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Posted: 8 years ago
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Originally posted by: Itssanjh

This one is pure love sweetie! Loved it! Kash ki serial mein kabhi to aisa kuch dekhne ko milta! But never mind! Shravan and his thoughts, Sumo the way she expressed her longing! And the cherry on the cake was the proposal! Loved it totally! Will be waiting for your next write ups!


thank you dear, show me bahot kuch expect kiya tha #phootikismat but its okay apane arman OS me nikal lete hai 😉
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Hey Hello all forumvasiyo... i hope you all remember this OS of mine 😕

Actually i got some requests to continue this as atleast TS or a small SS as this was the most promising scene where we really expected many things so i just gave a try to continue this story 😳
For now i an keeping as SS wit will change as i progress because as of now i am also not sure how i am gonna progress on this🤔

i will decide to continue or not only on your responses and comments...
Aslo 1 request please read 1st part before this 😳
Thank you deepti for helping me out here really it worked for me 😊
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Dil Sambhal jaa zara...part 2

Tring Tring!!!!

his phone started ringing, sumo wiggled to break their kiss but he didnt budged opposite to that he tried to deepen it, sumo pushed him and broke kiss, but he didn't leave her.

"Shravan tumhara phone baj raha hai kya kar rahe ho uthao na" she wiggled

he tighten his grip on her waist "sumo rahane do na kisi ka bhi baadme dekhunga" he leaned again to capture her lips

she covered his mouth with her hand "ahh...shravan kitane battameez ho gaye ho phone uthane ke jagah tumhe kiss karane ki suz rahi hai" she faked anger and her chicks turned to one more dark shade of pink

"battameez aur mein naah" he bobbed naughtily "bilkul nahi i am just tasting my raspberries" he touched her lips with his thumb, color of red rose in her hand spreaded on her chicks,

she turned her head to the side to avert from his intense gaze as its impossible for her to hold his gaze with so much love

"sumo tum to sharmana bhi sikh gayi, achha hai" he winked and gained a soft whack on his chest

his phone started ringing again "are yaar ye kaun hai jo es samay tang kar raha hai, wrong timing" he irked and fished out phone from his pocket "Ohh papa" he signaled her to keep quite, but still holding her close with one hand on her waist

"Haan papa boliye"

"hello shravan kaha ho kitani raat ho gayi hai abhi tak ghar nahi aaye" ramnath inquired with concern

"Papa woh mein anjali ke party me aaya tha to kuchh purane dost mil gaye the unhi ke sath busy ho gaya tha" he pulled her by waist more close to him as there was no place should be left for even a thread to pass

"ohh..lekin ghar kab aa rahe ho kya time ho raha hai jara bhi andaza hai"

"papa woh aaj rohan ne bola ke usake yaha ruku sare dost yahi ruke hai you know type of boys night etane saal ke baad mile hai sab, kitanae saal dur the ek dusare se to aaj chodne ka man nahi kar raha hai" he replied looking directly into her eyes, her eyes widen after deciphering his intentionality

"acchha thik hai beta lekin sambhake rahna, bye Goodnight"
"Good night papa" he ended call and slided phone again inside his pocket only after putting on silent mode

"Aise kya ghur rahi ho aaj mein tumhe chodke kahi nahi jjane wala hu" he announced cheekily

"Lekin shravan tum aise kaise yaha raat bhar rukoge koi dekh lega to" she asked with disbelief in her eyes

he pulled her more into him "tumane aisa soch bhi kaise liya ke aaj mein tumase dur jaa paunga, apane ishq ka izhar karake tum bach jaogi" he smirked mischievously turning her into a human tomato and she hide her face into his chest

he closed his eyes with satisfaction and planted kiss on her forehead "sumo"
"hmm" she nuzzled on his chest
"aaj lag raha hai mein pura ho gaya hu, har taraf sirf pyar hi pyar hai aisa lag raha hai aaj apani kismat par yakeen aa gaya muze jab uparwalene tumhe de diya muze zindagi bhar ke liye" he sighed


Raahon mein humko milo
Jahan bas pyaar ho,
Sar pe fizaaon ke
Ishq sawaar ho.

Asmaan ko phir zameen se itni mohabbat ho
Wafa phaili ho zameen pe
Chahaton ki saubat ho.

