NeiRa OS--Change ~Updated part 2 on page 6~

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<font size="2">Hello IKNMP members! I am surbhi, quite of a silent member here. I have written something on NeiRa, give it a shot :)

NeiRa OS--Change

Those mighty words spoken by him stumped her mind again. She was losing the ability to think, his behaviour towards her grandmother, his unpredictable apology to Dr. Aman and few hours back his backing for her infront of the society members was forcing her to think "good" about him. Since so many years she had avoided their memories but the very day Nachiket Khanna stepped into her house her mind and heart stopped listening to her! Isn't it unfair? She asked herself. All these years he stayed out and now he just came back...acted good for a while but now how does it matter? She made a face out of stress and walked into the washroom.
Ms. Ragini Patel, yes thats what her name plate read, she was single and independent, tough and going but life had taken a full U-Turn when his Ex-husband returned and over powered her senses with his magic touch. It was hard ignoring him. Really hard!

*Splash*
3 times she splashed cold water on her face and closed her eyes but alas to her unfortunate luck he returned.
Why its happening? She thought to herself. These 15 years he didn't cared for me and my children and now he's behaving like he is the best father? Crap! Nothing's gonna change!
She slowly kneeled down along the cabinet and tears started to roll down her eyes, she kept her knees close to her chest and rested his hands on her arms. She cried her heart out until her sobs went lighter and she sniffed.
She came out of the washroom and went into her room quietly, her gaze went onto her bag and she remembered about her daughter's wedding and she panicked for a second, next she was packing her bag when she held the red saree and fresh memories of nachiket and hers went rolling out, how he said blue and she took red. He takes pleasure in teasing her everytime and is so outspoken! Her mind drifted to those moments when she agreed for destination wedding just for him. But why?
Ragini! She mentally whacked herself for thinking about him, again for the third time of the day, first being at the table already!
Within minutes she packed her suitcase and went onto check at everyone, the bus could arrive any moment.
Ting! The doorbell rang and ragini made her way to open the door, her mind already thinking about the person who could be here any moment. She opened the door with a hoping-to-see-him expression but to her sad luck it was pappu panwala asking for his dress. She sighed and ensured him that he will get it by today itself. He was about to go when he again returned which irked ragini more and she almost forced him to leave.
Ting!
Bhaiya bola na mil jayega aapko! She yelled while opening the door and there was her man standing at the door in white shirt grey coat. And her words died in her mouth.
Their connection was so strong that it took many seconds for nachiket to realize that he is still standing outside. *Why to blame society people when we virtually are still together* he smiled at this thought and cleared his throat.
"Ahem Ahem"
Ragini blinked her eyes and soon her senses returned.
"Ragini i was just wondering ki tum ek chair bahar rakhwaalo...you know in case you forget about someone standing on the doorstep"
Nachiket teased her.

Ragini gave her a whatever expression and came inside the house leaving nachiket all smiling and entering with the same aura he's known for until he heard her counter attack.
"Its just a matter of few days, and i won't mind making people stand on my doorstep except my family" ragini spoke while preparing coffee in the kitchen. She then straightaway went into her room without looking at him.
Nachiket sat at the sofa while whispering to himself "Shayad isiliye Dr. Aman ko andar aane ki permission leni padti hai"

