SwaSan FF: Thinking with my Heart Chapter 3 - Page 1

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tootiefrootie11

@tootiefrootie11

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Posted: 9 years ago

#61

Lanny- this was the chapter I was waiting for. We had discussed the corresponding show epi at great length after all and had been unhappy with Swara firstly leaving there and then later not feeling awful regardless of what she thought of Sanskaar and however confused she was. This of course fixed that and showed the humane and compassionate Swara I have always admired. The one who would feel bad for anyone, even if she thought them a criminal. Really liked Swara's irritation with Sahil too but it was realistically balanced with the understandable mistaken belief she has in him as her friend and true well wisher. His delusional fantasies were appropriately creepy- yuck! But I found Swara's approach hit just the right note.

Great chapter I though:).

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Shru X

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...Penknife...

@...Penknife...

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Posted: 9 years ago

#62

I'm so happy seeing sensible Swara!

She has all her alarm bells in the right place. 😆

I was so pissed with Swara leaving a bleeding Sanskar on the ground and scurrying off with that creep Sahil.

I mean Swara wouldn't do that to anyone. She even forgave that sister who pushed her in a river on her wedding day. So swara not helping a poor helpless bleeding man is such a misfit.

I loved how you wrote of her guilt that part where she has a go at Sahil. Take that you.😡

Lovely update. 🤗

Edited by ...Penknife... - 9 years ago

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lucky.m

@lucky.m

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Posted: 9 years ago

#63

oh god Lanny

I cant thank you enough for this FF ..It makes total sense..The flow and essence of characters is intact they are behaving the way they should be, true to their nature👏👏⭐️

I am going to dump whatever track I have watched in SR thinking I had partial amnesia and I am going to stick to this FF and I am going to be in one dimensional mode on this..

Great going yaar ..looking forward for next chapter

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Lucky

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Sumi Roy

@LoveSonu2408

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Posted: 9 years ago

#64

Part 3 exactly u wrote d way wht i wntd 2 c in epis.
The heart conectn z thr.swara cn feel it.
Also swara gv bk jahil.he had no ri8 2tk any discion 4m her behalf.
I hadnt much prob with jahil scn as it ws requird & his charec ws tht only acc 2 trak bt ovrdse of his creepiness,touchy scn,roaming around evrywhr with swara whn thr ws no scn of swasan cosmic conectn tht irritated me more.
Very well written.love it.
Thnks 4 pm.updt soonish.

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krishuuuuuuuuuu

@krishuuuuuuuuuu

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Posted: 9 years ago

#65

Lanny dear...

Chapter 3 was superb...im glad u portrayed kind side of swara unlike in show where she was all rude n heartless .in Ml track...felt good seeing her worried for sansku..not directly..but was worried...

Well im not fond of sahil..his obsession scares me...how suddenly someone loves u soo much n thinks that ur his private property..showing full authority over that person..it gives me chills...

Overall very good..waiting for more

Talia

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Aheli

@iam_aheli_98

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Posted: 9 years ago

#66

Hi Shruti,😊
Part 3 was amazing.👏 Even I was shocked when Swara was not affected with Sahil hitting Sanskar with a rod in the show.😭 But I'm so happy that u portrayed it here, and so beautifully and perfectly.😉 Felt good that though indirectly, Swara was worried for Sanskar,😳 unlike in the show where they showed Swara as a rude and heartless towards Sanskar after her ML.😭 And Sahil!!😡 He is totally mental and psycho!!! I really hate this obsession thing...!!!🤢 Update soon.😳 And thanks for the pm.😃
With love,
Aheli.

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Cogito_Ergo_Sum

@Cogito_Ergo_Sum

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Posted: 9 years ago

#67

Originally posted by: CogitoErgoSum
Shruti...🤗

Dear, I'm just loving the fast flow of chapters.🤗 A chapter (or more) a day, keeps the doctor, and fury at deadwood away. 😉 😆

Ok, actually----only keeps the doctor away. Can't keep fury at deadwood at bay, even if I try! (Which I am not...😳 😈)

Res for now. Will un res asap---may be tomorrow yaar. I need to write out the outline for Chap 5 of "Postern" asap and post within this week; as I have loads of commitments July 4th to 15th. But I will be back soon---pakka!

Loads of Love,

---Viji

Shruti 🤗

Please bear with this delay for un res'ing. Will try my best that it doesn't happen for the subsequent chapters. 🤗

What I love the most about your writing is the way you imbue an emotional depth to the light moments you portray; as well as give a light touch to the poignant, emotional moments. 😊 It's like having the best of both worlds. And your wit and sarcasm...😆 😆 Superb.

