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Posted: 14 years ago
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I apologise for my poor hindi...
While they returning from Abhi's house.. lets hope Moushi will not insult Naina in front of others there and naina managed herself properly.. [all these by guessing they reach there and attend the fn...]
Daksh: Naina..
Naina: hamm.. bolo Daksh
Daksh: tum bahut takat dikhaya jab Abhi us ledki ki ungali par anguti pahne mein... iska matlab tum us baat mein itna pareshaan nahin hai. yaani.. tum bilkul teek ho...
naina: mein ne kaha na.. mujhe koyi farak nahi padtha... muje sirf ek baat mei afsos hai ki mein uska proposal ko han keh diya .. sirf eh sochkar woh muje pyar karta hain.. Meine socha agar muje pyar karnewala ho to woh hamesa mera saath rahega.. par sab galat tha.. mera faisla aur mera viswas.. dono.. phir... muje mera dil ki baatem samach paayi.. tumhe pata hai. uske baat bhi mein uske liye mein apna feelings ko bhoolne ka thaiyar huyi...
Daksh: Dil ki batem...?
Naina realises what she said.: Woh sab baatem chodo..
Daksh: Accha to ek baat batao... abhi bhi tum ghar chotkar jaana chahte ho?
naina: hah...
Daksh: Kyo? abhi abhi tumne keh diya ki tum bilkul teek ho... to ghar mei kya problem hain? agar tumhe koyi prob nahi to tum ghar kyo chodthe ho?
Naina: Mujhe jaana hai...
Daksh: to tum choot bol rahi thi ki tumhara tang udtha hain ghar mein... tum ne ghar chotne ka faisla kisi aur kaaran se le liya tha.. bolo.. kyo aisa faisla le liya?
Naina: kyo ki... mera jaana teek hoga..
Daksh: Matlab...?? Tum batem saaf saaf se kyo nahi batate ho? tum mujse kuch chupa rahi ho? batane mein darte ho?
Naina: darrr.. my foot... mr KP. Kyo.. kyo mein tumse chupana hai?
Daksh: phir kyo batate nahi..?? hanh??
Nina becomes silent and speachless.. she understood he trapped her... Then softly tells: woh.. hum dono ke liye wahi accha hoga Daksh...
Daksh wonders.. : Naina???!!!
Naina: Soch lo... wahi teek hoga...
Daksh: Mujhe samaj me nahi a raha... [he feels bad in hearing it] bolo naina.. tumhara kehnae ka matlab kya hai?? [He holds her and shakes]
Naina tells with tears: Abhi kisi aur ke saath rahna mein dekh sakti hoo. par... tum.. tum (pauses) mein dekh nahi sakthi, Daksh...
Daksh wnders.. shocked.. he cannot understand whether he needs to cry or laugh... but then he understands what and why she told..
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Posted: 14 years ago
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ur ff is really gud do continue...

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Posted: 14 years ago
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Mind-blowingFF šŸ‘šŸ¼ Luv U for that šŸ¤— and especially the part where you say Daksh doesn't know whether to cry or laughšŸ˜†, also brillant analysis of Naina's feelings toošŸ˜‰ ... if only CV's could read this dialogue we would have some great scenes! Kudos to you for your wonderful posts!
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Hey ,Nice dialogues as usual šŸ‘ but what if the dialogues are like this, after daksh asks naina if still she wants to leave house

Naina: Yes daksh, I still want to leave the house
Daksh; Lekin kyun..ab jab sab kuch teek hogaya..phir bhi
Naina ; Kyunki yahi teek rahega tumhare liye aur sonakshi ke liye bhi

Daksh stops the car suddenly..
Daksh; Kya matlab hai tumhara😲 Aur tumhare ghar se jaane ka sonakshi se taaluk kya hai?
Naina ; Tum nahi samjoge..waise bhi mein tumhari aur sonakshi beech nahi aana chahti

