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Posted: 18 years ago
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sorry for the massive delay!!! i got caught up in someones weeding/ceremonies!



R: " Shaurya ji, there's no point of banging and yelling at the door. No-one going to open it since the kids are all fast asleep"

S: (Bangs his fist at the door) " These kids had to be asleep right now, other days there usually awake till now".

R: " What should we do now"?

S: " Mujhe nahin pata"

Radha walks towards the window and stands there for a while and suddenly the lights go off.

S: "Uff, abh yeh bigli bi abhi janai thi"

R: "Aap kai paas candles aur matches hai?"

S: "Yes, cupboard mein hai"

Radha proceeds towards the cupboards and takes out the candles. She places them onto the tables where Shaurya is standing near. While lighting the candles Shaurya looks at Radha's face—lovingly. The song Aankhon Ki Gustakhiyan Maaf plays in the background
Aankhon Ki Gustakhiyan Maaf Hon
Ek Tuk Tumhe Dekhtein Hain,
Jo Baat Kehna Chahe Zubaan, Tumse Ye Woh Kehtein Hain,
Aankhon Ki Sharmo Haya Maaf Ho,
Tumhe Dekh Ke Jhukti Hain, Uthi Aankhen Jo Baat Na Keh Saki
Jhuki Aankhen Woh Kehteein Hain,
Aankhon Ki Gustakhiyan Maaf Hon

Stanza Kaajal Ka Ek Til Tumhare Labon Pe Laga Doon,
Haan Chanda Aur Sooraj Ki Nazron Se Tumko Bacha Loon,
Hoh Palkon Ki Chilman Mein Aao Main Tumko Chupa Loon,
Khayalon Ki Ye Shokhiyan Maaf Hon,
Har Dam Tumhe Sochtien Hain, Jab Hosh Mein Hota Hai Jahan,
Madhosh Ye Karti Hai,
Aankhon Ki Sharmo Haya Maaf Ho

Radha look's up to see that Shaurya is looking at her face and both of them have a eye locking session which break's apart when at the corner of her eye Radha notices lightning and gets scared and stands up. With the wind blowing hectically both rush to the window at the same time and are trying to close the window. When Radha reaches to push away the curtains Shaurya's hand reaches at the same place. Both of their hands touch and Radha remembers what Sangam had told her the other day.

Flashback

Sangam: " Mallishka , tumhai nahin lagtha ki tum Shaurya ki kuch jada kareeb ah rahi hoon? Listen to me carefully stay away from Shaurya because he isn't ur fianc Addy is."


Present

Radha slowly moves away her hand and so does Shaurya. Radha walks away from the window sitting down at the sofa and Shaurya follows her. He sits at the opposite sofa.

Danny's room

Danny wakes up.

D: " I need water badly" He reaches for his nightable to turn on the lamp but finds that it doesn't turn on. "Not again the electricity went out" He takes the flashlight out of his drawer. "Just to top it off my glass of water is finished better go downstairs to get some water"

Shaurya's room

Shaurya starts looking at Radha lovingly again, and she does the same thing too, both are lost in each other's eyes. The song Aisa ankein nahin… starts playing in the background

Aisi aankhen nahin dekhi, aisa kaajal nahin dekha
Aisa jalwa nahin dekha, aisa chehra nahin dekha
Jab yeh daaman ki hawa de, aag jungle mein laga de
Jab yeh saheraaon mein jaaye, ret mein phool khilaaye
Aisi duniya nahin dekhi, aisa manzar nahin dekha
Aisa aalam nahin dekha, aisa dilbar nahin dekha

Uske kangan ka khalakna jaise bulbul ka chahekna
Uski paazeb ki chham chham jaise barsaat ka mausam ............

Downstairs

Danny is going upstairs and goes into his bedroom. He puts the flashlight into his drawer, drinks his water and goes to sleep.


What will happen in Shaurya's bedroom? Find out in part three "the bedroom"
Edited by *saakshi_fan* - 18 years ago
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Posted: 18 years ago
#12
hey guys no comments? 😭 😭
if its not good then tell me to stop guys or if i need to improve my story........
do give me ideas please
and please do comment-- for motivation 😛
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Posted: 18 years ago
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Hey guys here's the next part

The Bedroom

At Shaurya's bedroom Shaurya stands up and moves towards Radha's sofa. He sits beside her and continues to stare at her. He moves closer to her and caresses her checks. With his hands he moves the few strands of hairs touching her face. Radha closes her eyes and opens them again. Shaurya moves his face closer to hers and suddenly the door opens and Shaurya jumps away with a jolt.

