LIOC: MG FF Part 25 Updated on Pg 122 on 4-4-2018 - Page 51

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Posted: 8 years ago

Originally posted by: --Evil_Angel--

great cs..
and the starts of the story.. followed by the line👍🏼
the fusion of inspector maan & lawyer geet is indeed interesting to read :)
all the best for this venture😉
tnx fr pm !!



Glad you like it.. love to hear your whole verdict when you complete reading the whole story...
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Posted: 8 years ago
Thanks for pm n note. Cs is interesting. Will do comment after sometime as i have to read the updates. Sorry for making u wait.
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Posted: 8 years ago
Wow awesome concept. I read all parts in one go. Everything is so mysterious n no loop hole is there to find. Everyone is feeling jairaj as innocent but they all are far away from getting any clue for it.
As here is a slogan BETI BACHAO, BETI PADAO. Geet came as saviour for time being. All are feeling bonding with her n trying to help her. Case is really like web of spider, no one can say where n at which it will finish. Wonderful writing. Waiting for next.
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Posted: 8 years ago
Beautiful story liked maan jolly nature gautam love n longing for his mother n his love n protectiveness for geet without knowing their truth relation somewhere I didn't like his mother behavior with him just in her angry she is breaking him down
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Posted: 8 years ago
Character Sketch is very Interesting

I somehow love Maan's family more 😆

so in actual Geet and Gautum are real siblings

waiting for the next chapter
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Posted: 8 years ago

Originally posted by: Risingsun626

Thanks for pm n note. Cs is interesting. Will do comment after sometime as i have to read the updates. Sorry for making u wait.


No worries I can beside you are new to why to apologise
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Posted: 8 years ago

Originally posted by: Risingsun626

Wow awesome concept. I read all parts in one go. Everything is so mysterious n no loop hole is there to find. Everyone is feeling jairaj as innocent but they all are far away from getting any clue for it.

As here is a slogan BETI BACHAO, BETI PADAO. Geet came as saviour for time being. All are feeling bonding with her n trying to help her. Case is really like web of spider, no one can say where n at which it will finish. Wonderful writing. Waiting for next.



Thanks for the lovely comment i think you are strongly believe in girl child. Me too... Girl can do anything if they got any chance beside in most of the cases girl is always the strong one Jhgnasi ki raani le lo yaa Raziya Sultan

Thnx for your reply
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Posted: 8 years ago

Originally posted by: Insaneniyu

Beautiful story liked maan jolly nature gautam love n longing for his mother n his love n protectiveness for geet without knowing their truth relation somewhere I didn't like his mother behavior with him just in her angry she is breaking him down



Thanks for reply Insaneniyu... Glad You like my version of Maan ...

Well I know Tejaswini is wrong but you may feel good at the end...
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Posted: 8 years ago

Originally posted by: taahir004

Character Sketch is very Interesting

I somehow love Maan's family more 😆

so in actual Geet and Gautum are real siblings

waiting for the next chapter



I am glad Taahir you liked the character sketch of the Story Actually i t is mention in the start but I needed the faces...


Why Maan's family????




Edited by IlaTanwar - 8 years ago
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Posted: 8 years ago
Part 19




Geet(After listening)- Ji Mom! Shayad aap sahi keh rhi hai... (Taking a sigh)... I hope voh log jald hi ek family ki trh ho jaaye shayad yeh case solve hone k baad hi yeh ho paayega... anyway mom... (misheviously)... Vaise vahan mauke ka fayda jarur uthaya jaa rha hoga... [Malini frowns]... Ab na main hu vaha aur na hi jai... Toh voh kaunsa gaana tha... haan yaada aaya.. "KOI NHI HAI GHAR PE KYA HASEEN MILA HAI PAL AAJ SHARARAT KRNE DO KAAM BAAKI KARENGE KAL"... App aur Dad apna third honeymoon bnaane ki taiyaari kar rahein honge haina...


Malini (blushing and snapped)- Badmash! Ghar aao tumhe btati hun main... Mumbai jaake kuch jyada hi shaitan ho gyi ho...


Geet(laughs)- Ab kya karein Mom aap log ke saath reh kar kuch jyada hi serious look aa gya tha... (smiles)... anyway acha mein rkhti hun raat bhut ho gyi kal subah uthna b hai... bbye tc


Malini- Ok Beta bbye tc...


Geet(thinking)- Mom is right muje aunty aur Gautam bhai k matter mein ab kuch nhi krna chahiye... yhi better rahega baba ji ab sab aapke haathon mein hai... aap toh sab dekh rhe ho naah babaji toh aap kyu nhi krte madad bhai.. ab voh b toh aapke bche hain meri tarah jiss tarah meri help krte ho toh unki b kar do naah... karoge naah babaji...


