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Mirabell

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Posted: 10 years ago

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Ok.. I should have it up in a few hours folks.. I need to edit it just a bit. Have been writing till the very last minute. Now I am waiting for the verdict from my two very gorgeous editors. ❤️

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You can do it...

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Waiting waiting waiting ...

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Arshi67

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Posted: 10 years ago

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My Dearest Mirabell, you always overwhelm me with the generosity of your unstinting praise. Thank you so much for your kind recommendation 🤗

"The ephemeral morning mist rose to meet its warmth in swirls against the dawn light"

"Those orange rays of light held in their tenuous hold, rays of hope for the new day, as if the sins of the night's past washed away and the new day offered itself a second chance"

Mirabell, I'm in danger of quoting the entire beginning of your chapter here! I love love love these lines. For me, it speaks so much about the story itself. The fragility of life, the burgeoning of a new hope, the darkness of the night being gently dissipated.

Arnav and Maya share such a lovely friendship. Silently, unobtrusively, offering and receiving reassurance. There's a deep sense of comfort between them which you bring out so well. As you did with Naniji feelings. She may not understand their friendship, but it doesn't affect her warmth for Maya. A gracious and dignified lady.

You could see just how much strength Maya draws from Kailash. His faith in her ability to draw herself away from her demons, giving her the impetus to do just that. His presence, his words the assurance she needs.

Meera and Mohan are just simply the most adorable. Mohan opening up slowly is an absolute delight to read. Those tiny imperceptible steps he takes, captured by you beautifully.

Khushi's remorse at her unthinking hurtful accusation at Arnav was so well brought out. Seeing his generosity of spirit in continuing to care for Meera, must make that feeling of regret so much more acute. I love how you show that subtle weakening in Arnav at her tears before he closes up again. His big heart, ready to absorb it all. But those jagged pieces of it lying around them are painful to witness.

Jane Subah Se Shaam Tak, Dil Ke Kitne Tukde Hote Hain,

Aur Bikhre Hue Un Tukdo Par, Mere Ashq Girte Hote Hain...

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Jignasha

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Posted: 10 years ago

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The intensity of this chapter screamed with every scene. And no matter how many times I have read it, I am left with a broken heart. It hurts. Really hurts to see all of the characters where they stand today.

Wrong or right... who are we to judge? There is so much at stake for every one of them. It's easier said than done.

It seems Maya has found her second chance with an understanding husband. Who has been by her side. But her feelings for Arnav, wanting happiness for him, shows how deep their relationship is. One of friendship and love. And like any friend, she doesn't want to see him hurt. He comes first, and always will when making sure his heart isn't broken.

You had me rooting for Arnav in this chapter... Yes I said it out loud, "Go Arnav!" I loved the fact he did not back away from Meera. He is well aware, no can take the place of her "Appa". But they have connected in way, that turning away from Meera is almost like betraying her... YKWIM?

The scene on the bed with him reading "Little Prince", which btw is one of my favorite children's book because of my little prince K. That scene had me going awe, many times over. Loved it!

But what I loved the most in this entire chapter, was Mohan... I told you when you first introduced him to us, he is my jaan. And to see him improving with Meera around, almost makes me feel like a proud parent. My heart swelled as he leaned closer to his Papa or even the fact he voluntarily changed his schedule. That in itself is HUGE step for him. There is hope, and I am hanging on to it for him... bas!

Khushi is a lost soul with guilt piguing at her to want happiness, love and to live her life. Until she finds herself and looks deeply inside her, nothing can happen. It is up to her to want it, as much others around her. Sigh. We have a long way to go...

But my dear SS, I am bracing myself for what I believe will be toughest part of this journey coming up next. You have set the stage and I am waiting with bated breathe.

Truly amazing is Second Chances, and you!

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BlueMystique

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Posted: 10 years ago

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Dear MB,

"Why is there ever this perverse cruelty in humankind, that makes us hurt most those we love best?"
Jacqueline Carey, Kushiel's Chosen

Maya's care for her gentle giant is endearing to see. And Kailash's silent support, with the occasional reassurances, are equally beautiful to me. You write about good people, MB. You write about bad things happening to good people, and the villian of your story is fate and it's cruelty. It is very hard to make a story interesting without showing the contrast of good vs evil and you have managed that without introducing any negative characters at all!

I don't know who I hurt for more, Khushi or Arnav. I understand Khushi's reluctance to let Arnav get too close. Once bitten, twice shy. She took a risk loving NK, letting someone have that power over her life, after having lost her parents, and to have lost him to the cruel twist of fate...no wonder she is reluctant to take this second chance offered to her. And in her attempt to distance herself, she hurt the one person she never wanted to cause any hurt to. But such is life. We only seem to end up hurting people that we deeply care about.

I hope Khushi wins her battles against her inner demons, and takes the hand Arnav has extended towards her. But I know there's a ways to go before that happens, and until then, I wish our gentle giant the patience of a saint and his heart, the armor of a warrior.

Can't wait for the next update!

Love,
Ridz

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Shyamala

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Posted: 10 years ago

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Yay!

It was a very emotional update to read and I was actually crying by the end of it but for the life of me I can't figure out who I was crying for - Arnav , Khushi maybe Maya even ? There were parts of the update that I felt guilty like I was actually eavesdropping on a couple at their most private moment.

I actually felt the pain of both Khushi and Arnav and Maya's too. The more I get to know Maya the more I like her. It's sad how we invariably always hurt the person close to us the most and so easily. I hope Khushi will be able to win over her fight with herself and be able to take her second chance with Arnav. Her fears and insecurities seem too deep rooted and her unfortunate experiences in life just cemented it I guess.

I can't wait for the next update now, you made us so emotionally involved that now this is all I can think about. I hope all is well and fine at your end! Thank you for being the writer you are and brightening our lives with your beautiful story!

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Manasa

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Posted: 10 years ago

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It was the brightest of the stars indeed! I will take it that the darkest moments are a necessary and a worthy price to pay for that😉.

And what price are our protagonists paying. Maya wants to say it but it's not her place to say, Khushi somehow always ends up saying the wrong things and Arnav is not even sure what to say and when to say. Ah, the intricacies of human mind, always goes the extra mile in wishing but somehow manages to fall short in acting on those wishes.

I can probably call this a stalemate situation but then there is a kid whose innocence does not distinguish between the love she feels in the memories of her dead father and the love that is a reality in the companionship of her mother's friend. And then there is the purity of another kid whose offer of not going to school, brings smiles to faces of many. Aren't these reasons enough to make it all work? I am not even sure who to feel bad for or sad for now😭

Loved every bit of chapter - from Maya's well deserved Thank you's to her judicious advice, Khushi's acceptance to her confession, Arnav's broken heart to his reluctant/adamant heart. It was hard to read so I can only imagine how hard it was to write.

A bit eager now to see how long this cycle of cynicism is going to continue. But, I am also getting ready for the long drive in the dark tunnel.

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