"achha aaj aisehi khade rahane ka irada hai raat bhar" she murmured into his chest

in response he tighten his grip on her "aise to mein zindagi bhar khada reh sakata hu tum bas raat bhar ki baat kar rahi ho"

"ohh bheem ki aulad mera kuchh to khayal karo, you are squeezing me dab jaungi ab mein" she chided

"ohh sorry sorry" he relized her and hold her shoulders gently "tum thik to ho na sumo, meri wajah tumhe koi takleef to nahi hui na..." he agitated darted her with concern and fright at same time

she smiled on her overprotective bear and cupped his face "nahi my huggy bear tum muze kabhi takleef nahi de sakate ho bus kuchh jyada intensity se hug kar rahe the" she replied with sheepish grin

"ohh matlab hug se problem nahi hai hmmm" he moved and sit down on floor resting his back on one of the side wall "lekin esaki adat dal lo kyuki intensity to kam nahi hone wali hai" he shrugged and signaled her to sit near him.

she reached him and before she can sit beside him on floor, he yanked her waist and she slumped on his lap "shravan kya kar rahe ho?" she startled on his sudden action

"kya kar raha hu bas apane pyar ko apane godi me bitha raha hu" he replied with nonchalance like he has practice of doing this from years

she raised a brow "bol to aise rahe ho jaise muze roj hug karate ho, apane god me bithate ho..." she darted him quizzically

"haan to roj to yeh sab karta hi hu" he pulled her small nose tip and she widen her eyes "i mean khayalon me hamesha karta hu" he shrugged

she narrowed her eyes "achhaji aap ye sab karate ho, aur kya kya karate ho mere sath apane khayalon me"

"abhi batao kya kya karta hu...baad me mat bolna padosiyo ne complain ki i am not responsible " he smirked and realization downed to her

"chii shravan kitani cheap harkate karate ho tum" she whined

"usame chip kya hai jo bhi karta hu apane gf ke saath karta hu tumhe kya problem hai" he faked anger

"lekin mein hi to tumahri..." she stopped

"kya tum meri sumo bolo?" he whispered in her ear hoarsely and she blushed hardly

"kuchh nahi chup karo"

he tugged her hair braid behind ear "bolo na sumo" he asked mischievously

"woh mein tumhari muze nahi pata" she replied shyly
he starts laughing "oh god sumo etani tomboy banake ghumati ho aur ek gf bolane me etana sharama rahi ho" she started hitting his hard chest with her tiny fists

"ohh meri jangali billi lag rahi hai jara aaram se apana jungali pan kahi aur dikhana" he catches her fists to stopped her and winked

"kahi aur dikhana kya matlab" and she understood his intention, her mouth fell open "shravan tum kaisi baatein karane lago ho achanak se etana sidhe dikhate ho aur baatein aisi karate ho"

"ohh sumo mein jisake samane jo baatein karani hai na wahi karta hu, tumhari tarah nahi kahi bhi kuchh bhi shuru kar deta hu" he pulled her close to his chest
she rested her head on his chest and he enveloped his hands around her waist
"shravan tum muze sachme kabhi chod ke nahi jaoge na kuchh bhi ho jaye" she squeezed his hand

"sumo humara ishq sabase upar hein mere liye kuchh bhi ho jaye kabhi tumhe nahi chodunga, fevicol ka majboot jod hai tudega nahi" he laughed whole heartily

she slightly pulled her head back and stared him, after so many days he was smiling contently, he stoped and cocked a brow in question and she nodded negatively.

"tumhe pata hai aaj mein" he pointed toward moon "us uparwale se permission lekar aaya tha tumhe apane dil ki baat batane ke liye, dekho kaise ghur raha hai na muze" he acted like thinking hardly "hmmm...lagta hai jealous hai"

"kyu" she flabbergasted

"are meri kismat pe jal raha hoga naa, soch raha hoga k ese etani anmol chiz ese kaise mil gayi" he smiles beatifically and her eyes filled with all love she have in her heart for him

Jheel ke paani mein
ishq hi behta ho
Ishq ho dua bas
Ishq ki ibaadat ho.

Khuda bhi jab tumhe
Mere paas dekhta hoga
Itni anmol cheez de di kaise
Sochta hoga.

"shravan etana pyar karate ho muzase" she cupped his face with her small hands
"tum soch bhi nahi sakati sumo utana pyar karta hu" he kissed on her palm
"tumhara etana pyar karoge to mera joonun ban jaoge tum, waise ban chuke ho" she smiled shyly

"ohh kya baat hai meri sumo wrestler ko etani achhi baatein karna kab sikh gayi"

"tumhare pyar ne sikha diya" her cheeks turned pink

Subha ka chain mera
Shaam k sukoon hai
Pyaar tera pyar nahi
Mera junoon hai

suddenly nirmala's remembrance flashed in her mind, she decided to talk with him at this moment

