SwaSan FF: Thinking with my Heart Chapter 3 - Page 1

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Seems to be a good and promising sorry line..can't wait to read the story..
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Hey shruti... amazing start... looking forward to it... add me in your queue... I'm very much disappointed...

With love...

Kam..
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Originally posted by: svg98

Seems to be a good and promising sorry line..can't wait to read the story..
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Have updated the first chapter. Do let me know if you liked it😳
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Originally posted by: Vaiyambar...

Hey shruti... amazing start... looking forward to it... add me in your queue... I'm very much disappointed...

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Kam..


Thank You Kam

Yes I hope this story soothes your disappointed soul & I am able to do better justice to our beloved characters than the CVs
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Res 😊
Will un res tomorrow Shruti dear. 🤗

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Hi Shruti dear
🤗🤗

Had read Part 1 yesterday, and had a lovely Monday morning reading part 2 as well. 😊 Just loved your portrayal of what was going through Sanskaar's mind, his emotions at being doubted by Swara, being accused to attempting to murder her.

In Part 1, I absolutely loved his focus and concern on his wife, the fact that he genuinely believed she had just mistaken him for Rajat, in a hysterical, Post traumatic stress disorder type of reaction. Maybe he was shoving away those doubts and fears into the back of his mind, but it would genuinely have never crossed his mind, that HIS Swara, could think that he could kill her.

That lovely touch, of Swara feeling comforted bu his presence, by his touch, when she was still semi conscious. Obviously, when her conscious mind did not have the opportunity to assert its mistaken conclusions, the truth within her subconscious came to the fore. That she loved this man, and that he adored her. That he would treat her with so much tenderness and care, and she could trust him absolutely, even with her life on the line.

Sadly, the moment she recovers full consciousness, the misunderstanding rears its head again, and its back to "khooni, khooni" jaap. 😕 I feel for her, really. But my heart breaks even more, seeing Sanskaar's state... 😭

Part 2 was a lovely little treat---very poignant indeed. The way Sanskaar just wanted his family to leave him be, as he sorted out the bewildering maelstrom of feelings within him. How he was trying so hard to rationalize Swara's thoughts, at convincing himself that all she needed was some time and space to recover her memories; to get over her knee jerk terror of him. But despite all this, there was a corner of his courageous, large heart; which was so broken at the fact that Swara could think this of him. Which felt so devastated, that she had recovered certain memories of her weak kneed father; her friend-discovered-to-be-half sister who'd really tried to kill her (twice!), but for him---she had just this one, incomplete, misunderstood, memory.

The whole scene of Sanskaar being unable to resist standing behind the tree and gazing at Swara, was so well written. Conveyed his sheer yearning for her and the inherent pathos in the situation. And then Sahil...😡 Each time I think of him hitting Sunny on the head with that metal rod, I SO want to see Sunny bashing him up in the serial. Like, serious bashing up---resulting in a broken nose, a few teeth coming lose, a couple of black eyes, and perhaps even a broken lower jaw? 😡 😉

Good that Sunny has come to suspect Sahil---or at least, feel that his behavior is rather odd. There were loads of things about Mr Wood which never added up----and a person as sharp as Sunny would surely catch on to that fact.

Lovely start, looking forward to Part 3. 🤗

Love,

---Viji


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Lanny xoxo

Had to break my self imposed exile to read this ofcourse:). Love the start already! As you know we had endless discussions on what could have been so really looking forward to read this. I like the first chapter as it sets the tone for what promises to be touching and soulful and what I think most really wanted to see in terms of the heart v mind battle from Swara and Sanskaar's reactions tailored just so:). Will be back for more and try to comment as much as I can (as you know I'm sworn to stay offline for now!) xoxo

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