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Posted: 13 years ago
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😆Ami..you keep surprising us with every part. This was fantablous!! Honestly you should be a writer. Story, concept and emotions- right mix of all. And best of all there is PhAb in it!! :D

Love, love, LOVED it!! Amazing work again! 👏👏👏

I just got back home a while ago and hell tired but couldnt stop myself from reading it and glad I did. Really woke me up... The kiss so unexpected that I nearly went like Phulwa -> :O. 😆😆
Sorry but cant give detailed comments now. Really tired so this place reserved till morning! :D

EDIT- So as promised, I'm here with my detailed comments. 😆

I really liked that interaction with the villager. Truly she has always been there support and savior every time there has been any injustice. :)

Abhay was pacing around his office like a caged tiger.

UFF! I can so imagine that. Perfect analogy! 😉

How could he have felt attraction towards her?

Ohh! So ACP sahab already knows what he is feeling. Wow. Usually heroes go through the 'whats happening to me phase' but with Abhay nothing is usual. He is so hatke…obviously he knows himself. But aww don't like the feeling now do you? 😆

Aarti having buri naazar on our Abhay! Stay. Away. 😳 But can't blame her, he is so dashing. 😳

It seemed like fate will continue to bring us together until I catch you, Phulwa.

Oohhh! So true na. Yes, you will catch her just as she falls in love with you. And then you both will be trapped. ;)

He waited impatiently wanting to get his hands on Phulwa as soon as possible.

Haye haye abhi se itne impatient ACP Abhay? Uff baad mein tu he won't be able to keep his hands off her. Literally! 🤣

His body burning up as his mind conjured the image of him touching Phulwa.

Ahem. Now really Ami, if you will keep putting such sentences how you do expect us not to think in the right direction. But gosh! Even the image of it has such an effect on him…honestly the future seems…too hot to handle.☺️😆

Nobody would take her down but him.

Yeah, baby you'll be taking her down, again literally! 🤣 Alright shutting up. :P

@Biting- Haha, Phulwa! Maybe she was just trying to get a real taste of him. 🤣

She twisted from his grip bringing her knee up to hit a very specific area of his body but he moved just in time.

When I was mid way the sentence I went like 'Phulwa! NO!' but then read the rest of it so sighed a breath of relief. Really Phulwa, never ever do that again. You are putting your own future at stake here! 🤣

but most disturbing was the body of the man currently on her. She groaned with the weight of it,

Arey Phulwa stop groaning aur aadat dal lo because later on tu…well you know!😉🤣@Kiss- Um…yeah okay. So it was….AAAHHH!! I was so pleasantly surprised. Seriously that was HOT.☺️☺️

UFF! If Abhay can't control himself now then sachi what will happen in the future. And to think this was only their second meeting? OHHH! I wonder what will happen in the third and fourth? 😉

@Hitting- LOL! That was so Phulwa! Haha good move. :D

And he just cant keep his eyes off her lips? Gosh! He is so gone. 😆

Bad boy- Haaaye! I want my bad boy back ASAP! :/

Aww she felt bad after hitting him? Sigh…its happening to her too.😳

Gosh! That was amazing!! Honestly cant wait for the next part. And oh, she will be going to station next? Uff be careful dacoit jee, you know never know what unexpected things Abhay jee might do next.😆

Edited by Ameres - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Originally posted by: mimi_s

Ami...👏

As long as we dont gt jaygun on tv promise me that u will b writing one epi and posting so that hum apne gum ko thora bhool paye😊

Aww mimi, that's like the most heart-warming comment i could have gotten. 😳 You sure you wont get bored?😆 You might start hitting me if i don't give you your PhAb together soon😆
"Give your children an education especially your daughters."
This part was sooo good...she realises what she is missing...this is the USP of your writing ...u jst bring soo many angles so many emotion to it😊

Thank you, mimi. You'll spoil me with ur comments really😳😳
Poor girl😛 ...she had no idea that their next meeting would would actually go beyond ...face to face😳

