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Ross11

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Posted: 6 years ago

#31

Originally posted by: Dr.Don
Good Job Ross ! 👏

I do not think there are many boys in the forum who write stories.

Write more dude !

Regards

Thank you Dr. Don.

Apart from You and me, aur boys hai hi kaun yahaan forum pe.😆 jo karna hai hum ko hi karna hai. 😆

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Ross11

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Posted: 6 years ago

#32

Originally posted by: ruchi3179
Its so cute story Ross.Very nicely written

Thank you so much Ruchi, am glad you enjoyed it.

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Ross11

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Posted: 6 years ago

#33

Originally posted by: SixteenAgain
Hi Ross,

I really enjoyed this one! It has such a humourous twist to it. I couldn't stop laughing. It in fact provided bedtime story material for me ;) and my daughter loved it too.

The plot and flow both just perfect. Would love to read more from you.

Hi May,

Frankly, I was waiting to see your comment on this story as I know you have voted for this in the contest.

As it was my first attempt, I didn't know the flow in particular worked or not, I wanted to reveal everything at the end and your comment made my day for calling it a twist. 😳

Thanks for sharing that it served as bedtime story material, it's motivating. 😃

Edit:

Forgot to add why didn't you post your stories yet? You have made an index toh you can add to it na.

Edited by Ross11 - 6 years ago

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Ross11

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Posted: 6 years ago

#34

Originally posted by: truptishree
Hi Ross
See I am commenting here.
I loved your OS. It was very good for first attempt.
You told me to write. Let's see I am not that good but if I write something you will be the first one to read that. I can't write stories I write poems that too once in a while.
Once again good work and keep writing.

Hey Trupti,

Tumne toh seriously idhar bhi post kar diya 😆... Thanks for your kind words.

Yeah, I will definitely read your work, do write poems.

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Ross11

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Posted: 6 years ago

#35

Originally posted by: Sakshi607
Hi Ross,
Superbly hilarious OS. A very nice one for first attempt. Sameer apne hi jaal mein phas gaya. A nice dastan it is. Keep writing.

Thank you Sakshi for your kind words. Am glad that you enjoyed it, hope you will be reviewing my other works in this category too.

Waise aajkal TP epi ke karan update dene mein woh maza na raha toh yeh try karke dekhte hain. 😆

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Ross11

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Posted: 6 years ago

#36

Originally posted by: mehraan
Hahahah...Read in tis contest n was thinking kiska khurafati dimag hai ye 😆...Really surprising wen the revelation was out...cos Hamare Ross bhaisaab likh sakte hai..ye pata nahi tha!!!..Its humorous n playful...n cud absolutely visualize with the characters!!..Hope to c u writing more n entertain us with ur subtle n witty ones...Lovely!!

Thank you so much Meher. Yeh hamare Sameer babu ka khurafati dimaag hai you know 😆

Thanks for the kind words, it means a lot. 😳

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Ross11

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Posted: 6 years ago

#37

Originally posted by: Samaina_1990
Wow Ross! I really loved this piece! Such a hatke thinking!
I was reminded of a comedy show on TV long back- by Jaspal Bhatti...there also the girl tells her groom that their families have agreed so easily..there's no spice in their story! And she proposes to have a runaway marriage before the actual one! 🤣
Sameer bichare ki to band baj gayi...pata nahi hai kya use abhi tak...aage se khelna aur Agarwal khandaan se khelna ek hi baat hai...pehle ladki ko apne ghar le aa...fir jo natak karne hain kar! Hehe...but thankfully, it was a plan on the gang's part! Meri khud ki hi jaan nikal gayi thi to know gharwalon, esp Rakesh ko pata chal gaya!

Wonderful piece! Continue to write more!
Sur

Hi Sur,

haha,Tum ko confuse kar diya matlab paa liya.😆

I do remember there was some comedy serial of Jaspal Bhatti but now don't remember any of episodes.😃

Thanks for appreciation.It means a lot.😛

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MSK04

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Posted: 6 years ago

#38

Hi Ross... I am late, but finally am here... and yes yes... along with the several adjectives you have for me, you can add late-lateef as well... 😛

But, well... you already know about my schedule... so I won't rant here... 😆

Rather, let me tell you that as soon as I found time to comment on some stories, your OS is the first one I pick... You know why? Because I understand how much courage it takes to write something creative for the first time and then post it on the forum knowing well that it would be dissected from all angles... And you did this in the OS contest thread, as anonymous, inviting unbiased criticism and appreciation both... Just for that, I salute you... 👏👏

Now coming to the OS... I totally loved the concept... Sameer Maheshwari wanted to prove his sachcha pyaar... Hahaa... Where can I even begin to say that this Sameer is cute as well as stupid... But his friends and Naina played well... achche se mazaa chakhya usko... 😆😆😆

But, being a Sameer fan, 2 weeks thoda zyada punishment nahi ho gaya?

I also have to say, the dialogue crafting is good Ross... 👏 And this is where I should have realized it is you... All that sarcasm... how did I miss it???

And finally, now that you have started, please keep on writing more... 😃

Cheers,

Mou

Edited by MSK04 - 6 years ago