SS-Aaj Phir Tum Pe-(M) 4TH & Final Pt Updated Pg 15

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Hey everyone this was totally unplanned- and once you read you will no doubt realise...
Anyway Nikki jaan this is for you🤗 i will await your acceptance of my maafi😆

This is also dedicated to all the BGD crew, credit for the white pants- Sia and Pri, Shivu the pipe will make an entrance later. Black top ke liye hi5 to Pri and Reeno...Reeno thanks for your support (however short lived😆) and all those who frequent the AT🤗

ps. I think I will continue this only because I'm not satisfied with the way i ended it😳

Not been proof read or anything so apologises

Aaj Phir Tum pe pyar aaiya hai...




She heard a knock at the door, her heart began to pound and her breathe shallow. She took her time getting to the door. She wanted to savour the anticpation, the desire. Another knock, this one a bit more furious. She opens the door, he is stood in the door way black top and white linen pants. She realises she is breathing a little hard. She cant help but stare at him. She takes him in, the way his top fits snuggly on him,his biceps bulging, strong rugged arms. The fitted pants accentuating each and every part of him. He is smirking at her. He knows she wants him. It enthralls him but right now he wants to play. He doesn't want to give her what she wants until he is satisfied.


They are silent, he walks in after her. He is holding a bag behind his back. He places it on the bed. She gasps when she reads Agent provocatuer'. She was not prepared for this. She thinks she understands what he wants. She goes to towards the bag but he places his hand on her wrist. His touch is electrifying . He then whispers into her ear why don't i help you'. She takes a step back. On cue, he begins to lift her kurta, his arms around hers as he negotiates with the buttons on the back- one snags and his patient is wearing thin- He asks her to turn her back to him, while he makes haste with the rest of the buttons. He is teasing her by running his fingers up and down her back in circular motions. She does not know how she is able to stand when her body is on fire, the intensity burning through her. She leans against him, head tiled, her hair in his face she can feel his breathe on her, she senses that he too is in pain. She can feel his body against hers, and wants nothing more to become his right there. He has others plans though, he begins to kiss her at the nape of her neck, as he undoes each button until there are no more buttons and the white kurt that she so lovingly chosen to wear this morning has been left discarded on the floor.


He then steps back, consuming each and every curve of hers, his eyes settle towards where her hair is covering barely covering her He mutters something to himself, she is not sure what he wants but she knows what she wants. She steps out of her remaining clothes and attempts to wear his present. She knows she must be blushing bright red but she doesn't care, right now all she knows is that her she wants him in every possible way. She takes a moment too long in undoing the zip of the garment. Before she knows it he is helping her again. Each time he touches her skin she trembles in ecstasy How is he so calm she wonders, she places her hands on his waist and brings him closer. She realises by the close proximity that he too is not calm in any shape or form. She inhales him, and feels intoxicated by his very being.


Each and every fibre of their bodies are calling out for one another, as they stand in front of each other intoxicated. She takes one step forward and she finds herself falling into his arms but she steadies herself for a moment.


"Raman wont you let me do something for you now" she says to him as she begins to make herself acquainted with his lips and the inside of his mouth...


Aaj phir tum pe pyaar aaya hai

Aaj phir tum pe pyaar aaya hai

Behad aur beshumaar aaya ha


(film-hate story2)


part 2 page 6


part 3 page 11


part 4 page 15


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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by Nikki_Titli

omgg beginning is good...esp SUPER LOVED they way u made ishu describe him,the way he ws scannin her with his x-ray eyes...

i love u UZ...n i FORGAVE U...

u r so sweet uz...only coz of tht i forgave u...warna maine toh pgm mana hi li thi to INCREASE hardship level MORE for u so tht u can write MORE HOT things n then i will be fully NATURALLY convinced

Edited by happenstance - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Yo. :D
Finally, arent you proud of me!? Im already editing 😳
😆

Khair, again, what is with you and short lengths?! 🤔 do you have a thing for them? because this was REALLY short, AGAIN! 😛 par 2 saath hi hona chahiye tha, and part 3 would have been the original part 2! :P Khair...😆