Loved the fact that Swara here is feeling so bad at seeing Sanskaar bleeding from that cut that ##@@$$$#@$$ inflicted on him. Deadwood 😡🤢 Though she is confused and bugged with herself for being concerned about her "khooni", at least, that undeniable connect and empathy is there.

I just loved the transition you made from Swara thinking that Sahil was an angel...and a minute later, not wanting to speak to him since she was so angry with him. 😆 She steadily grew more irritated when he called 18 times!!! 😆 No Swara, he CANNOT get the message. That's why he is what he is!!!

She defended her irritation with Sahil saying that he was so angelic, he shouldn't have sullied his hands with a khooni. 😡🤢 But I get a feeling this is her defense mechanism talking. She is bugged with Sahil for daring to hit Sanskaar, period. That too, in a cowardly, lily livered manner, hitting from behind!!! Ugh!!!

Sahil touching Swara's lips on that image in his projector...😕😲 I want Sanskaar to give him 2 black eyes...for daring to look at HIS Swara like that. Man, I SO want Sanskaar to beat him up!!!

Lovely work as always yaar. Waiting for the next chappie.

Loads of Love

Viji

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Tardis

@DreamOfEndless

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Posted: 9 years ago

#68

Originally posted by: The.Lannister

I have been pretty vocal about how disappointed I was with this track & how SwaSan, Swara & Sanskaar were shown in this track. So this is how I would have liked them to show our dear couple. Thanks for liking my efforts Tia.

I have seen some posts where you described your points. Initially, I didn't want to lose hope without seeing where it is going. But then your fears turned true, they completely destroyed a beautiful story. Right now, even I am disappointed. The point is not that Swara will regain her memory, but the point is how the memory loss change and affect Swara and Sanskar's relationship. What if Swara didn't regain her memory? Was their relationship strong enough to withstand that tsunami? It was all confused and mixed up sequence. I felt I was served a juicy fruit, it was forcefully put in my mouth and then taken away before I could savor it's taste (no pun intended).

Anyways, Unresed on page-7 😊

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Tardis

@DreamOfEndless

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Posted: 9 years ago

#69

Hi Shruti🤗

I am in awe of Sanskar's ability of bearing pain and agony, his courage to fight with it no matter what and never letting go of his love. Seriously, hats off to him👍🏼. If I had to go through even 5% of such agony and pain, I know I wouldn't have stood anywhere near. I find this quality of him very inspiring. What is he build of? The only thing he believed in is Swara's promise - that they would be together no matter what - and that gave him so much courage. I loved that when Sanskar saw Swara with Sahil in the park, he wasn't jealous to see them together, it kind of shows how secure Sanskar feels about SwaSan bond. Moreover, Sanskar was never a possessive kind of guy.

How his mind cannot stop his heart to reach out to Swara just once more, and once more. Even infinite number of glances at Swara would not be enough for him. And Swara naturally senses him around her. Shruti, you draw the cosmic connection so beautifully here. I love you for this🤗

I hate Sahil for hitting Sanskar. What does he think of himself? 😡 I agree to Sanskar's inferences about Sahil he made at the end and I remember you making the same inferences when that OLV came out... I loved the line 'She was my wife well before she was your friend and she was myfriend well before you even knew she existed.' Well said!👏 Now Sahil would know what happens when you get off on the wrong foot with Sanskar Maheshwari😎

The comment on next chapter is coming soon. 😊

- Tia

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Tardis

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Posted: 9 years ago

#70

Hi once again😳😆

(chapter - 3) This is exactly what I wanted to see in the episode. Why don't you replace the SR "creatives"?😉😆

Swara was so angry, frustrated and irritated; and she could tell at what! She left a wounded Sanskar on the road convincing her mind that maybe it served him right, but her heart wrenched and cried bitterly at her soulmate's pain. I wish I had got this Swara onscreen as well😭...

I see that you have started Sahil obsession right away, calling Swara 19th time! I am glad that Swara has also started to call Sahil a khooni😆. It should be a wake up call for Sahil as she is capable of making anyone a khooni...🤣 Okay, jokes apart! Well, honestly as a SwaSan shipper (to be specific) I didn't like when she said Sahil is more important than Sanskar. But then if I analyse deeply, those were just words. Actually, she was extracting a promise of Sanskar's safety from Sanskar's biggest enemy (right now). Well done Swara👍🏼... Maybe her sub-conscious mind directed her to do it. She may not agree that Sanskar is important for her, but her heart knows better😉

Thank you for writing so beautiful chapters. I am now eagerly waiting for the next part.

Thanks for PM😊

- Tia

Edited by dreamy.tiara - 9 years ago