Ahem...uh...yes yes poor girl indeed😆 Wud have so liked to be this poor girl when he kissed her😆


OHHH thats soo Abhay...I wish they had shown Shatru going through such turmoil while in kabila...say after the shelter scene...he is trying to sleep bt is kept awake by the moments spent with phulwa and he is getting super irritated bt doesnt know how to gt hr off his head😛

LOL, i think maybe he did go through the turmoil. He was always staring at Phulwa in that longing look😳 But he was the good guy shatru then, could not show his feelings like ACP Abhay can😉
I couldnt help thinkng abt the cake feeding scene...how she had bit him..and the look on her facewas like...yummy😉😉...probably the fingers were tastier than the cake😊

Uff me too,
@Bold-the expression on Phulwa's face at that time was really indicating towards that🤣
Abhay kissing Phulwa ...that to against her wish...😳😳😳...U have jst killed me Ami...this is jst too hot and if I may say...soo unexpected😉 ...gosh I was totally taken by surprise while reading it😊...sooo loved it Ami...I sooo much wanted Abhay to kiss her in the serial...thanks fr making my dream come true😊

Hehe, well that was my wish too😳. So fulfilled...now let's give them some more opportunities to do so😆
Loved this part...loved the way u wrote it...gosh I think he increased the pressure and woke her up from the sweet dream she was having...😳
Our ACP has that effect on woman i guess, it's only after a while that you realize what's happeneing to you😳😆
I sooo miss this bad boy😭...bt thanks to u Ami wont miss him any more...I jst need to come back and read this again😊

🤗Miss him too. But glad could give you a glimpse of him again. If we cant see, we can always imagine😉


Thanks fr ending with this line...jst makes me sooo happy that the next part will again have them in a confrontation😊

LOL, like Abhay said, fate will keep putting them together until he catches her but as a police officer or ...man, remains to be seen😉


Anu!! Wow, im super flattered at you thinking I shud be a writer. 😳But i know what i have is not enough😆 Don't know how many short stories wrote in the past and tore them up, thinking somebody might see them and just laugh at me😆 So this feels like an ego boost😉 Thanks🤗
Edited by beebutterfly - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
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LOL, Anu, thanks for those lovely comments😆🤗What would i do without them seriously. All these besharam hidden baats, only you can find🤣 I'm thinking of putting after every line this between brackets: Anu, please SHUT the besharam window in your head🤣 Sorry, not giving a proper answer to your comments. I'm left speechless really🤣🤣
🤗for staying the same😊
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Honestly Anu I am in splits after reading your comments...actually its a double treat fr me...loved the SS by Ami and then loved your fitting comments😊😊...thanks fr the treat guys😛
but most disturbing was the body of the man currently on her. She groaned with the weight of it,

Arey Phulwa stop groaning aur aadat dal lo because later on tu…well you know!😉🤣

Simply loved this part Anu
Honestly i can never stop commenting on the kiss...it was soo unexpected and sudden 😉😉...but totally loved it😃...i hope there r more to come😉...(nw dont run after me Ami...u pls write as u like... i am jst joking)
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Thanks a lot😃
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Originally posted by: mimi_s

Honestly Anu I am in splits after reading your comments...actually its a double treat fr me...loved the SS by Ami and then loved your fitting comments😊😊...thanks fr the treat guys😛

but most disturbing was the body of the man currently on her. She groaned with the weight of it,

Arey Phulwa stop groaning aur aadat dal lo because later on tu'well you know!😉🤣

Simply loved this part Anu
Honestly i can never stop commenting on the kiss...it was soo unexpected and sudden 😉😉...but totally loved it😃...i hope there r more to come😉...(nw dont run after me Ami...u pls write as u like... i am jst joking)


LOL, mimi, you are absolutely right. Without Anu's comment my SS would have been so dull🤣🤣 She is the mistress of spices🤣
Wow, glad put the kiss in there then😉 Seems like you are still under the spell. I think we are all trying to imagine ourselves in Phulwa's place, that's y the kiss was more enjoyable🤣
Will not run after you...in fact, fourth part coming up😉
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Guys, thanks a lot for reading and liking the SS😃 Umm... going to introduce a character we saw in the show but here it's in a totally different light. I don't know if you'll like it. Feel free to say so if you dont😉 LOL, it's just that i'm fulfilling my adhoore sapnes with the SS so you might just see me altering some of the characters there. Sorry in advance, if it doesn't appeal! So fourth part...

