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Posted: 3 years ago

Originally posted by: Paru95

Sathya...this was soooo beautiful🤗

I loved how Shiva stood up for Raavi😳 and didnt care to listen the Bhabhimaaaa😆

I hope this happens in the show tooo

Beautifully written dear👍🏼

Loved it❤️

Glad you loved it Paru Akka❤️! Someday, I hope this happens on the show as well! 😒

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Posted: 3 years ago

Originally posted by: Suparna2210

I’m so over the place on this series! I read the one on page 22 and the one of upcoming dhoka track and I loved it! Your every update is a masterpiece! I’lll check out the whole thing again and comment! Do tag me on updates! Loving it!💗

Happy new year!🥳

Suparna! You didn't know about this thread? I created it solely for the purpose of being able to write atleast drabbles on ideas that i couldn't make full length OS/TS' out of... Glad to know that you loved the little you've read of it! Will look forward to your reviews on them...

PS I'm just going to link my index here for you so that you can see if there's anything else you might be interested in reading, but have missed.

https://www.indiaforums.com/forum/pandya-store/5250199/meowwws-index-of-kaandya-land-main-apna-kaands

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Posted: 3 years ago

Originally posted by: blissfulcanyon

I'm just so late in reading everything these daysss 😭

Ahhh, just read the new year's piece and what can I say? I never wanted it to end.😒

Acche moment pe rok diya o saathiii reyyy 😆

I am content with the fact that they talked it all out though - much needed!!!

And Raavi got her kiss

I'm so glad Shiva understood her hurt and decided to go after her, and in the process, he also ignored Dhara which gave me IMMENSEEEEEE joy 😆


And I absolutely loved the first bit! It did not sit well with me how Dhara was acting all doctorly when poor Raavi was hurt. A check-up was needed, irrespective of what your personal diagnosis is.

Caring, softie Shiva always steals my heart, you know that very well ❤️

Him scolding her with all the haq in the world has me awww-ing like a mad woman


Looooved it! Next time, aur lamba chahiye!!!🤪


(And I know I still have to read your FF, main nahi bhooli!🤗)

Shiny🤗! Having a busy time these days? Which reminds me that i have no idea what you do! I'm guessing you have a job, so you tell me if that was a decent guess... ❤️

It was short because I got too lazy to write, really, that was it. Plus, it was a decent place to stop! Shivi ignoring Dhara is always the BEST!!! 🤣

Also, ITV and my annoyance with the ignorance of medical check ups unless someone is behosh, go way back😈! I'll make sure that the next one is longer.... which will happen inevitably since that one's supposed to have smut in it... 😆

PS Iss okay😳! Read the FF whenever toy have the time!

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Posted: 3 years ago

Originally posted by: Pottermeow

Shiny🤗! Having a busy time these days? Which reminds me that i have no idea what you do! I'm guessing you have a job, so you tell me if that was a decent guess... ❤️

It was short because I got too lazy to write, really, that was it. Plus, it was a decent place to stop! Shivi ignoring Dhara is always the BEST!!! 🤣

Also, ITV and my annoyance with the ignorance of medical check ups unless someone is behosh, go way back😈! I'll make sure that the next one is longer.... which will happen inevitably since that one's supposed to have smut in it... 😆

PS Iss okay😳! Read the FF whenever toy have the time!


Shiny?!😲 Yeh kya bol diya 😭


hehehe I guess you could say busy, but I'm also lazy, such a bad habit but kya karun 🤪

But I'm trying to get back on my reading game! Catching up slowly and steadily.😛

Yes, you're correct, I do have a job 😆 I work at a lab.


Omggg, did you mention smut? 😳

That'll always have me turning into the Flash 🤣

Intezaaaaar karungi

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Posted: 3 years ago

Originally posted by: blissfulcanyon


Shiny?!😲 Yeh kya bol diya 😭


hehehe I guess you could say busy, but I'm also lazy, such a bad habit but kya karun 🤪

But I'm trying to get back on my reading game! Catching up slowly and steadily.😛

Yes, you're correct, I do have a job 😆 I work at a lab.


