ARSHI OS - Arranged for her , Love for him - Page 2

Originally posted by: anjs

Liked theOs, but not the fact that he loved sheetal deeply n she dumped him, had it been some other girl, it wudnt have mattered. But the name sheetal in arshi story makes me cringe, n him in love with her is indegestible.

Anyways, rest all was good, initially i thought mayb he ws in love with Khushi only, n some MU happened. But no, it had to be sheetal the bitch

Originally posted by: shalini.ranjan

Jayeeta yaar... first of all, sorry for such a 'late' unres, but you probably know why 😉

So sweet of you to dedicate it to me, but like I said, this OS is your baby... my idea was just the beginning and the end... 😆

I liked the way you spun the background of Arnav & Khushi... really didnt expect that Arnav was in love with Lavanya... I was amazed to see that twist (and a couple others too!)

Coming to the main part, 'ahem ahem'; was that really Arnav teasing Khushi? hehe, never expected that! You did bring forth Khushi's nervousness nicely and also the way Arnav handled things with her, taking everything slow while still giving Khushi the space she wanted. Good job there! 👏

Since you did ask for an honest criticism, I would tell you this... when I had started reading this OS, you have written everything in the 'present tense' ... I could literally visualize everything playing out in front of me, but then suddenly sometimes the usage of 'past tense' in the middle, it kinda caught me off-guard, like disrupted my flow of reading... but apart from that; I totally enjoyed the OS, it was a pleasant read... do write more OS'es ⭐️

Originally posted by: tuli_jayee

Hey Shalu, first of all thank you that you liked it. After all it's for you. & really thank you for your honest opinion. & I would be definitely more cautious, while writing any story next time. & I guess by Lavanya, you meant Sheetal.