of kisses he finally do her dori.

Tere siva mera koi naa honaa
He took sindoor and fill her maang.Geet close her eye to feel this moment.

Yaad teri kitnaa sataye -
He then took earings matching with dress.He put them in her ears while doing soo he just eate her ear with his kisses.Finally done with all it.

Tu hi meri, hai zindagi
Tu hi meri, hai har khushi
Tu hi meri, hai bandgi

Geet narrow her eyebrow like asking how she look?Maan simply took kajal with his small finger from her eye and place it behind her ear.And kiss her on her forehead with his full love.

Tere bina tere bina dil naiyyo lagda.Mera dil naiyyo lagda
Kaise kahoon? kahaan jaaun?Kise karoon sajda?
Haan, kise karoon sajda?

she smiled at his hubby gestures.She come forward and kiss him on his cheeks.Oh man he lost.

Precap:[I thinks ab past me wapis jana chahia.What say?]

MSk ki girlfriend.Ab ye kon hai geet ya koi aur?

Hope i live upto ur expectations.If i do my job plz u all also do ur job my pressing like button and do commnets.

Edited by -knirwal- - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
R
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I loved both the updates
Piya ore Piya is my fav song 😳 and d song which u used in this part was also fab but once again Khushi don't take me otherwise I want u to improve writing romantic part is a different thing and giving the update a romantic feel is another aspect
The romance gets lost somewhere while u frame the sentences kuch kami lagthi hai u need to improve a lot khushi aur main ye dialogues nahi hai issliye nahi keh rahi ur writing should b so powerful k bina dialogues k hi wo update superhit ho
najaane kyun mujhe itna romantic feel nahi aaya
i am sorry agar tumhe hurt kiya ho toh but i feel i should give my honest opinions so that u can improve
love-Piya
Edited by piya- - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
Amazing Update
Continue Soon
Thank You So Much For The PM

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