TS - Heartbroken |completed| - Page 5

Originally posted by: PSP07

Pehle toh thank you so much...iss week ke starting se chahiye tha koi iss situation par FF likh de..aur likha toh kya khatarnak likha hai👏..merko writing ka itna pata nahi hai..toh uss sense mein feedback nahi de sakti..phir bhi itna keh sakte hai jo yeh likha hai isko easily imagine kiya jaa sakta hai.. dialogue padh kar lag raha..yeh Viru bol raha yeh Sudha bol rahi hogi..unke way of talking se imagine kar sakti hu..aur emotions toh kya bhar bhar ke daale hai..idhar aaram se ro jaayega banda.

Show version accha hai..lekin yeh usse better hai..isme alag level ka feel aa raha hai..jo show mein bullet train ke kaaran nahi mil paata.. emotional scenes toh lamba chalne diya karo bey..rone hi waale hote hai ki next track aa jaata hai🤦

Abb iss story pe baat karte hai

FF mein bhi Nandini ko koi intelligent nahi dikha sakta🤣.. idhar bhi Pur ko blame kar rahi hai😡..chaaro bacche mein yahi hai jo Sakshi par thodi gayi hai😑...waise yeh waala Veer kitna sahi hai..Baat samjhne ki koshish toh ki..Show mein toh pagla rakha hai🤢...Sudha ne sahi sunaya..show mein bhi suna de toh maza aa jaayega.

Now talking about Viru..bhai meri kidney mein heart attack aajana tha..jab yeh Pyaar aur Bawari word bolte time ruka..itna painful laga na🥺...aur Jab nahi mili toh kaise room mein bhaga aur Bawari chillaya..yaar jab itna pyaar karta hai kyu hurt karta hai usko??? Baad mein regret karta phirta hai.. terko dhakkan , gadha, dumbo , khadoos kuch bhi bol lu na kam lagta hai.

JnM ka Viru se aise bolna 😭 😔

Ab viru ko realise hoga ki bawri ne uska pariwar toda nhi balki joda tha !

Bawari ne accha sunaya sabko...line se sabki jo class li hai..maza aagya padh kar..bas yeh khud samjh jaaye Veer ki aise shaadi nahi karni chahiye thi...aur apne pariwar ka hissa na maane waali baat kya sahi boli thi..Viru ko yeh cheez samajhna chahiye..patani show mein aisa kuch dikhayenge ya nahi.. sirf trust issue problem hai nahi😣..baaki iske letter ke end mein jo aapki Bawari Molkki likha hai😭 ..ahhh..itna Dukh lekar kaha jau mein😑

Kahi mat jaaoo... Yhi forum par rho 😝

1st paragraph idhr sab writers ke liye hai..saare ek se badhkar ek talented ho👏

Cheers to writer's club !!

Ommgggg 🤗🤗

I'm so moved !! Line by line analysis kiya apne meri story ka. I really loved it 😍😍

Thanks to you for motivating me upto this extent 🤗

I really laughed while reading your review. Maine jo jo soch kar scenes likhe the, apne wo sab is post me likh diya

Dhanyawad 😊🤗

Is dard bhari kahani ke dard ko padhne ke lie shukriya 🤭🤭

Speechless

After reading the whole story in one go all I just can say one word... PHENOMENAL...and I have no words to describe your story it's so good and your writing skills are so unique and outstanding.

Part2 just tore me apart, so now you should know that how impactful and powerful is your story and how amazing writer you are...and now I'm so eagerly waiting for the story to continue so plz update soon dear...

BTW, I'm ur new reader I just started reading.

Lots of love & All the Best..❤️

Updated Soon...

😲Wow... I have no words to comment on this beautiful part.... Loved it... Show mein bhi Sudha ko ek baar toh kuch aisa kehna chahiye.. The letter is so painful... Rona aagya yaar😭😭.

Baki you are just amazing👍🏼😳

Waiting for the next update😳

Ohh next part update kar diya.. Thank you suppa..🤗❤️

Padh kar reply karti huu thodi der mai..😋

Originally posted by: Sofia.K

Speechless

After reading the whole story in one go all I just can say one word... PHENOMENAL...and I have no words to describe your story it's so good and your writing skills are so unique and outstanding.

Part2 just tore me apart, so now you should know that how impactful and powerful is your story and how amazing writer you are...and now I'm so eagerly waiting for the story to continue so plz update soon dear...

BTW, I'm ur new reader I just started reading.

Lots of love & All the Best..❤️

Tons of thanku and lots of love ❤️🤗

Updated Soon...

First of all, welcome to the forum Sofia 🤗

Thank you for reading and giving your precious review. I just expressed my thoughts, it's an honor that you ppl are liking it 😳

I'll update soon ☺️

Originally posted by: Sampada001

😲Wow... I have no words to comment on this beautiful part.... Loved it... Show mein bhi Sudha ko ek baar toh kuch aisa kehna chahiye.. The letter is so painful... Rona aagya yaar😭😭.

Baki you are just amazing👍🏼😳

Waiting for the next update😳

I like a bit bold characters. Excessively naive character I personally don't prefer... To socha yha pe kuch aisa try karu 😅😅

I'm really happy ki ye pasand aya 🤪

Many many thanks to you 😊🥰

Pahle to gale milo, mujhe rona aa raha hai😭😭

Kahi do saba se, bas yahi chahiye aur kuch bhi nhi, kuch..... Bhi..... Nhi......

Sunder likhawat, bahut sunder, dil tak pahunchne wali.

Letter aisa tha jaise purvi mera ghar chod kar ja rahi ho,mai ro rahi thi

2 baat jo mujhe sabse acchi lagi

1. Jab letter me mukhi ki bari aati hai, wo apni aankhen band kar leta hai.

2. Vir purvi ke saaman me uski khusbu dhundh raha hai, tab maine apni aankhen band kar li. I feel that line.

Thanku suppss is sunder se os k liye. Agle part ka intezaar rahega❤

Supriya di!

Ab aapki ye story ka next part hi sahara hain!

Jo hum ne Saba ma'am se expect kiya tha vo to mila nahi.

Aap update kr do Jaldi please!

This version is much much better than show version.

Suppa...🤗🤗

Such an amazing write up.... continue soon....

Suppa 🤗

What an amazing story, girl❤️

Though I am much less sympathetic to Purvi than all of you seem to be😆, you have bought out Purvi's pain & anguish brilliantly.

And I am glad she expressed everything in the letter!

The dialouges, the shayari as well👏

Ab jaldi next part likh do please