MN - The Fragile Magic ** Epilogue - Pg 140. - Page 18

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Posted: 14 years ago
B'latd Happy B'day Kinza!!
aww... beautiful part! esp d rahul n Nupur's convos...
omg... now how will mayu react on nupur's quesn?
cant wait 4 d next update!
continue soon!
luv ya !🤗
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Posted: 14 years ago
interesting update...looking forward to see the bonding between mayur to grow up soon..cant wait 4 the next part
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Posted: 14 years ago
Okay so, I was grinning like a fool reading Dia's letter.

but I really like this story. i like for a fact, the attempt at something other than the usual, and awkwardness, I know, is pretty hard to write about. I wholesomely appreciate your effort.

Now, i see they are conversing, and I admire nupur's sensibility when she decided to talk to Rahul. I have a feeling, the boy will come around.

Loved it, Fanta.

Continue super super soon. ❤️

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Posted: 14 years ago
happy birthday (belated) wish you all the joy in the world

as for this ff and this part, ...like another person who said it best- i find it difficult to accept Mayur with anyone else. otherwise, the parts were good- after a while the kids become all important and everything else pales in comparison .

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Posted: 14 years ago
Firstly wish you a very happy birthday:) have a great year.. I am usually a silent reader on if but I have read every single ff of yours and I must say you are a really talented writer and I could actually see an improvement from your initial ffs to your later ones:) well done.. This story also fantastic.. Keep up the good work and pkease update soon:) take care :D
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Posted: 14 years ago
Amazing update Kinza !!!!!!!!👏👏

I loved the convo between Rahul & Nupur ...

I am in love with the way u write..there is something in ur style...only u could have done justice to this delicate topic..👍🏼👍🏼⭐️⭐️

Waiting to hear what Mayank has to say abt the sleeping pills..

Cont soon..😊
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Posted: 14 years ago
Chapter # 5:

"ap sleeping pills kyun letey ho?", nupur's voice was concerned - this was the only conclusion mayank could draw.

"I can't sleep without them", he replied turning to the other side.

"kyun neend nahi ati hai?", she was not satisfied with the answer,

"pata nahi", this time he was stern.

"aur ciggarates?", she asked, with an equal stern voice, "why do you smoke?"

"I don't believe this!!",. kanchi gasped and mayank immediately turned to find that she was holding his bag,

"how dare you!, give my bag back", he shouted.

"what the hell are these ciggartes doing in your bag?", she was still in shock, holding the ciggarte boxes in her hand.

"why did u open my bag, learn respecting privacy", he snatched the bag from her,

, "privacy my foot!, I don't believe mayank you smoke?"

"you don't have any right to ask me, you left me saying that you hate me", he now took the ciggarte packets from her hand and threw them in his bag.

"have you lost it or what?, that was just because you were being so cranky and I was just angry, you fool!! ", she took a step towards him and cupped his face, "what is it mayank?, why smoking?, have u ever thought what will didi think if she comes to know about this!, mayank she lives abroad and just because she can't be with you mean that you will start following the wrong path , .. mayank..

"I am not following any wrong path", he slipped his hand across her waist and hugged her, hiding his face in her neck.

"then what mayank", she asked , hugging him back, equally tight.

"I was so alone .. you left me..", he replied in a low voice

"I didn't", she broke from the hug and gently kissed his lips, "I didn't mayank, I can never leave you, I am sorry I won't do it again , I promise", she again kissed him and this time mayank kissed back before she could pull back,

"promise that you won't smoke again mayank", she said pulling back and mayank captured her lips again.

"but you have to promise not to do this again when we will get married", he said pulling back , "I promise", she smiled and both deepened the kiss again.

"why do u smoke?', nupur asked again and mayank took a deep breath, "don't worry , I know I don't have to smoke in front of children, I have never done that ",

"I am not asking this, why do u smoke?", she insisted

"good night Nupur", he said in a voice which certainly meant that he was in no mood of talking. Nupur took a deep breath and closed her eyes, she didn't even wish back, maybe she asked all this too early.

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Sometimes it seems that life will come to a halt and never move forward, but that is where man is mistaken. The Almighty creator has given man strength to move on from every situation, from every problem and every dilemma.

After the death of their partners, both Mayank and Nupur thought that their lives stopped - this is the end ' there is nothing after this ' but the very moment, the tickling giggle of their children collided with their ear drums, filling in new hope for life in them.

Forgetting their own loneliness, they started to fill colors in the lives of their children, but what lacked was still there ' their children were growing up with a single parent - they lacked something. Although not prominent, but the holes had started to embed in their personalities. The feeling that they had something missing had started to dawn upon them, but then again God brought them the parent they were lacking ' Rahul a mother and Pranav a father.

