ShiVi OS Series: Reimagining Them [Part3Page24 06/08/2021] - Page 6

Originally posted by: SlytherInMe.

Question:

Should I start from the kids scenes? or the first bike and mirchi wala scene?

I want to go in chronological order as much as possible hehe

Originally posted by: hedwig_potter

Since you want to go in chronological order (perfectly fine with me), so this idea can be used quite later,

but I want a different version of the scene when Shiva wipes her tears, instead of her saying that those tears are punishment of marrying him I want a more heartfelt moment where she expresses her vulnerability❤️

I love that idea

I also felt that the scene could have been so much better but the writers chose to have them fight once again

slow burn ka epitome bangaya hai ye toh 😆

Originally posted by: katheriene

Interesting idea😊

Excited to read them

thank you so much jaan 🤗

Originally posted by: Swathu

PhD in mathematics

You are a medico?

trying to be 😆

dekh the hai if it actually happens

Originally posted by: MeeraWrites

This is great!

Update soon...

updating soon! 😳

Gola:

“DEVVV!” He winced at the screech, his brother’s name sounding like a word of abuse. He was already irritated with the prospect of seeing his Maami and now this chipkali was going to annoy him further with her Dev jhaap. He couldn’t figure out what was annoying him more: the fact that she was Maami Ki Behen Ki Beti or that she paid special close attention to only Dev. Either way if she didn’t shut up soon, she would feel the worst wrath his 8-year-old mind could conjure up.

Dhara could see the evident anger on Shiva’s face and hurriedly warned him to behave. Normally he would have put his anger aside and listened to Dhara, someone he had come to love as his older sister but as soon as she had left, Raavi had once again turned her full attention towards Dev.

“Dev meri dress kaisi hai? Sundar hai na?” Shiva rolled his eyes in exasperation. Not only had she not even looked at him once but yet again, she only cared for Dev’s opinion. Why didn’t she insist on asking him? Why was it so important for her to hear it from Dev rather anyone else?

“Bahoth achi hai Raavi. Sundar dikh rahi hai tu.” As usual, Dev had complimented her and while Shiva begrudgingly agreed, his mouth told a different story.

“Aee Maami Ki Behen Ki Beti.” Finally, she had turned towards him and was now the sole heir of her attention. Shiva intended on maintaining the attention he was receiving and proceeded to insult her as always. He knew that it was the best technique to elicit a reaction that would solely be for him – just him. “Tu kabhi sundar nahi dikh sakti. Chichundar dikh rahi hai.”

“Tu chichundar. Main sundar hoon. Dev ne bhi bola mein sundar hoon.” She had yet again ruined the moment by taking Dev’s name, aggravating Shiva further. He had expected a full-blown banter from her, but she stuck to the topic of Dev as if her life depended on it. Chipkali had proven to be a perfect nickname for her.

“Ye Dev se kya puch rahi hai, ye toh hai hi aakal se bad dimaag aur ankho se andha. Tu toh chipkali ki beauty queen dikh rahi hai.” Dev glared at Shiva for insulting him, but Shiva had his entire focus directed towards Raavi. She huffed in annoyance at his comparison of her to chipaklis but decided to irritate him in another way.

“Tujhe main beautiful dikh thi hoon Shiva?” Raavi blinked her eyes at him seductively, a trick she had seen Anita Di use on Gaumbi multiple times. Although Anita Di usually looked like she was having a seizure while doing it, Raavi was confident that she had mastered the method.

“Main…woh…kya…chup kar gadheri” Shiva was entranced by her 8-year-old impression of sexiness. Her eyes were fluttering at the speed of his mother’s chappal flying but he wanted her to keep going.

“Shiva agar tujhe main itni pasand hoon toh bata deta. Itna natak karne ki koi zaroorat nahi thi.” Shiva snapped out his daze at Raavi’s words and realized that he had been rendered speechless by Maami Ki Behen Ki Beti.

“Aee chipkali. Tujhe toh meri jutti bhi na pasand kare.” He snatched the gole ka sherbet from her hand and poured it all over the dress. Since she hadn’t cared for his opinion on her dress, he couldn’t care less what happened to it. “Ab sundar lag rahi hai”

Raavi stared back at him in shock and started crying at his brashness. He felt a little bad but remembered that she was his enemy’s relative and didn’t deserve his concern. Dev began to console her and the two were emersed in each other’s company once again. Irritated by the lack of attention, he refused to apologize and ran inside to face the real source of his anger.

He snatched as many cashews as he could from his Maami’s bowl completely aware that each cashew he picked up burned her cheap soul. “Kyu hua Maami? Itni garmi ho rahi badang main toh gole ka sherbet dal doon tere upar?” Maami moved back in fright, hiding her hands behind her back as well.

“Aee Shiva. Tu kaisi bata kartha hai, tu toh mera favorite banja hai na.” Shiva chuckled at her fear and was about to retort back when his chipkali came inside wailing her lungs out.

“Maasi dekho Shiva ne meri dress kharab kar di.” Raavi cried in her Maasi’s arms and everyone looked at Shiva in agitation.

“Shiva ye kya kiya tune. Maine bola tha na ke shararat maat karna” Dhara scolded him.

“Mujhe iski dress bilkul pasand nahi ayi. Chichundar dikh rahi thi. Iski bhalaye ke liye kharab kar diya maine. Aee Chipkali woh blue dress jo tu kal store pehen ke ayi thi brown sandals, silver bracelets, aur hair clips ke saath, woh pehenke aa. Us main kaam chipkali lag rahi thi.”

Everyone stared at him in awe. They were completely shocked that he had remembered the tiniest details about her. Raavi had stopped crying and had looked up at Shiva, wondering why he knew her exact outfit. Shiva rubbed his head in embarrassment and grabbed another glass of gole ke sherbet to throw on Raavi as a diversion. She shrieked at his advances and ran out the door with him following behind, as always.

Hi jaans 🤗

Here's the first installment for my OS series.

Thank you so much for encouraging me 😳 especially Bhavs di for reading it over for me!

Hopefully I met expectations otherwise I expect the tamatars 😆

If possible, please do leave feedback and your thoughts so I can improve for the next one 😳

Love you all 🤗

Mrs. Dhillon 🤣

I haven’t seen this scene but it’s written very beautifully meri tharki behena. Bechara Shiva just wants some attention, but this gadheri is busy with Dev 🤣

This is really very nice👍🏼

He remembered even the accessories... Aww

Loved it❤️

Waiting for the next one.. jaldi update dedo darling🤗

By the way, your medical will get completed asaani se... Don't worry😊

N I loved this one.cute n shows how shiva always needed ravi's attention.