Buniyaad se bane 'RISHTEY'

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Posted: 14 years ago
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I am writing a new FF based on my own characters. I have named it Buniyaad se bane 'RISHTEY'. I think the title is apt to the story I am attempting to write here.
This is my second FF. Please read and leave comments. Please press 'LIKE' if you like it!

Contents

The concept Page 1

Character Sketch Page 1

PART 1 - Introduction to characters Page 1


The Concept
The story is of two families that live under the same roof. The families are business partners and have dreams of changing the friendship to a familial relationship. Each family has a son and daughter. The story starts off with both boys returning from studying abroad.

Characters Sketch

Family 1 - Raichand Family






Family 2 - Aryavardhan Family







Please read my other (ongoing) FF fiction: MJHT FF ~ Same characters different story!

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Posted: 14 years ago
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lovely concept and cs
do continue soon
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Congrats dear
nice intro
can u write a mayur version of this ff ----plzzzzzzz

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lovely concept dear do cont soon n thanks for the pm
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nice concept dear continue soon
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nice concept dear continue soon!!!!!!
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PART 1 - Introduction to characters

Scene 1
Location ~ Aashaa Nikiten (The name of the House) -
First floor
Characters in scene ~ Riya, Harsha & Ambha


8 AM. A young woman is seen arguing with a servant. Only the back is visible. She is wearing a light blue anarkali suit.
Young woman
- Tumhe patha hai na, aaj bhaiya a rahe hai? Badi Maa ne bataya tha na? Toh phir ye dono kamre abhi tak tayar kyun nahin hai?
Servant
- Tayar to hai Memsaab. Maine khud saaf kiya ta dono kamro ko.
Young woman - Acha? (She takes the servant by the arm and leads him to a table in a room) Toh phir yeh kya hai? (In a vase are some wilted flowers. The servant looks at her sheepishly)

Servant
- Maaf karna Memsaab, maine dekha nahin.
Young woman - Teek hai! Agli baar teek se dekhna!
(The servant leaves with the flowers and the young woman turns around. It's Riya Aryavardhan. She goes down a long, stunning staircase. As she gets closer to the bottom of the stairs, a beautiful voice can be heard singing. Once downstairs she walks into an open plan mandir and the back of a woman is seen praying and singing. The woman is wearing a green banarasi sari. She finishes and turns around. It is Harsha Raichand.)
Harsha -
Are Riya? Tum ut gayi? (She comes up to Riya) yeh lo Prasad! (Riya takes Prasad. Harsha looks behind Riya)
Tumhari pyaari saheli kaha hai? Abhi tak uti nahin maharani?
Riya - Badi Maa, woh.... (An elderly woman walks in wearing a white and orange silk sari) Daadi!
(Riya goes and hugs Ambha Aryavardhan. Ambha then walks to Harsha and also takes Prasad)
Ambha -
Tum bhi na Harsha! Der raat jag kar apni bhai ki aane ki thayari kar ke soyi hai, to der thak tho sohna jayiz hai.
Harsha - Ha Mai! (She smiles at Ambha) Par kya karo? Che saal ho gaye apne Akshay ko deke hue. Kitna badal gaya ho ga na woh? Aur Karan? Unh dono ko dekhne mere ankhen taras rahe hai!
(Ambha smiles and sighs)
Ambha -
Ha Harsha. Taras to main bhi rahi hoon, unh dono ko dekhne, par ab toh sirf ek hi ghanta bache hai. (She faces Riya)
Jaa Riya, tu jaldse Pari ko uta le. Phir tum dono tayar ho jawo hume airport jaana hai na?
Riya - Jee Daadi!
(She leaves)
Ambha -
Subhu aur Jatin Kaha hai? Unhe airport nahin jaana kya?
(Harsha laughs)
Harsha -
Jitna hum tarse hai, useh kahi zyadi woh dono tarse hai apne beto ke liya. Woh to kab se tayar bete honge.

Scene 2

Location ~ Aashaa Nikiten -
Ground floor Living Room
Characters in scene ~ Jatin, Subhash & Riya

5 minutes later. A middle aged man is sitting in the living room wearing a navy blue suit, when another walks in wearing a casual beige Kurta. The man in the suit stands up.
Man in suit -
Are aap yeh kya pehn rahe hai?

Man in Kurta - Kyun? Kya kharabi hai isme? (He looks down at his clothes)
Acha khasa hi to hai.
Man in suit
- Par Jatin Bhai, hume aaj airport jaana hai!
Jatin - Ishi liye! Ishi liye mein yeh kurta pehn raha hoon Subhu! Aaj itne saalo baad mera beta wapas aa raha hai. Woh ayega to main apna sab kuch usko sawp kar retire ho jawunga. Tab to mujhe aise hi kapre pehn kar ghar behtna hai. Meri baat maan Subhu, tu bhi apna saab kuch apne bete ko sawp ke retire ho jaa! Ab to hamare araam karne ki din aye! (Subhash smiles)

Subhash - Haa Jatin Bhai. Bete aa jayenge to hum bhi tora araam karlenge.
(Just then Riya walks by on her way to Pari's Room)
Jatin -
Riya beta? Dekho, main kaise lag raha hoon?
(He puts his arms out and twirls around)
Riya -
Wow Bade Papa. Bikul 'man of leisure' lag rahe hai.
(She leans on him and gives him a cheeky smile, Jatin makes out to hit her)
Jatin -
Baadmaash!
(She moves away laughing and hides behind Subhash. She holds her ears)
Riya -
Sorry Bade Papa!
Jatin - Acha teek hai. (He indicates and she comes over and he puts his arm over her shoulder) Tu ab kaha jaa rahi hai? Airport ke liye tayar nahi hui?