Omggg, did you mention smut? 😳

That'll always have me turning into the Flash 🤣

Intezaaaaar karungi

It was a typo, Shyna!!!!!! Keeps happening if I don't double check because I use my phone to use IF...

A lab? Like a science and related lab, or a investigations for medical practices kind of lab? I'm doing my MBBS, so I'm just being curious! 😆

Intezaar karo, it's gonna take a bit of time, but it'll be here. I have 4 ideas going on in my head right now.

1 smut, 2 angst, 1 fluff. 😳

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Posted: 3 years ago

Originally posted by: Pottermeow

It was a typo, Shyna!!!!!! Keeps happening if I don't double check because I use my phone to use IF...

A lab? Like a science and related lab, or a investigations for medical practices kind of lab? I'm doing my MBBS, so I'm just being curious! 😆

Intezaar karo, it's gonna take a bit of time, but it'll be here. I have 4 ideas going on in my head right now.

1 smut, 2 angst, 1 fluff. 😳


Chal tere sau typos maaf 🤪

Science-related lab, no medical stuff 😆


Ohhhh, interesting, dekho pehle smut post karna okay 🤣

Then fluff, then angst, because me is sensitive 😆

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Posted: 3 years ago

But you promised.... Raavi deserved an apology from shiva for what he did... Ancient barter system... Huh bada aya tha😆Raavi's disappointment was depicted sooo well😭

Good that she she reminded him of promises and more good shiva realising his mistakes and apologising🤗

Macharr maan😆😆cutteeessssyyyy it wass

Shiva's attraction for raavi... Chori pakdi gayii🤣

To let Sacrifices or not... Shivi as laxman and urmila would have been sooo perfect😭

The angst. 💔

Atleast shiva got to hear Raavi' views

And that 14 years reference 👏👏

Will be coming back later again😆

Gottaa goo🤗

Edited by Ocean_breeze - 3 years ago
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Posted: 3 years ago

Because the lost possibility of Raavi's memory loss was way too tempting. And because Min wanted me to explore this. For you, Min! ❤️

Also, completely unedited!

Disclaimer: ~1.5k words. This is set after the hospital kaand, when Raavi has an accident and Shiva is in jail.

Medical facts- The kind of memory loss ITV normally gives us, where the complete identity is lost is called dissociative fugue, and yes, it's a rare yet real thing. Amnesia is usually just retrograde or anterograde, where only recent memories or everyday things are forgotten.

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A Chipkali and her Dark Knight.

He had been looking for her for three days now. Three. Add the two days he'd been languishing in jail to it, and she'd been missing for five days total now. Please just let her be safe, he prayed again. It had become a chant in his head. Behind the thoughts of which of her friends to call next, or should I check with her Papa's relatives or not, and 'Hey Bholenath, not another hospital please please please', this had become a chant in his mind. That she be safe. Because the thought of anything other than that made him shake in his sturdy Bata's, his knees having moments where they refused to keep him standing strong.

"Mr Shiva Pandya?", the receptionist called out to him, and he looked up from where he'd been staring at his dirty chappals against the clean, white marble of the hospital lobby. Hospital. Raavi. The lady was going through some papers, cross checking them with something on the computer screen in front of her. "Ji?", he called out, wanting to get this over with soon so that he could move on to the next place. He had to look for her. To find her.

"Naam kya kaha tha aapne?", she asked and he repeated himself. "Raavi. Raavi Shiva Pandya. Shaadi se pehle Raavi Narayan, aur usse bhi pehle Raavi Vyas", he answered, running a sweaty hand across his face, rubbing at his eyes and moving his unruly hair off of his forehead. "Hmm... ", she hummed, before nodding at him. "Please, haath sanitise kar lijiye", she requested, nodding towards the bottle of alcoholic hand rub placed on the table, and he did it, his brows furrowing in confusion at why she was asking him to do so.

She called someone else on the landline, having a quick conversation before placing the server down and looking straight at him. "Seedhe jaayenge tho elevator hoga", she said, pointing to the corridor to her right. "Third floor pe jaake Doctor Abishek ke cabin pe jaayiye. He will guide you from there".