"shravan ek baat hamesha yaad rakhana tumhari sumo jaisi bhi hai jo bhi karati hai lekin kabhi tumhare baare me kuchh galat nahi soch sakati hai" he gazed her with his questionable eyes "jo bhi ho jaye ye yaad rakhana sumo tumhari hai aur hamesha tumhare sath rahegi har sukh me, har dukh me"

he stared her steadily "tum aise kyu baat kar rahi ho sumi" he hold her hands in his
"muze tumape pura bharosa hai...i trust you on that" he squeezed her hands reassuringly

"shravan muze tumase kuchh baat karani hai bahot jaroori hai"
"haan bolo na kya hua sumo"
"lekin pahale ek wada karo tum meri puri baat sunoge usake baad hi jo bolna hai wo bologe, adhi baat sunake ghussa nahi karoge" she caressed his hand and he nodded giving in

"Nirmala aunty yaha tiwari killa me hai niche.." she said hesitantly looking into his eyes with her hopeful eyes

within a moment his expression hardened and she understood because words were really not required them to understand each other

"dekho shravan muze pata hai tum unase bahot gussa ho mein manati hu unhone jo bhi kiya galat kiya, unhe tumhe chodkar nahi jaana chahiye tha, aajtak mein bhi yahi sochati thi ki woh galat hai lekin jabse wo aayi hai yaha meine unake ankho me tumhare liye tadap dekhi hai, tumhare liye pyar dekha hai,
mein unaki side bilkul nahi le rahi hu bas etana kahna chah rahi hu ki ho sakta hai koi aisi baat ho jisake wajah se unhe tumhe chodne ka faisala lena pada ho. koi majboori ho sakati hai..."
a lone tear escaped from his eye slicing her heart with sharp knife, she wiped it off "shravan please apane aapko etana mat dard do mere baare me to socho muzape kya bitati hai tumhe dard me dekhakar pata hai" her eyes swam with tears, she cant see him in pain

Dard tujhe ho agar
Aankh meri roti hai,
Judaa hoke mar jayenge
Humein maloom hai.

he closed his eyes and rested his head on wall "kya majboori hogi sumo jisake wajah ek maa ne apane sage bete ko ek pal me chod diya...ek baar mudake bhi nahi dekha woh beta jinda bhi hai ki nahi...jis bete ko subah uthate hi sabse pahale apane maa ko dekhane ki aadat thi har kaam wo apani maa ke sath arne ke sapne dekhata tha wo usake bina kaisa hai?" his jaw clenched

she caressed his chick softly "shravan mein yeh nahi bol rahi hu ki tum unase jaake gale milo ya unhe maaf kar do, bas etana chahati hu ki ek baar woh jo bhi kahana chahati hai woh sun lo, ye humare rishte ke liye jaroori hai, mein nahi chahati ki hum log apana rishta kisi bhi zut ya nafrat pe shuru kare, bhagwan ne tumhe ek mauka diya hai nirmala aunty ki baat sunanae ka, kahi aisa na ho ki ye mauka tum gawa do aur badme pachtao aur mein apane shravan ko kabhi harate hue ya dard me nahi dekh sakati" still warm water flowing from her chicks

he opened his eyes to gaze her, she can see so many emotions in his eyes pain, hurt, agony but along with that she can see trust...yes trust for her for which she requested before sometime and for which she was ready to scarify her life too...

she cupped his face and planted kiss on his forehead, her lips lingered there for long as if she was trying provide him strength and warmth of her love, and promising him that she will be there beside him always no matter what will be the situation

he wrapped her in his arms and buried his face in her crook
"sumo lekin kyu tum chahati ho aaj hi mein unase milu etane salon baad tum muze mili ho kahi mein tumhe firse kho na du, i am scared sumo"

she hugged him tightly "shravan muzape bharosa hai na tumhe" he nodded against her neck "apani sumo pe bharosa rakho woh tumhe chodkar kahi nahi jayegi, aur tumase dur jake to mein mar jaungi, aur etani selfish to hu mein apani jaan to nahi jaane dungi na" she jested and felt his smile on her crook

Kitna sukoon mile
Sang tere aye sanam
Door kabhi jaakar
Karna na hum pe sitam.

"neend nahi aa rahi hai qutub minar tumhe?" she grinned
"aaj sukoon se so paunga mein tumhari bahoon me etane saloon se neend kaha aati thi" he sighed

she pulled back from hug to see his face clearly "ohh so cheesy haan Mr.Malhotra aise soyenge to you will get pain in your legs" she animated

"haan waise baat to sahi hai cute motu jo mere godi me baitha hai" he earned most needed whack from his giggling SUMO

"tumane motu bola" she glared him

"are sirf motu nahi cute motu kaha motu" he smirked and pulled her chicks

"ahhh...shravan" she hit him on his chest

he hold her both hands "achha baba thik hai my cupcake nahi bolunga motu okay..."

