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oh_nakhrewaali thumbnail
Posted: 2 years ago

Mubarak ho on getting a segment🤣

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Dialogue Dynamos

Posted: 2 years ago

Segment #9

(tw: suicidal thoughts)


The streets of Kolkata never failed to amaze Samarth. Even now, in the middle of the night, the road was absolutely bustling with people, the lights too bright, the sounds too loud.


Here on the terrace of his building, sitting on the high ledge with his feet dangling in the cool air, Samarth felt his mind at peace. He could clearly see now. How everyone had a purpose. Somewhere to go, someone to meet.


A use to their lives.


Why couldn't Samarth ever be useful? Why couldn't he ever do anything right?


His Gramps would probably be ashamed.


Sam's grandfather and Abhay's grandfather had been childhood besties. When he was little, Sam would often meet up with Abhay in the park because of their grandfathers' shared love of morning walks. While the two of them would skip ahead and indulge in childish contests, their two grandpas would lazily trudge behind them, engaged in merry conversation. Sometimes, when Abhay was too busy trying to collect more leaves than him, Sam would sneakily try to listen to the chats, find out what they were discussing that made them laugh so heartily. He craved for a friendship like that.


As he tore off some leaves from his own pile to make sure Abhay stayed undefeated, he hoped that this would be an everlasting friendship too, something he could treasure all his life.


Of course, that did not happen. With his dad's transfer, Sam and his mom shifted to Dehradun and stayed there for years, until his dad passed away in an accident and his mom decided she couldn't live there anymore. When they returned, Sam was fourteen, his mom was clinically depressed and his Gramps was dying.


Abhay's grandfather helped out a lot. He appointed a nurse for Sam's mother and got his gramps admitted to the best cancer hospital in the city. But of course, Sam wasn't a little kid anymore. As the man of the family, he felt obliged to chip in. And since Abhinav nanu wouldn't accept money under any circumstances, Sam decided to work as a chaffeur for the Mehtas as a way of repayment. It was very little, he knew, but it was better than nothing.


Abhay had changed so much, though. Sam didn't really remember a lot from his childhood, but he did remember the sweet kid who would roll around with him in the muddy park and giggle when he got the bigger stain in his shirt.


Gone was that simple, silly boy. Abhay Mehta was now a passionate young man who wanted all the best things in life. The best car, the best clothes, the best shoes. The true heir of Mehta Enterprises, which was a booming business now.


Sam wasn't jealous. After all, Abhay deserved it. He was intelligent, hardworking and driven. If anything, Sam admired him... wanted to be someone like him. Whenever he went to visit his Gramps in the hospital, he wondered if his Gramps would be prouder to have a grandson like Abhay instead. Someone who could achieve all the goals in life, and do it with style and perfection.


However, working as his chaffeur, Sam watched from a distance as Abhay went from confident to overconfident, from self-assured to proud, and from deserving to entitled.


Sam still admired him, though. To him, Abhay was almost like an idol, someone whose presence could never be tainted.


Or maybe he was too busy admiring him to notice how tainted he already was.


Looking back now, it was his own rose-coloured glasses that prevented him from exposing Abhay's misdeeds to Veronica. Somehow, he had convinced himself that Abhay was the perfect partner for Veronica — no one could possibly be better.


It was easier to stop thinking about her if he believed she was happy.


Coward.


Even when she did find out about the cheating, Sam was relieved, in a way — that he had not been the one to bring that utter devastation to her face.


Coward.


He couldn't even tell Abhinav nanu about it, even though he wanted to. He couldn't imagine disappointing him that way.


(He definitely didn't spend days wondering if Abhinav nanu would even believe him over his own grandson. Nope.)


Coward.


He'd only managed to tell Mrs Mehta about it, with a lowered face and a hushed voice — as if he'd been the one found cheating. Mrs Mehta, standing stiff and expressionless, had thanked him for being so reliable and assured him that the matter would be taken of.


Pathetic.


All his life, Sam had just wanted to be valued by someone else — to have someone who would look at him and say, "I'm so glad to have you in my life". But then his dad died, his mom became a shell of the person she used to be, and now his Gramps was so far gone too.


In the past few months, spending time with Veronica had almost been a balm for his own heart. Each smile that he'd manged to coax out of her had felt magical, like a giant bag of sand being lifted from within himself. Maybe, he'd thought... just maybe, he could be a good enough friend for her and prove his worth as a person. Their friendship had been blooming, slow but subtle, and Sam had let himself hope.


Stupid, stupid, stupid.


"Trusting you was the worst mistake I ever did, Samarth. You just made a mockery out of my entire existence... and I bet you enjoyed every moment of it, didn't you?"


Stupid. Disgusting.


Looking at all the people down there, pushing each other to get to their destinations, Sam realised, with a cool detached certainty, that his life would never be like theirs. It would never matter as much.


Useless.