Sangam: Shaurya, Mallishka tum dono yaha kya khar rahai ho?

S: "Sangam di, wo koi bahar sai kisi nai door lock kardai tha, es lai hum dono andaar thai"

Sagam eyes Radha and she nods her head

Sangam: "OK, but what was Mallishka doing in your room with you"

S:" She came to ask me something, and I told her to get me a file and in between all that someone locked the door from the outside."

Sangam: "you could have called someone"

R: "no one was listening, before I came here I checked up on all of the kids, they were sleeping."

Sangam: "ok, uh malliska go to your room I have to talk to Shaurya about one of our business deals"

R: "Ji"

Sangam: "Shaurya, next time get your files by yourself"

S: "Sorry Di"

Sangam: "Ok, now I'll leave because I have to go to sleep. Good night."

S: "Good night di"

Shaurya stands there thinking about Radha and how close he came to her.

S: "What am I thinking, she's the type of girl who will fall in love with you and leave you when getting all of your wealth" But somehow he wasn't satisfied with that, he felt something else, something different which he never felt before in a long time.

Outside
N: "Thanks, girls (she notices a car which she recognizes) so girls I'll get going see you Friday?

Girls: "Sure why not?"

Naiya climbs up the vein and goes to her bedroom. At her bedroom she quickly goes to her bathroom changes her clothes and goes to bed. Sangam enters at the moment she goes to bed and she thinks

S: " Radha was right the kids are sleeping" She leaves the room quietly

The next day

Everyone is getting seated at the breakfast table and Sangam notices that Shaurya isn't there.

Sangam: "Uff, yeh Shaurya kaha hai? Why didn't he come to breakfast? Mallishka go call him"

R: "Ji Sangam di"

Before Radha could reach to Shaurya's bedroom Shaurya has already come out of his room. Both see each other and have an eye-lock session. Shaurya gazes upon those beautiful brown eyes. While Radha looks at his small brown eyes. Both are lost in each other's eyes when Sangam interrupts—again.

Sangam: "Shaurya, you're here. That's great come and have breakfast"

Sangam was about to put her spoon into her mouth when she remembered something

Sangam: "Shaurya, remember the deal we made with Walia group of Industries, did you receive any information?

S: " Yes, and they told me in celebration of our project they are throwing us a party!"

Sangam: "Really that's interesting, ok then party it is, phone Mr. Walia and ask him when it is"

S: "He already told me…. Tomorrow"

Sangam: "Uff, tomorrow, can u tell him to post-phone it"

S: "He told me that tomorrow is the only time he would have time"

Sangam: "OK, no problem I will place the order for food, drinks, and everything else." Mallishka, go and help Misty choosing her clothes, and I will send up three sari's later on and you decide which one you want to wear ok?"

R: "Ji"

7 comments and i will do the next part......with pictures
Edited by *saakshi_fan* - 18 years ago
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Posted: 18 years ago
#14
hey saakshi...

Read all the 3 parts now.and u did a wonderful job yaaar 👏 👏 👏

And i luved all the scenes especially wen Sang stormed into S room 😆 .. Thank god SR bachgaye warnaa ab tak R ki suitcase wud have been flying outside the house 😆

Continue sooooon 😳

Krishi
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Posted: 18 years ago
#15
hi saakshi...

wish u have written all in english for the benefit of those who doesn't understand hindi.
anyway good job, waiting for the continuing part. 😉
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Posted: 18 years ago
#16
Hey! You did a nice job! 👏
I liked the way you showed Shourya's thoughts 😊
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Posted: 18 years ago
#17
hey I jsut canT wait to read the next part your great 👏 👏 👏
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Posted: 18 years ago
#18
Its gr8! can't wait for the next part!!
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Posted: 18 years ago
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a quick question
im postin pictures which link do i use (for the fanfic)
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Posted: 18 years ago
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good job, its shaping up to be a good fanfic

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