my first scene : edited I want to see this

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Posted: 16 years ago
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TIS IS THE LIMIT guys yeh cretives bhi naa ek achi kaasi period love soty ko kha se kha le ge ,, is main ab sab kuch hain bt bt bt 1942 ki fredom part , period love soty ka to naamo nishaan tak nahi hain😡🤢

jab tablea secen dekh to laga ki saayed story wapis track pakar rahi hain but sab khade main ,, SARI UMEEDO KA SATYA NAAS KAR DIYA AUR PANI PER DIYA .
bt latest track dekne ke baad i just want to say dat i really really want to see this thing happen in show u know y guys i'm telling u dat kyuki jab se mere woh arthi waala secen sach huya hain tab se i'm getting little confident .....
yes guys yeh arti waal secen m,ain humesha soxchti thi li kaash esha ho jaye bt in defferent maaner fibally woh sach agay to i' m try to write some thing
hope u all like it its my first try guys so plz tell me how u like it and plz press THANK YOU button to boost up my confident level
THE THING I WANT TO SEE IN MRD IS LIKE THIS :
(1) one day KRANTI got a ph call and got shocked she cant understand what to do n say she lost her senses (are baba woh pagal nahi huyi hain she is all rite) then she shouts CHAIJIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIII
then chaiji , buaji , kewal ,all run down n evry one got shocked to and alll run imeditally n they reached some place..................
kranti goes to respition and asked yeha se ph yaha tha rajveer lal ,rajverr lal kha hain , lady is busy taking on ph KRANTI shouts:
K: SHOUTS i ask u some thing
LADY : aap ka kya rista hain patience se (YES THEY ALL REACHED TO HOSPITAL RAJ MET WITH AN ACCIDENT N BADLY INJURED)
K: main KRANTI RAJVEER LAL aur WOH MERE PATI HAIN.
L: he is in OT opration cal raha hain.
secen cut to all running toward OT every on eis standing out side the OT KRANRTI ki haalat bahut butri hain she is standing with wall ,us ke baal bikhre huye hain , akho se aanso ruk nahi rahe hain ,she is holding her MANGALSUTRA very tightly and remembing all the words of raj "that one day u will come to know the importance of these things" and crying crying crying crying 😭 , she thought dat is all her mistake jo raj ke saath yeh sab huya. then suddlenly she relise on ehand on her shoulder she turn and see nirmal .she is crying badly , nrmal console her, kranti told her it coz of her raj is in dat state, then nirmal tell her some thing (nirmal gyaan)
N: kranti kuch nahi hoga jeja ji ko sab teek hojaye ga rab par barosa rah.
K: yeh sab sab meri waja se uhya hain didi , meri waja se rajveer ki yeh haalat ho gai hain, sab meri galti hain.
N: kisi ki koi galti nahi hain. kranti main jo kahe ja rahi hu use diya de suna , samajna , tuje patha hain yeh jo pati patni ka ristha hota hain na woh bhut hi nazuk hota hain, bilkul ek kache dhage ki tarha.is risthe ki bunyaaad sirf aur sirf viswas aur pyar hona chaiye.
tehn kranti turn again.and nirmail cont speaking
N:kranti main maanti hu ki raj ne tume bauth dukh deye hain, bauth paresaan kiya hain, jane anjane main bathut choot phunchaayi hain, aur jin haal main tumari sadhi huyi aur usne jo kuch bhi tumare saath kiya use maaf karna tumhare liye aasan nahi hoga, lekin aaj jo raaj hospital n=main hain na woh!! woh pahle wala raj nahi hain woh bilkul badal chuka hain, woh aapne galti ki bahut saza bukat chuka hain , jo galtiusne nahi ki us ki bi ( then N TOLD HER ALL THE TABLEA FISCO)
kahte hain payar rab ki deen hoti hain, to jo ristha usne khud jorha hain tum use baag nahi sakti,use tum to kya kudh bagwaan bhi nahi torh sakta,
jo bit gaya wol kal tha jo ane wall hain woh bhi kal hain kranti abt yeh tumhare upar hain ki tum kya chunti ho beetye huye kal ki karvi yaado ko jaha sirf dard hain, takleef, hain ya sunahar kaal ko jaha ghar, hain kushya hain, vishwaash hain, saath hain aur sanse upar pyaar hain,, rajverr tum se baut pyaar karta hain ,itna payar tumhye aaj tak kisine nahi kiya hain aur naa hi kar sak ta hain. aur tum bhi naa.
then kranti turn back and hug her and keep on crying
then nrimal said KUSH RAHNA BAGWAAN TUME HAR KUSHE DE......................
and then OT lights goes off doctors come out of the Ot and raj got sifted to room every body is standing around his bed krinti is still cring holding her magalsutra and her evry single breath is praying to god
then suddley raj open his eyes and strgiht see KRANTI he saw she is crying, holding her magalsutra tighly,, and giving thank to god, raj give a sintusti wali smile while seeing krinti as if he got some thing very precious, every body meet RAj .....
doctor come to exmine raj and said u all ned to take care of him his condition is not good as if now and leave ......
din betate gay............
AUR EK DIN..............................................
CONT LATER ...........
BAS MAIN THAK GAYI MY FINGERS IS PAINING ALOT,, AUR THORA SOCHNE BHI TO DO YAAR AUR.........
THAND RAKHO SABAR KARO , KUCH SESPENCE BHI TO RAHE DO
THERE ARE LOTS MORE THINGS COMMING UP ......
ACTUALLY AUR BHI SECEN HAIN ACTUALLY WOH SECEN IS SE PAHLE THA BT KOI NAHI BAAT MAIN LIK DO GI
guys plz tell me ur true comments and suggestionsand feel free to say what ever u want to say as is its my first try if i made a mistake then plz forgive me
and tell me how u like its and u want me to cont or not
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Posted: 16 years ago
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itna bura lika hain kya 8 views no replys.
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Posted: 16 years ago
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nicely written. I want somethig like this to happen with Raj while doing some social service or Krantikari activites
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Originally posted by: coolpurvi