What? Why? Every hospital he had visited so far had given him a clean no and sent him off, so why was he being told to meet a doctor? Unless Raavi was here. Here and hurt, maybe. He rapped his knuckles on the table, grabbing the woman's attention once more. She looked annoyed now, but he didn't care. He didn't. "Kyun doctor se milna hain? Matlab Raavi yahaan hain kya? Meri wife yahaan hain?", he asked her. The woman stayed quite, waiting for him to finish his panicked questions before responding in a calm voice again. "Yahaan Raavi naam ki ek patient admit hue hain, yes. Unke surname entry nahi hui hain, par unke Attending Doctor ne kahaan ki aapko unke paas bech de. Isse zyada information mere paas nahi hain, Mr Pandya," she said. He had simply nodded before walking away.

Two minutes later, he opened the translucent door to, who's room was it again? Right. Dr Abhishek. The man was young on first sight, definitely less than thirty, but the clarity in his eyes as he looked up from the bundle of papers on his table made Shiva's own twenty two seem much younger now. "Mr Pandya?", he asked, his eyes noting every move and voice low yet carrying well. "Ji", he answered, moving to sit in the visitor's chair across the table as the man gestured to it. The doctor fiddled with his phone for a moment before placing it on the table, then pointed at it. Shiva looked down to see a picture of a smiling girl in a hospital gown, some kind of bandaid on her forehead but otherwise seemingly well. A muffled voice reached through to him with questions, "Aap inhe jaante hain? Yeh aapki wife hain?", but Shiva paid no attention to anything.

He had found her. He had found his Raavi. His chipkali.

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Raavi sat up in her bed. Freshly showered, new hospital gown on. She had hated the green one from yesterday and had convinced the regular staff nurse to get her a blue one for today. She looked much more pretty in it, and less sick. Sweet Miss Latha!!! She grinned, pressing the buzzer for her Latha Di to come in. She needed to change the medical tape covering her stitches, and she needed her breakfast before she could have her tablets. The vitamin C still tasted weird to her though.

Only, after two minutes of impatient waiting in which she had tried to half heartedly towel her hair dry before giving up and settling into the chair by the window, in came not Latha di, but Dr Abhishek. With someone else. A man. He looked to be a little older than her from the way he carried himself. Loosely. Perhaps a little too loosely? He was tall, but not too tall. And lean despite the hard muscle she could sense lying beneath the loose, dirty clothes. He seemed tired, what with his bowed head and hunched shoulders, yet tense. And his hair was too long, covering his forehead and curling around his neck, hiding more of his face from her.

"Raavi?", Dr Abhishek called out to her, and from the look of it, not for the first time. "Ji Doctor?", she asked, before getting out of her chair and moving towards the bed. Wasn't the doctor's rounds usually after breakfast? And just WHO was that man? Dr Abhishek gestured towards the man, "Yeh Mr Shiva Pandya hain", he said as he moved forward towards her, taking his torch out of his pocket. Shiva Pandya. Shiva? She heard an echo of the name in her own head. Shiva!!! Kya kar raha hai tu?!! Raavi shook her head, ignoring the echoes in her head, and knowing the routine, she let the doctor examine her eyes, tongue and stitches. He asked her a few of the usual questions, headache, nausea, sleep, weakness, before moving away, letting Mr Pandya enter her field of vision once again. "You're healing well! Jald hi aapko yeh tape ki bhi zarurat nahi padegi, aur bas stitches ki dissolve hone ka intezaar karna padega".

She nodded half heartedly, before her eyes went back to the man, who's head was still bowed. Well, she was staring, wasn't she? Maybe the poor man was just uncomfortable, she realised. Just as she was about to tear her eyes away from him, he looked up, his eyes meeting hers, and the pain in them caught her off guard. Who was he?! What had happened in his life that his eyes held so much pain?

