Cleopatra (ZaYa FF) chap 1 is up..!! - Page 4

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Posted: 11 years ago
#31

Originally posted by: pinki123

wow it is really intersting👏 love it so much!😳😳

continue soon!😃
you are really good!👏

Thank you ..!!!😃😃

and yes will surely continue..😳😳

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Posted: 11 years ago
#32

Originally posted by: -Nimmi-

wow that was an awesome prologue👏

waiting for the update...continue soon 😊
and do pm me that is if you are PMing others😛

Thank you dear..!!!😳😳

and yes will surely pm you ..!!😃😃

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Posted: 11 years ago
#33

Originally posted by: kunakshafan26

wow horror adventure action nd thriller perfect idea for me

Thank you ..!!!😃😃

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Posted: 11 years ago
#34

love the prologue renu..horror thriller actually I love these type of stories...update soon I'm waiting..n who told u u r nt gud at writing tell us the name of tat person we will throw him/her in the bawdi even if its u only😆

😆love ths...ur monkey
Edited by Aneesha. - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
#35
Hellowww..kaise ho aap sab???mei aagayi with the very first update on my CP..!!!
This chap is dedicated to Meri pyaari TR...Mrs.fake zain abdullah ..Vinu darling .. yele vinu teri b'day ki advance gift ..hope you enjoy the chap ..i didn't do any proof reader so ignore typos..and Happi Reading Pals..!!

Author's Note:
Story ,Things ,Themes Situations and Names Etc used in this FF are purely my imaginations..they have nothing do with the original cleopatra.. i just used the outline of her story ..rest is all my imagination ..!!!
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CH1:"Sun Sets To Rise Again"
-Robert Browing

30 BC

Alexandria, Egypt


"Antonyyy"she yelled her heart out ..collapsing on the floor...crying on the death of her long lasting love "Mark Antony"
"I don't wanna have the life in which you are not with me..!!"she stood up ..wiped her tears and move on to a chest where is near by her bed post ..and took out an asp from that chest
"I Love You Mark"
that was her last words as the asp's poison made it's way into cleopatra's body .

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After 4,000 years

London
"Unc Zubbu.. can i ask you something???"the little angel said helping herself down from her baby seat
"surely my angel you can..!!" said zubbu wiping her mouth with tissue
"Where are Mi and Bu Gone??" indicating that she was missing em
"Well they went on excavation ZaYa"he cupped her face assure that they will back pretty son
"sista..don't worry Mi and Bu will be back soonie.."said an sweet little sound from behind who just finish his food and was have a tough time in getting up from that baby seat
"Aahil wait a min .. i will help you out ..!!"zubair went near him and took him his arms
"It had been so long .. i have seen em..Unc zubbu..brova.. i miss Bu & Mi..!!"the little angel's eyes were filled with tear and were fixed on to the floor
"Even i do "aahil eye filled with tear seeing his sista crying
"Aww.. my cutie pie.. don't cry you guys know right ?? i 'm here and i hate tears ..now stop crying ..your Mi & bu will come back pretty soon..!!"zubbu hug both of em and try-ed his best to console the little souls..
"Zain.. Aliya where you both man ..come home soon..these lpoor things are miss you guys badly !!!"Zubu though to him self while making soft circles on those two cute angel's back
"Okay now ..who wanna go fishing with me??"zubbu try to cheer the kid
"Me.." "Me" both of them pulled back and started jumping ..
"Okay then ..let go fishing ..!!"

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Akhmim,
Egypt

"Finally ..We Made it ..!!"she started jumping around
"Ya we did bugs"he said smiling at her childishness
"Daffy i'm so happy..we found the bracelet of Isis..!!"she hugged him out of joy ..but in no time they landed up on the earth due to a earths shake..zain was lying on the floor with aaliya onto him
"What was that "zain stroked his eyebrow up
"No idea"aaliya gave an confusion look to him
sudden zain facial expression changed
"Don't tell that this chest is cursed..!!"
"hmm let me have a look at it " said aaliya helping herself up
"The ..one ..Who..Disturbs ..the..sleep..of ..chest ..shall...taste ..the.. heat ..of ..earth ang.."


before she could complete her words ..the earth started tumbling as it does before an earthquake..Both of em looked at each other.
"Oh my ..daffy this chest is cursed..!!"