"better you lambu"

he turned her so that her back can rest on his front, he rested his head on top of her head and placed hand on hers resting on her stomach , they slept there like that for whole night unaware of 2 orbs are witnessing them

Khuda bhi jab tumhe
Mere paas dekhta hoga
Do badan ek jaan de di kaise
Sochta hogaa...
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Next day sumo opened her eyes with the sound of early morning birds chirping, she smiled when she realized her position.

she uplifted her hand and caressed his chick "shravan utho subah ho gayi hai"

"hmm...sumo sone do na plz 5 min aur" he pulled her more into him

"shavan koi dekh lega to hum log yaha aise raat bhar so rahe the" she blushed reminiscing last night

he opened his eyes reluctantly and mesmerized by the sight in front of his eyes

His sumo sitting with him in his arms, those saffron sun rays brightening her face increasing her beauty by tenfolds, that divine power showering its love on them, he cupped her small almond face in his big palms and touched her forehead with his lips pouring his respect, love, care and feeling his most beautiful dream which turned into reality today

Tu hai zindagi ye
Kitni haseen hai
Bin tere pheeki hai
Tujh se rangeen hai.

"Good morning my Sunshine" she closed her eyes relishing his love and warmth "you are mine, don't ever leave my side My love"

"Good Morning Shravan,i am all your's, my heart, my body, my soul , my every breath everything belongs to you and only you no one can separate us from now onward and its my promise to you" she whispered and smiled contently against his chest

after few seconds they broke apart sumo took his hand and hold it in between her both hands "i know shravan tum kya soch rahe ho, kis ulzan me ho but i promise everything will be okay, aur ek baat kitani bhi badi baat ho jaaye bas ye yaad rakhana tumhe ek chance mila hai aapane parents se baat karne ka, unaki baat sunane ka, aur tumhare sath mein hu en sabme... you wont be alone anymore, but har kisiko ye mauka nahi milta, many things which you want to say someone you need to keep it unsaid becuase..."she paused her eyes welled up "woh apase etane dur chale jaate hai ki puri kaynat ek kar do fir bhi woh mauka nahi milta"

he understood and nodded in agreement "ab meri har sas tumhari hai" and they both again went to a eye lock witnessing their eternal love for each other...

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"Shravan tum ek kam karo ghar jao fresh ho jao fir mein nirmala aunty ko lekar aati hu kahi pe jaha tum log baat kar sako aaram se okay" sumo said while descending stairs but hard squeeze on her hand didn't went unnoticed by her when she mentioned about nirmala
she turned her face to side to him and he nodded reluctantly because somewhere he know that he can face anything in this world with his sumo on his side

Both went to his car and after consoling him for complete 5 minutes like a child he left from tiwari killa halfheartedly only after giving a small peck on her lips.

After his car disappeared in morning fog she went to her room and decided to hava a small nap before starting a longest day of her life... because this is going to be a longest day for her chashmish and she need to be there with him all strong then only she can handle him, she closed her eyes and flash of shravan's predicament when ramnath accident news arrived played in front of her eyes and she quivered

Its Gonna be a long day!!!

She tried very hard to sleep for 1 hour but something was bothering her beyond limits but what?? answer was not clear to her but her intuition was telling her that something is wrong with her chashmish
her phone ringed displaying pushkar's name "ye pushkar etani subah kyu call kar raha hai kahi kuchhh..." she flinched and answered call

"hello pushkar etani subah call kyu kiya sab thik to hai"
"nahi sumo kuchh thik nahi hai" she sensed some fear in his voice
"kya hua pushkar jaldi bata...agar tu majak kar raha hai to aaj pakka mere haat se marega" she demanded impatiently
"sumo woh bhaiyya..." and she heard dead silence from other side...

Har ek saans meri
Mujhse ye kehti hai
Mere aasmaan ki
Tuhi zameen hai.
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so guys this is the second part please let me know how it is??
i really need your suggestions on this to decide i should continue this or not??