Daksh; Kya...ek min..ye tum kya keh rahi ho..mere aur sonakshi ke beech?? kya hain hamare beech.?..oh acha toh ye baath hain.Tumhe kya lagta hain??.tumhare chale jaane se sab kuch badal jageya..mere dil mein sonakshi ke liye pyar aajayega ..nahi naina..tum galat soch rahi hoon..aisa kuch nahi hoga

Naina; daksh..meri baath samjne ki koshish karo..sonakshi se tumhari shaadi honewali hain..mere waha rehna teek nahi hoga..tumne dekhna us din jo kuch bhi hua(refers to the day where sona cartoon created scene)...iss mein sonakshi ki koi galati nahi.mein uska dard samaj sakthi hoon
Daksh; gets angry..tumhe uss ki dard aur taklif samajh mein aata hain lekin mre nahi..
Naina; daksh...

Daksh; ..dekho naina koi bhi wajhe ho, tum mujhse door nahi ja sakthi aur mein jaane nahi doonga..samjhi aur agar tum mujhe apni stupid se reasons dekar convince karna chahtee ho ki tumhara ghar se jaana, mujhse door jaana sahi hai, mein kuch nahi sunna chahta..kuch bhi nahi...

Naina gets angry and gets down car and daksh follows her.They have an argument in their usual style

Naina; iss liye... daksh tumhe apni priorities samjhna chahiye..and she turns other side
Daksh holds her hand turns her, to his side
Daksh; Mein apne priorites ache se jaante hoon..shayad tum jaante nahi tum mere liye kya ho...

Sorry guys out of time..can't type dialogues so just synopsis of my thought
He holds her shoulders...

Daksh becomes emotional and holds naina and tells her howmuch he values her friendship an her presence in life and he had agreed to marry sonakshi just for naina..he is not lucky enough to get her love but he can't live without her friendship...(in tears)...dialogues for this scene..contd..

Daksh; Tum janthi nahi tum aur tumhari dosti meri zindagi mien kitne mainey(imp) rakhthe hey..sirf sirf tumhare kehne par ,tumhari khushi ke liye maine sonakshi se shaadi ke liye haan kaha.ye jaante huye bhi ke mein kabhi uss se pyar nahi karpaaunga😭..

It starts raining...

Daksh; Tumhe pata hai..jab abhi ne tumhe propose kiya, aur tumne haan kehdiya, mein poori tarah se toot chukha tha..bahut mushkil se maine apne aapko sambhala, ye soch kar tum khush ho..tumhari khushi se badkar mere liye kuch bhi important nahi..Maine apne aapko samjha diya ki mere kismat me tumhara pyar nahi lekin ab agar tum mujhse door hogayi main phir se sambhal nahi paunga

He shakes her and says "tum samaj rahi ho na..mein kya kehna chahtha hoon"

Daksh tells her how much he loves her and he will never be able to love anybody else in this life as naina is his first and last love(with tears in his eyes)

Naina just keeps listening wondering how she stupid she is to not to recognise his love and how wrong she is to say yes to stupid abhi...tears roll down her eyes as she is feeling the love she craved her whole life
An intense eye lock...with tears rolling down...

Both are drenched in rain..both become highly emotiona😭l, forget everything and hug each other.ā¤ļø.

Slowly the lines of song naina tere..tu hi hasrat..tu hi chahat ... is played...contd...

hows this?





Edited by lucky.m - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Wow... Another amazing dialoguešŸ‘Mashaallah we have some very talented writers on this forumšŸ‘šŸ¼ā­ļøLooking forward for some more powerful dialogues!

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Posted: 14 years ago
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ntsindia and lucky.m..u both wrote a nice dialogue scene...loved it yaar...keep writing dese type of scenesšŸ‘šŸ¼till we get our dakshna together...we cud easily help ourselves a lot reading dese beautiful scenes😊
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Posted: 14 years ago
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hey..its too good post.. i really like ur hindi; its soo cute to read, dont get me wrng its truelly cute hindi..! mazza aya story lines padke..ye possible he..! good job..!😊
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Hi,

Thnks for the response yaar..šŸ˜›.
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Posted: 14 years ago
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both the dialogues are superb and beautifully written...
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Originally posted by: lucky.m