Abhay's head was hurting like hell. The woman could hit! Aarti helped him to the jeep. Jitendra had arrested the two men and was already on his way to the police station.

Aarti looked at him out of the corner of her eye as they drove to the hospital. Abhay was clenching his teeth against the pain. As they reached the hospital, Aarti parked and helped him get down.

The waiting room was buzzing with people. Aarti walked to the receptionist and asked for a doctor for Abhay. The woman was about to say they would have to wait when she noticed Abhay recognizing him. She did not want rile the area's new ACP so she nodded telling them to go straight to Dr Patel's cabin. Abhay interrupted her, still holding his handkerchief to the wound.

"Is Dr Arjun Singh here?" he asked in a low voice. He could hardly talk with the pain his wound was giving him.

The receptionist looked surprised he knew him. Dr Arjun had just shifted there about two months ago. He treated major cases and you needed a prior appointment to meet him. She opened her mouth to say this but Abhay cut her off.

"Just call him and tell him it's Abhay Rai Singh."

He gazed long enough at her for her to comply silently. She spoke on the phone for a second then nodded to them.

"You can go in. It's the third cabin on the left." She gestured to the corridor.

Abhay walked a little unsteadily to where she pointed. Aarti quickly came to take his arm to support him.

The cabin was just as he he had expected. It was stark but the most organized one you could ever come across. There was only a painting of a waterfall at the back wall which livened up the room a bit. Arjun was sitting calmly behind his desk dressed impeccably as always. He looked less doctor and more movie star. He got up laughing at Abhay's condition.

"What happened to you? Seems like a wild animal was after your head?" he laughed again slapping Abhay on the back.

Arjun was his childhood friend. He was one of the few people he knew in Chambal. They had been inseperable as kids and even now joked on how their respective transfers had again brought them together.

Abhay glared at him then thought: You don't know how right you are, Arjun.

Arjun told him to lay down on the examination bed then he noticed Aarti. He cleared his throat.

"You are still the same Abhay. Rude. You did not even introduce me to the lady here." Arjun grinned then turned his attention on Aarti.

Aarti had been looking at Abhay but now her head snapped to Arjun. She looked back at him unsmilingly.

"Sorry, this is Inspector Aarti. And Aarti, my childhood friend and enemy Arjun." Abhay said pointing to Arjun. " Now will you please tend to my wound, Doctor" he spoke sarcastically.

Arjun removed his hand from his pockets and extended it towards Aarti. Aarti ignored it turning her face back towards Abhay.

Uh huh, attitude, I like it, Arjun thought grinning inwardly. He drew back his hand and started cleaning Abhay's wound. Abhay winced at the sting of the antiseptics.

"You escaped stitches unfortunately." Arjun said, dressing up the wound.

Abhay grunted an anwer and got down from the bed.

"Yeah, I'm surprised I'm still alive after..'" he trailed off leaving Arjun and Aarti looking at him curiously.

"Let's go now, we have something important to wrap up." Abhay said quickly to Aarti thinking of Phulwa, then to Arjun, "Thanks buddy. Meet you later." He smacked Arjun on his shoulder.

Arjun prescribed him painkillers. Then as they turned to go, Arjun's voice stopped them.

"Come back whenever you want Abhay," he paused, " but please do bring Inspector Aarti also." He said it innocently but the twinkle in his eyes betrayed him.

Abhay grinned knowing his friend well but then seeing Aarti's expression, they both became serious.

"Come on, Inspector Aarti, we are getting late."

