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Jignasha

@Chokri_ASR

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Posted: 10 years ago

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Arshi67

@Arshi67

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Posted: 10 years ago

#843

We're all a bit over excited 😉

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And I can see why!

What_the!!!! Seriously??? You're leaving us hanging there??? While you chuckle away surrounded by those glorious hues of blue ...

"Best of luck for tonight, Arnav"

Seemingly ordinary words elevated into poignancy by the words left unsaid but there nonetheless. Unspoken but understood. You've captured all those emotions so beautifully. I liked the way you've shown him introspecting. He needs to understand the part he's played in them reaching this point. It's only then that he can try to repair things. The love he saw in her eyes will act as a spur and a talisman.

Loved how you showed the contrast between the unbridled excitement spilling out of two of them at the getting of the contract and the culmination of it. No difference in the presence of it, just an inability and hesitancy to express it.

You've written Lavanya so well. She hasn't given up on the "out of reach closed book" her friend has become. Isn't that what a true friend does? Is there for you and with you regardless? I like the way she makes Khushi realise for herself what she wants. Giving advice is easy but understanding what your friend needs is what only a genuine friend can do. The more you show of their equation, the more I am in admiration of it.

Clever Arnav! Subtly telling her he wants her there. That promise he'd extracted of her all those years back still holding true for him. HIs wife, by his side. Her pride in her Arnav shining for all the world to see. Being Mrs Arnav Singh Raizada and not merely "playing" Mrs Arnav Singh Raizada.

Oh and that Alisha 😡 had better watch out. If Arnav's "shark" doesn't deal with her, I know my way to Chicago ... be afraid, be very afraid ...

I want Arnav's "Minutes of happiness courtesy of his happiness" to transmute into an eternity of happiness once again.

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Jay

@jduke

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Posted: 10 years ago

#844

As usual another amazing chapter Jigs 👏. Where did Kushi's insecurities stem from? Is there any back ground story that is yet to be revealed to us? Is Kushi not aware that Arnav hates infidelity?. Why is she so insecure? I love the way Arnav expressed his heart's desire by leaving invitation for Kushi to notice it and makeup her mind.

Looks like there is less communication and more confrontation and arguments between Arnav and Kushi past couple of years. Was work only reason for them to drift apart? Or something else?

I think before Kushi decides to leave from party Arnav will spot her or Lavanya may notice her or worse Alisha may see and call Kushi.

... Arnav and Kushi are lacking this...

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Meena

@chotidesi

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+ 5

Posted: 10 years ago

#845

"Her name slid off his lips"- I loved that line. It was tinged with sadness and so much wishing. That was how I felt like this chapter was- so much painful longing for things to be better, regretting lost chances.

The flashback and the sentence after it made my heart break for these two. It was such a beautifully sad contrast between the elation that he shared with her versus how he's so reticent about sharing it now, wondering if she would even want to know.

And yet- she's still proud of him. I loved that touch you added- despite all of the issues in their marriage, she knows how important this is to him and how hard he's worked. And she's proud of him- you show that in her actions, and in her words. The moment when she looks at the invitation, with its gold lettering- when she decides that this is about how proud she is of him... it was so genuine and honest.

Damn you, for ending this chapter there. I can't believe you did that to us! And I have to wait a whole week to find out what happens- I felt so bad for both of them in that moment. To have Khushi's happiness and pride in him shattered when she sees him sharing it with someone else... sigh. I just- I hope this won't be another lost chance.

Love always,

Choti :)

P.S.: Dear Alisha,

P.P.S: Oh, and this is for leaving us there.

😆

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Manasa

@ManKiBaath

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Posted: 10 years ago

#846

Finally your wish is coming true. Here is my story - A fisherman went fishing. As soon as he goes into the water he sees this nice golden fish. He liked it so much that started calling it "my shark". He then sets up a nice bait to make sure the golden fish (aka his shark) can see it clearly. The golden fish sees it and starts thinking should I go in or not? Alright, the story ends here😃.

Now you see, how it feels to end the chapter hanging us high and dry😉😉. I know, I know, intezaar aur sabr ka phal meetha hota hai per kya kare, itne intezaar mein bhook bhi tho lagta hai😃.

As usual, this chapter adds another jewel in crown for you. I am sure the crown should have got pretty heavy by now😊.

It is still amazing how your concoction of a story or a chapter always has a tinge of emotions, memories, relations and characters. Even Mia interests as a character and that is just a sample of the power you hold on your readers👏. Alright, as in your words "Let me not say anything more that will lead into ruining this moment".

Coming to chapter, looks like bottling up of their feelings and emotions is the only thing both have an agreement on. I really like the way how you capture and contrast what they want and what they cannot. It is pretty clear that both ignored each other at their suitable times to get it this far. I am not sure where those wedding promises have gone and how they got drifted apart (no points for guessing where my vote on the poll was😃)

Talking about promises, I am glad Khushi decided to keep the promise that matters. Most of the credit should go to Lavanya though, for doing what friends always do. As always those kind of friendships never need any promises to do what is right.

After all consultations in her head and just when we were ready to forget Khushi and see Mrs. Raizada, you have to drop in Alisha. I will reserve my judgements on Alisha until I hear further. But as for my Khushi, it's time for her to realize that the demons in her head are more dangerous than the devil in front.

Needless to say, how eager I am for the next update, this time your ending is giving me the extra impetus😊.

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sman

@sman

Inactive

Posted: 10 years ago

#847

res

I had got the first spot but didn't want to res wondering I will spoil Jig's res again :-)

I love this FFF game..we are crazy bunch of girls..

ab mai kya boloon? Jigs, tumne meri bolti band kardi :)

How insecure is Kushi..for a successful lawyer and a attractive lady who knows her husband loves her, she is very insecure..she should have stayed at the party.. there is Arnav's fault too..why is he so chipkooing with Alisha when he knows Kushi might walk in and how insecure she is..

more later..my heart broke at the last sentence..wonderful update Jigs..

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canapoem

@canapoem

Sparkler

+ 6

Posted: 10 years ago

#848

Jigs, another emotionally painful heart wrenching update.

I have decided that from here onwards before I start reading "Revealed" I am going to keep a tissue box next to me. And Jigs that is a compliment to you for your writing skills. Trust me there are so many sentences in this update which made me tear up.

There were so many moments in the beginning of this update where I wanted them to forget everything and just talk and share some nice memories from the past hoping that it would trigger them to open up to each other and share their sorrows. But atleast they did not fight. And when Arnav stood at the window and waved to her, I crossed my fingers hoping that she would turn back and wave too.. and I was so happy when she did.

So after his mother's death, he did withdraw himself into a shell drowning himself in work, was that the starting point to them drifting away??

When I read about their happier times, my heart aches even more for this couple.

The conversation between the friends La and Khushi was so heart touching. La is indeed like the best friend any girl would want, not interfering too much yet helping her friend make the right decisions.

I checked out the photos on your blog of the building and its architecture. It was amazing!!!

Ok now who is this Alisha??? I cannot take this suspense any more.

Why does Khushi feel that Arnav and Alisha make a better pair than her and Arnav??

And as much as I have read about Arnav, he does not like infidelity. And I dont think he loves Alisha.

And I really dont want to judge Alisha as a home wrecker immediately without knowing anything about her. But why is she clinging onto Arnav?

Oh man, and Khushi did not even meet him and is returning back to go home. I hope someone notices her presence and informs Arnav about it.

Jigs, now waiting for the next update more eagerly than ever.

A song which I thought for apt for them as of now:

[YOUTUBE]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=OOuNafeuNiM[/YOUTUBE]

Edited by canapoem - 10 years ago