Hey ,Nice dialogues as usual šŸ‘ but what if the dialogues are like this, after daksh asks naina if still she wants to leave house


Naina: Yes daksh, I still want to leave the house
Daksh; Lekin kyun..ab jab sab kuch teek hogaya..phir bhi
Naina ; Kyunki yahi teek rahega tumhare liye aur sonakshi ke liye bhi

Daksh stops the car suddenly..
Daksh; Kya matlab hai tumhara😲 Aur tumhare ghar se jaane ka sonakshi se taaluk kya hai?
Naina ; Tum nahi samjoge..waise bhi mein tumhari aur sonakshi beech nahi aana chahti

Daksh; Kya...ek min..ye tum kya keh rahi ho..mere aur sonakshi ke beech?? kya hain hamare beech.?..oh acha toh ye baath hain.Tumhe kya lagta hain??.tumhare chale jaane se sab kuch badal jageya..mere dil mein sonakshi ke liye pyar aajayega ..nahi naina..tum galat soch rahi hoon..aisa kuch nahi hoga

Naina; daksh..meri baath samjne ki koshish karo..sonakshi se tumhari shaadi honewali hain..mere waha rehna teek nahi hoga..tumne dekhna us din jo kuch bhi hua(refers to the day where sona cartoon created scene)...iss mein sonakshi ki koi galati nahi.mein uska dard samaj sakthi hoon
Daksh; gets angry..tumhe uss ki dard aur taklif samajh mein aata hain lekin mre nahi..
Naina; daksh...

Daksh; ..dekho naina koi bhi wajhe ho, tum mujhse door nahi ja sakthi aur mein jaane nahi doonga..samjhi aur agar tum mujhe apni stupid se reasons dekar convince karna chahtee ho ki tumhara ghar se jaana, mujhse door jaana sahi hai, mein kuch nahi sunna chahta..kuch bhi nahi...

Naina gets angry and gets down car and daksh follows her.They have an argument in their usual style

Naina; iss liye... daksh tumhe apni priorities samjhna chahiye..and she turns other side
Daksh holds her hand turns her, to his side
Daksh; Mein apne priorites ache se jaante hoon..shayad tum jaante nahi tum mere liye kya ho...

Sorry guys out of time..can't type dialogues so just synopsis of my thought
He holds her shoulders...

Daksh becomes emotional and holds naina and tells her howmuch he values her friendship an her presence in life and he had agreed to marry sonakshi just for naina..he is not lucky enough to get her love but he can't live without her friendship...(in tears)...dialogues for this scene..contd..

Daksh; Tum janthi nahi tum aur tumhari dosti meri zindagi mien kitne mainey(imp) rakhthe hey..sirf sirf tumhare kehne par ,tumhari khushi ke liye maine sonakshi se shaadi ke liye haan kaha.ye jaante huye bhi ke mein kabhi uss se pyar nahi karpaaunga😭..

It starts raining...

Daksh; Tumhe pata hai..jab abhi ne tumhe propose kiya, aur tumne haan kehdiya, mein poori tarah se toot chukha tha..bahut mushkil se maine apne aapko sambhala, ye soch kar tum khush ho..tumhari khushi se badkar mere liye kuch bhi important nahi..Maine apne aapko samjha diya ki mere kismat me tumhara pyar nahi lekin ab agar tum mujhse door hogayi main phir se sambhal nahi paunga

He shakes her and says "tum samaj rahi ho na..mein kya kehna chahtha hoon"

Daksh tells her how much he loves her and he will never be able to love anybody else in this life as naina is his first and last love(with tears in his eyes)

Naina just keeps listening wondering how she stupid she is to not to recognise his love and how wrong she is to say yes to stupid abhi...tears roll down her eyes as she is feeling the love she craved her whole life
An intense eye lock...with tears rolling down...

Both are drenched in rain..both become highly emotiona😭l, forget everything and hug each other.ā¤ļø.

Slowly the lines of song naina tere..tu hi hasrat..tu hi chahat ... is played...contd...

hows this?

Wow!!! its superb yaar... do continue...

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