Pehala ye vadha humne kiya hai...

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The time is night clear frm the open window behind his bed, decorated by a white transparent curtain having some golden leaves printed on it here and there, the room is lighted by moon, Abhay is sleeping peacefully, Phulwa sitting on a chair besides him leaned closer to him, her hands running along his thick hair, a small but pleasant smile on her face, she simply looking into the closed eyes of her love, life Abhay like she can see him through those closed ones. That day evening Dr. Arjun done his operation and told that Abhay is fine now, his sensations are back, he will be her ACP again.

ACP Abhay Rai Singh, Phulwa remembered the first time she saw his face, as satru, his hair was falling to his forehead hiding it in them, for the first time ever in her life some body commented about her beauty, her eyes, that day, he introduced himself as a thief and she was unaware about the fact that he will be her thief. For a moment she felted a kind of pride over her husband, after all he is such a dedicated officer! he suffered a lot in the kabile, how many times he lost his self respect there, how many times even she insulted him, still he stand there bear it all just to finish his duty, yes the ironic part is that, he was in a mission to arrest her, humiliate her, take revenge on her fr his brother's murder, but now fr his that act she doesn't feel angry fr him but a kind of pride over him. she murmured into his ears, what did you do to me?

She placed her head on his shoulders, the place where she felt more secured after her mother's lap. Closed her eyes but they were over flowing and she allowed them to flow also they are the tears of happiness, they are the tears of her love fr him they can come out of her eyes since it is fr him, every thing is fr him and any thing fr him, just fr him. She hugged him a little more tightly. Again her mind drags her back to some old memories, the day she was attacked by the villagers, how he came in between and rescue her and took her away, that day she slapped him fr touching her and ask him to keep away frm her and now she wants him near, nearer and nearest. She wants him to touch her to hold her tight, she needs nothing but him. That was not the last time she slapped him, she moved up and placed her hands over his cheeks, how could I can do that with these cute ones? she asked herself smiling and with a face of a mother. Second time she just wanted to keep him away frm the anger of Babu and all other kabile people, he also understood that. May be that was the first time she stand for him against all world, ya surely not openly but she stand fr him.

When sharbhathy told the words " even your securer Shatru cannot help you this time" she just wanted to say aloud "no until he is with me nobody can even touch me" and she said it also. How much belief was there for shatru in her mind, how happily and confidently she told sharbathy, holding his hands that she find her happiness in her life her love in her life. How many promises he had been made fr her, she could still heard him telling " Agar har ka mathlab apko ethna kush dhekna hai tho jeevan bhar ka har mansoor hai hume". How he hold her tears and made them blend with his life and told that he will be there fr her till the end. She remembered fr the first time she dressed up for him, how he looked at her and it can still blush her his staring... and how she asked him to be like that and never change and he promised "kabhi bathalega nehi" .But he broken all his promises which he made to her(with out her asking),at the time he introduced himself as ACP Abhay Rai Singh. He was standing
there pointing gun over her head. That moment after a long time she shattered completely, her self was going away frm her, her belief, love everything was flowing out of her hands, she just wanted to call out shatru pls not this with me... her eyes filled with tears this time she wiped them away, she knows they are no longer needed. He fulfilled all his promises by this time, stand fr her, rescue her frm all dangers even placing his on life at the mouth of death, he gave her all the care and love he promised to her.

She remembered their marriage, how irritated he was? how shocked he was when he saw her instead of Arti, and without filling her mang how he stood up shocked, " are meri pyara pathi dev ab apko humare alava kisi our ko apne sath dhek sakthi ho kya?" she asked him with a mischievous smile over her face. Then he completed that last stage of their marriage with his blood " rehane dho Phulwa" those words completed her. She remembered her promises to him, which she made on the day in which her life met with the truth of death. She slowly placed her hands in his and said never let this away from yours. I will be there fr you as you were fr me. I will become ur strength and courage. Will love u more than me. She again place her head on his shoulders and closed her eyes.

