Fix me - RiKara SS (Complete: 11/05)

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Posted: 8 years ago
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This originally started as an OS for the prompt by Annika_ishqbaaz - aaj jaane ki zid na karo. But then it turned into a two-shot which eventually morphed into a short story! I can't believe this has happened. This is angsty, but I swear there are RiKara moments splattered all over it.
Give my sloppy writing a try and let me know if you want me to continue this. I don't think this is anything like what Annika_ishqbaaz wanted, I'm sorry to disappoint you darling. But I do hope you like this!

Chapter 1: My hand over your heart

He tiptoes around her noiselessly, picking up pieces of himself and putting them back. She tries to put in bandages of hushed words but he keeps on pushing her away. He keeps her away, shielding her from himself, protecting her from the harshness his life is.
Often, the resolve wavers, back and forth, especially when she smiles at him. With eyes that light up, a steady shine that kindles a flickering flame of desperate hope in him.

Sometimes his hugs end up being too tight, making it hard to breath. There are days when his arms are uncomfortably tight around her but she doesn't utter a word. She stays still in his arms, letting her arms slide around his neck for comfort.

He clings on to her, fingers digging into her skin, contouring her body to fit into the hard frames of his own. Her presence is enough, at times, withe the lavender smell of her hair invading his senses, but quite frequently he has this urge to bury himself deep under her skin.
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Somedays, his kisses taste of warm sunshine but there are days when his mouth reminds her of the waning moon and all the darkness that goes along with it. His kisses are never bitter though, always tasting of guilt, remorse and something she is unable to identify.
He never kisses half-heartedly. His kisses have passion and longing etched all over them. By now, she's quite used to being tipped back at unexpected moments. It is also habitual to find herself being pressed against unusual surfaces, his passionate embraces leaving swollen lips in their wake. She learns to love them alongwith everything else he brings to her life.

He takes her name and she lets the sound reverberate and sink into her skin, his adoration quite evident. Her fingers stay tangled in his hair, she quivers with a moan, giving in to the eager demand of his mouth.
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If you don't like it, feel free to throw shades in the comments!
Oh, and if anyone wants to read more, just let me know! This is mostly complete.

Chapter 2 - page 2
Chapter 3 - page 4
Chapter 4 - page 4
Chapter 5 - page 6
Chapter 6 - page 7
Chapter 7 - page 8
Chapter 8 - page 9
Chapter 9 - page 11
Chapter 10 - page 12
Chapter 11 - page 14
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writergenie17 thumbnail
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Posted: 8 years ago
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I don't know what to say... there's something so raw and personal about this piece that I felt guilty reading it, like I was peeking into someone's life, their mind, their heart without their permission.
Powerful stuff... Can't wait for more from you!
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Faye meri jaan!!! this is so awesome..
u r goona continue this ASAP..
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Superb. Awesome. Please update soon
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Originally posted by: Annika_Ishqbaaz

Faye meri jaan!!! this is so awesome..
u r goona continue this ASAP..

Oh thank God you like this!
I wa so embarrassed about how this turned out.
Glad you liked it. I'm gonna post the next chapter soon.
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Originally posted by: writergenie17

I don't know what to say... there's something so raw and personal about this piece that I felt guilty reading it, like I was peeking into someone's life, their mind, their heart without their permission.

Powerful stuff... Can't wait for more from you!

Thanks Genie! I'm blushing now! Its the feedback from you guys that keeps me going. I do hope you like the next part too.
I never asked your name!
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Chapter 2: Kiss me hard before you go

He meets Svetlana one day, and safe to say the conversation manages to bring up the bitter taste of their past. It leaves him reeling with emotions he is careful to hide from the vile woman.
He takes an exceptionally long drive along the streets of Mumbai to clear his head and the result is being home when everyone else is quite asleep in their rooms.
He enters their room noiselessly and takes off his shoes without turning on the lights. He can see her silhouette on the bed, turned away from the door. He shakes off his jacket before walking towards her.

He settles himself behind her, arms finding their way around her waist and she turns to face him instantly. "You're late. I'll get food."
He pins her back to the bed, his thigh slids in between her legs to anchor her beneath him. Terror slams into him when she smiles up at him with twinkling eyes, one hand reaching up to trace his jaw. The terror of losing her, the terror of Svetlana's harsh words. The terror of every nightmare coming true.

Before she can say anything else, his mouth finds hers in a searing kiss, drawing her into himself. She feels the urgency in the kiss but the hardness in the way his lips move against hers scream of something bad. His mouth chases hers hungrily, she hooks her hand behind his neck while his hands span her waist restlessly.
"Is something wrong?" she breaks the kiss to ask breathlessly. He thinks about her question, but everything feels alright now, now when he has her in his arms.
"As of now, nothing is wrong. But there will be if you don't kiss me back right now," he says with dark eyes. There's a book waiting to be read in his eyes, but some other day, she promises herself because he doesn't seem to be in the mood.
Then there's nothing for her to do but to tilt her head up and kiss him. She again feels the tension in his muscles when her arms lock around his neck but his kiss turns demanding instantly and his mouth has always been sinful, divesting her of every coherent thought until all she can hear is the pounding of his name in her head: Omkara, Omkara, Omkara.
His arm flashes out to turn on the fairy lights and she again breaks the kiss to look at him with questioning eyes.
"I want to see you tonight. I want you to look into my eyes," he murmurs and drags his mouth down. Her hands busy themselves into getting his shirt off to feel more of his rippling muscles.
"I always know it's you but tonight I want the lights," he bares his teeth against her throat. Her eyes widen but she manages a shaky nod, hands finally managing to get the offending garment out of the way. He samples her tantalising flesh, his stubble leaves pink skin in its wake. He again drags his teeth over the long column of her throat, fingers making quick work of the provocative buttons on her top and her back arches when they brush against the newly bared sensitive skin. She squirms under him, alive with need.
He pulls back then to admire his muse. She looks stunning under him. Her hair is mussed, lips swollen while she stares at him with hooded, wanton eyes. A desire to brand her as his takes hold of him quite suddenly then. The desire to crawl right under her skin and make a home for himself, a safe haven, to have his scent on her, to be the only one she sees.
With a throaty groan, he gives in. His teeth clamp down on her soft flesh, a bit harder than ever before and this time, her fingernails dig into his shoulders. The pleasure-pain shoots through her, igniting her bones, encouraging him to pepper her skin with more bites. He is a quick learner so when his bites cause her to utter a litany of his name, he smirks to himself and settles down to completing his task with utter devotion to his wife.
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The third chapter is also written. I'll just have to proofread it.
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Posted: 8 years ago
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FAYE!!!! I don't know what to say... this was just so powerful... So intimate. I could literally visualise RiKara through your words. I'm obsessed. 😊 Do continue... very very soon!
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Faye!!! u made me pass out.. *falls unconscious due to the intensity*
i m blushing AF!!!
continue sooonish.
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Posted: 8 years ago
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hey it was quiet a erotic update 😳

continue soon 😊

anyways have u ever tried dark ff I mean u can give it a try on Rikara, till now i have not found any dark ff on them

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