Aarti continued to glower at Arjun, who was now smiling devilishly at her, as she followed Abhay out.

****

Phulwa was thinking hard. How could she break into the police station without getting caught? She could have handled the officers but that ACP Abhay was becoming a headache. Her hand involuntarily went to touch her mouth. Then she blushed, scolding herself inwardly.

She had an idea but she was not sure it would work.

***

Though Aarti suggested he should go home, Abhay refused. He wanted to interrogate those two men they had caught.

He went straight to the lock up and surveyed the two men inside. The gun supplier must have been in the mid-forties. He looked scared, sweat beads shining on his forehead. Abhay's eyes shifted to the other guy. He was taller, more muscular but also younger. In fact he had an angry air about him which was vaguely familiar. He looked as if given the chance, he would kill Abhay right then and there for putting him behind bars. Abhay had a sudden thought. When he had been hiding in the woods, he had noticed the closeness between this man and Phulwa. Who was he? All of a sudden, he felt unexpected anger mounting up. He refused to believe it to be jealousy. After all, why should he be jealous? But why had he been looking at Phulwa like that, as if reluctant to leave her. He slapped his palm on the iron bars, the vibrations it caused making the throb in his head start again. He turned to the constable asking him to open the door. The constable placed a chair in the middle of the cell locking the door behind him. The driver cowered back as Abhay sat down but the younger guy looked back at him, unmoving, head resting on the wall behind and arms crossed on his knees.

"What is your name?" he directed the question at Babu, a hint of menace in his voice.

Babu remained silent. Abhay felt his blood boil. He tried calming himself down then asked the question which was actually nagging him.

"How are you related to Phulwa?"

No answer again. Abhay tried something else.

"If you co-operate, we will let you go. We just want to catch Phulwa. Just tell us her whereabouts, and you are free." He said calmly gauging Babu's reaction.

At the name of his sister, Babu got to his feet, enraged. He did not know if Phulwa was ok or not. Hearing this cop talking of her like that just made him lose his head.

"Don't talk about her like that!" his voice slashed through the air.

Abhay got up, his face a mask of anger. So what he was thinking was true. This man here was someone close to Phulwa. Perhaps the one she loved. He felt his heart constrict at the thought.

Babu made to grab his collar but Abhay pushed him back with force causing his head to bang against the wall. Babu struggled and tried to punch Abhay. On hearing the commotion, Jitendra came in quickly, breaking the two apart. Constables held Babu's hands still while Babu snarled at Abhay.

Abhay wanted to punch him. Only one thought turned in his head. Phulwa loved this man. He felt his wound start to throb again.

"Sir, I don't think you should be here in this state." Jitendra said noticing Abhay's wince. "I'll carry out the interrogation."

"NO!" Abhay's voice reverberated off the cell walls.

Jitendra was taken aback. Abhay realised there had been no reason for his violent reaction and tried to redeem himself.

"I mean I'll do the interrogation myself tomorrow." He said in a normal voice.

Jitendra, still confused at his early outburst nodded silently. Abhay looked hard at Babu before going out. It was almost night anyway and he was not thinking clearly.

He left, walking towards his jeep. As he opened the door of his jeep, Aarti came up to him with a blue file in hand.

***

Phulwa looked out from the shadows. She was behind the police station, a saree concealing her kurta and pants, waiting for Chotu.

The she saw him. He was near his jeep, a bandage on his head. Phulwa flinched thinking of the blow she had delivered to him. She was glad he was alright. Wait. What? She shook her head trying to clear it. Then something made her burn. There was a police woman deep in conversation with him. She felt something she could not define. Why was the woman standing with her face so close to his? She thought angrily. She could talk from a distance also, couldn't she? Then she got a more disturbing thought. Why did it matter? This should not be bothering her.

Aarti's voice drifted to her.

"Sir, as you had instructed, we have reduced the perimeter where Phulwa possibly hides. We can start the operation as soon as you give the go-ahead."

She handed the blue file to Abhay.