"i don't like pointing finger ..but weren't you the one who was suppose to read the inscription before opening the chest??"
"So what do you mean it's my fault ??"she crossed her arm against her chest
"hm..observantly..it's your..!!"
"Mine..okay fine i didn't read but what about you ??can't you read the inscription or at least suggest me to read it ???"she stroked her eyebrow up
"Don't you remember ancient Egyptian isn't my fonte ..!!"
"oh .now wha.."before she could complete it the earth tumbled again this time with more power ..thats when she was about to fall when he caught her "Bugs..Can we postponed this fight for few hours???"she nodded
On the other side of the temple the earth started breaking into two equal half..with a organe-ish red colour substance call "Lava" was flowing out ..slowly and steady the lava was spreading into the whole temple..leave no room unburnt ..it had no other aim apart from turn everything into ashes..the lava had cover the 3/4 area by now..it reached the place these two were fighting ..both of them as usually got scary due to the general metabolism designed in humans..both ran in all the possible direction ..but it was of no use..as they were caught by lava in each direction they ran ..at least they were left with no place to run ..lava covering em from all the sides..they both hugged each other in fear of losing each other..and the lava started inching toward em...they were entangled between the wall and lava.
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Pheww katam hogaya hey ...i know it is just an piece of shit ...i just wrote it out of blue ...ye tho hona hi tha but next chap..achi hogi i promise ..please give your feedback please do like and comment, it only takes a few seconds to like and a couple of minutes to comment...ignore typos ,criticism and suggestions are most welcomed ..!!!
Love,
Renu..
Edited by ...Renu... - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
#36
Before running away after the chap .. i wanna tell you guys few thing about this ff. so Don't Ignore this post ..!!
Characters:

ZaYa:


(Thanks to vinu for selecting this )

Aahil:


Aaliya:


Zain:


zubbu:


Cleopatra:


Mark Antony:


(Kyun kaisa laga mera imagination??? shock laga ki nahi??? i know i know mera kuch bhi nahi hosaktha hai..!!)

Costume conner:
well yes there is going to be a costume conner for every update where i'm gonna update ZaYa's daily costumes..so here you go with today's costumes..!!

Aaliya


Zain:

lo bhai mei tho chali.. kyu ki iss update mein itani hi melega..!!


Edited by ...Renu... - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
#37
you are such a *beep**beep**beep**beep**beep**beep**beep**beep**beep*
jaha pe last time choda tha phirse wahi chod diya?
and what do you mean yeh meri bday gift hai?
mere b-day me abhi 12 days hai and usse pehle mujhe aur updates chahiye!
now the update.. so the story is based in 3970?
itna Fast forward?
ur cleopatra is sexy yaar!
aww... i love zubbie here.. cutie pies ko sambhaal raha hai na..
and what did i do except naming Zaya? you found the girl..mujhe kyu credit diya?
and ZaYa are archaeologists are they? or adventurists ??
pata chalega aage aage
and kya kahoon unke baare me?
woh kahi bhi kabhi bhi kaise bhi kitkit kar sakte hai!
superb one MA...keep that coming..
but i want a longer next part
and the drill is still the same
if u don't continue IPBT, i'll discontinue CP!
Edited by vinu127 - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
#38
res...after iftaari unres karungi😃
unres!!
WOW!!!👏
this is soo unique!!!!
i love the story line!!!
ZaYa have cuties..
Hope they have romance in Egypt😃
N this looks like thriller story to me...
YES!!! Mazaa aane waala hai..!!!
AWWW!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
i cant say u made my day..lekin u made my night BQ!!🤗
-Yours truely
Dazz😃
Edited by ZayaShiz - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
#39
Awesome update renu!!!!👏
Zaya and Ahil calling them Mi and Bu is cute.
Sr.Zaya are archeologists hmm..interesting
Zain- ALiya's kit kit not going to stop in such a situation too😆
They call each other daffy and bugs! Maybe i will get the answer in the coming updates...
You call this piece of shit which you wrote it just like that...you gotta be kidding!!

Little zaya and ahil are cutet!!!
Loved the cast too.
Wow costumes for every update! Thank you it is easier to imagine...loved your selection.

Update soon but lamba wala next time ok...😛


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Posted: 11 years ago
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Lovely update...
Zain and aliya in Egypt leaving their cuties with their unc zubbu 😆
Zaya never misses a single second for fighting 😆 😆
Update soon...

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