LIOC: MG FF Part 25 Updated on Pg 122 on 4-4-2018 - Page 56

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Posted: 8 years ago
Hi


I am so glad that You guys are loving the character sketch and the update. Thanks for commenting It's really encourage writer to write more. I appreciate your each and every comment and taking time to write. I have seen lots of people to guess who will be the person is... Some right in guessing and some are almost right in guessing you may never know... to know who is right or who is almost right you have to wait for a while i will post the chapter as soon as possible.


P.S. Keep Commenting Guys

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Posted: 8 years ago
hey! thanks 4 da pm n note! will b waiting
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Thanks for pm n note. Waiting for update.
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Posted: 8 years ago
Lovely Part

Geet's mum advising her to leave the matter of Gautum and his mom for a while as things might become worst and Geet too agrees
I like how easily she plays with her mother
deciding to prepare her aunty's favorite dish for breakfast Geet makes a mess in the kitchen shocking Tejeswini
Geet exploring the place and even argues about the price of bangles but it seems as if there is a guy following her , now I wonder is he not her security or maybe some informat that wants to reveal something about the case
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Posted: 8 years ago

Originally posted by: taahir004

Lovely Part

Geet's mum advising her to leave the matter of Gautum and his mom for a while as things might become worst and Geet too agrees
I like how easily she plays with her mother
deciding to prepare her aunty's favorite dish for breakfast Geet makes a mess in the kitchen shocking Tejeswini
Geet exploring the place and even argues about the price of bangles but it seems as if there is a guy following her , now I wonder is he not her security or maybe some informat that wants to reveal something about the case


I so love your verdict and The way you comment this gives me a different thing to think i wanted to show something but i always find that common thanks for your comment taahir...
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Posted: 8 years ago

Part-20







{Bangle vaale bhyia- Theekh hai mam sehaab le lo... aap b kya yaad rkhengi ki apun ki dukaan se leke gyi ayi shapat dubara jarur aayengi yha lene...{Ok Mam Sahaab! You can take it... You will remember that You had purchased it from my shop and I promise you will come again to buy...}


Geet(smiles at his comment)- Jarur and shukriya bhyia... {Sure and Thank You Bhyia}


[She left from there. The Strange Guy was looking at her and smiled inwardly and started following her... Geet found it weird why was he following her... she increased her pace... to avoid him but he was not budging at all...]


Geet(Self Talk)- (while looking back) Yeh mere peeche kyu chal rha hai... babaji ab aap hi isse peecha chudao... {Why he is following me Babaji Now, only you can help me and stop him from following me...}


Stranger- Bhan Than Chali Jaandi Ae Jaandi Re Jaandi Re... {You are going doing make up...You are going doing make up...(it's a hindi song please don't laugh and ignore if i had written wrong) }


[Geet again increased her pace. Stranger too increased and Teasing her...]


Stranger- Aye Ruk Jaa... Jaan Kaha chali yun dil todke... {Stop there... Jaan where are going after breaking my heart...}


Geet- (Turned and in Anger) Dekho! Main kuch keh nhi rhi iska yeh mtlb nhi ki tum kuch bhi karoge. So better hoga ki tum yha se chale jao. {See! If I am not saying anything that doesn't mean that you can do anything}


Stranger- Arre! Meri Sweety Maine kab mana kara tumhe kuch naa kehne ko hum toh chaahte hi ki tum humse kuch kaho... jara hum b toh sunne kya jaanti ho mere baare mein... {Arre! My Sweety! when did i said you can't say anything I want you to say something... I really want to hear what you know about me... }


Geet- (She got miffed) Tum aise nhi maanoge... {You won't understand like this...}


[She raised her hand to hit him but he dodged it... ]


Stranger- Arre Itna kasht mat karo! haath naazuk hai tut jaayenge... bas gale laga lo dil ko chain aa jaaye... {Don't take this much trouble! Your hands are soft... Just hug me and you will soothe my heart}


Geet (got angry and open to say something)- Tum... Aise nhi maanoge ruk... {You... You will not listen like this... Wait...}


[She took her sandals out... and start hitting. He started running and after a while he sang something that baffled Geet]


Stranger- Ouch! Ouch! Ouch!... Wait... Saans toh lene do meri maa... ouch!... Ouch!... Arre ruk jaa meri behan... { Ouch! Ouch! Ouch!... Wait... Let me take the breath my mom...ouch!... Ouch!... Arre Stop My Sister...}


Geet- Acha ab tujhe mein behan nazar aati hun ruk abhi btaati hun... {Now, You see me as a sister... Just wait I will show you...}


Stranger- Aye Rut Mastaani Kab Ayegi Tu Beeti Jaaye Zindagaani Kab Aayegi Tu... Chali Aa Tu Chali Aaa...Aaahhh...(Listening this Geet Stopped...){It's a song ang how could i translate i can't able to use appropriate song}


Geet (shockingly)- Jai! Is that you?????


Jai(getting Relieved)- Getting relieved... finally Mastaani shaant ho gyi... Vrna maar maar ke mera band bja di hai...{Getting relieved... finally Mastaani is having some peace... She had beaten my black and blue}


Geet- Oh my god! I am really surprised... what are you doing here you are in Dehradun right for training right?