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"mummy aj school nahi jana hai", pranav made a face and hugged Nupur while she pushed him away, "paranv ap koi baby ho jo abhi bhi tang karte ho?, kiya problem hai school se , ap ..

"I don't believe this", a third voice alarmed both of them and on turning they found that it was mayank standing on the door, "very bad!",

"kia hua uncle?", pranav walked towards him amazed and mayank sat on his knees, "ap school jane k liye tang karte ho?, I don't believe this, this is very bad", he said in a disappointed tone and pranav got embarrassed, "roz nahi karta .. main '", he tried to defend himself, "bus kabhi kabhi ..", he turned towards Nupur for help but she didn't,

"g nahi, ap roz tang karte ho!!' Nupur said in a strict voice and pranav was dumfounded that his mother didn't support him, "nahi uncle .. main..", he made an feeble attempt but then surrendered and lowered his eyes.

"I am sorry", he said in a low voice and mayank's heart contracted with affection, he pulled him close and ruffled his hair, "kiya baat hai beta?, ap ko school psnd nahi hai?"

"psnd hai", he said raising his eyes and mayank was startled at the twinkle of his tiny eyes, "tu phir kiya problem hai?"

"wo .. it's difficult going to school", he slowly said and mayank smiled, "hmmm, that I can understand, but what if we have an ice cream treat on our way to school, as Rahul has , everyday", he asked and pranav's face lit up, "good boy, now get ready and don't bother mummy again', he said those words and got up to found that Nupur was already looking at him smiling.

Returning her a smile, mayank went

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Rahul!!",

mayank helplessly looked at Rahul who was not listening to him.

"beta ap ko pata hai mujh se ye sketching nahi hoti, mujhe tu pencil bhi thek se pakrni nahi ati, and how will i..

"this is not fair daddy!!", he pouted and mayank sighed, "per bache mujhe ata nahi hai ..

"can I help?", a soft voice gained the attention of mayank and Rahul and they found Nupur was standing on the door, with her soft smile playing on her lips.

"please do!", mayank sighed, while Rahul further snuggled into mayank's lap and tried to ignore Nupur.

"kiya hua?", Nupur asked walking towards the matress, "Rahul ka sketching ka assignment hai, and he wants me to help but I can't even draw a straight line", mayank said helplessly and Rahul was totally quiet during all this.

"hmmm, so Rahul, can I help?", Nupur asked looking at Rahul and he kept his face straight.

"do u know sketching?", he asked and mayank was about to glare at him for his stern voice but Nupur didn't let him, she spoke in between

"u can test me", she said politely and Rahul was still staring her with quiet eyes.

"okay", he jumped out of mayank's lap and sat in front of Nupur handing her a paper,

"ummm, so I need to draw something?", Nupur faked nervousness and the boy nodded.

"hmmm, umm, Mr Sharma will u please excuse us", she looked at mayank who was glaring at Rahul for being rude .

"what?., why?, I need to sit here!", he replied still glaring Rahul

"but we don't want you, right Rahul?", she looked at Rahul who was trying hard to hide himself behind the book to save himself from his father's glares ,and nupur's question felt like the rescue way , so he nodded his tiny head vigoursly.

"Nupur..

"please mayank .."

This soft exchange of words did the work and after glaring Rahul again, mayank left.

"hmm, so as ur strict daddy has left, you can give me my test freely", she smiled and although Rahul wanted to smile back but still he felt he shouldn't.

"you need to draw an apple", he said , being sure that it was the most difficult he could think off and nupur quickly sketched an apple on the paper.

"how is it?', she asked, still faking nervousness, although she knew it was perfect ' Nupur was the winner of every art competition of her life.

Rahul was startled to see the perfectly sketched apple, it was just so GOOD!!.

He looked up at her and then placed his sketching book in of her, "I need to draw a river, but I don't know how to draw it" he said slowly, finally thinking that he could trust her.

"hmm, rivers are simple'

"but I don't want to draw a simple river, ", he pouted and Nupur smiled, "hmm, u want to draw something different, then you need an inspiration"

"what?", he looked up totally confused over the new word, while Nupur held his tiny hands,

"inspiration, it's like someone or something gives you new ideas to draw .. umm .. is there anyone whom u talk and then u feel like u can draw your best drawing?", Nupur asked observing his expressions change.

"Yes!!, I have this class fellow of mine , akki, she gives me this ins.."

"inspiration", Nupur completed the sentence and he nodded, "yes this inspi thing .. she can't draw herself, but when I talk to her, I feel so many ideas", he was ecstatically speaking and nupur could see his eyes twinkling .

