|TwiNj SS - Dooriyan-Nazdikiyan| Chapter 3 -Page 6 [30/5]

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Hey Guys!
Well I am here with an FF. I am not going to blabber much. But before starting, I would like to thank Zawra Di for posting that she wanted to read something like Rags Di's 'The Heart Brings You Back'. I know that my story won't be as amazing as Ragini Di's story but I'll try my best. I would love it if I could get constructive comments 😳.

I was thinking of posting it later when I have at least 5 chapters ready but then the rumours made me hurry... I definitely want Sid aka Kunj to be imagined while you read this. Then again it is your choice.

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Chapter 3 - Link to Page 6
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As I said this is a quick one and I am not sure for myself if all the tense is correct. I'll surely edit all the mistakes once I get time.

Chapter 1


As I got down the plane and closed my eyes, the Amritsari air rushed into my lungs. It was long since I breathed this air. This air had memories- good, bad and worst. I flinched as a series of events flashed across my mind. I breathed slowly and opened my eyes. 'I am here, not to reminiscence her memories, but for an important contract.' I reminded myself.

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I walked down the aisles and gates. After picking up my luggage, I proceeded outside. The hustle-bustle made me feel home. After all, this is my home. No one, I repeat no one can change this, how much ever wrong they do to me.
I sighed. Even after 5 years her memories and her betrayal don't leave me.
The moments spent with her are day-dreams, while her betrayal remains a nightmare.

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"Sir, you want a taxi sir?" The taxi driver's question brought me back to reality. I don't know how long I had been standing there, thinking about her.

"No kaka, I am sure my brother must be sending someone to pick me up." I smiled at the old man. He seemed disappointed but smiled back. I knew what I had to do.

I walked a few feet away and dialled Anand Bhaiya's number. He picked it up instantly.

"Hello Bhaiya?"

"Yes Kunj?" came his reply.

"Who's coming to pick me up?"

"Uh, Kunj, the car had a punctured tyre.. But no worries! It's repaired and the driver must be reaching there anytime." he reassured me.

I grinned, "No need Bhaiya. Ask him to take a U-turn and go back home. I'll come home."

"Are you sure Kunj?" he sounded confused. Maybe even amused.

"Yes I am Bhaiya." and I hanged up before he could question me.

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I walked up to the taxi driver once again.
"Kaka, could you ride me home. The car I was supposed to ride, broke down." I smiled.

I was returned a very warm smile, "Sure beta."

I quickly sat in the taxi followed by Kaka taking his seat on the wheel. He smiled and ignited the engine while I looked out of the window. I had missed this place a lot and looking through the window was an amazing option.

As the car came to life, I saw a woman hug a little girl, probably her daughter. The girl looked so happy. I smiled automatically. But then I received the shock of my life which instantly snatched the smile from my face. The woman turned and she looked like Twinkle. No, no! She was Twinkle.

"Stop the car." The words were out of my mouth before I realised. The car screeched to halt.

"Is there any problem?" Kaka looked behind with worry etched on his forehead.

I shook my head to clear the thoughts. "No. It's ok. Start the car."

"Sure?" He still looked worried.

I plastered a smile. "Yes I am."

He gave a reassured smile and started the car again. I sighed.

Was that Twinkle? It looked so. But...
She can't have a daughter! Or can she...
All kinds of thoughts clouded my mind. She really cheated on me? my brain questioned.
But she had tried calling. my heart justified.

NO! I cleared my thoughts. It doesn't matter any more. We have stayed apart for 5 years. I can stay away for the rest of my life. Once the contract papers are signed and our divorce is done, I will leave for to London and never turn back.

You have lived away from her for the past 5 years, yes. But did you forget, how difficult each second has been? my heart whispered but I ignored it and drifted to sleep.

After about an hour, Kaka woke me up.
"Beta we've reached."

I woke up with a start. I had been dreaming about Twinkle once again.

As I got down, my eyes first went to the Taneja Mansion. The gates were open. My heart wanted to jump there and meet Twinkle. I clenched my fist and controlled myself. I paid Kaka when he spoke "Beta, I wish that nothing wrong happens to you, and you live happily forever. I hope that you get success in whatever work you are here for." He smiled and kept a hand on my head.

I looked at him with a raised eyebrow. He laughed and said, "I have seen the world a lot more than you. I also know that you yourself told your driver to not come."

I smiled sheepishly. He helped me carry my luggage to the gates and then left. I watched him go. It felt great to see someone happy.

If only I could stay happy. If only, my reason of happiness had not become the reason of my despair...

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I hope that the chapter was bearable 😆 (Okay, it was. I know I am not that bad 😛) Thanks for reading. I would love to get precious feedback.
Anyone interested to receive PMs, please Buddy me and like this post. Easy for me until I fond some other method.

Until next chapter, Ciao!
Regards,
Krishi

P.S. The whole story will be from Kunj's POV. I might write a spin-off from Twinkle's point of view, but that is far.

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Posted: 9 years ago
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amazing start Krishi. loved it. pls continue soon
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Posted: 9 years ago
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omg krishi i loved it!
you wrote kunj so well! the emotions he felt coming back, the memories trying not to remember her, trying to force himself to think that he's not back for her! everything was amazing!
continue soon! thanks for the pm!
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ohhh ...its sooo amazing yaara...
i loved it...lemme say kunjs emotions were potrayed soo beautifully...his inner conflicts everything..everything was perfect of the first chap...even i am intrigued to know who was that little girl...do continue sooon ...waiting to see twinj reunion..atleast in this...
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hey krish it is just amazing finally i have found an oasis in the desert
krish i just loved it dear
plzzz do continue soon
and do pm me😃
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Posted: 9 years ago
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How I wish this hadn't ended so early, I'm going to sound so greedy but please make the next chapter longer 😆Loving this already, update soon dude!
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It was amusing dude...
Hnstly spkng , i wntd to read smthng lyk tht ...
U ve done a wndrfull job...lvd it to the core
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Originally posted by: Sherni_Jerry

amazing start Krishi. loved it. pls continue soon



Thanks.. I will 😳
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Originally posted by: ...Shakti...

omg krishi i loved it!

you wrote kunj so well! the emotions he felt coming back, the memories trying not to remember her, trying to force himself to think that he's not back for her! everything was amazing!
continue soon! thanks for the pm!



Thanks.. 😳
I am working on the next one 😃

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