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"Chains do not hold a marriage together. It is threads, hundreds of tiny threads which sew people together through the years" - Simone Signoret

Hello everyone!


So I am back with my second story, Revealed! A warm welcome to my old and new readers, as we embark on this new journey. It was your love and support, that has brought me back here once more. This is nothing like my previous story, Stripped, but I do promise one hell of a ride! Will you join me on this roller coaster?

Here's something I would like to call out that will be different for Revealed, the size of the updates... I have been challenged to keep my fingers under control, meaning the update has to be less than 5000 words. For those who know me, this is quite the challenge, but I have accepted it whining and screaming! My challenger will be revealed should I go over the count... a challenge is a challenge... Bring it on!


Please note, the dimaag will continue to work the way it has, the challenger was kind enough to let me use it to its max capacity...

The story...

Marriage is built on love, trust, friendship, compromise and faith... but what happens to the relationship when a couple forgets these key fundamentals?

This journey is about a couple who has been married for over nine years and have reached a crossroad. Will they work on fixing their broken marriage? Or will they choose to go their separate ways?



Updates/Alerts:

Updates will be once a week depending on my hectic AD, but I will do my best! I will send out a PM's or follow me on twitter @Chokri_ASR

Please buddy me if you wish to receive PMs when I update.

Feel free to silently read, like or comment, everyone is welcomed!

The blog is also up for Revealed, if you refer reading there. CLICK HERE


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Index:


Prologue - Posted below


Chapter 1


Chapter 2


Chapter 3


Chapter 4


Thread Two

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Posted: 10 years ago
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Edited by Chokri_ASR - 9 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
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I freaking love you damnit! This makes me so happy!





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This makes me so very, very happy. You make me so very, very happy! I'm so glad you took your challenger on for this, remind me to thank them, okay?


Your Arnavs are always so hot. Sigh. And yet, I never receive them for my birthday- disappointed hoon, meri jaan. 😆 I love how they always go after what they want- it's incredibly, incredibly appealing. (btw, R, died of laughter at the "worthy of SRK's cool chain")


Swooning aside- I really like how Khushi backtracks when she starts to tell her assistant to bring it to Arnav, and switches to "my husband". There's a formality in it, and it shows the distance between them so well. I like how you've shown Khushi retreating into herself here. It's such a departure from Stripped, where they confronted things head on, and it'll be interesting to see how that develops.


Their argument was so brutal- I was almost wincing as I read it. Arnav's anger and Khushi's determination to not let that affect her- this will be quite the combination. What a contrast to that memory. Is it bad that I'm almost looking forward to their arguments? 😆 It's just that the writing in them is so sharp- you don't hesitate to make them throw words at each other, and it brings out the fury and everything else that comes together to create that atmosphere.


Speaking of atmosphere- you've done a fantastic job here building it up. Really, truly fantastic- I'm damn impressed. I always am with you, but this- the atmosphere, the emotions... everything here is drawn out so well. It makes us feel along with them.


I'm so proud of you.


Love you always,
Your Choti :)
Edited by chotidesi - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
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A very excited me :)

Unres'd with no sign of any of that excitement abating!


Welcome back my darling! This promises to be quite a story. Your ability to understand people has always been your forte so I'm really looking forward to seeing how, or even whether, they resolve their seemingly intractable differences. It's reached the point of divorce ... I know that you will do full justice to exploring each of the fundamentals you mentioned about marriage.

A strong Khushi has always been one of the mainstays in your narratives and I'm happy to see that remains. It appears she's hurting at taking this step, seeking refuge in anger even while berating herself for inflicting her mood on others. Her questioning herself, her looking into herself beautifully portrayed by you. All the bittersweet thoughts swirling through her mind very poignantly written.

The picture you've painted of this Arnav is perfectly swoon worthy. I already love him! I'm not taking any sides here, just that he's so ... umm ... totally worthy of SRK's "cool" chain.

Lavanya seems to be a good friend of both of them. I love the monickers you've given them, denoting the warm affection Arnav has for her and her kids.

Silence is not always golden. Not when the end result could mean putting asunder that which God has joined together.

So, will Arnav fight for that which is "not over"?

I've loved the way you've introduced them to us, now waiting to get to know them better :)

Edited by Arshi67 - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
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🤗 Ruchi
Yay Jigs.

Angst from you, Jigs!
This sure is different.
But this happens to so many married couples.
Do they have children?
I don't think so.
Could this one of the reasons for the break up?
I'll be waiting for you to reveal the story bit by bit.
Very interesting prologue.
Edited by 1chilly - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Me too...

Yes my dear, ready for my 5000 word roller coaster every week. Marriages are already roller coasters in some sense, but looks like you will be hanging them upside down too for the ride😉.

With a prologue this awesome, you are asking for sticking around? I will be getting the season pass on this one with box seats. On top pof that tail gaiting and after parties will be alag se as usual😃 .

Let me admit first that you spoilt us a lot with Stripped so please don't mind my comparisons with the classic. This one already feels like a kick in the guts compared to the peck on the cheek of Stripped. But, I know you will get us to the promised land and just for that I will brace myself for the hard blowsJ.

Now I realize how much I miss reading those descriptions. Your detailing to the level of the stripes on the shirt to the heel on the shoe - sigh, it's like a 3D movie where my hands are trying to reach out to themJ.

I personally like the zebra style (sorry, that is what I call it) storytelling, a black stripe to represent the current dark times and a white stripe to represent the past pleasant times. Don't worry, I am patient enough until I get to see my white elephant J.

Arnav seems to be the same old Arnav we can relate to. Charming, coinfident, angry and stubbornJ. But, where did the lashing Khushi come from? But, I like her new Avatar. Each new angle makes it that much more interesting. Lav is back and her usual self and looking forward to meet the Mathur's.

I know you just got started, but I already got my Tuesday planned for the next few months J. I know you will rock as usual, just make sure you don't rock the roller coaster too much J...BTW - I never got on a roller coaster in my life J

Great start babes...will be a great ride too

Edited by bhavali4RR - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
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meee

This is the only one roller coaster I want to ride..

The prologue has captured me totally..am already in love with blue eyed Arnav...

what a storyline Jigs..Architect - Lawyer combination is great..and the story is so non fiction..can happen with anyone we know..amazing..

looks like they dont have kids..may b thats the reason?????
Lavanya is married to Aman with two boys..

loving "Revealed" and YOU..
Edited by sman - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Welcome Back 🤗

So looking forward to another exciting story!!
Edited by inamajar - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
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What the! Unbelievable...
IF is not allowing me to reserve saying I have already posted!😡

😆

Interesting Jigs...
Looks like marriage crisis... Both seem to have sailed in a rut... and are just surviving and not thriving in their marriage...
Looks like both are in dire need of counselling to make them open up and discuss without biting the head off! Patience to listen seems to be missing...

The last part was really good Jigs...
How beautiful is to be silent when someone expects you to be enraged! Arnav Singh Raizada is one heck of a man who seems to have understood the power of silence in the nth moment... And Khushi knows that silence is the loudest cry.. for it conveys the hurt when she is ignoring him...

Jigs... May I sign off with...😉

😆
Edited by rulama - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
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You are back and I am hereto enjoy yet another roller coaster ride🥳.
Ok so something did not change- Attraction at first sight was there, is there and will be there😃

So one wants divorce 🥺 and other does not ❤️ meaning he will try to not have one and woo her back because ASR always gets what he wants. A man's attitude does not change with time😉

Will be excited to see the journey from attraction at first sight to war at first sight to again peace at first sight.

All the best for your new venture especially when you said you have a challenge too.
Edited by -Bhavi - 10 years ago

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