[In Morning, Geet wakes up and started making breakfast to manofy her aunt]


Geet(Self Talk)- Ab bas yeh Chinese Noodle dhang se ban jaaye Aunty ki favourite hai... fir toh aunty ka mood theekh ho jaayega... hope so voh mere se jyada naraaz naa ho... vaise babaji dekha jaaye koi mere se jyada der tak naraaz toh rehta nhi...


Tejaswini(Curious)- Yeh kitchen mein kaun kaam kar rha hai [Tejaswini was doing the pooja when she heard the noises in kitchen and got curious who was in there...]... Geet toh kabhi kitchen mein gyi nhi... chalo dekhti hun chal kya rha hai iss ldki ke dimaag mein... koi naah koi musibat mein pdti hi rehti hai yeh ldki...[as soon as she enters the kitchen she saw a mess created by Geet and got shocked out of wits...]... Hey bhagwaan Geet...


Geet(making a puppy look)- Aunty aap yahan... (having a naughty smile)...


Tejaswini(Having a Horror Look)- Geeet... Yeh Kya haal bana rkha hai kitchen ka??? Tum yahan kar kya rhi ho...


Geet- Voh Aunty Main aap mere se naraaz thi naah toh main apke liye aapka favourite chinese bna rhi thi thi...


Tejaswini- Geet! Tum iss tarah se chinese dish bnaati ho Kitchen kitni faila di hai tumne koi b samaan apni jgh pe nhi hai... ek kaam krne ke chakkar mein sou kaam ikhate kar liye hain tumne...Ab Yeh sab saaf kaun karega...


Geet(looking with puppy eyes)- koi baat nhi Aunty main hoon naah vaise b aaj meri chutti hai toh main saaf kar dungi bas appki fav dish bnanane hi vaali hai fir mein yeh sab sahi se rakh dungi...


Tejaswini(taking a sigh of relief)- You better be... huh... jldi saaf krna vrna tum apni outing k liye b der ho jaayegi... OK...


[After saying this she left from there]...


[After manaofying her Aunt Geet left for her outing. She first went at Juhu beech there she played in water and clicked the pictures of scenery and relaxed herself after that she went to Goregaon Chawpatty. After that She went to the local market which famous for its local shops and street foods.]


[After sometime, She was looking at the bangles shop and choosing the bangles for her Mother and Aunty totally unaware of that someone is following her from the behind. ]


Geet(selecting the artifical kada)- bhyia ! Yeh kitne ke diye?



For Tejaswini



For Malini



Bangle vaale bhyia- Mam Sahab! ek joda 250 ka hai toh do jode apko 500 k pade...


Geet- Arre bhyia aise kaise 500 ke de rhe ho bhut jyada laga rhe ho aap... Muje yeh sirf 350 k chahiye...


Bangle vaale bhyia- Arre Mam sahab sahi daam lgaaye hai maine ajkal itne k hi milte hai...


Geet(Kept on arguing)- Aise todhe hi 350 dungi chaliye jaldi pack kijiye...


[She was arguing and both are not reaching at any conclusion.]


A Strange Guy (came and stand with her)- Hello Bhyia! Yeh kitne k diye...


Bangle vaale bhyia- Ji 200 rupaye ke...


A Strange Guy- Ok pack kar dijiye... [Geet was also arguing that time but suddenly for teasing her he said something to the shopkeeper]... bhyia de dijiye vaise be Teekhi churi hai liye bagair maanege nhi...


Bangle vaale bhyia(astonished and laughed a bit)- kya bhau aaj kal ki mehangaayi main itnayech ka milta hai apun ne kuch galat mol bhav nhi kiya...


[Meanwhile Geet was giving hard glare to him...]


Geet(ignoring the comment of Strange Guy)- Excuse me bhyia last time 400 se jyada nhi... dungi main... (self talk) Pata nhi kya smjhta hai apne apko... babaji apne aise namune ko hi bnana tha kya kaha muje theekhi mirchi... huh bada aaya...


[She kept on cursing him..]


Bangle vaale bhyia- Theekh hai mam sehaab le lo... aap b kya yaad rkhengi ki apun ki dukaan se leke gyi ayi shapat dubara jarur aayengi yha lene...


Geet(smiles at his comment)- Jarur and shukriya bhyia...


[She left from there. The Strange Guy was looking at her and smiled inwardly and started following her... Geet was finding weird why he was following her... she increased his pace... to avoid him but he was not budging...]

Precap: REVELATION OF THE STRANGE GUY WHO IS HE???????







Next Part




Hi guys i hope you like this update too. Please guys comment and tell me how you feel about this story in 4-3 lines i will be highly obliged. specially the persons who likes my story too... Please comment i like people who give reviews even if you dont like anything you can tell me that too...


With Regards
ILA


Edited by IlaTanwar - 8 years ago


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