Riya - Are haan...Bade Papa mujhe Pari ko uta na hai, phir hum dono ko tayar hona hai. Main aapse baad mein milthi hoon. Bye Bade Papa. Bye Dad
! (She waves at both and runs off, Jatin smiles staring after her)
Jatin -
Ek tharaf mujhe yakeen nahin hota ke main apne bete se itne saalo mein nahin mila, aur dosri tharaf yakeen hi nahin hota ke itni jaldi ,che saal beet gaye, aur Pari aur Riya itne bade ho gaye.

Subhash - Haa Jatin Bhai (He gets slightly teary) Dekthe hi dekthe Riya ki shaadi ki umar ho gayi
. (Jatin puts his arm over Subhash's shoulder)
Jatin -
Tu kyun chinta kar raha hai Subhu? Teri beti to shaadi ke baad bhi isi ghar mein rahe gi, meri bahu jo baneh waali hai. Ab dekna, jald se jald Akshay aur Riya ki chat mangni pat shaadi kardenge.
(Both friends hug)

Scene 3

Location
~ Aashaa Nikiten - Pari's Room
Characters in scene ~ Riya & Pari

A little later. Riya walks in to a beautiful room with a gorgeous canopy bed.
Riya -
Pari? Pari! Tu abhi tak soh rahi hai? (She shakes a person shaped heap on the bed) Pari?
(She pulls the blanket off the bed and is surprised to find a heap of pillows. Just then a young woman comes up from beind)
Woman -
Boo!
(Riya's pulse goes up in shock and the woman runs off. Riya realises who it is)
Riya -
Pari ki bachi, idhar aa. (Pari runs off laughing as Riya chases her, eventually they are both exhausted and both drop onto the bed breathing hard) Tune to mujhe dara hi diya!
(Pari laughs)
Pari -
Wohi to mera irada tha! (She ducks Riya's swat) Ok sorry! (Both start laughing)
I'm so happy Ree, ke bhaiya aur Karan wapas a rahe hai! Kitne saal ho gaye na?
Riya - Haan! Main bhi bohut kush hoon. Par tum ab mujhe Ree ya Riya bulana band karo (she gets serious) main ab bohut hi jald tumhari bhabhi bane wali hoon!
(She looks at Pari with a straight face, no longer able to hold it, she starts to laugh and Pari follows)
Pari -
Ree, jab shaadi ho jayegi, main sirf tumhe bhabi hi bulawungi, but for now? Tum meri dost ho, my best friend. (She hugs Riya) But I know, ke ek din, tum duniya ki best bhabhi banogi! (Her eyes settle on a clock and open wide) Par bhabhi bane ke lye, bhaiya ko aana parega, aur woh tab ayenge, jab hum unhe airport lenhe jayenge.
(Riya follows Pari's eyes to the clock and she stands up)
Riya -
Oh God! Pari, hume sare ath baje (8.30) nikalna hai. Jaldi Tayar ho! (Both get busy in getting ready)

Scene 4
Location
~ Airport
Characters in scene ~ Ambha, Jatin, Harsha, Subhash, Riya, Pari, Karan & Akshay

9.30 AM. Ambha, Jatin, Harsha, Subhash, Riya & Pari are all waiting at the arrival gate at the airport. Riya is now wearing a mint green and pink shelwar suit, Pari is wearing blue jeans and a yellow embroidered kurta top.
Harsha -
Itni der kyun ho rahi hai? Ada ghanta hua flight land hue, abhi tak wo dono aye kyun nahin?
(Jatin smiles at his wife and indicates to Ambha)
Jatin -
Mai! Tu hi samjha na ise. Kyun pareshaan hoti hai?

Ambha -
Main kya samjawu beta, mujhe khud itni fikr ho rahi hai!
Riya - Kyun fikr karahe ho Daadi? Woh dono ajayenge. (She looks up and sees a familiar man exiting the arrivals gate and smiles) Woh dekho Karan Bhaiya!
(Everyone looks at the man. Another man comes towards him pushing a luggage trolley. Seeing him, Pari smiles)
Pari -
Aki bhaiya bhi! (She waves and the man waves back without smiling, her smile vanishes) Inhe kya hua?
(Everyone looks at him, happy yet confused, when a woman comes from behind him wearing a red short skirt and tight white shirt. She puts her arm through his and gives him a kiss on his cheeks as he stares at his family. Everyone is shocked! Riya walks over to her Dad and Daadi and puts her hands in theirs as she looks on stupefied. Karan, Akshay and the woman walk towards them)

End of Part 1

I know the part is short but I wanted to leave it on a cliff hanger. Please leave comment and press 'like' if you like it.



Edited by Parvin86 - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
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awesomeeeeee updt loved it superb continue soon n thanx 4 the pm
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Lovely update
loved ria and paris convo
good start
keep it up
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Posted: 14 years ago
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lovely update
thanks 4 the pm

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