"good, lets call her then ", she said and Rahul jumped to bring the phone and Nupur was amazed that he knew her number by heart.

Akki was a sweet child, though Nupur thought she was a bit insane, but very talented and sharp. She let Rahul and akki talk for a while and every second it felt as if Rahul was filing with new energy.

The girl has something!", Nupur thought and after the phone was over, Rahul sketched a gorgeous river with two friends sitting on it's side.

As Rahul was done, and instructing him at a couple of places, she left his room but when she went in the kitchen after checking on paranv's home work, she found a small paper, with a colorful thank you over it, and seeing it she knew it was Rahul.

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"suniyeee", Nupur came in the room very excited and mayank was amused to see her child ' like flutter,

"kia hua?",

"wo rahul aur paranv ki frndship ho rahi hai, abhi dono bahir garden main khel rahe they aur abhi dono Rahul k room main koi cartoon movie dekhne gaye hain"

'wow!, that is great, main ne kaha than na k un ki frndship ho jaye gi,

"haan , ummm", she stopped in between and mayank raised his eyes from his file, 'what ? kia kehna hai?'

"ummm, hum sun k aye k kiya baat kar rahe hain dono , please/", she asked innocently and mayank couldn't help smiling, "spying!", he said in an alarming tone and Nupur huffed, "this is not spying, just curious, please..", she again asked with innocence and mayank had to agree .

They both walked towards their room and hearing both of them squealing over their superman , were about to return when they both heard them talking about something which stunned both Mayank and Nupur.

"paranv tumhare pass tu mummy hain, you are so lucky', it was rahul's voice, filled with hope and desire and mayank felt as if someone pulled earth beneath his feet.

"haan aur tumhare pass daddy hain, you are also lucky", paranv replied and Nupur felt herself going numb all over.

'yeah you don't have a father and I don't have a mother", rahul's voice was low .

"but you know I really like mayank uncle, he is very nice", hearing this statement, mayank took a glance at Nupur who was standing totally aloof from everything, blankly hearing.

" I know, my daddy is the best", Rahul replied with pride, "and I also like your mummy, she is sweet , she helps me with sketching, but my own mummy was different, let me you show her picture"

They both heard Rahul jumping from bed and after a while heard pranav, 'wow, she is so pretty, my daddy is also difernt , I also have his picture in my room, let me bring", and as mayank heard pranav advancing towards the door, her pulled Nupur by her arm, and they both hid in the small gallery behind the door.

Nupur was pinned against the wall and mayank was standing in front of him, she didn't know when did mayank pull her from there, the words of children were echoing in her mind, and consequently, tears flowing.

Mayank, although stumbled that he was standing so close to her, but then seeing that she was crying, he forgot the awkwardness, "Nupur", he whispered and she raised her teary eyes to meet his eyes filled with pain.

"it's okay, they need to talk about them , their real parents", he tried to smile, but Nupur closed her eyes to allow tears to flow and mayank just slipping his hand behind her head, slowly shifted it to his chest and sensing a support, she was so yearning for the last five years, she closed her eyes firm and grabbed his shirt in her fist.

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Edited by Fantasia. - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
KINZUUU!!!!!!!! *TIGHT HUGS* U NO DOUBT ARE A SUPERB WRITE KINZUUU!!!!!!!👏A BEAUTIFUL UPDATE YET AGAIN!!!! MAYANK AND NUPUR DISCUSSION, THE WAY THY BTH TRIES TO FILL THE VOIDS IN THE KIDS LIFE, THE WAY KIDS FELT AND THE EFFECT ON THR PARENTS!!!! ALL THE FEELING WERE SO PERFECTLY EXPRESSD BESTIE!!!! MAYANK'S TRY TO SUPPORT NUPUR! EVERYTHING WAS DESCRIBED IN AN AMZING MANNER!!!!!! LOVE U BESTIE!!!!!!🤗
Edited by mulan. - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
EDIT :

Aila!! What do i do about phans!! *fans self* 😎 🤣

Awe, Fanta really. I have been grinning, (I realise its a better term for blushing. 😳 ) 🤗 --> This is for you. 😃 You know you are a complete sweetheart. Of course you know. 😃

And secondly, I loved loved the update. I'm loving this thing that even though you're writing a story, you're keeping this sense of reality in the story, in the sense that no one can forget their own parents when a step parent comes by. I likey. :)

And then, hmm, the hug. its a thing about two broken and miserable people. They bond the best. :) I'm loving the way their story is going.

i know you just updated, but continue super soon. I'll send "inspiration" every day. 🤣

Love,
You-Know-Who

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Edited by You-Know-Who - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
superb! loved the update
continue soon
nd thnx for the pm 😊

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