He clenched his eyes shut, then, his hands fisting at his sides. And there was something about the way his brows furrowed and the bright sunshine from outside hit him as the sun came out from behind the clouds. The bronzed skin, the echoes in her head, the too long hair and those biceps. "Mere kahaani ka villain!!!!", she screamed, getting up to kneel on the bed and point an accusing finger at him, her hands shaking in rage. And then the weirdest thing happened, because she was sure people normally had a different reaction to being called a villain. Hope. Hope lit up his eyes like a beacon, pulling her in to them.

"Raavi? Aap inhe jaante hain? Do you recognise him?", Dr Abhishek asked her. She peeled her eyes away from the greatest rival in her remembrance, turning towards the doctor. "Yeh?! Yeh bandar insaan haina doctor?! Yeh hi mere sapnon ka villain hain! Jiski vajah se main ek dragon se ek choti si, daraavni si chipkali ban jaati hoon! Aur jiski vajah se main uss tower ke andar kabhi jaa hi nahi paati! Aa jaata hain yeh jab main khidki tak pahunchti hoon! Knight in shining armour? My foot! Dark Knight hain yeh! Dark Knight!", she screamed, her finger shaking at him again. "Aur main tho iski story ki Joker banke rahunga!", she declared, sitting back on her legs and glaring at the amused look in his eyes as she tried to control her furious breaths.

Hearing no sound of support or encouragement from the good doctor, she looked towards him only to see him staring at her with wide eyes. Had she perhaps gone a bit overboard, she wondered, before shaking her head in a decisive no. The man deserved it for being the pain in her dreams that he had been ever since she'd come to this hospital, ever since she remembered. Dr Abhishek cleared his throat, and she saw a sudden vulnerability in his eyes, fear of something. She simply hummed to show that, yes, she was listening, not wanting to miss a single emotion that flitted across his face. "So, Mrs Raavi, meet Mr Shiva Pandya, your husband. Discharge ki formalities puri kare?"

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I know this is pretty open ended, but I have a second part planned that i'll write and put up if enough people are interested.

Lambe reviews would be much loved!

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Posted: 3 years ago

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Okay so first of I am ALL for a Raavi memory loss. It is such an intriguing story prompt because of the intensity it brings along. A pining Shiva in agony, a confused Raavi and a grieving family over Shiva's hurt because let's face it Raavi will always be last priority. Even Kanta Kaki comes prior to her in Kandya house. A memory loss story line gives Shiva the much needed time to ponder over his actions and finally redeem himself.

Which is why I was super excited in the A/N itself. Like Yoohoooooo excited.

The first paragraph itself took my heart away. Worded so beautifully. I have always struggled with beginnings yk? Like what should I write in the very first line / paragraph that would grasp my reader's attention and make them drown. This was a good example of it. It got me hooked.

The way he answered Raavi's name going way back up until the one her birth parents gave her made me see how anxious he was in this scene. So beautifully hidden but right in the FRONT. Makes sense?

The momentary relief he felt even though she was in the hospital speaks volumes.

The 'He had found his Raavi' marks an end to his longing and his dread takes a backseat. It was brilliant to oscillate between these two emotions. Couldn't have asked for a better pouring out of the heart.

And then there's our Dobi still trying to look pretty in a hospital gown, something you'd not expect right? But she's right there. Raavi noticing the pain in his eyes after hearing the echo was something very overwhelming. Truly 'Dil Ka Rishta' if you ask me. I don't know how much truth this holds or if it is even possible but reading about 'The mind forgets while the heart remembers the warmth' has me in awe. I mean always. I do not have an iota of idea if its true because never in my life I have experienced this kind of warmth for myself, but if it is true then its something intricately pure.

Her subconsciousness guiding her moves and words along the way while she ranted and he heard with no care in the world about who stood around them was such a SHIVI thing. I didn't know it could happen so soon but glad it did. The last line had me going mad though...WHO ENDS ON A CLIFFY AND THEN HYPES IT UP FOR MY POOR HEART??!

WHO?

I'LL TELL YOU : SATHYAMEVJAYATHEEE.

She tormenting me now. *Heartbreak has entered the chat*

Update ka wait kr rhi hu main. Gimme a long, agonising, overwhelming piece okieee?!❤️

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