Random meows in my head (drabbles only) 8th up pg26 15/2/2022 - Page 22

Originally posted by: EuphoricDamsel.

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Okay so first of I am ALL for a Raavi memory loss. It is such an intriguing story prompt because of the intensity it brings along. A pining Shiva in agony, a confused Raavi and a grieving family over Shiva's hurt because let's face it Raavi will always be last priority. Even Kanta Kaki comes prior to her in Kandya house. A memory loss story line gives Shiva the much needed time to ponder over his actions and finally redeem himself.

Which is why I was super excited in the A/N itself. Like Yoohoooooo excited.

The first paragraph itself took my heart away. Worded so beautifully. I have always struggled with beginnings yk? Like what should I write in the very first line / paragraph that would grasp my reader's attention and make them drown. This was a good example of it. It got me hooked.

The way he answered Raavi's name going way back up until the one her birth parents gave her made me see how anxious he was in this scene. So beautifully hidden but right in the FRONT. Makes sense?

The momentary relief he felt even though she was in the hospital speaks volumes.

The 'He had found his Raavi' marks an end to his longing and his dread takes a backseat. It was brilliant to oscillate between these two emotions. Couldn't have asked for a better pouring out of the heart.

And then there's our Dobi still trying to look pretty in a hospital gown, something you'd not expect right? But she's right there. Raavi noticing the pain in his eyes after hearing the echo was something very overwhelming. Truly 'Dil Ka Rishta' if you ask me. I don't know how much truth this holds or if it is even possible but reading about 'The mind forgets while the heart remembers the warmth' has me in awe. I mean always. I do not have an iota of idea if its true because never in my life I have experienced this kind of warmth for myself, but if it is true then its something intricately pure.

Her subconsciousness guiding her moves and words along the way while she ranted and he heard with no care in the world about who stood around them was such a SHIVI thing. I didn't know it could happen so soon but glad it did. The last line had me going mad though...WHO ENDS ON A CLIFFY AND THEN HYPES IT UP FOR MY POOR HEART??!

WHO?

I'LL TELL YOU : SATHYAMEVJAYATHEEE.

She tormenting me now. *Heartbreak has entered the chat*

Update ka wait kr rhi hu main. Gimme a long, agonising, overwhelming piece okieee?!❤️

Ritu🤗! You know? Everyone has such a different khayali pulao for this trope? I wasn't expecting that until the comments started coming in, really...😳 I agree about the potential of this trope and your other points, but personally, I don't feel like the family on the show would be able to grieve even their own son's loss. They're all so insensitive, so NOT empathetic, you know? I can imagine Suman saying something along the lines of bala tali very easily. So I'm really thinking something more along the lines of Raavi being unbiased about her decisions regarding the family. Doing only what is right, and doing just enough. 👍🏼

I'm glad you were hooked to it right from the start! The name thing was supposed to be all about an 'it's okay she's not mine to the world, but please let her be safe' thing. Also, super glad you feel that the emotions were all in the right place! I was pretty confused and wondered if I should just rewrite the second half completely for a while there before I decided to just post.

Now, coming to Raavi! Losing memories doesn't mean you've lost YOU. You're just going to be very unsure and second guess yourself probably, and that overpowers the sense of YOU and muscle memory. Because there are no facts to back anything up. I feel like the Dil ka Rishta thing is probably true, you know? Post NEET, when I was falling into depression slowly and was like super super stressed? I don't remember things from back then. Crazy things that my parents swear I did, but I can't remember even traces of them happening. Not even echoes of them. But I remember things my parents did, my best friend said. Stress induced amnesia much? Probably. But Dil Ka Rishta kind of pulls through all of that and sticks to you, you know😆? The romantic kind of it, though? I'd love to find out one day as well!

Again, losing your memory doesn't mean you've lost YOU. The behavior you've developed is going to still stay intact, probably. Even medically speaking. So Shivi fighting, which is basically muscle memory for them, was something I didn't really think twice about writing. 🤪

You want something angsty? This part itself was supposed to be much more angsty, but I reigned it in to give a comic element to Raavi's POV of things. But maybe the next part, then! 😆

HAYYEEE YEH KYA 😲

MUJHE DUSRA PART ABHI CHAHIYEE 🤔

THIS IS SO WELL WRITTEN JAAN

AND SORRY FOR THE LATE COMMENT, HAVE BEEN GOING CRAZY WITH EXAM KA STRESS

THANK YOU FOR THE TAGG

Originally posted by: Pottermeow

Vandana❤️! Glad you loved it! Shiva will suffer, but i think it's not in the way you think he will😆. So I'll look forward to seeing what you think of it whenever I write and put it up😳.