After 1 hour.
Everybody got seated in the bus and they started the journey towards karan's farmhouse. Ragini sat with Dr. Aman and likewise nachiket had to sit with nivedita. The journey was going perfect, agham and karan were in full marriage form and they made the atmosphere funny and light. Ragini and nachiket smiled at their jokes, looked at each other and consequently they got lost in the pool of romance. Watching each other smile was the best part nishi's wedding had got for them. They downcasted their eyes and diverted their mind in opposite directions.
It was evening time and the whole family decided to take a power nap as there was going to be no sleep for these five days. Nivedita purposely kept her head on nachiket's shoulder and drifted off to her beauty sleep while nachiket's eyes were stuck on the love of his life, ragini.
She was sleeping so innocently with her head tilted to the back that he got a sudden urge to go and kiss her rightaway, but somehow he controlled himself. Her serene face was the reason behind his uneven heartbeats...her light pink lips reminded him of their sleepless nights together. He blushed slightly at this thought.
Her long hair, though now tied in a bun, earlier they were always left open as he loved kissing them every minute he spent with her. He deeply sighed and then mentally applauded himself for his resistance power.
It was quite a breezy evening, he could see everyone curling up to themselves on their seat in the blanket, as he glanced at ragini, to his happiness she didn't stick to Dr. Aman...but she covered her arms with her hands indicating she was feeling cold in her sleep. He looked here and there making sure everybody was asleep, then smartly he made nivedita face the other side not waking her up as this was the only time she was bearable for him. He stood up and took a quilt from the luggage portion upwards in the bus...and kept it on ragini's arms and to his surprise she quickly grabbed it and made herself comfortable in its warmth. A smile placed on nachiket's face after seeing her in peace, how he wished to stay with her this way, caring and protective, to remove all the insecurities she keeps about him and to make her realize that she is the only one for him. But reality struck him and he quietly glided back to his place, then closed his eyes to imagine herself a little closer to him.
After few seconds ragini opened her eyes to see his man beautifully sleeping with an adorable smile playing on his lips. With tears almost dropping down and a shy blush creeping up her face she dozed back to sleep thinking "Some things never change" and she clutched the quilt tight and closer to her heart.
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Sorry if i bored you all :X I hope we're cool :D
Its been like months i have come back to writing and its all because of Nachiket and Ragini!
Do give your honest feedback :)
See ya around.

Surbhi
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ronitfan thumbnail
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Surbhi!!!
That was just wonderful.. Exactly what my heart needed on this beautiful Friday to delve deeper into my thoughts about this beautiful couple..
Love the way you've described their suppressed thoughts about each other and how much they're physically attracted to each other still.. Love it!


Please write more.. :)
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Originally posted by: ronitfan

Surbhi!!!

That was just wonderful.. Exactly what my heart needed on this beautiful Friday to delve deeper into my thoughts about this beautiful couple..
Love the way you've described their suppressed thoughts about each other and how much they're physically attracted to each other still.. Love it!


Please write more.. :)



Hey thankyou so very much! Honestly speaking i was waiting for a comment and as i have written after sucha longg time after reading your review i am feeling pheww! Thankyou so much for the appreciation :) Means a hell lot. And i hope your everyday goes like this!
And Even i wish to write something more on them soon :)
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Awww :)
It truly was wonderful. Infact, you should continue this only.. The journey and how they melt more and more and move emotionally towards each other.. I'd love to read it! :)
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Originally posted by: ronitfan

Awww :)

It truly was wonderful. Infact, you should continue this only.. The journey and how they melt more and more and move emotionally towards each other.. I'd love to read it! :)



I have no problem but umm i am very bad at updating on time...i always run away from writing SS lol this was actually my stress buster...even my sister is getting married in 10 days so the marriage thing is same haha!
Time constraint i have...this i just managed to jot down...but surely i won't disappoint you and i will think of a better story for NeiRa :)
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Oh Surbhi, you definitely need to write more and continue this.
My poor heart skipped a beat ❤️

This is just so fabulous. Absolutely what the Dr ordered.
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Posted: 10 years ago
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This was perfect!!! I agree with Sukhs and Rachna, you have to write more.. It would be a crime of you dont.

This was beautiful and yes i had a smile plastered on my face the entire time I was reading this. Fab job! ❤️
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Awww <3 <3 beautifully written
please continue soon :) and make weekended bearable

loved it :)
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very nice keep writing more
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Surbhi! Awesome OS yaar!!! It was cute and sweet! ❤️ Loved how ragini could not stop thinking about nachiket back in her apartment the way she mistook him for the paanwala and their cute nokjhoks 🤣 the bus scene, nachiket's care, the way he covered her with that blanket and the way his heart filled with peace and contentment as he watched her adoringly sleep in peace❤️ just loved it yaar!

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