[Geet happily hugged after breaking hug She hit him in the stomach]


Jai- Haan tha toh vhin but 2 hafte k liye aya tha socha ki tumse mil lun fir maa se pata laga ki tum yha theri huyi ho... aur koi case le rkha hai tumne kya baat hai...acha vaise case kya hai??? {Yeah! I was there but for 2 weeks I am here so i thought to meet you and I got to know that you are living here... And you have taken a case anyway what's the case about?}


Geet- Ummh... Haan jiska case hai aunty akeli rehti hai toh company de rhi hun. Well case itna serious nhi hai (try to divert his mind) ... Woh chod kisi aur din btaungi filhaal tum btao kaha ghum rhe ho yhan...{Ummmh... Yeah... The aunty whose case I am fighting is living alone so i am giving the company. Well, case is not that much serious (try to divert his mind)... Leave it... I will tell you some other day... right now you tell me where are you roaming...}


Jai- Arre yaar kaha ka ghumna mere Senior cum mentor jo train kar rhe hai dimag kharaab kar diya kal raat pahunche socha aaj ka din aish karenge fir training shuru usne aate hi band bja diya... yeh b koi baat huyi... par tumhra bhai ka naam Jai hai Jai... apna bhi swag hai... Kisi ne btaya tha ki yha pe ldkiyan badi mast ghumti hai toh aa gya yha pe disguise krke... socha sadu dhundh na le... aur fir tum mili merko yha acha hua alag se plan nhi bnana padega... {Arre Yaar! Where to roam? My Senior cum mentor who is training us he has made our mind screwed up we thought we would enjoy after reaching here on first day but he had tortured us... this is the way... But Your brother's name is Jai... I have my own swag... Someone told here beautiful lady's and girls come here so I am here being in disguise so that Sadu won't find me... and I fin you here and It's good I don't have to make the another plan...}


Geet- Ok! But training chodna galat baat hai Jai... {Ok! But Jai Leaving training is a bad thing...}


Jai- Terko lgta hai Jai The Jai Deshmukh Training mein peeche rahega... jis case pe muje work krna hai uski vjh mujhe issi jagah milegi so here i am ldkiyon ko dekhne (Geet slapped him) Ouch! I mean vhi lead ko jaanane. {You think The Jai Deshmukh will lack behind in training... the case I am working on the reason and clue is here... So, I am here for seeing girls (Geet slapped him) Ouch! I mean to find the lead.}


Geet- Oh toh janaab! case solve kar rhe hain... training k time bhi... {Of toh His highness is solving the case... that too in training time...}


Jai- Case solved hai... bas vaise act kar rhe hain jiski lead yhin milegi... aur (Tone change like Jailer of Sholay...) Yeh jo Case hai jisne solve kiya hai Pata hai ahhaaa... ahhhaaa... ahhhaaa... mere favourite all in one the great the great ACP Jairaj ne... Vaise maine socha tha ki unse milunga but voh hai hi nhi khair shayad kisi aur shehar mein... koi na ik din toh mil hi jaayenge kaunsa dehli dur hai hai ki nhi Mastaani... tu bta tu yha kar rhi hai case solve krna hai ki nhi?? {Case is already solved... we are just acting and lead is going to be here... and (Tone change like Jailer of Sholay...) This case which is solved you know who has solved it ahhaaa... ahhhaaa... ahhhaaa... my favorite all in one the great the great ACP Jairaj... anyway I thought I will meet him but he is not here anyway i guess he is in other city... It's ok I will meet him someday Delhi is not far away... Mastaani... You tell me what are you doing here you want to solve the case or not???}


Geet- Arre bas aaj ki chutti li thi... maine socha ghum lun aur maa k liye kuch le lun... yha se jaao toh milte jaana... {Arre! I have taken a leave for today... I thought to visit this place... abd buy something for maa... that is sold here...}


Jai- Sure! Acha ab mein chlta hun apne lead ki khoj mein jyada late kiya toh Mere sir meri band bja dega... Ok ... {Sure! Ok Now, I have to go for finding my lead if i will be late my sir will kill me for sure... Ok...}


Geet- Bye!... (They hugged each other)


Jai- Vaise Mastaani! Tujhe koi mil toh nhi gya... voh kya hai na dad and mom pareshaan ho gye hain tujhse... soch rhe jald se jald vida kar de... {Vaise Mastaani! Did you not Find anyone? It's because Mom and Dad are irritated with you and they are thinking to marry you off}


Geet- Hat... Jai (lightly Punched him) tujhe vida karenge hum mujhe nhi... smjha... {Hat... Jai... (lightly punched him) We will marry you off not me understand}


Jai - Acha baba! ab main chlta hun.(Suddenly, he got punched on his face and landed on ) {Ok Dear! I have to leave now}




Precap- Geet is miffed...😡





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ILA


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Posted: 8 years ago
hello! thanks 4 da pm n wonderful update! superbly written! Geet was annoyed with the stranger! he teases her! she is angry! bt surprised n happy seeing its Jai! Jai n Geet share a lovely bond! update soon
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Posted: 8 years ago
Superb update
Oh is its jai n he doesn't know about jairaj n his case
Loved how jai pulled geet leg n their bond
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Lovely update geet was buying Bangles when a guy started to trouble her and geet was in full sherni avatar and it turns out to be Jai her brother in disguise he is on a training here on a case that's why all dressed up and thought to look around but he bumped into geet and start his experiment on her he was teasing geet when someone punched him I have a feeling it's definitely maan that's why geet is angry
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Posted: 8 years ago
superb part...
i was right its jai...love the sibling bond...
waiting for next part...

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