First and foremost, aapka bht bht shukriya, LOL for the shoutout/mention/dedication, i LAAAV youu! ☺️ and have to obviously be thankful to NB... for making you the bakra so we could get some Hotness... make you come out of YOUR comfort zone with such ease 😈 🤣 so thank you NB... and ofcourse, Uz! 🤗 😆


Now Now... okay, i thought you'd write a Hot OS as in itll have a nice normal plot and you will somehow consolidate or incorporate a hot scene/happening somewhere in between but NO! aap 4 haath aage theen and this had hotness from the word GO! Entry se hii you were describing her heart... the scenario (sort of) and then... HIM! so ofcourse, as i said... HOTNESS, from the word GO ;) ☺️ 🤣 HAYE HIS DESCRIPTION... ISHITA KI AANKHO SE! BLACKKK SHIRTTT *insert lovestruck emoticon* :P and and and THE INFAMOUS WHITE PANTS! 🤣 AHAHAA! KILLER COMBO, DUDETTE! trust me, waheen main flat hogayi thi... first para main! 😛

AND THEN! EFF, REALLY!??!! He gets her Agent provocatuer!?!?!? LOLOLOL EPICC! My KK Bhalla be SOO Chaalu i tell you ;) LOL please let us know the color okay? I couldnt WAIT for HER to be "helped" by him 😆... and then it started... yes... he was being such a ... umm... gentleman!? 😛 dcahdvcsdjvc im trying to use decent words here, alright? ;P the whole part of him untying those buttons and finally her kurti lands on the floor... the way you described the whole process, was honestly really beautiful. It was HOT but not vulgar :) loved how she was getting taken aback each time with his touch... which as evident by her gasps.


OOMMGGG are we going to see our Jhansi Ki Rani in action in the next one!?!?!? TRUST ME THIS SOUL RIGHT HERE CANNOT WAIT! hahaha, i cant imagine her doing anything, so you'd better make me do that! :P 😆

LOVELY HOT STUFF THERE UZ! Proud of you!
Cant wait for the next installment! ;)
Love youu! <3
Edited by serendipity. - 11 years ago
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omgg beginning is good...esp SUPER LOVED they way u made ishu describe him,the way he ws scannin her with his x-ray eyes...😉...

write till part 4 n then i will forgive u 😆😉
Edited by Nikki_Titli - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Uz my friend... I res...

EDITED...

Thats the thing with mistakes. Asking for forgiveness could lead to dangerous territory 😆 So I guess I should thank Nikki for this one 😊

Attempt at a different genre..hmmm... I am trying to reconcile the mirror/mirror author and the author of this story. All I can say is, I am glad I know both of them 😊

My only complaint with all your writings has been... they are too short... just when things are getting interesting, you decide to stop 😡😆

So eagerly awaiting your next update 😊
Edited by always_a_TV_fan - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
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OMG Uz!!!
What a chupi rustam !! From mirror mirror to this !! I'm impressed 👍🏼.. Fantastically written ... HOT and SENSUOUS !! 👏
First of all .. thank you so much for the credit for the infamous white pants and then the black top too ...I'm elated 😃
Then... the length yaar... itna short...keeping us all on tenterhooks 😆.. chalo.. atleast it means we will get many instalments 😛
Now the main part ...seriously no time wasting at all ... it was READY STEADY and PO !! no build up .. but free hit from the word GO !! Nice... 😉
The way Ishita has described him.. my God .. and then AP?? Dude Awesome ...the kurti coming off the playing around ... so well described... and then Ishita to take charge... this is going to be one hell of a ride of Raman and Ishita 😉
Edited by PreciousPri - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Yay! Can't wait to read! 😃

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Uzma, this was so 😳☺️. 😆 You're such a tease, though, just like Raman. 😆 Dil maangey more, yaar. Get on ittt. 😉 Writing is good, though. I like it. Good job! 😊
Edited by Isma_A - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
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next page- 😳😆
Edited by happenstance - 11 years ago
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u r so sweet uz...😆...only coz of tht i forgave u...warna maine toh pgm mana hi li thi to INCREASE hardship level MORE for u so tht u can write MORE HOT things n then i will be fully NATURALLY convinced 😆😉
Edited by Nikki_Titli - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
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hogiya- I've added another line in that para instead😉
Edited by happenstance - 11 years ago

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