My first SS:Jihne mera dil lutiya TEASER pg69 - Page 33

Awesome honey, totally awesome.
Haye, unka romance.
Loved it, indeed.

Do cont soon and do PM me.

whoa...!!!!!!! cutie...
what a brilliant part baby...

trust me...
you're good wid writing romantic parts...

I was blushing all the while...
Brilliantly written...

N yeah... inka pyar to badhta hi jaa rha hai... 😳

umm... MSK ki gf... i think Geet nhi hogi..
ab letz c gues correct hoga ya nhi..

love ya cutie... 🤗

part 9
nice lovely part...
cont soon...

thanks for the pm

Originally posted by: piya-

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I loved both the updates

Piya ore Piya is my fav song 😳 and d song which u used in this part was also fab but once again Khushi don't take me otherwise I want u to improve writing romantic part is a different thing and giving the update a romantic feel is another aspect

The romance gets lost somewhere while u frame the sentences kuch kami lagthi hai u need to improve a lot khushi aur main ye dialogues nahi hai issliye nahi keh rahi ur writing should b so powerful k bina dialogues k hi wo update superhit ho

najaane kyun mujhe itna romantic feel nahi aaya

i am sorry agar tumhe hurt kiya ho toh but i feel i should give my honest opinions so that u can improve

love-Piya

well i agree with piya's comments
last update was pretty okay par i too felt tumne words complete nahin kiye

other than this i also feel ki ur trying ur best...but do keep in mind what piya said

and yes sincere apologies from ma side too if u felt bad

Originally posted by: piya-

R

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I loved both the updates

Piya ore Piya is my fav song 😳 and d song which u used in this part was also fab but once again Khushi don't take me otherwise I want u to improve writing romantic part is a different thing and giving the update a romantic feel is another aspect

The romance gets lost somewhere while u frame the sentences kuch kami lagthi hai u need to improve a lot khushi aur main ye dialogues nahi hai issliye nahi keh rahi ur writing should b so powerful k bina dialogues k hi wo update superhit ho

najaane kyun mujhe itna romantic feel nahi aaya

i am sorry agar tumhe hurt kiya ho toh but i feel i should give my honest opinions so that u can improve

love-Piya

Thanks for ur precious comment...and i will try di 😆

Originally posted by: nahtani88

Amazing Update
Continue Soon
Thank You So Much For The PM

Thanks alot dear for ur precious comment