As for Dr Abhishek, he will not be a third angle character, but being one of the only people Raavi now knows, he might make an appearance or two. Or maybe not. I guess you'll just have to wait until I make my mind up about it. 🤣

As long as Shiva suffers, I'm okay. But I will offer a more definite opinion once the update has been done and read. 😎

I don't want Dr. Abhishek to be a third angle, but I want Shiva to think that. Does that make sense?! 😆

Bas, Raavi should get all her khushiyaan. ❤️

Waiting for the next one eagerly!!

Raavi's memory would mean they get to start over, without any previous history or inhibitions. It is like how Raavi had once asked him, "Hum ajnabee ban jaate hai", as a way of starting afresh. So it is a very interesting take on their relationship.
Of course Shiva will be hurt in the course of it, but he'll get through!

Lovely update overall
Your writing never ceases to amaze me! ❤️

Originally posted by: Ocean_breeze

Sathya.. First of all taking time outta your schedule and updating is highly appreciable❤️

What you wrote is something many here wanted to see... And you my dear as always did a splendid and marvellous job at storytelling.🤗

Raavi remembering shiva when she doesnt remember anything and that too as villian of her story... Sad but thats what he has turned into. Shiva's worry for raavi..When raavi called him villian... The hope in shiva's eyes that she might have recognized him... Oohh... all of it was so painful...felt so baad for shiva💔Then I remembered shiva's doings.. So yeah.. Moving on🙈

I so wish raavi whenever she gains her memory back to prioritize herself over every nuisance around her. Its high time she focusses on herself.

I so wish shiva realizes his mistakes and repent hard... Now he should be the one to make raavi feel protected, loved and cared for. I hope to see him understanding where he went wrong and how miserable he and his family had made raavi. ts now his time to make himself worthy of raavi.

Btw.... Dr. Abhishek... Uhmm uhmm... Young doctor... Ohky we'll keep in mind😆

Neha🤗! It's that writing itch, you know😆? Also, I'm not one of those people who will stop everything else to finish the job at hand. I much prefer planning so that I can have everything on the track I wanted it to be....

It's one of the biggest compliments for any author I think, when someone says I almost forgot what that character did... So thank you for that😳! This Raavi will prioritise herself, and why not, right? Shiva has a huge learning curve to go through! I actually had a different idea that I wanted to write after the hospital kaand, but I don't think I'll do it anytime soon....

Pfft...🤪. Dr Abhishek was just me trying to show ITV how medicine is done normally. Although, who knows? 😉

Originally posted by: Suparna2210

Oh wow Sathya! I loved this! Although I do not like the memory loss trope.. but seeing ShiVi through your lens has always been amazing! I love the fact that even though Raavi lost her memory, she still dreams of him.. without knowing its him! I love how the POV shifted from Shiva's to Raavi's! I loved the glimpses of fiery Raavi and worried Shiva! Waiting egarly for part 2!!

Suparna🤗! I'm glad you loved it! A memory loss, although a cliche and often badly executed trope, does have potential, you know? It's like a reset button, but it comes with warning signs from the past and the constant fear of karma catching up.... Shivi's connection us simply too strong for Raavi to not even have the ehsaas of his presence in her subconscious, and Shiva's worry is practically a given at this point! He might try to force on a mask of hatred and apathy, but who is he kidding, really? 😆

Originally posted by: hapakalanoodles

HAYYEEE YEH KYA 😲

MUJHE DUSRA PART ABHI CHAHIYEE 🤔

THIS IS SO WELL WRITTEN JAAN

AND SORRY FOR THE LATE COMMENT, HAVE BEEN GOING CRAZY WITH EXAM KA STRESS

THANK YOU FOR THE TAGG

Noodles🤗! Main tho khud exams ki vajah se gaayab ho gayi thi! Glad you loved it though! And hopefully, updates will be coming up front and at top speed now! ❤️😆

Originally posted by: nolee3097

Raavi's memory would mean they get to start over, without any previous history or inhibitions. It is like how Raavi had once asked him, "Hum ajnabee ban jaate hai", as a way of starting afresh. So it is a very interesting take on their relationship.
Of course Shiva will be hurt in the course of it, but he'll get through!

Lovely update overall
Your writing never ceases to amaze me! ❤️

Thank you Namrata! Ajnabee tho yeh dono puri tarah se kabhi ban nahi paayenge, but this is the closest they'll get to it, atleast.... 😆