"I still have to fine tune some of the strategies I've thought of. It might take a few days. Then I'll brief everybody on it." Abhay's voice suddenly sounded tired.

He said his goodbyes to Aarti then drove off. Phulwa was apprehensive. So ACP Abhay had a new plan to catch her and he had an idea of her whereabouts. Whatever the blue file contained, Phulwa would have to get hold of it. Babu would be able to decipher their plan maybe. Phulwa was glad Abhay had gone home. Somehow she did not think her task would have been easy with him there. Phulwa scowled at Aarti as she drove off too. She decidedly did not like her but she could not exactly say why.

Chotu came just then, holding his tea holder. Phulwa smiled at the lanky boy who usually delivered tea to the station. Then she retrieved a vial filled with white powder from her pockets, and carefully added some of it to each glass. As Chotu was making his way in, Phulwa stopped him.

"Chotu, do you know where ACP Abhay lives?" she asked.

"Phulwa didi, you know that brick white house on the hill, right?" Phulwa nodded. She had always thought it was a lovely house. "That's where he lives."

Chotu went in as Phulwa peeped in through the window.

****

Five minutes later, all the cops were slumped on their desks. Phulwa walked in expecting everyone to be out cold, then saw the lone conscious constable surveying the scene incredulously. He ran to the phone but Phulwa blocked his way, beaming at him. She snatched the phone and smashed it hard enough on his head for him to fall on the floor with a thud. He would have, at most, a bump in the morning. Phulwa snatched the keys from the belt of the constable and opened up the lock-up where Babu was kept. Babu smiled wide at seeing her and hugged her hard.

"Jijia, I thought something bad had happened to you."

Phulwa squeezed him back then let him go.

"We have to get out of here fast. Somebody might come." She grabbed Babu's hand.

Jagan was already running outside forgetting to even thank Phulwa in the rush to freedom.

****

They were back home and Babu was fast asleep. Phulwa looked at his sleeping figure tenderly then a thought came to nag her. There was some information in that blue file that would help ACP Abhay reach her. He had already taken her on the wrong foot once, she could not let it happen again. She had to know what he was planning and for that, she needed to get hold of the file. She looked at Babu a last time, then went out.

****

The house stood in the dark, it's white bricks covered in shadows. Phulwa circled it, listening for any sound. But the place was dead silent more so because there weren't any houses around. She crept up to the open window she spotted then dropped silently into the living room. There was a faint glow provided by a small lamp on the table in the centre on the room, making the shapes visible. How would she find the file in there? Then her eyes fell on the couch. Abhay lay on the couch, his lashes closed onto his cheeks. How could a man have such long lashes? Against her will, Phulwa advanced towards him. She saw it. The blue file was tucked close to Abhay. She sighed in exasperation. This man could never make her life easy, could he? She knelt down in front of him. He looked so childlike, his features relaxed in sleep, his breathing regular. Her eyes went to his lips. They had kissed her. Phulwa's eyes strayed to the bandage on his head. She told herself to grab the file stealthily and run but something pulled inside her. She felt it again. The almost invisible chord that connected them to each other and which tried to pull her towards him every time. This time she could not fight it. She leaned close, stopping her breathing momentarily, with fear of waking him up. She could not help herself, she kissed it, her lips remaining there for some time. He smelled clean, spicy but most of all male. She breathed him in then he stirred breaking the spell. Phulwa drew back hastily, shocked at her own actions.

She tried to pull the file from him but he stirred again, hugging it closer, a smile on his face. Then he uttered the word which made Phulwa go numb.

"Phulwa." His voice was low but filled with sweetness. His eyes started o flutter open. Phulwa suddenly panicked. This man had pinned her to a wall on the road, kissed her in the jungle. Now she was in his house. What would he do if he found her there? She looked at the file a last time then returned from where she had come from.