Please give you sincere suggestions because i am not sure how it tuned out so please...

ans yes if you dont like this then also dont hasitate to give your comments as i said its really imp for me atleast for this story 😊

Edited by priety.priti - 8 years ago
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Posted: 8 years ago
#43
Resi res
Preeti di
Aapne comment se bore karna
Coming to chappy
Its so good
I amm so happy and blushing while reading this
How do u write so well



Haye shravan kitna romantic hai
Loved the dialogue...so cute and lovely 😳
Kitni soni baate karta hai
Kash show mein aisa kuch milta
Loved the dialogue!!!! Blushing!! Blushing




And when shravan said "itensity toh itni hi rahengi "
Oh god !!!what a lines di
Too good


When sumo start the conversation
I was damm nervous
But end mein
Its alll very good

👏

Lovely !!! Cute chappy di
Jaldi update karna di
Waiting
Plzzz



Luv
Tiii se tiinna

Edited by Tinna28 - 8 years ago
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Posted: 8 years ago
#44
Res 😳
****
Unres
Priti...🤗
So happy that you are cont it 😃
I so loved it ya ❤️
ShraMan's kiss...
OMG!!...Shravan lied to Ramnath 😲 😆
Their lovey dovey moments were soo awesome... 😳
Naughty Shravan, Romantic Shravan, Chotu Shravan, Lover Shravan, Bestie Shravan...All in one there with his love Sumo...❤️
Loved the way Sumo talked with him about Nirmala...Assuring him that no matter what, she'll alwats be there fir him, with him, every step of the way..❤️
Aww!!..Both slept in each others arms... 😳 ..N who saw them?...Nimmo aunty??!!!

But!!..The end 😲
Shravan ko kya hua???...No no !!
Update soon !!
Thanks for the pm bud 😊
Loads of Love n 🤗
Nikka sa Nik
Edited by Nik03 - 8 years ago
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Posted: 8 years ago
#45
Amazing update!👏
Just one word for this part Loved it!
Their conversation is so cute!
Two beautiful souls sleeping peacefully!
Sumo patiently explained him about Nirmala!
What was at the end? Don't say shravan is met with an accident!
Continue soon!

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Posted: 8 years ago
#46
Hey Preeti...🤗
Ur title is beautiful yaar...!!!It one of my favourite songs...❤️
So for the first time ANUKULGR8 is unressing on time..😆😆
I had read the first part before par comment nahi kiya tha..
aaj phirse padhna shuru kiya tab yaad aaya ke ye already padha hai😆😉
Loved both the parts...
Beautifully penned..!!!👏👏
I juz love the way u write yaar...Spellbounding..!!❤️
Beautifully penned dialogues..
Shravan's permission from the moon...
Confession was too cute and beautiful...👏
I loved the second part the most..
Pyaar aache aacho ko pagal kar deta hai..Aur yaha toh besharam kar diya..😆😆
Padosi☺️ Meri tubelight bhi baad mey jali..😆
ShraMan convo about nimmo
❤️
Sumo convinced him so beautifully..
Aagar bas chalta toh pura convo yaha Highlight kar deti...😳
SharMan terrace convo was also beautifully peened...👏👏
Aur ye kya???!!!!!Shravan ko kya hua???Accident???
Plz usko sahi salamat karhna preeti...
Update sooonish...
Luv ya..
ANU😳

Edited by anukulgr8 - 8 years ago
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Posted: 8 years ago
#47
Wonderful update!
But what happened to Shravan?
Aise suspense pe chod dhiya...
So update soon!!!
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Posted: 8 years ago
#48
Oh my pretty priti!! Kya moda hai aapne. 🤗

Great that you are extending your beautiful OS. And tera gaana to haaye. .

Tumhara Shravan to unstoppable hai bhai!!😳 Hee hee 😆

But good the way dalmata situation is being handled.👏

Ye end me kya dirama ho raha hai?? U got shravan into what?? Agar shravan ko kuch ho gaya na to forum me jina mushkil kar denge tumhara😡

Awesome update and SS bana diya 🥳 bas updates ke liye na tarsana jaldi se batana ki Shravan ko kya hua!! 😭

Thanks for listening to your readers and obliging to the request in your super sweet style 🤗
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Posted: 8 years ago
#49
RES Priti.
Will UNRES soon ;)
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Posted: 8 years ago
#50
Humara sanskari Shravan asanskari hogaya sumo ke pyar mai 😃 😉...
thank God ramu kaka ne apne bete ko bachha liya 😃. ...
Shravan even lied to his father 😃. .
Their emotional scenes are so beautiful adding to that your beautiful song...
Ek moment mai emotional, phir next moment mai jhagda, this is what I really like about ShraMan...
Sumo can't even say that she is his gf 😃
Good that sumo wants Shravan to talk to his Mother to clear out misunderstanding, only way he can start believing womens again.. . Also nice that Shravan instead of getting angry listen to sumo and agreed to meet nirmala..
But what happened at the end? Accident...
Continue soon

Love
Shrujani

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