nicely written. I want somethig like this to happen with Raj while doing some social service or Krantikari activites

thanks for ur comments purvi yeh to abhi adha hi lika hain
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Posted: 16 years ago
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lagta hain kisi ko pasand nahi aaya tabhi to sirf ek reply😭
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Posted: 16 years ago
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u hav written nicely bt d scene s very much similar to dose of ekta kapoor's as in dat times typical accidents can't happn due 2 less no of cars evn i don't think OT'S were dere .............................actually d scene luks lik d one happnd in "KUTUKB" bt really nice effort nd gud dialogs yaar............"WELL DONE"
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Areh ro math meri.. pari...
It seems thumari kanhi me twist aa gayee....
Raj ko nahi.. balki Kranti accident huwa he na....
Good job Pari..
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Originally posted by: akashruti12

u hav written nicely bt d scene s very much similar to dose of ekta kapoor's as in dat times typical accidents can't happn due 2 less no of cars evn i don't think OT'S were dere .............................actually d scene luks lik d one happnd in "KUTUKB" bt really nice effort nd gud dialogs yaar............"WELL DONE"



cant say so. OTs were threre. I saw this in one old Bangla film "Saptapadi" (it was also based on 1940's era). Something like this happens in the last part of the film.. heroine gets injured becasue of bombardment while saving villagers near Burma border or something cant recall during world war II. They hero says Im her husband n signs the paper
Edited by coolpurvi - 16 years ago
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Posted: 16 years ago
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i really like this pari👏...................i have a feeling that something like this will be shown in MRD..............kranti needs a jhatka to realize her true feelings for Raj..............so a raj on death bed.................great and if raj is on death bed cos he was doing some krantikari work than sohne pe sohaga😊
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Posted: 16 years ago
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@shurti ya its quite simmiler to kutab serial bt jesa ki mane kah ki abhi kaha ni main tusit baki hain accident kese huya woh to batana aki hain naa

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