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Hey Bubble...
Once again, an excellent duo of chapters (14 & 15). I loved how Sanskaar had so thoughtfully arranged tickets for the concert; which he knew Swara would love to go to.
And his much awaited outburst, though a controlled and relatively genteel one to Swara, asking why every conversation of theirs has to revolve around Ragini and Lakshya! 😛 Priceless! At least Swara is slowly getting the message, that now with RagYa putting their life together on track, her monitoring and analysis and overweening concern about them is no longer needed or even appropriate.
I just loved the the SwaSan conversation on the terrace. He apologizes for his minor outburst, she sunnily says it's fine, and when he says he feels utterly jealous at her preoccupation; I liked the way you had made Swara as "in a small voice", if Sanskaar was jealous of Lakshya. It came through very clearly, that ot bothers her if Sanskaar doubts her, or thinks she could still be harboring romantic feelings for Lakshya. But the way he said he's jealous of Swara's devoted focus on Ragini, sure must have made Swara think a lot.
That little nuance was wonderfully put; how Sanskaar feels it would be so nice to be the centre of Swara's thoughts, indeed her very existence; and the way Swara reassures him, that her focus on Ragini is because Ragini's life is causing her no end of worry, but Sanskaar provides her with all the answers!! 😊
THe next chapter was great too. An interesting twist about Ragini's latent past insecurities slowly coming out, as she gets comfortable and secure with Lakshya to confide in him. Seeing Swara so comfortably leaning back against Sanskaar's leg seems to have awakened Ragini's jealousies at her cossetted, suppressed upbringing. So she seems to have been very jealous indeed, of Swara's friendship with Debabrata! 😉 My guess is, that Ragini had a monster sizes crush on Debabrata, who didn't ever notice her, and was just pals with Swara. Ragini's insecurities vis a vis Swara must have started right then; exacerbated by Lakshya's snapping off of their engagement and falling in "love"/ infatuation with Swara.
Great work with maintaining a very different storyline from the serial. You have fleshed out both Ragini and Lakshya much better than we get to see on TV!
Looking forward to chap 16, dear.
Once again, an excellent duo of chapters (14 & 15). I loved how Sanskaar had so thoughtfully arranged tickets for the concert; which he knew Swara would love to go to.
And his much awaited outburst, though a controlled and relatively genteel one to Swara, asking why every conversation of theirs has to revolve around Ragini and Lakshya! 😛 Priceless! At least Swara is slowly getting the message, that now with RagYa putting their life together on track, her monitoring and analysis and overweening concern about them is no longer needed or even appropriate.
I just loved the the SwaSan conversation on the terrace. He apologizes for his minor outburst, she sunnily says it's fine, and when he says he feels utterly jealous at her preoccupation; I liked the way you had made Swara as "in a small voice", if Sanskaar was jealous of Lakshya. It came through very clearly, that ot bothers her if Sanskaar doubts her, or thinks she could still be harboring romantic feelings for Lakshya. But the way he said he's jealous of Swara's devoted focus on Ragini, sure must have made Swara think a lot.
That little nuance was wonderfully put; how Sanskaar feels it would be so nice to be the centre of Swara's thoughts, indeed her very existence; and the way Swara reassures him, that her focus on Ragini is because Ragini's life is causing her no end of worry, but Sanskaar provides her with all the answers!! 😊
THe next chapter was great too. An interesting twist about Ragini's latent past insecurities slowly coming out, as she gets comfortable and secure with Lakshya to confide in him. Seeing Swara so comfortably leaning back against Sanskaar's leg seems to have awakened Ragini's jealousies at her cossetted, suppressed upbringing. So she seems to have been very jealous indeed, of Swara's friendship with Debabrata! 😉 My guess is, that Ragini had a monster sizes crush on Debabrata, who didn't ever notice her, and was just pals with Swara. Ragini's insecurities vis a vis Swara must have started right then; exacerbated by Lakshya's snapping off of their engagement and falling in "love"/ infatuation with Swara.
Great work with maintaining a very different storyline from the serial. You have fleshed out both Ragini and Lakshya much better than we get to see on TV!
Looking forward to chap 16, dear.
Cricket