***

Abhay sat up on the couch, a glint in his eyes. So Phulwa wanted the file, did she? He could have caught her now but somehow, he did not want her capture to be like this. It would have been too easy. In fact, he wanted to capture her in every sense of the word. He did not know what that meant exactly himself but that was how he felt. His hand went up to touch where she had kissed him. For a moment there, he had wanted to open his eyes, grab her and pull her to him...to test whether the kiss tasted the same as in the jungle. It was insane but he could not deny the pull that he felt towards her. The woman had the most disturbing effect on him but seems like I'm not the only one affected, he thought, smiling wryly. He needed to find out the reason for this thing between them and he had the perfect plan to make her come walking to him by herself...


If you are already bored with me, DO NOT hesitate to say so! As always, your comments are most appreciated😊

Edited by beebutterfly - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
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OMGGG!! Ah I LOVED this part honestly even more than the last one. :D
Awesome, awesome, awesome!! 👏👏👏👏

@Dr.Arjun- Glad you brought him here like this. So they are finally bachpan ke friends like we all had hoped for. And he seems to be more happy and flirty kind here? Great touch! :D
And he is already hitting on Aarti? lol. Good, so you have planned everyone's happy ending I see. Naice! 😉

@Abhay- Oh oh! He is already feeling jealous and that too from Babu! LOL! But obviously he doesnt know that but bechara! haha. Ohh he is in for surprise. 😆

@Phulwa- Ohhh so aag dono taaraf bara-bar lagi hai? Me LIKES! 😉
I really liked how you showed both of them getting jealous here and Phulwa not knowing how to define this feeling. I guess in the show too she was like this refusing to see her feelings. I mean Abhay somewhat knows his feelings here but Phulwa being clueless about her feelings is suiting her character alot. Great job! 👍🏼

The almost invisible chord that connected them to each other and which tried to pull her towards him every time. This time she could not fight it. She leaned close, stopping her breathing momentarily, with fear of waking him up. She could not help herself, she kissed it, her lips remaining there for some time. He smelled clean, spicy but most of all male. She breathed him in then he stirred breaking the spell.

Okay no guesses here, my favorite part and lines from the whole scene. Absolutely loved it! So many emotions beautifully contained in little words. Sigh...beautiful.
Love the connection part, because honestly I have always loved the bond that they share.
Ohhh Phulwa can't blame you, once you have gotten the taste of his lips you can't resist it more. 😉😆

His hand went up to touch where she had kissed him. For a moment there, he had wanted to open his eyes, grab her and pull her to him………to test whether the kiss tasted the same as in the jungle.

OMG!! So he awake all this time! Haww! Naughty Abhay! 😆
Brilliant touch there, wasnt expecting it. And yes my second most favorite lines. UFF! He is such a goner no? Ohhh even he cant wait to know or rather get some more taste of her? 😆😆

In fact, he wanted to capture her in every sense of the word. He did not know what that meant exactly himself but that was how he felt.
Oh dont worry Abhay we know exactly what you meant her. If any problem hum haina to explain the hidden meanings of words!! 🤣

he had the perfect plan to make her come walking to him by herself………….
Omg!! What are you planning to do? Or rather what is Abhay going to do? And when he does finally catch her then...UFFF! Cant even imagine kya hoga?! Temperatures rising already.☺️🤣

Cant wait for the next part. You are just brilliant with this one! Loving it! :D:D
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Oh thanks Anu!. Im surprised you liked this one more, i was actually more apprehensive about this one so right now im 😃

Loved your comments, you are a confidence booster, seriously🤗

In fact, he wanted to capture her in every sense of the word. He did not know what that meant exactly himself but that was how he felt.
Oh dont worry Abhay we know exactly what you meant her. If any problem hum haina to explain the hidden meanings of words!! 🤣


Haha, thank you thank you thank you😆 Without this comment, i would not have felt happy. At least one besharam comment mujhe chahiye🤣


Well, surprise for the next part. TOP secret😆😉

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great update
loved arjun over here
wow!!!!!! abhay is insanely jealous though he doesn't realise why?
omg!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! abhay was awake
what is his plan?

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