Camera slowly moving away frm that beautiful couple, the next day sun rays will bring them a new beginning but surely not the end of their problems. What ever may come what made her happy is that he will be fine.
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All kinds of criticisms are welcome 😊, and I know there will be a lot... Just come in my mind and wanted to write, when wrote wanted to share nothing more than that, so there will be a lot missing and a lot problems so be open heart to criticize.


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Posted: 13 years ago
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Excellent 👏loved it each and every word in it . cvs copy this don't worry about rights issue ..feel free to copy...😆.but have a feeling we might see something like this in show ...will love it..

She slowly placed her hands in his and said never let this away from yours. I will be there fr you as you were fr me. I will become ur strength and courage. Will love u more than me...wow superb 😍
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Agar har kamathlab apko ethna kush dhekna hai tho jeevan bhar ka har mansoor hai hume"

So beautifully put Athira. That's something Abhay will say for his Phulwa. You summed all the happy and sad moments so well. Thanks for reminding of the day he told Phulwa her eyes were beautiful. Loved that bit. Especially when Phulwa looked back at him as if to say those eyes can killl too😆.
*Sigh*, our dear shatru. When Abhay gets back on his feet, im waiting to hear such praises for his lady love again.😊
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Thank you so much Ami and Sidra fr liking my post than you so much
Ami those lines are not mine it was said by Shatru in one of the epi.
Edited by thiku - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
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@athira gud writing!!👏👏it was wonderful & marvellous!!⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️i felt so nice that i m hoping CVs'll atleast take sumthing from ur post. and u know i was also thinking on the same lines 2 b shown in the show but u wrote it more beautifully than my thots!!!⭐️⭐️
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Posted: 13 years ago
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@thiku superb effort u r such an wonderful writer till now i dont know that we have great writer in our forum pls keep it up n give us more phab scenes im waiting
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Originally posted by: thiku

Thank you so much Ami and Sidra fr liking my post than you so much
Ami those lines are not mine it was said by Shatru in one of the epi.


Athira - U r rite but then he didnt mean it, now if he says it, he will😊 Ur writing is so simple yet so touching. A big 🤗for that.
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Thank you soo much tiny and saumya its too good to know that ur work is getting appreciated by some one... and a prideful moment also

Tiny & Ami I watched that epi on you tube and u know i was just re watched that fr how many times I dont know that words were really touched my heart and his expression when he said it was also perfect and I think that is fr the first time we get to see phulwa smiling. really a heart melting dialogue.

Saumya
You can call me Athira. Yes I will try of course to write something on PhAb before also I used to write but this is fr the first time i posted it separately or else I used to post it on PhAb AT, since i am not confident enough to start a new post fr my madness.
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Simply BEAUTIFUL!! 👏

Wow! In one go you made us relive all the past moments and like Phulwa they did not make us sad because now we know they are together. And I really like how you showed Phulwa watching Abhay sleep. Usually its the opposite with the guy looking at the girl sleeping but here you reversed the situation and it fitted perfectly. Nice!
True, fate had always indicated they were meant to be thats why unknowingly hi sahi she had stood for him always.

her eyes filled with tears this time she wiped them away, she knows they are no longer needed. He fulfilled all his promises by this time, stand fr her, rescue her frm all dangers even placing his on life at the mouth of death, he gave her all the care and love he promised to her.
I LOVED this line. How true, this time without even her asking he gave her everything. You described it beautifully! 👏
Yes, hoping tomorrow brings new beginning and hopes.
Once again, amazing job. Please keep writing more! :D
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Posted: 13 years ago
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OMG why did I not see this before… and why did I not read this before ahhh.. But omg thiku you did an amazing job.. the whole scene was written so beautifully. It was like I was actually watching this on tv… I LOVED LOVED LOVED IT… I really don't know what to say I am speechless.. 🤗

She placed her head on his shoulders, the place where she felt more secured after her mother's lap…

Awwn this is sooo cute.. she finds peace and happiness in him ahh the cutest couple ever..

Then he completed that last stage of their marriage with his blood " rehne dhoo Phulwa" those words completed her.. ahhh fainted

Please do continue.. .. would love to read more things from you 👏

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