In that moment, he made a decision. There was something he needed to do.



~~~~


This was not as well written as I'd like it to be :( I'm sorry about that 🥺

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Posted: 2 years ago

Aah....kill me already😭😭😭😭 this was beautiful, so beautiful 😭😭😭😭

I had actually thought that A and S are friends who drifted apart to the extent that A treats him like a stranger🙈

Finally we know how the families are related.

So is he still a chauffeur or now working somewhere else, like what did you have in mind?

Edited by oh_nakhrewaali - 2 years ago
Bee222 thumbnail

Dialogue Dynamos

Posted: 2 years ago

Originally posted by: oh_nakhrewaali

Aah....kill me already😭😭😭😭 this was beautiful, so beautiful 😭😭😭😭


Hayee... Aisa reaction mil jaye to aur kya hi chahiye 😭❤️


Thank you for this bcz I was feeling kinda unconfident about this piece 😅

Bee222 thumbnail

Dialogue Dynamos

Posted: 2 years ago

Whether he is still working there, I'm not really sure. In my mind, it mostly depends on Abhinav nanu, since he's the only one in that family Sam has a bond with. As long as he's there, Sam might continue working (whether he's still alive or not is also not clarified)


But he might also have left after Abhay sent back the test reports, since that was sent through him. I feel like that might've been Sam's last straw, ki "iske baad I can't work at this place anymore".

Edited by Bee222 - 2 years ago
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Narrative Ninjas

Posted: 2 years ago

Originally posted by: Bee222

Segment #9


This was not as well written as I'd like it to be :( I'm sorry about that 🥺

Are you kidding? This was gorgeous! Why are you people like this?


So so glad we got Sam's PoV. You really got into his head with this one, didn't you? It's plain as mud why he feels so obligated to Abhay's family. And his yearning to be useful to someone 😭. Just rip my heart in shreds and stomp on it, will you? 😭


This part especially struck me deepest -


Even when she did find out about the cheating, Sam was relieved, in a way — that he had not been the one to bring that utter devastation to her face.

Coward.


There's that little tiny glimmer of selfishness and self-protection that momentarily overtakes his immense feelings of love & protection for Veronica. With this one line, you managed to give Sam another dimension that we hadn't yet seen. He is self-sacrificing and loyal to a fault, yes but he does have some self-preservation instincts (which I'm happy about) & hopefully that will serve him well if the story indeed does move ahead with him.


That last line sounds ominous and it better not be what the TW was about 🤢.




Q: Now are we back in present, linear time? Just confirming.


Also, did someone put Sam through college? Or did he do that himself? QD hasn't mentioned what he graduated as? Could he have gotten a job in that field?

Edited by LizzieBennet - 2 years ago
oh_nakhrewaali thumbnail
Posted: 2 years ago

Originally posted by: Bee222

Whether he is still working there, I'm not really sure. In my mind, it mostly depends on Abhinav nanu, since he's the only one in that family Sam has a bond with. As long as he's there, Sam might continue working (whether he's still alive or not is also not clarified)


But he might also have left after Abhay sent back the test reports, since that was sent through him. I feel like that might've been Sam's last straw, ki "iske baad I can't work at this place anymore".

Ig qd and/or shiri can figure it out.

Abhinav is alive though, in your post you mentioned about S wanting to tell him but couldn't.

Also, no more characters in this story whose names start with A and S🤣

LizzieBennet thumbnail

Narrative Ninjas

Posted: 2 years ago

Also, here's a suggestion to all the contributors...


Maybe each time you post your segments, you can follow it up by quoting my posts on the sequence of events and the timeline and add on to it with the salient points in your segment for ease of reference for all authors? So they don't have to go back and re-read to remember all the significant happenings from the previous segments?

Each author quotes the previous author's timeline/event posts & updates it with their own


And WD can update it on the first page if need be.

Idk if this will help

Edited by LizzieBennet - 2 years ago
Bee222 thumbnail

Dialogue Dynamos

Posted: 2 years ago

Originally posted by: LizzieBennet

Are you kidding? This was gorgeous! Why are you people like this?


So so glad we got Sam's PoV. You really got into his head with this one, didn't you? It's plain as mud why he feels so obligated to Abhay's family. And his yearning to be useful to someone 😭. Just rip my heart in shreds and stomp on it, will you? 😭


This part especially struck me deepest -


Even when she did find out about the cheating, Sam was relieved, in a way — that he had not been the one to bring that utter devastation to her face.

Coward.


There's that little tiny glimmer of selfishness and self-protection that momentarily overtakes his immense feelings of love & protection for Veronica. With this one line, you managed to give Sam another dimension that we hadn't yet seen. He is self-sacrificing and loyal to a fault, yes but he does have some self-preservation instincts (which I'm happy about) & hopefully that will serve him well if the story indeed does move ahead with him.


That last line sounds ominous and it better not be what the TW was about 🤢.




Q: Now are we back in present, linear time? Just confirming.


Also, did someone put Sam through college? Or did he do that himself? QD hasn't mentioned what he graduated as? Could he have gotten a job in that field?

Lizzieeee 🤧 why you make me cry like this 😭


Thank you so much for your words 🥺❤️❤️ I'm glad you loved it


This whole part @pink is everything I tried to convey there and you just explained it so well 😭❤️


I gave tw coz he was feeling that way, hope Simi twists it around coz I really need Sam to be alive 😭


Idk, I'm still confused about the timelines! 👀 I just know that this is a continuation after the last 2 segments where Veronica finds out about Sam's feelings and that he hid the truth. Last part was about Vero's feelings post that confrontation, and this one is about Sam's feelings post that confrontation 😅

Okay I just checked again and with segments #1 and #7 tying up like that, this is technically present time. Finally! 🥳


Sam was Abhay's batchmate right? So he was in Microbio, but we don't know if he managed to graduate. Abhay was topper so he obviously did, and Nica and Saikat work at TCS but about Sam we don't know.

Bee222 thumbnail

Dialogue Dynamos

Posted: 2 years ago

Originally posted by: oh_nakhrewaali

Ig qd and/or shiri can figure it out.

Abhinav is alive though, in your post you mentioned about S wanting to tell him but couldn't.

Also, no more characters in this story whose names start with A and S🤣

Exactly, mera kaam maine kar diya, kuch loose ends tie up karke kuch aur chod diya 🤣


Yes but that was presumably when he found out about the cheating na. Guy cheated for 2 yrs, uske 6 months and divorce bhi hogaya.. Abhinav nanu could've passed away during that period, he's old after all


You should just be grateful I didn't go with my first name which was Sanket nanu 🤣🤣

This one's easy, Abhay ka nanu Abhinav 😆

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